Hi everyone! Thank you for your amazing feedback! I am glad to know you guys enjoyed it so much therefore I have changed it from an OS to an SS :)
@hs7071 thank you so much for telling me about my character sketch mistake. I have fixed it now :)
I have tried to PM you all. Please, please, please forgive me if I have missed anyone out and do tell me off! :) x Here is the next part!
PLEASE NOTE: These updates are entirely a work of fiction. Any resemblance to people (living/passed away) are totallycoincidental. These updates are not meant to offend anyone and are just a creative way of expressing thoughts and ideas.
Part 2
Manvi is crying in Virat's arms unaware of the world around her. She suddenly comes back to her senses.
Maanvi: Kya yaar Virat...tumhey logo ko rulaana achha laghta hai kya? Bina matlab ka lovely shovely sa mood satyaaannnaassh kardiya! Tu bhi na partner.
Virat: Accha-iss mey bhi mira galthi hai? Chalo ab tho adaath pargayi hai tumhaari yeh ugly shugly waali daat ki. Ab ghar challey?
Maanvi: Ha yaar chalo. Pathaanahi Jeevika di kithni dramatic hori hogi ghar bethey bethey. Chalo yaar. Jaldi! Jaldi!
Maanvi gets up from the hospital bed but loses balance. Virat catches her.
Virat: Maanvi, dekho samhaal ke. Tumhaari tabyath theek nahi hai. Araam se-
Maanvi: Dekho yaar Virat-mein theek hoon. Aur please mujhey patient jaysa treat math karo ha? Mein theek hoon. Ab chalo na partner!
Virat: Yaar...tum kaunsi meeti se bani ho? Kabhi gir jaathi ho kabhi hyper hojaathi ho.
Maanvi: Lagtha hai tumney Veer Zara nahi dekhi na! Koy baath nahi mein hi tumhey bathaadethi hoon angry young man ki hum tho bhay jaysey hai vaysey rahengey! Ab challlooo na!
Virat: Chalo...
Beeji and Virman make their way back to the house. When they enter they see Jeevika, Viren, Dada ji, Chaachi and Chaachu waiting for Maanvi to come back. Bua ji and Maya are obviously gossiping in some corner.
Jeevika: Maanu? Maanu tujheyy kya hua? Tujhey barbaar yeh kya hojatha hai? Ha? Maanu?
Virat: Vo bhabhi Maanvi-
Maanvi: Eh-Viraat'choro na! Di mein bilkul theek hoon. Aapko patha doctor ne kaha ki sab 100% theek hai. Aap kyu bevaja-
Jeevika: Maanvi agar sab theek hai tho barbaar tujheyy yeh kya hojatha hai?
Maanvi: Arrey kuch nahi di kyu baath baath mein aap bevaja drama karthi hai. Itni chintha! Such mein na Jigu sahi kehethey hai'biwi ho tho ayssi!
Virat: Maanvi zara merrey saath aana'tumsey abhi baath karni hail
Viraat grabs Maanvi's hand and takes her into his room.
Virat: Maanvi tum ayssi baath bhabhi seyy kaysey chupa sakthi hoon. Tum pagal hogayi ho kya?
Maanvi: Virat-Virat relax. Agar bathaana hotha tho ab tak bathaa dethi hogi na? Mein di ko iss key barrey mein kuch nahi bathaoongi. Bewaja vo chintha karney lageygi aur-
Virat: Bewaja? Maanvi Bewaja kaysey? Tumney socha hai ki jab unhey patha chaley ga tho unhey kaysa lagey ga? Soch hai tumney?
Maanvi: Virat. Dekho tum meri mood spoil math karo. Tumhaari bhabhi se vo zaada meri di hai. Aur merrey aur meri di key rishtey ke beech koy nahi aasaktha. Tum merrey partner ho na? To di'di meri zindagi hai.
Virat: Ok baba sorry! Sorry ! Likin Maanvi samhaal key hai. Tumhey patha hai na ki bhabhi ko kabhi na kabhi patha chal hi jayegaa?
Maanvi: Bhagwaan karrey ki uskkey pehely mein chali jaao iss-
Virat pulls Maanvi into his arms.
Virat: MAANVI! Chup...bikul chup...ayssa kuch nahi hoga. Bak bak karni ki bhi ek limit hothi hai aur tum. Sighs. Tumhey kuch nahi hoga samjhi tum. Kuch nahi hoga.
Maanvi: Okay partner relax. Breaks free from the hug and wipes away her tears. Chalo ab mein di aur Jigu se milleythi hoon-theek hai?
Virat nods and Maanvi leaves the room. Later on when Virat is by himself he thinks about what just happened. What is this new feeling growing inside himself. Why is he suddenly so concerned about Maanvi. Why does he want her in front of his eyes all the time. He closes his eyes and sees her face. Like a star illuminating the darkness...
Please forgive my mistakes in spelling/grammar/punctuation. Sorry this was a short update. Hope you don't mind. Please leave behind your feedback and suggestions including anything that you want me to include or exclude in my SS. Thank you!
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