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A NEW SS-- FAMILY HOLIDAY (Page 12)

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Posted: 19 May 2012 at 1:34am | IP Logged
Originally posted by divyabhallax

when will u continue,want some virika romance xx
 
i said in the beginning of the update only that the next update will be on tuesday or wednesday... so on those days you can search the first few pages of the forum and if i have updated you will come to know... or you can also check the index...

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Posted: 19 May 2012 at 12:10pm | IP Logged
omg
it was so funny
MANVI CHOUDHARY se koi nai bach sakta
loved it
fab...

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Posted: 20 May 2012 at 5:35am | IP Logged
Originally posted by nishi12345

omg
it was so funny
MANVI CHOUDHARY se koi nai bach sakta
loved it
fab...
 
Yeahhh... i had a lot of fun writing the manvi part also!!
Im sooo glad that you liked the part and the manvi scene...
Thank You So Much!!
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Posted: 23 May 2012 at 1:24am | IP Logged

Hey Guyss!!! Im back with another update, as i said... on Wednesday..

THANKS: firstly, i want to thank all of you for the wonderful comments you'll have posted. And sorry to the people who didnt recieve PMs.. But please add me to your buddy list so that i can PM you from the next update.

NEXT UPDATE: i am leaving town for a week and therefore no update till then L. So the next update will be on Thursday-Friday. (31st or 1st)

ABOUT THIS UPDATE: this is a mixed one- virika, virman, family, jeeju saali vs devar bhabhi, and all!!

GENERAL: (VERY IMPORTANT): I know that i am stuck on the airport scenes for a long time but as this a SS i want to show every step for boarding,and i want to elaborate it. So please dont mind. You'll must be wondering when are they going to reach singapore, but that will take some time, there are a lot of scenes before that which i want to add! I hope you'll wont have any problem.
One more thing, in the beginning of this SS i had said chachu, chachi and shlok would be in it too... but then i completely forgot about them, and till now i havent added any scene for them! So from now, this ss wont include them..

RECAP: the passport confusion.

PLEASE SEE: I hope you'll like the update. I took a long time to write this update. And i really hope you'll like it. Please feel free to give suggestions and do comment! Dont forget to press the like button. J

So here it goes:-

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Part:5: On the airport (part:3)

J: Kya ho gaya virat? Mannu ne fir kuch garbaar kiya kya?

M: Di aapko humesha kyu lagta hai ki mein hi saari jar ki problem hoon... aap issi se pooch lo, meine iski bohot help ki, kyu bolo virat!

Virat: Bohot help ki matlab? Woh aadmi pehle se hi galat tha aur mein yeh janta tha, tumne zyada madad nahi ki, balki tumhare wajah se hi woh itna bharak gaya...

M: ACHA! Jhoooteee! Agar mein nahi hoti toh tum abhi bhi waha atke hote aur humari flight miss ho jaati! Meine tumhe bachaya aur...

Virat: waah waah wahh! Bol toh aise rahi ho jaise mein mar raha tha aur tum apni jaan ko khatre mein dhalke mujhe bachane aayi thi..

M: ek tarah se, mein wahi kar rahi thi!

Virat: please! Mein yeh tumhare bina bhi kar leta...

M: hauuu, mere bina toh tum jese bina aag ke maachis, bina mom ke candle, bina rang ke holi, aur bina patake ki diwali hooo!

Virat: tum tohh..

Viren: bas bas, abh tumlog  fir shuru mat ho jana... manvi, hum jante hai ki tumne virat ki madad hi ki hogi...

M: bilkul sahi jeeju..

J: Kyu? Viren ji, aap isse jante nahi ho, mein isse bachpan se jaanti hoon, bas yu samajh lijiye, ki jaha MANVI waha PROBLEM..

M: Di yeh kya keh rahi ho aap (makes a puppy face) MEIN aur PROBLEM????

They all laugh.

Viren: acha abh chalo security check karake hum jaldi se baaki logo ko join karte hai.

M: Chalo jeeju.

They go to the security counter. JeeMan goes to the ladies row and the Vadera brothers go to the mens row. Jeevika puts her purse in the hand bag checking, manvi puts her small bag, Viren puts his briefcase and virat puts his laptop bag.

They do the security and come out.

J: arrey Viren Ji, Yeh kya hai? (points towards his briefcase) mene toh yeh dekha hi nahi pehle.

