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enchanted23
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Joined: 15 October 2011
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Hey guys, this is going to be a short story exploring the "what if" scenario if Kesar never left for hostel and did not discover Dushy's secret for a while, his growing attraction for Gulaal and Gulaal's handling of the situation and ofcourse the confrontation after the secret finally comes out...I am not going to re-write the entire journey just some specific scenarios that will be altered to how I would perceive it but the goal still remains same in IT term this is called variable analysis throwing different information at a situation while keeping the end objective in mind...Please let me know if you guys will be interested in reading it...
Dedicated to Jzee
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Clock stuck 11.00pm increasing Gulaal's anxiety manifold, all her anger from the afternoon having read a note from Kesar's School Headmaster already thing of past, Worried and fearful about his whereabouts at this late hour, she decided to go and look out for him, overruling MB's order forbidding the same...
Having searched all the known hideouts, her heartbeats were rising steadily with each failure, It was unlike Kesar not to come and seek answers to his questions, in all of last two years of knowing him this was the first time where he had decided to keep what happened in the school to himself, "Kaha ho tum Kesar, Hey bhagwaan mere Kesar ki raksha karna, main tumhare har sawal ka jawab dene ke tayar hu Kesar bus ghar wapas aa jao jaldi se"
Knowing Gulaal will not take kindly to his skirmish in the school and all his questions will meet the same fate as his past queries, he was hell bent on buying time away to reflect on all those inner turmoil that he had been experiencing off late which started from innocent remark from his classmate about having a beautiful wife awaiting anxiously his return from school, what did he really mean, and why did that other fellow smiled as if there was more to this remark and why did MB wanted him to move into a separate room now, he always slept with Gulaal since the day Vasant bha left both of them and went away never to return, Why did Gulaal get angry at his remark to Talli about not walking into their room unannounced ,he has never been shy of changing clothes in front of Gulaal but that did not mean same rule applied to Talli, after all Gulaal was his wife, that's what everyone says right...
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Chapter 1- http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=3
Chapter 2 - http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=7
Chapter 3 - http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&PID=55146543�
Chapter 4 - http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&PID=55146554�
Chapter 5 - http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&PID=55459635�
Chapter 6 - http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=16
Chapter 7- http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=16
Chapter 8 and 9 - http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=19
Chapter 10 - http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=21
Chapter 11 - http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=25
Chapter 12 - http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=28
Chapter 13 - http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=34
Chapter 14-http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&PID=58261324�
Chapter 15- http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&PID=58751699�
Chapter 16 - http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=41�
Chapter 17 - http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=43
Chapter 18 - http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=44
Chapter 19 -http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=45
Chapter 19 - http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=47
Chapter 20 - http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=48�
Chapter 21 - http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=50�
Chapter 22 - http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&PID=62384971�
Chapter 23 - http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=52�
Chapter 24 http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&PID=63700777�
Chapter 25 http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=54Chapter 26 Part II http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=57
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minizz
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Joined: 28 September 2011
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The first part is simply wonderful.You picked the perfect scene to start off with.As I said earlier my fav part is the last paragraph.That is so,so good.It's like you got a peek into Golu's mind.I swear,I can see Ali act it out brilliantly.Even in the show his classmates had started teasing him regarding Gulaal and I am sure after a time this topic would have come up.I loved how Golu could not understand the meaning of his wife waiting for him-so cute and yet so poignant.It reminds me of Kesar's dialogue at the shaadi fiasco "mera bachpan chin gaya Gulaal...waqt se pehle hi mujhe pati bana diya gaya..."
No one ever understood how deeply it would affect the psyche of a 12 year old kid,no one took time out and explain it to him.Everyone thought bacha hai and left it at that...Now how can you blame the kid when he grows up to have feelings for his own wife.The following 3 member(s) liked the above post:
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manzilmukul
IF-Rockerz
Joined: 14 April 2011
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Oh wow Aditi 
..I want updates every hour RES
EDit
My Haseen Qatil...Tu sach mein mujhe jaan se maar degi yaar.
First of all huge huge thanks for starting this
..I always wanted to write something on this.Thanks for making my dream come true.Who will be a better person than you who can delve into the mind of Kesar -a growing one and bring out the tiniest details about his changing feelings for Gulaal.
Aditi I agree with Mini...Kesar's statement was such a poignant one -"Mera bachpan chin gaya Gulaal.."
Yes!! A 12 year old boy just matures overnight into a pati.This theme is so so gripping as Teenage is not merely about growing physically but a lot more changes occurs psychologically.No wonder Teens is a very tender age..which lays the foundation of your future.I am so desperately looking forward to the updates from now on...Coz I just can't wait anymore for the little details from you..My huge hugswa to you..
Please update pretty soon
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MR21
IF-Dazzler
Joined: 09 September 2011
Posts: 4933
...this is an amazing concept......the changes that he is facing now...whether mb wanting him to change his room, gulaal not liking him asking talli to be formal while entering their room, his comfort with gulaal n not the same with talli...n n n his final declaration thinking gulaal as his wife considering every one's words abt their relation......I am just loving the way u started it...I am looking forward to read the next update ...well I know we both r busy with lots of work these days...but u can try to update the chapter n I can try to comment on the update respectively 
...your IT obsession...u r discussing IT logic here 
...your love for IT is unbelievable!!!The following 4 member(s) liked the above post:
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alanta
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Joined: 12 May 2011
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I always wanted to read an SS from u of Gulsar and esp from Kesar's POV...and when I came back from a short break,..this was really a surprise for me...above all the concept and the instant from the show u chose for this really amazed me..I am so glad yaar,,really I am not getting the words..this particular concept needed more exploration than what we saw in the show..they gave it a conclusion by Kesar's out burst in the mandap..there was no any further discussion...it still remained as something which only bothered Kesar...in fact no one dared to speak about it to Kesar.....I am waiting for the updateThe following 3 member(s) liked the above post:
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sharmishta
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. waitn 4 nxt chappi.. updt soon... for dis awsme cretn..The following 3 member(s) liked the above post:
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enchanted23
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