Posted: 07 June 2012 at 2:20am | IP Logged
I AM Terribly Sorry for not commenting on any of your updates! Leave alone comment, I didn't even read it properly earlier, but yesterday I got some time out, and I sat here reading all of your updates from Chappy One to Chappy Thirteen!! And My, My!!! It couldn't have been better!!!
You are a phenomenal Writer, Chani Di!!! It is AWESOME, AMAZING, BEAUTIFUL, ENCAPSULATING, LOVELY, HORRIBLY GOOD!!!!! All the BEST adjectives in the dictionary, can be used to describe this Phenomenal, Historic Story!!!!! The backdrop is one of the most perfect one's you'll ever get, for their Never Dying Love!!!
Every chapter had at least a small scene comprising of their encounter or fall out, anything, but you gave us lethal doses of them in every chapter, with sensuousness weaved in through and through from the start to the end!! I, at a time, actually felt like I was reading a Mills n' Boons story, written by YOU!!!! God!! Wouldn't it be lovely to publish it into a book, in the category of Historical Romances, that has just released a few of it's first ventures this June!!!!!!
I would like to dedicate a poem written by me to you and your Magnificent story... Here goes...
Bas..Chhod Diya Yaheen..
Suno suno, yeh taare mere..*wiping tears and sweat off my eyes and forehead, respectively* Phew!!! *sniff* Well, I was actually crying while writing this thing out!! You know, I wanted to feel the pain that she went through after the announcement of Arnav's marriage to the Princess of Merwar/Mewar!! Of course this is from Khushi's point of view! Because most of the story focuses more on Khushi rather than Arnav!! :D Well, it's my POV!!!
Jade hue hain jo iss kaale andhere mein..
Maa-baap ki jo
chhaaya deti hain mujhe..
Tujhse ek baat kehni hain..
Zindagi ne aapko chheen
Le gayi voh vaapis aapko vahi pe..
Jahaan sab hain baraabar ki
baat, baraabar ka pyaar
Aur khwaahishon ki bauchhar..
Chhod gayi mujhe akela,
duniya se yaheen..
Rajkumari hoon ya nahi,
Bataake bhi nahi gayi..
Yaadon ke saath ji rahi hoon apke,
Sapnon mein ud rahi hoon khulke,
jo di thhi aapne,
Chhin gayi ek hi pal mein..
"Sapne dekhna koi paap nahi,
karne mein koi rukaawat nahi",
Kahaan thha Aapne mujhse yaheen..
Saath nibhaane ka vaada kiya toh nahi,
Lekin maine maana yahi,
Par le gayi mujhse door apko zindagi,
Bas...Chhod Diya Yaheen..
Ladti rahi main Khud se,
Unke rang mein na dhalne ki
Unke rivaazon mein na bandhne ki koshish se,
Apna haq maangne ki
Udne...ki chaahat se, Azaadi ki maang se,
Ladti rahi Main, Apne
Phir ek din, aayi main yahaan,
Ik jagah jahaan,
Baatein karti thhi Hawaa,
Jahaan thha khula Aasmaa.
Ek din, Voh mila mujhe,
Jodhpur ke Yuvraj thhe,
Chhua usne mujhe aise,
Ki Dill khil uthha Khushi se..
Dikhaaya usne mujhe apni Zindagi,
Sparsh thhi har jagah, Prakruti ki,
Khushboo thhi Azaadi ki,
Aur Asmaa.. bas khatam hi nahi hoti thhi..
Udne ki koshish toh ki,
Par main bandhi hui milli,
Pankh lage thhe lekin,
Udne ki chaahat...Voh nahi milli..
Chaadar ki tarah, Usne mujhe odhliya..
Chhukar, yeh ehsaas dilaaya,
hoon ik Naadaan Parinda...
Jaise jaise pal beet-te gaye,
Vaise vaise hum paas aate gaye..
Aur ek din vahi hua jo hona thha...
Humein ho gaya...Pyaar.. ek doosre se..
Nazrein doobi nigaahon mein, ek doosre ki,
Rishta aise juda ki,
Ban gaya ek atoot sa vaada,
Jo pura hoti hi gayi...
Humaari aatma ek ho gayi...
Sapne hue sach mere,
Sapne hue sach uske,
Kyunki dono ke thhe vahi sapne..
Jab jud gaye hum is atoot se rishte mein,
Toh pata chala ki hum dono hain,
Iss duniya mein Naadaan Parindey...
Ghar laut ke aaya mera mann,
Vaapis laut ke aaya mera tann,
Bandhi hui Naadaan main,
Azaad ho gayi ek hi jhatke mein..
Udne ki chaahat puri hui meri,
Saans lene ki Raahat aakhir mein mill gayi..
Lekin aisa kyun hota hain,
Ki sapne dekhte hain,
Aur puraa kar bhi lete hain,
Uss Khushi mein jab hum behte rehte hain,
Lehre jab humein pyaar se chhoote hain,
Unhi lehron ki aakaar itni badi ho jaati hain,
Ki sab...sab kuch ek hi pal mein,
Kho jaata hain...?
Dhoka milla mujhko,
Dhoka milla mujhko,
Chhin gaya voh sab kuch mujhse,
Jo bhi thha bacha paas mere...
Thod diya mere dill ko usne,
Vaade nikle sab hi jhoote,
Thod diya iss rishte ko usne,
Itni Asaani se,
Ki pata bhi chalne nahi diya,
Ki sab khel thha racha uska...
Jo pehle hua, hua vaheen,
Zinda Khushi ko maar daala vaapis yaheen,
Saason ko le liya, bas shareer ko chhod diya yaheen,
Bas..Chhod Diya Yaheen..
Ab bataaon mujhe,
Kya main Zinda hoon?
Kya main...Zinda hoon?
Thank you for all the PMs, Chani Di!!!
Love ya loads!!
P.S.: Do tell me how my poem is!! I'll be posting it in my collection!!! :D
Edited by AnnieKittWatt - 07 June 2012 at 11:13am