Viren: yeh trolley pe rakhi thi, isliye tumne nahi dekha hoga...

J: haan, lekin isme hai kya?

Viren: woh... kuch zaroori case ke kagazat hai...

J: HOLIDAY MEIN BHI FILES?

Viren: thode hi hai, aur vese bhi jabh manvi busy hogi aur tum aur tumhara devar milte hai toh tumhe kisi aur ki kya fikar... usse samay toh mein bore ho jaunga! Toh yahi sabh zaroori kaam kar loonga..

J: aap holiday mein kaam kese kar sakhte ho! Dadaji ke kehne ke baad bhi aap nahi maane! Unhone kaha tha na ki koi kaam nahi karega inn chutiyon mein!

Viren: haan..bas..thoda..sa

J: nahi bilkul nahi...aap vacation par kaam nahi karenge and Thats final... aapko apni biwi, aur family ke saath waqt hi nahi bitana hai na...

Viren: jeevika aisi baat nahi hai..

J: nahi... abh toh mein aapko bilkul bhi kaam nahi karne doongi... chahe iskeliye mujhe dadaji se hi kyu na baat karni pare!

Saying this she marches of towards the lounge, where the others were waiting, with Viren following her trying to stop her.

Virman walk slowly towards the lounge.

Virat: Partnerr! Yeh tumhare bag mein kya hai?

M: tumse matlab.

Virat: bolo na partner, pleeassseee..

M: Nahi... (turning her face to the other side)

Virat: abh zyada bhav mat khao samjhii!!! Bolo na...

M: abh tum itna insist kar rahe ho toh theek hai, tum guess karo, mein  haan ya naa mein jawaab doongi..ok?

Virat: Okkk!!!

M: theek hai... toh shuru ho jao partner...!!

Virat thinks hard for a moment and a smile forms on his face..

M: E!! Itna muskura kyu rahe ho? Answer mil gaya kya? Ya kisi tarah se bag ke andar dekhna ka tarkeeb... dekho virat cheating mat karo haann?? Guess karna hai toh ache se karo warna chod do...

Virat: mein cheating kabhi nahi kartaa...

M: Achaa... toh yeh smile kyu??? Im sure tumhe pehle chance mein toh nahi milega..

Virat: Kyu? Kyu nahi mil sakhta?

M: tum mujhe itni achi tarah se pehechante nahi ho na abhi... first chance mein sahi guess karne ka record sirf jeevika di ka hi raha hai...woh meri har baat samjhti hai... tum nahi guess kar paoge first chance pe.. dekhna..

Virat: agar kar liya toh??

M: nahi kar paoge... jhoote umeede mat bandho..

Virat: agar kar liya tohh?

M: toh tum jo kahoge mein woh karungi... lekin sirf ek kaam haan?

Virat: hmmm... done... mera pehla aur sabse solliddd guess haii... jo mein janta hoon ki galat nahi hogaa!!

M: Kyaa???

Virat: KHANA!!!!!!

Manvi's mouth falls open, she stops walking and just stares at him as if there is a dinosaur standing in front of her... (an extinct animal)

Virat: arrey mein thodi na koi extinct animal hoon jo tum aise ghoor rahi ho (he simply, read manvi's thought)..

M: tumhe kaise pata?

Virat: tum meri partner ho yaar, mein tumhe itna toh janta hi hoon! Dekhaaa... tumhari jeevika di ka record toot gaya naa!! Hahahaha... mein tumhe bohot achi tarah se janta hoon partner, shayad tumhari di se bhi zyada..

M: BILKUL NAHI!! Meri di mujhe sabse ache se janti haii.. waise yeh sabh chodo, par tumhe pata kese chala...  

Virat: Manvi choudhary 1 ghante ke liye bhi bhooka nahi reh sakhti. Toh iss 5 ghante ki flight mein khak apna pet manoranjan nahi karegi?

M: 5 GHANTEEE!!

Virat: haan, tumhe nahi pata tha kya?

M: Di ne toh mujhe kaha ki 3 ghante ki hai! Di bhi na!

Virat: haha, acha hua bhabhi ne tumhe 3 ghante hi bola warna tum ek poora suitcase bharke laati khana ka, by the way flight mein tumhe khana milega..

M: Haan, lekin desi khana toh nahi hoga na..

