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A NEW SS-- FAMILY HOLIDAY (Page 3)

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Posted: 05 April 2012 at 8:18pm | IP Logged
Actually I think you should put Maya..cz It'll make the virman scenes more interesting with virat having to choose between the two..nd spending time with one of them..it'll b interesting for our detective Viren to look more closely at the problem lol..

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Posted: 05 April 2012 at 9:34pm | IP Logged
No Maya...

Love VirMan And Only VirManDay Dreaming

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Posted: 06 April 2012 at 12:20am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Dina98210

Love the concept...!!! Please make it very romantic between virman..!!! I love them.. And nooo maya plz...!!! Pm when u continue..!!!
 
I'm not that good at writing romantic scenes, but i will try my best to make it funny! Big smile
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Posted: 06 April 2012 at 5:38am | IP Logged

A FAMILY HOLIDAY

Hi!

Thanks for all your comments. Since you'll were so eager for the update,  here I am with the first part.

Please add me in your buddy list as then it will be easier for me to PM you'll!

I hope you'll enjoy it.

There are some short forms for what im going to write.

(SB- swamini bua, D- dadaji, I- Inder, C- Viren's chachi, S- shlok, J-Jeevika, M-Manvi, V- Vanshika (Viren's mom). Virat And Viren will be written in full form.

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Part: 1 ' The Journey Is About To Begin!

SB- Arrey Viren, Sara saaman gaari mein rakha do. Nikalne ka time ho gaya hai, ab humein aur der nahi karni chahiye.

Viren- Ji Bari Maa, lekin dadaji kaha hain?

SB- Bauji bas aate hi honge, (Dadaji enters) lo aa gaye.

Viren- Dadaji, dijiye mein aapka samaan bhi gari mein rakhwa deta hoon.

D- Haan beta, waise bhi hume jaldi pohochna hoga... kyuki hum singapore ja rahe hai toh international checking mein aur time lagega. Humari flight theek 12 baje ki hai, toh hisaab se humein 9 baje nikal jana chaiye.

Virat and Shlok come into the hall with their bags.

Virat- lekin dadaji, hum itniii jaldi ja ke karenege kya? I mean 3 ghantee?

S- Virat bhaiya, meine bachpan mein seekha tha ki jaldi pohochne mein koi nuksaan nahi hai magar agar late ho gaye toh flight miss ho jati hai.

Virat- Acha acha theek hai, hum abhi hi niklenge.

S- good. Aur 9 bajne mein abhi exactly (he checks his watch in dadaji style) 10 minute baki hai.

 

Sb- Waise Viren Yeh Jeevika aur Manvi kahi dikhai nahi de rahe?

Viren- Woh bari maa, jeevika packing complete kar ke aa rahi hai, aur manvi apne room mein hogi. Mein usse bula ke lata hoon.

Virat- Bhai aap rehne dijiye na, waise bhi aapko itna sara kaam ha ' Sara luggage gari mein set karwana hai, bhabhi ko dekhna hain, etc, etc. Manvi ko mein bula ke lata hoon. Aap ruko.

Viren  gives Virat a "mein sabh samajhta hoon" look and goes out to keep the luggage.

Virat goes to Manvi's room and knocks.

M: Kon Hai? (She shouts)

Virat: Mein- The best person in the world.

Manvi immidietely recognized virat's voice.

M: arrey tum world ke best kaise ho sakhte ho? World ki best person toh yaha room ke andar bethkar koi bandar se baat kar rahi hai.

The door opened and Virat came in.

Virat- Kisko bandar bola? Mujhe?

M- nahi (sarcastically), Mein na is room ke diwaro ko bandar bol rahi thi, is mirror ko, is bistar ko aur is pure room ko bandar bula rahi thi.

Virat- Waah Waah derfutiya! Im impressed! Tum sach bolna janti ho! Thats great! Congratulations! ( he held out a hand teasingly)

M: Kya? ( She didn't understand what Virat meant)

Virat: Tumne mujhse abhi abhi kaha na ki tumne mirror ko bandar bulaya?

M: Haan. toh?

Virat: well mein tumhe blame nahi kar sakhta.. Jab tum mirror ke samne khari thi aur khud ko mirror mein dekha to obvious hai ki apne aap hi muh se  'bandar'  nikal gaya! Tum lagti ho hi bandar jesi! (Virat Laughs).

M: ha ha ha ha (fake laugh) kya chutkula maara hai!!! Meri toh hasi hi nahi rukh rahi...

Virat: Tumne abhi kya kaha? Chutku whattt?

M: CHUTKULLA.

Virat: woh kya hota hai?

M: tumhe chutkula ka matlab nahi pata??? Sahi hi hai, tum janoge kaise.. Hindi mein toh zero ho hi! Haha... Matlab joke!!

