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A NEW SS-- FAMILY HOLIDAY (Page 7)

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pls cont soon...

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This was amazing!
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great job!!!! do continue soon Smile
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Heyy Guyss!

Im back with an update! Im sorry that i updated so late! But I was very busy!

Thank you for ALL YOUR COMMENTS.. I am very happy that all of you liked the part SO much!

Sorry to everyone who didnt recieve PMs..

I hope you'll like the part!

P.S.- I wont be able to PM you'll any longer because its too tough for me to type so many names as you'll are not in my friends list! It takes a lottt of time! So please do keep checking this ss because maybe i update and dont PM! But i can assure you one thing that my next update wont be before a week!

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Part 2- On the Way!

Viren Jeevika sitting at the back seat, waiting for manvi and virat. Manvi gets inside and sits next to jeevika and virat comes inside from the other door and sits next to viren.

M: Diii!!!! Kya hai yeh? Yeh itni si jagah dogi apni mannu ko?

J: Manvi itna saara jagah toh hein! Tu hati jitni bari toh hain nahi!

M: Hati kya! Arrey iss jagah mein toh cheeti bhi naa aaye, ghisko na andar pleaseee! (she pushed jeevika towards viren)

At the same time,

Virat: Kya mere bhaiii! Darwaza band hi nahi ho raha thoda andar jaao na! Aapki pyaari si badi maa ne itni badi gari kharidi hai toh zara iska upyog toh karo! ( saying this, he too, pushed viren inside)

Virika looked at each other and their eyes met-love clearly sparkling in their eyes!

M: Haan! Abh bohot jagah ho gayi hai! Driver bhaiya chaliye!

So Viren and Jeevika were squeezed into each other by virman. Jeevika was literally sitting on viren! J

Virat: Chalo kuch baat waat karte hai ya fir kuch khelte hai!

M: Kya solid idea hai partner!! Kya khele?

Viren and Jeevika together: ANTAKSHRI!

They looked at each other and smiled. Their thoughts were so alike.

M: Waah di! Kya setting hai aap aur jeeju ki, yeh sabh aap dono  ghar se rat ke aaye the ki aap dono ki dil ki connection sach much itni strong hai?

Jeevika looked at Viren and blushed.

Viren: (looking at the shy jeevika) Kya kare saali sahiba, aapki di hai hi itni pyaari ki apne aap dono dilo ka connection jud gaya.

M: Acha abh yeh secret romance bandh kiya jaye aur antakshri khela jaye.

Virat: Toh fir teams kya honge?

Virat thinks: taki bhai aur bhabhi ek saath ek team mein ho mujhe is bandariya ke saath adjust karna parega! Lekin its ok! Khali ek game hi toh khelna hai! Aur wese bhi woh itni bhi buri nahi hai! Kabhi kabhi toh uske saath bohot maza aata hai!

Manvi thinks: jeeju ko di ke saath aise hi kam time spend karne ko milta hai! Mujhe unhe har oppurtunity deni hai jisse woh dono saath mein rahe! Mujhe is game mein uss chep ka saath dena parega! Lekin its ok! Nothing is impossible for Manvi choudhary!! Aur woh theek thak hi hai! Utna bhi bura nahi hai!

Jeevika thinks: Bachpan mai mein aur mannu itna antakshri khelte the! Yeh acha mauka hai! Aaj fir se hum dono ek hoke khelenge toh bohot mazaa aayega!

Viren Thinks: Virat itna acha gata hai! Mujhe toh uska saath dena chahiye! Agar mein uske team mein hoon toh woh aur khulke ga payega aur usse mera support bhi milega!

They all come out of their thoughts.

J: Mein aur mannu!

AT THE SAME TIME

Viren: Mein aur Virat!

AT THE SAME TIME

Virat: Mein aur derfutiya!

AT THE SAME TIME

M: Mein aur Chep!

Virika looked taken aback for a moment.

Virika: Kyu?

Manvi thinks of an excuse quickly and says:

M: Didi mujhe toh laga tha ki aap mujhe janti ho! Par abh lag raha hai ki bilkul nahi janti ho!

J: yeh nautanki bandh kar aur saaf saaf bol kya problem hai?

M: arrey di, aap toh janti ho na ki mujhe jeetna kitna pasand hai, aur isliye mujhe virat ke saath hona he!

J: Oh toh tujhe lagta hai ki mere saath tu har jayegi aur virat ke saath jeet jayegi..

M: Haan Di! Obviously, virat itna acha gata hain! Apne bhi toh uski aawaz sangeet mein suni thi!

J: haan manu, lekin..

M: nahi di! Mujhe ussi ke saath khelna hai warna mein nahi kheloongi!

Virat: Haan bhai! Mujhe bhi iss bandariya ke team mein hona hai, kyuki kya hain naa, kabhi kabhi yeh banderiya transform ho ke coel ban jaati hain!

M: Toh fir done! Mein aur chep partner aur didi aur jeeju partner!