Virat: hmm...woh toh hai... wese mein bhi flight ka khana nahi khata, mujhe gas ho jaati hai, toh if you dont mind, kya mein tumse thoda khana share..

M:BILKUL NAHI! ... (she overthinks it and then) Acha theek hai, tum bhi kya yaad rakhoge... thoda sa tumhe bhi de doongi..

Virat: thank you...

M: wese, tumhe ek baat batau?

Virat: haann...bolo na?

M: mujhe travelling bilkul pasand nahi hai, mujhe na chakar aata hai aur ulti bhi hoti hai, issliye mein aur di rishikesh me hi rehte rahe hai... AUR YEH TOH 5 GHANTE KA HAI WOH BHI AAKASH MEIN... neeche dekhte hi chakkar aayegi! (she tries to imagine how it is going to be as she has not been in it before)

Virat: mein tumhara khayal rakhunga! Kuch nahi hoga! Promisee...

Manvi smiles..

M: wese yeh plane kesa dikhta hai?

Virat: jab jaaogi na tab dekh lena! Hum wese bhi thodi der mein, flight board kar lenge..

M: theek hai!

Virat: wese bhoolna mat... tumhe mera ek baat manna parega abh.. JO BHI MEIN KAHOO...

M: Kyuu?

Virat: arrey, kesa dimag hai yaar tumhara, abhi toh bhola tha na ki (IMITATES A MONKEY'S VOICE) "agar tum pehle chance mein guess kar liye toh mein tumhari koi bhi ek baat manoongi" ...(BACK TO NORMAL VOICE) itni jaldi bhool gayi..

Manvi smacks him hard on his arm for the voice...

Virat: Ouch zara dheere...

She gives him a fake smile...Manvi bites her lips and gets a little freaked out on thinking about what the task will be... but then she thinks of putting up a brave face in front of Virat...

M: Haa..haan, thee..theek hai!! Dekha jayega.. abh chalo... sabh ko lag raha hoga ki hum mar gaye!! Itna samay barbaad karte ho na tum virattt!!

Virat: meinn... meinn...

She doesnt wait for him to finish the sentence and walks off towards the lounge with virat behind her.

They reach the lounge. 

SB: Acha hua bauji, ki aapne zidd karke hum sabh ko airport jaldi le aaye. Warna inn bacho ke karan pata nahi hum flight ke liye kitne late ho jate.

V: chodiye na didi...abh bache hai..

SB: Haan lekin Viren, tum toh then na inke saath, tum toh samay ka kitna khayal rakhte ho... toh fir?

Viren: Haan badi maa, woh asal me, virat ka passport... (he tells the whole story)... aur fir jeevika aur mein jaldi se yaha aa gaye.

D: manvi bete, thank you so much! Agar tum nahi hoti toh virat abhi bhi wahi betha hota!

M: Nahi nahi dadaji, theek hai! Mein toh aap hi ki family hoon na, toh fir? Apno ko thank you ya sorry thodi na bolte hai.

Dadaji smiles.

SB: Virat agli baar se khayal rakhna inn sabh cheezo ka..

Viren: Bilkul virat! Tum inn sabh cheezo ko abh lightly nahi le sakhte ho!

J: arrey aap sabh virat ko hi kyu daat rahe ho! Galti manvi ki bhi hai, usse iss tarah se uss insaan se baat nahi karni chaiye thi.

Manvi opens her mouth and thinks that how can her jeevika di scold her in front of everyone.

Virat mumbles: Mooh bandh karo, makhi ghus jayegi..

Manvi shuts her mouth and just stares at jeevika.

J: acha abh yeh sabh chodiye, dadaji mujhe aapse ek shikayat karni hai..

D: Kaisi shikayat bete?

Viren: Kuch nahi dadaji, woh bas aise hi keh rahi hai..

J: dadaji, aap inki baat mat suniye.. aap hi ne toh kaha tha na ki hum ek holiday pe jaa rahe hai toh humein kaam nahi karna chahiye bilkul bhi, aur family ke saath time spend karna chahiye aur enjoy karna chahiye...

D: haan...

J: lekin dadaji...

Viren: dadaji, waqt toh dekhiye, itni deri ho rahi hai, humein chalna chahiye, after all vadera khandan kabhi late nahi hotaa.. (he tries to interupt)

D: Viren, abhi 10 minute baaki hai, jeevika ko apni baat complete karne do...