Virat: Haan,uska matlab nahi pata kyuki mein tumhare jaise greek mein baat nahi karta hoon na.. Isliye!

M: Kya? Tumhari problem kya hai haan? subha subha chale aaye pakane? Khana nahi khaya hai kya, jo dimag khane aa gaye ho????

Virat: Relaxx .. (he said in a chilled 'virat' style) Mujhe yaha aake tumhe pakane ka koi shok nahi hai! Aur haan, mein bharpet bhojan kar liya hain, thanks for asking anyway!

M: Toh yaha aaye kyu ho?

Virat: Woh kya haina sabh tumhe bahar bula rahe hai! Humein abhi nikalna hai, isliye!

M: ABHI? Magar humari flight to 12 baje ki thi na? Abhi kyu nikalna hai? Timings prepond ho gayi hai kya?

Virat: Yahi sawaal meine bhi ki thi, magar mujhe jaldi pohochne par ek lecture diya gaya! Aur annt mein yahi fesla liya gaya ki hum theek 9 baje niklenge!

M: Oh.. (she looks at the watch and sees that it was already 9:05).. Nauuu Pachhh!!!!!

Virat looking shocked: Kyaa?

M: Tum mujhe yeh pehle nahi bata sakhte the kya! Aise toh itna bakar bakar karte rehete ho magar jab kaam ki baat bolne ka samay aaya toh baki ki fizool ki baat lekar beth gaye! Sabh tumhari galti hai! Naauuu paach! Humein toh nau bajhe nikalna tha aur hum pach minute already late hai! Agar sirf hum dono ja rahe hote na toh mujhe kuch farak nahi parta aur mein tumhe maaf bhi kar deti,magar yeh toh mogambo dadaji hai! Yeh humari baat nahi sunenge! Abh toh hum gaye! Agar bahar jaakar mujhe kisi se bhi daat pari naa toh mein saaf saaf tumhara naam laga doongi aur...

SHE HAD SAID ALL THIS IN ONE BREATH

Virat: CHUP CHUP... EK SHABD AUR MAT KEHENA WARNA MERE EARDRUMS FAT JAYENGE! Tum itna kese bol leti ho yaar? Aur woh bhi ek baar mein?

M: meine isme PHD ki hai! Bachpan se aadat hai. Mein di ko bhi bohot sunati hoon. Ek baar jab bolna shuru karti hoon to mujhe rokna thora mushkil hota hai. Magar...

Virat: abh fir mat chaaloo hona, pleeeaassee!

They looked at each others eyes for a few moments and Virat was laughing thinking of manvi's child behaviour! Manvi on the other hand was looking quite surprised on Virat laughing like this.

M: Kya? Abh khare khare chup chap hase kyu ja rahe ho? Chalna nahi hai kya!

Virat: Sorry...sorry..chalo.

Virat lifted manvi's bag and went out followed by manvi. There was no one in the hall. They went outside and saw 3 cars lined outside. All of them had sat down and were waiting for Manvi and Virat. As they came they went to the first car in which dadaji, swamini bua and vanshika were sitting. Virat went to them.

Virat: Sorry dadaji, bua, mom! Woh thori der ho gayi! Aap log chaliye hum gaari mein samaan rakh ke aate hai!

D: Kitni der lagti hai beta!

Virat: sorry dadaji, woh bas...

SB: Chalega...abh time waste mat karo, hum dus minute aise bhi late hai aur hum tumhe daat ke abh holiday ka mood kharab nahi karna chahate.

V: Beta, agle gaari mein cadambri, inder aur shlok betha hua hai aur ekdam aakhir ke gaari mein Viren aur Jeevika bethe hai. Tum dono unke saath jaake beth jao!

Virat: Ji maa...

Virat and Manvi put the bag in the last car and sit inside with Jeevika and Viren.

-------------------------------------------------------------------------------------Thats it for now!

I hope you'll like it!  Please do comment and press the like button also.

@VirIka Fans: I know there aren't any VirIka scenes in this update! Its more of VirMan. But next time I'll add a lot of VirIka scenes also.

I'll be waiting for your comments

--Sajanfan004

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Edited by sajanfan004 - 06 April 2012 at 5:44am

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Posted: 06 April 2012 at 5:49am | IP Logged
Great start so far... Looking forward to the next bit with hopefully more Virman and Virika :)

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Posted: 06 April 2012 at 6:01am | IP Logged
Great update.!
Continue soon and pm me when u update..
Thanks for this pm..!

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Posted: 06 April 2012 at 6:09am | IP Logged
Broken Heart No Maya 

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Posted: 06 April 2012 at 6:23am | IP Logged
Update fasttt!! please add a bit of virika ! n thank u ! it was great !

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