Virat: Bethe bethe kya kare, karna hai kuch kaam, shuru karo antakshri, leke prabhu ka naam, bolo Ram Ram Ram! m- bhabhi aaplog ka turn.

J: Mehendi hai rachne wali, hatho mein gheri laali... (Viren looks at her all the time she sings and smiles) ...mere maan ko, jeevan ko, nayi khushiya milne wali hai! O hariyali bano... O-

M: O haseena zulfo waali jane jaha... (virat joins in) a-

J and Viren: Aye dil, laya hai bahar, apno ka pyaar, kya kehna...   ...mile hum, chalak utha, khushi ka tyoharrr, kya kehnaaa! ... J-

M and Virat: Jab koi baat bigar jaye, jab koi mushkil pad jaye, tum dena saath mera, o hum nawa... NA KOI HAI, NA KOI THA, ZINDAGI MEIN, TUMHARE SIVA , TUM DENA SAATH MERA...

After singing this song:

M: pata hai mujhe kya lagta hai? Ki jis kissi mahapurush ne yeh gana likha hai naa, usne zaroor aap dono ko picturise karke yeh gana banaya hoga! Bilkul aap dono ko suit karta hai! Kyu jeeju? Meini theek kaha na?

Viren and jeevika looked at each other and got lost in each other's eyes!

Virat: uhm uhm... (he cleared his throat)

No response.

M: (cough cough)

No response.

Virat: (loudly) kya kar rahe ho mere Bhaaaiii!

No Response.

M: Diii! Yeh kya kar rahi ho aap!

No response.

Slowly viren and jeevika started looking as though they were made of stone,  not moving an inch, not blinking at all, their sweet smile fixed and their face lit up! It was as though they could not see virman at all, asif they couldnt hear anyone at all excepting each others heart! They had come very close.

Virman: DADAJI AUR BUA? AAP YAHAAA?

Immidietely they broke apart!

Without looking properly Viren says: dadaji, badi ma, woh mein toh bas...

Virat: Haan haan bete hum jante hain ki tum kya kar rahe the! (he tried to immitate dadaji but viren caught him)

Viren: VIIIRRAAATTT! Teri toh kher nahi!

J: Mannuuu? Yeh sabh mazaak tha! Pata hai aaj toh tum dono ne mujhe dara hi diya!  (she pulls manvi's ears)

M: Aaah di! Choro! Lag rahi hai.. (jeevika left her) abh humari galti thodi hai! Aap dono ek doosre mein itna khoye hue the ki humari koi baat hi nahi sun rahe the! Toh abh hum dono ko yahi rasta apnana para!

Jeevika looked down and smiled. Viren looked away.

Virat: acha sorry bhai aur bhabhi, abh hum yeh game continue kare please?

Viren: theek hai, chal, teri baari!

After 15 mins of antakshri:

M: Arrey, abh yeh bohot  borinnng ho raha hai! Chalo kuch aur khelte hai!

Virat: (in teasing mood) meri derfutiya, hum 10 minute mein pohoch jayenge.. tab tak aur kya kya khelogi? Gari mein chupa chipi khelne ka irada hai kya? (virat smirked) aur wese bhi tum itniii moti ho ki chahakar bhi kahi chup nahi paogi! Elephant ko competition dene ka irada hai kya?

M: tumne mujhe mota bolaya! MUJHE! MANVI CHOWDHURY KO? Khud ka size dekha hai kabhi! Tumhara birthday kab hain? Kher jabhi bhi ho, mujhe pehle se hi bata dena, mein tumhare liya aayina (mirror)  laungi! Fir tum ussi ko dekhte rehna aur apne size par haste rehna Dinosaur!!!!

Virat: arrey manvi, humare soch kitne milte hain, mein abhi soch raha tha ki mere birthday ke return gift mein me sabko ek mirror dunga! Jeevika bhabhi ko unki khoobsoorati ka pata lag jayega, bhai ko pata chal jayega ki woh kitna kaam karte hai, dadaji ko pata chal jayega ki woh kiktne akroo hai, bua ko pata lag jayega ki woh bhai ko leke KITNI possesive hai, maa ko pata chal jayega ki woh kitnnnii understanding aur loving hain aur tumhe apne aap ko dekh ke sharam aayegi! Kyu sahi kaha na meine?

M: tumhariii tohh...

Viren and jeevika were not listening to any of this! They were looking at each other and talking in whispers.

Manvi suddenly spotted this and decided to pull their leg. Manvi put a song on her mobile on loudspeaker and started singing with it.

M: pehli nazar mein kesa jaadu kar gaya...

Virika immidietly broke eye contact and realised what just happened!

Viren tried to pretend that he was listening to virman's convo..

Viren: haan toh virat tu kya keh raha tha?? Tujhe houseful 2 picture dekhni hai? Dont worry hum jese hi wapas ayenge mein tujkhe uske agle din hi dikhane le jaunga!

Virman started laughing and jeevika took  the phone from manvi and shut the music..

