this thought has been running in my mind long time. i would like to hear your opinion about my work!!!!
comments and criticism are most welcomed!!!pls let me know about it!!!
after suggestions from Priya(nobo) and krithika di i gave it a serious thought , so i dedicate this to both of them!!!!
sorry and big apology for not being up to mark!!!
here goes the PROLOGUE:
Her room seemed more dark then ever, it gave a very dull look .She was lying lifeless on the bed. Her body seemed thinner than stick.Her face was pale . She kept on looking at the top of the ceiling lost in deep thoughts.She took her hand and touched the bangles.
She remembered the day when her di presented it to her. She remembered how they wished to be together. Tears rolled down her cheeks. She thought how life has turned upside down from the days her treatment has started.
She slowly stood up and walked towards the mirror holding on support.She looked at herself on the mirror.She realized how thin her body has become.She touched her face and wondered how pale she has become after a month.
She still kept on looking into the mirror and thought "what will happen when di sees me in this condition, a month ago she saw smiling and getting now since she has left to her in law house for durga pooja , my conditions have become even more worse, she will not be able to see me lifeless ..."Maanvi put her head down on the bed not able accept the reality.
Jeevika was arranging everything for Pooja in the pooja her thoughts were still about call Maanvi as soon as possible.As this was her first Durga pooja in her in-law house as bahu , she had to leave Maanvi all alone and be here till Pooja for a month !!!She talked with her Maanu through phones.
She looked at the clock , it was half past 7 ,Jeevika wanted to ensure whether Maanvi had her medicines.
She quickly ran toward her room to pick up the phone. On the way Vanshika called her to Greet the guests . She ran towards them and helped them .
Jeevika heart was crying from inside "yeh kya ho raha muje, Tik se ek bar bi Maanu se baath nahi kar paa rahi hoon , kya Maanvi ne sare medicnes ka liya , ab uska health condition kaisi hey"
still Jeevika's mind were filled with deep questions as she was preparing chai for the guests.
That's all friends.Comments and criticism are most welcomed.shall i continue.
Part 1:Page 3
Part 2:Page 6
part 3 :Page 8
Edited by jessiekarthik - 17 July 2012 at 4:24am