MIDNIGHT - When Wishes Come True...

Hi Everyone,

Well, I don't know many of you guys here but just to introduce myself on the writer's corner, I am Shehroon and I'm 15 years old. I've read some of your works and they are amazing. There are so many talented writers on here and I don't think this piece of work is half as good as theirs but still I'm going to post it only because I don't want to write anything else.

Well initially this piece of writing was for an English essay type thing. Actually, it was the 'Information & Ideas' section of the English Language course. There was a day left till our exam and our teacher just gave us this task which would have been part of the exam. Well the aim was to write about an unexpected event. I had thought about it so much and couldn't think of anything.. But finally, I did and after writing it, I handed it in. Though there was no point in me getting it back the day after the exam, the teacher still did and surprisingly this was a Band 1/2 piece of work, which is equivalent to a low A* and High A. The grade boudary equivalences are different in every part of the world so this may be wrong. But yeahh, since I got it, I was thinking that I would post it on IF to find out your views on it. I know its not as good or good at all compared to everything else. Lol, if any of yous' know me, you will know that I type a lot - and I think that is just visible in the introduction.
Anyways, I'll continue with my work. Its not long because there was a word limit of 600 words and this is I think just over 600 (but I'm sure that doesn't make a difference)

Actual OS/Piece Of Writing in the post below 

MIDNIGHT' When Wishes Come True

Swiftly I read my prayer and made an unspoken request to Allah asking him for the well-being of this family. After doing so, I went and sat in the lavish lounge to wait for dad to arrive home. There was a sudden delay in his arrival today ' something which was very strange of him. He should've known that today wouldn't be any different from the previous days where I would wait for him no matter how long he took.

The air gushed through my hair, which told me that he was here.

I turned around. His face spoke to me and today like every other time he hid something from me, his face explained to me that he wasn't happy to find me waiting for the arrival. He came wordlessly and sat next to me ' his face being turned away from me. He held onto my hand from behind for support before saying, 
"I'm sure that you know about the wars that are ongoing in Afghanistan and Iraq. Being the Deputy Supreme Commander of the UAE Armed Forces, I have been assigned to this mission to help save thousands of innocent lives. I know that it is extremely hard for you accept this sudden change but I couldn't deny the Head Supreme Commander's order."

Silence. I tried to figure out what he exactly meant by saying this. When I did realise the meaning, I slipped my hand out of his and embraced him ' with no tears and no sorrow. I think he was confused because he would have expected me to break down into tears. 
"Mannat, are you alright dear?" he asked quietly, whilst his palms were being stroked against my sleek hair.
"Is this what you were hiding from me? How could you think that I would be sad to hear such news. I can't believe that MY dad has been chosen out of everyone to represent Abu Dhabi! I'm proud of you dad' I knew that you'd become everyone's hero one day!" I exclaimed.

I also felt the need to ask him when he would come back. He laughed at the thought that he hadn't even left and I was asking him questions about when he would be back. He hugged me this time and said; 
"No matter how long this may take me, I'll be back by a midnight ' a midnight when your wishes will come true; your birthday' I promise!"

Yet even after 3 midnights where I have continuously asked for the same wish; he has not returned. My mum has accepted the fact that he will never return. At first he did call every Friday but since a year and a half ago, this has stopped. There have been no calls and no messages.

But I am still living on those last few words that he said. Maybe just maybe this will be the midnight where my wishes will come true' 

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So guys, how did you like it?
Was it good - maybe near enough to the quality you're used to reading?
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Shehroon x