Virat: acha yeh sabh choro... manvi tumhe ek game khelna tha na? Toh mere pas ek game hai! Hum ek doosre ke 1 achi aur 1 buri aadat bolenge! Isse humein realise hoga ki hum ek doosre ke bare mein kya kya sochte hai!

Viren: Theek hai!

J: Sounds like fun! Chalo khelte hai!

M: sabse pehle virat ka turn, aakhir game bhi toh ussi ka hain naa! Pehle us hi par aazma kar dekh lete hai!

Virat: ok!

Viren: virat ki sabse achi aadat hai ki woh bohottt understanding hai!

Virat: Waah mere bhhaaii! Kya start kiya hai!

J: Virat sabko humesha khush rakhta hai! Woh humesha yahi chahata hai ki uska poora parivar humesha khush rahe aur kissi ko bhi koi bhi tarah ki problem na ho! (she remembered her first night after marriage when viren left her and went to office and virat had entertained her so much)

Virat smiled..

After 1 minute

Virat: MMMAAANNNVIII! Kaha kho gayi? 1 poore minute se hum tumhara wait kar rahe hein aur tum ho ki pata nahi kya soch mein doobi hui ho!

M: Woh kya hai na partner! Tumhare bare mein koi bhi ACHA point dhoondne mein toh thora waqt toh lagega hi na! Its natural! Tumhe achi qualities hai hi kaha!

Virat: ha ha ha (sarcastic) very funny.

M: arrey mazaak kar rahi hoon yaar! Tumhari sabse achi quality kya hai pata hai?

Virat got alert! He didnt know why but he wanted to hear the quality which manvi liked in him the mostt!

M: ki tumhara dil bohot sacha hai aur tum kabhi bhi kisi ko bhi jaan boojhke ya fir binaa matlab ke hurt nahi karoge...

Virat's smile widened but then faded..

M: arrey hum bad point bolna toh bhool hi gaye! Mein shuru karti hoon a...

J: Manvi manvi, tu rehne de, tu shuru karegi toh kya pata kabhi khatam ho na ho! Mujhe toh virat mein kuch bura nahi dikhta!  He's amazing as he is...

Virat: I love you bhabhi!!! Your great!!

Viren: bas thoda responsibility lena baki hai kyu mere bhai?

Virat: haan, woh toh hai!

M: haan aur thoda ladkiyon se baat karne ka dhang bhi jaan lete toh acha hota nahi?

Virat: tum roko, tumhara turn bhi toh aayega! Tab dekhenge!
chalo abh jeevika bhabhi!

Viren looks into jeevika's eyes and says: PERFECT! Sabki khushi ko dhyan mein rakhna, bado ka paalan karna, sabki baat maanna, sabko khush rakhna, family se pyaar karna, kabhi jhoot na bolna, sabka khayal rakhna, apno ke gum batna, sharmana, sab kuch samajdari se karna, bure ka saath kabhi nahi dena,chaand se bhi zyada sundar, itni sushil, jiske aakhon mein se sachai jhalakti ho, jiski ek hassi ke liye mein apni jaan bhi de sakhta hoon, jo sabse zyada pyaari hai, a...

Virat: bas bas bhai! Airport aa gaya! (they looked outside and realised that they had already entered the airport zone and would reach in 2 mins) Aap paach minute se non-stop bole ja raho ho! Zara sabhar karo! Waise sirf ache point hi bolte jaaoge ya fir kuch shikayat bhi karoge...

Jeevika blushed and looked down.

Viren: usme juch bura hai hi nahi, bilkul perfect, she's pure like an angel!

Jeevika hugged viren immidietely! Viren felt like it was the greatest moment of the day! They were not ready to separate when manvi cleared her throat. They broke the hug and jeevika looked away!

Jeevika looked towards Viren with a mixture of gratitude and happiness, she just wanted to clutch him and never let him go! She thanked God for giving her such a loving and caring husband.

Viren: acha abh manvi! Tum apne behen ke liye kuch nahi bologi!

M: (overwhelmed at the love of viren for jeevika) kya bolu jeeju, aapne toh sabh kuch bol diya! Mein bas bohot khush hoon ki di ko aap jesa, itna pyaar karne waala, humsafar mila hain. Kyu di?

J: Haan manu, tune bilkul sahi kaha, (she looked at viren and said)  viren ji itne ache hai ki kabhi kabhi toh mujhe aisa lagta hai ki kya mein unke layak bhi hoon ya nah...

Viren put his finger on her lips...

Viren: Aisa kabhi wapas mat bolna! Tum bohot achi ho! I love you jeevika...

J: I love you too viren ji...

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I  hope you'll liked it! This time i tried and added some VirIka scenes... I'll add some family scenes next time.

----sajanfan004



Edited by sajanfan004 - 24 April 2012 at 3:54am

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Nice update...!!!!
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I enjoyed reading it...Loved it completelyClap

Thanks for the PM...Continue soon...
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