D: Bolo jeevika..

J: ji dadaji, woh viren ji apna poora briefcase laye hai! Files se bhadke!! Aap hi bataiye ki yeh unka business trip hai ya holiday?

D: Viren? Kya tumne files carry kiye hai?

Viren: j..jii dadaji!

D: kya mein pooch sakta hoon kyu?

Viren: woh bohot important case tha, toh meine socha ki agar 10 din tak koi kaam nahi hoga toh..

D: viren, hum sabh jante hai ki tumhe kaam se pyaar hai, lekin tumhe pariwaar se bhi utna hi pyaar hona chahiye.. jo bhi ho, humara nuksaan, humara faida, lekin yeh 10 din tum kaam nahi karoge aur apne files ko haath tak nahi lagaoge. Jeevika aur baaki logo ke saath time spend karo! (turns to jeevika) jeevika beta, abh yeh zimadari tumhari, viren ko bilkul kaam mat karne dena aur agar woh koi bhi business calls attend kare toh foren mujhe bata dena... isse kaam se bohot pyaar hai magar im sorry viren mein tumhe holiday pe kaam nahi karne de sakhta...

J: thank you dadaji..

Viren: theek hai dadaji, jesa aap kahe...

D:aur haan viren agar..

SB: bauji, abh jaane dijiye na.. abh woh itna seious hai kaam ko lekar toh hume khush hona chahiye... lekin, holiday pe nahi! Abh aapne bol diya na... aur kitna daatenge mere pyaare se viren ko! (swamini always had a soft corner for viren)

D: Hmm... Abh chalo hum boarding gate ke paas jakar intezaar karte hain... flight ki ghoshna hone mein abhi bhi 10 minute hain..

Viren mouths a *Thank You* to his badi maa.. 'agar aaj bari maa nahi hoti, toh mein toh jata kaam se'...

Swamini smiles at him.

SB: Ji bauji.

They all go and sit near the boarding gate.

D: hum teeno gate ke saamne bethte hai, aur tum chaaro jao aur kha pee lo, 5 ghante ka safar hai aage.

Virat: ji dadaji!

They go on.

M: Bohot pyaas lag rahi hai! Mujhe coke peena hai! I love coke!

Viren: theek hai Sali sahiba... virat tu leke ja usse, mujhe jeevika se kuch baat karni hai..

Virat: Oye hoyye! Theek hai, chalo manvi, humein love birds ko zyada der tak wait nahi karana chahiye...

M: haan! chaloo chaloo!

They leave.

Viren: jeevika aaj toh tumne daat khila diya yaar..

J: you deserved it... aapko toh meri koi fikar hi nahi hai na.. aap toh mujhse bhi zyada kaam ko pyaar karte hai.

Viren: sshhh jeevika...(puts his fingers on her lips).. aisa nahi hai! Mein tumhe poore duniya se bhi zyada pyaar karta hoon..

J: baate banana toh koi aapse seekhe.. (she turns on the other side)

Viren: aisa nahi hai jeevika, tumhe mere pyaar par shak hai?

He goes her and cuddles her from behind.

Viren: jeevika, mujhe tumse kuch baat karni hai!

J: mujhe aapse koi baat nahi karni, pehle toh aap sirf maanvi ki side lete ho, doosra aapko mere saath time spend karna hi nahi hai, aapko sirf kaam hi soojhta hai har samayyy!

Viren: Acha im sorry! Jaha tak manvi ki side lene ka baat hai, toh tum bhi toh virat ki side le rahi thi, aur jaha tak kaam ki baat meine kaha na ki mein kaam nahi karunga..

J: woh sirf isliye kyuki dadaji ne kaha, mere bolne par toh aapko koi farak hi nahi parta..

Viren: Dadaji ke baato ka mujh par bohot asar parta hai, lekin usse kai zyada asar mujhe tumhari baato se parta hai... I REALLY LOVE YOU... aur mein tumhare liye, apni jaan bhi de sakhta hoon... tum kuch maango aur mein naa doon?

Jeevika remains silent...

Viren: dekho jeevika, abh please maan jao na... dekho hum holiday pe ja rahe hai na, mein roos ke nahi jana chahata.. please gussa mat ho...maan jao na!

