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Read the two last updates..one word absolutely fabulous..Clap

Every scene of the story is to visualise and it gives the picture perfect of a couple so much in love..

I can say you are great writer and love how you always keep the flow of the story and you describe each scene so beautifully that its so interesting to read...

The consumation scene very well penned down and at the end you kept the innocence..the purity in this relationship and thats the beauty of agni..you wrote it as its should have been.sweet..simple but oh so beautiful..

The added pics esp their room decorated with scented candles and rose petals is really perfect to visualise the romantic atmosphere in their room for a first night..

Enjoy reading the story and awaits more from you..you did an awesome job..Thumbs Up




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Posted: 13 July 2012 at 11:25am | IP Logged
Thanks  for  updating  with  lovely   pictures  of  our  lovable  couple  (Dimple  &  Navi)  in  their   first  night...Smile
The  quality  of   your    writings  is  always  good...Your  presentation  and   pictures   are  perfect...Thumbs Up
The  creativity  of  your   each   Dimple &  Navi  scene  as   AgNi   is  so  cute... Heart
You   have    worked  minute  details  in   each   and   every  aspects   of  your  scenes  with  Utmost   care...Clap
Your   depiction  of   Our  adorable   Couple  ( Dimple  &  Navi)   feelings  for  their  special  night  with  perfection  is   amazing...Smile
Keep   Up   Ur  Brilliant   Work... 
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Navi-Dimple as Agam-Nimrit Continued... (My Story, PART 5)

We start off from the point where Agam and Nimrit lie in their bed, after a warm, passionate night together, soulful moments of expressing their undying love for one another.

Agam has his arm wrapped around Nimrit's shoulders, while his other hand lovingly holds onto to Nimrit's fingers. Nimrit has her palm resting nicely on Agam's bare chest, almost as though feeling his heartbeat, and the other palm is nicely tucked and intertwined with Agam's fingers. They both have nice big smiles on their faces, as though they were both feeling the same feeling of happiness even in their sleep. Its past midnight, and stepping into the wee hours of the morning, and Nimrit slowly opens her eyes. She looks at her Agam ji's face and smiles again, thinks 'Agam ji toh so rahe hai' and then slowly unlocks her fingers from his. She tries to get up softly, as she doesn't want to wake Agam up and wraps herself in a deep red blanket. She walks towards the wash room and heads inside for a quick shower.

After a few seconds, Agam also tries to move his arm around as he subconsciously feels that he can't feel his beloved Nimrit ji anymore. But his hands cannot feel Nimrit on the bed so he slowly opens his eyes and finds Nimrit is in fact not there. He hears the shower and figures that Nimrit is in the washroom. He looks at the clock and since its only 2am, he gets a bit worries and sits upright. He gets out of his bed and takes out a set of his white kurta-pajamas that he usually wears during night time. He puts on the pajama and walks towards the washroom. He tries to ask her if she is okay? But as Nimrit is unable to hear his voice, he tries to patiently wait outside. But keeps worrying and getting impatient.

Agam: Nimrit ji, Nimrit ji? (Thinks 'Kahi maine kuch galat to nahi kar diya?')
Nimrit: (Closes the shower tap, dries herself off and wraps herself up in the same red blanket and comes out) Agam ji? (She is a bit startled to see Agam standing outside the washroom) Aap? Sorry, maine aapko utha diya kya?
Agam: (Notices her all wrapped up in the red blanket and though he just wants to keep staring at her he worriedly asks) Aap theek to hai na? Woh aap itni der se washroom main... kahi maine aapko takleef...
Nimrit: Are nahi Agam ji, main bilkul theek hu. Woh mujhe bas thodi thand lagi rahi thi, aur neend bhi toot gayi toh maine socha garam pani se naha lu. Bas. (She walks closer towards Agam and tiptoes to go close to his face and kisses him gently).

Agam is relieved and happy, and then Nimrit shies off and hugs him tightly. Agam puts his arms around her instantly and strokes her hair, but feels that she is still shivering and feeling cold.

Agam: Nimrit ji, shayad aapko ab bhi thand lag rahi hai!
Nimrit: (With her eyes closed) Hmmm.
Agam: (Keeps hugging her and looks around for clothes and finds his suit jacket, his shirt, his trousers... her saree, her blouse... all lying scattered on the floor, just then he sees his pristine white kurta on the bed that he had just taken out of his cupboard) Nimrit ji, aap kuch kapde pehen lijiye.
Nimrit: (Opens her eyes) Are, nahi main theek hu Agam ji.
Agam: (Walks towards the bed, picks up the kurta, opens it up and puts it around Nimrit's neck) Aap yeh pehen lijiye.

Nimrit smiles and puts her hands through the sleeves, while the blanket drops on the floor. Agam picks it up and wraps it around Nimrit who is looking very cute in Agam's white kurta. He then lifts her and carries her in his arms. Nimrit is a bit surprised, but puts her arms all around Agam and kisses him on the cheek. Agam looks at her lovingly.

Nimrit: Ek baat kahu Agam ji, aap har baar mujhe yu apni baahon main kyu utha lete hai? Kahi aapko peeth main dard ho gaya toh?
Agam: Hmm, woh to hai, aap hai hi itni bhaari!
Nimrit: Kya? Main bhari hoon? Aap yeh kyun nahi kehte ki aap khud kitne kamzor hair ki aapko apni dubli patli biwi itni bhaari lag rahi hai?
Agam: (Smiles) Woh har baar aap kuch na kuch kar leti hain jisse mujhe aapko uthan padta hain. Aur is baar aap ko itni thand lag rahi thi, toh maine socha main aapko bistar tak chalne kaise doon?
Nmirit: Acha ji?
Agam: Sach kahu to Nimrit ji mujhe aapko yu apni baaho mein uthana bahut achcha lagta hai. (And with a cheeky grin) Aur mujhe pata hai ki aapko bhi yu meri baahon main rehna achcha lagta hai.

Both smile and feel shy as Agam bring her to the bed and softly puts her down. She holds his hand to not let him go anywhere else and he turns and smiles and sits close to her on the bed.

Nimrit: (Hugs him) Agam ji, aap khush toh hai na?
Agam: Are Nimrit ji main to itna khush hoon ke main aapko kya bataoon. Maine to kabhi socha hi nahi that ki aap meri zindagi main itni sari khushiyan lekar aayengi. (Kisses her forehead!) Aur mujhe aap se itni sari baatein karni hai, aapko woh sab kuch batana hai joh maine aaj tak kisi ko nahi bataya.
Nimrit: (Feels sleepy now, but wants to listen to Agam ji as she senses a slight tone of sadness in his voice. She wants to be there for him, every single fraction of a second, so that he knows he can always depend on her no matter what!) Haan Agam ji, mujhe bhi aapki woh saari baatein sun ni hain. Mujhe aapko jan na hai, aapko aur achchi tarah se samajhna hai. Pata hai, jab main shaadi karke yaha aayi thi, toh mujhe har din aapke baare main ek nayi baat pata chalti thi.
Agam: (Wonders if Nimrit is referring to his drunken times, times when he got angry, times when he was rude to his parents... and feels a little sad. But thinks he should not ruin this perfect night by talking about such things, and instead try and make Nimrit as happy as he can. He thinks he can make Nimrit understand his nature and his behaviour later by telling her everything that he went through during his childhood. He wants to be completely open and honest in this relationship, so that nothing in future can come between them, and they stay united forever. He also wants her to learn from all this and become stronger, not only for him, but for herself too. He knows Nimrit is way too naive and trusts people easily, and he just wants her to be wary of people to prevent her from getting hurt. He knows he can protect her with all his heart and soul, but he can't stop her from feeling the emotions she feels when people betray her or cause her unhappiness. But now he must focus on all the good things in life, so he says) Nimrit ji, main toh woh saare pal wapas se jeena chahta hu, jisme hum dono ne na jaante hue ek doosre se pyaar kiya. Woh khoobsurat pal, jab hum dono ne saath milkar har ek mushkil ka samna kiya.
Nimrit: (Figures that this is not really what Agam wanted to talk about, but is happy re-thinking of those beautiful moments she had shared with Agam) Haa Agam ji!

They start reminiscing the good old times!

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Edited by hiri_piri - 15 July 2012 at 11:06am

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Posted: 13 July 2012 at 12:03pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by richa.amonkar

ko0l dea..m lookin frwd to it :)

its up! just for you guys :)

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Posted: 13 July 2012 at 12:04pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by Anurna

bahot khubsurat hai pics. and ur whole story, presentation, description, writting,and off course ur choice of using different colors and ur reply to every comment of all of us.

yes, i like replying to people when they appreciate my work! its a nice feeling. thanks a million for your wonderful comments. makes me miss dimple/navi less!

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Posted: 13 July 2012 at 12:06pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by saveeta24

Read the two last updates..one word absolutely fabulous..Clap

Every scene of the story is to visualise and it gives the picture perfect of a couple so much in love..

I can say you are great writer and love how you always keep the flow of the story and you describe each scene so beautifully that its so interesting to read...

The consumation scene very well penned down and at the end you kept the innocence..the purity in this relationship and thats the beauty of agni..you wrote it as its should have been.sweet..simple but oh so beautiful..

The added pics esp their room decorated with scented candles and rose petals is really perfect to visualise the romantic atmosphere in their room for a first night..

Enjoy reading the story and awaits more from you..you did an awesome job..Thumbs Up


Thanks saveeta. I enjoy writing these updates just as much as you all love reading them. And without you all to appreciate it, there would be no point in me writing. So a big thank you to all of you too! Updated part 5 just now! Its relatively shorter, but hope you enjoy it!!


Edited by hiri_piri - 13 July 2012 at 12:06pm

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