Jeevika thinks for a moment.

J: aap sahi ke rahe hai, mujhe is trip ke dauran apmna aur aapka mood nahi kharab karnaa.. im sorry too... and i also really love you..

Viren smiles and suddenly spots that his napkin is already red and that jeevika needs to change it. He sees a medical store.

Viren: jeevika woh dekho, medicine shop, waha mere saath chalo...

J: Par kyu..

Viren: bas chalo, mujhe tumhare liye dawai kharidana hai...

J: zarwat nahi hai viren ji..

Viren: bilkul hai... chalo

He takes her to the medicine store and asks the man for a gauge, cotton, and medicine and takes jeevika to the chairs.

Viren: Betho yaha...

He makes her sit on the chair.

Viren: haath laaoo..

J: viren ji please dawai nahi, waha jake dawai laga dijiye ga abhi sirf patti kar dijiye..

Viren: Bilkul nahi... mein tumhari koi baat nahi sunoonga...

J: Viren ji, please, mere liye! Iske baad, mein aapki har baat sunoongi..waise bhi, yaha harbari mein toh ache se dawai lagegi bhi nahi...aur sirf 5 minute hi toh reh gaye hai.

Viren thinks for a minute and then says: theek hai... lekin waha chalkar sabse pehle tum dawa lagaogi..

Jeevika relieved for the moment said: haan haan...pakka...

Viren removes the hanky and sees her hand... Seeing so much of blood and the deep cut on his beloved jeevika, he feels very sad and tears fill in his eyes... jeevika notices this and wipes his eyes before the tears even touch his cheek.

J: isiliye mein nahi chahati thi ki aap mera patti kare... aap itna emotional ho jate hai... itni fikar karte hai...

Viren: acha toh yeh meri FM keh rahi hai ki MEIN kitna fikar karta hoon...haan?

He smiles and finishes her patti.

Viren: acha abh tum yaha ruko mein tumhare liye garama garam  coffee leke aata hoon..

J: Aapne toh jese mera man padh liya, mein abhi aapko yahi kehne waali thi ki mujhe coffee chahiye.

Viren: mein tumhari man ki aur dil ki saari baate par sakhta hoon, tumhare aakhon mein dekh kar keh sakhta hoon ki tumhe is waqt kya chahiye aur kya karne ka man kar raha hai.. MANVI KE BHASHA MEIN "AAKHIR PATI HOON TUMHARA, DIL KA RISHTA HAI HUMARA..."

They both share a laugh and viren goes and gets 2 cups of coffee and hands one to jeevika.

Viren: dhyan se, garam hai.

J:hmm, wese viren ji, abhi 12 baje hai, hum waha tak kariban 6 baje tak pohochenge aur hotel pohochte pohochte toh 7 baj jayega...

Viren: haan... kyu?

J: woh...kuch nahi...aise hi..

Viren: mein tumhari man ki har baat par sakhta hoon.. seedhe seedhe bolo ki kya hua?

J: woh kya hum waha shopping kar sakhte hai? Mujhe beeji, bari beeji, chachi, chachu aur khaskar dabbu ke liye kuch kharidna hai... agar aaj nahi toh hum kabhi aur bhi ja sakhte hai...

Viren: hum toh shopping  jayenge hi jayenge...tum fikar mat karo...lekin aaj shayad dadaji aur baaki sabh thak gaye honge isliye hum koi aur din jayenge...shopping toh sabhi ko karni hai...

Jeevika smiles and says: Thank you so much, viren ji.

Viren: arrey, isme thank you wali konsi baat hai? Chalo abh coffee peelo, thandi ho jayegi...

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Thats it for now.. I tried making the update really long, and i hope you'll enjoyed reading it. Next update will be on the 31st or the 1st...

Thank You!

--sajanfan004

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Posted: 23 May 2012 at 1:54am | IP Logged
very nice part.. now waiting for some virman scenes too in the next update... 

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Posted: 23 May 2012 at 3:03am | IP Logged
Loved it...! Great update thx for the pm, :) will be waiting to know what task virat will give manvi LOL LOL Big smile

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Posted: 23 May 2012 at 3:44am | IP Logged
loved the virika part.. so sweet!! :) looking forward for the next update

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Posted: 23 May 2012 at 5:08am | IP Logged
loved the update
it was fab

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