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Gulaal: What If chp 26(part II) upd Pg 57

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Hey guys, this is going to be a short story exploring the "what if" scenario if Kesar never left for hostel and did not discover Dushy's secret for a while, his growing attraction for Gulaal and Gulaal's handling of the situation and ofcourse the confrontation after the secret finally comes out...I am not going to re-write the entire journey just some specific scenarios  that will be altered to how I would perceive it but the goal still remains same in IT term this is called variable analysis throwing different information at a situation while keeping the end objective in mind...Please let me know if you guys will be interested in reading it...

Dedicated to JzeeSmile 

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Clock stuck 11.00pm increasing Gulaal's anxiety manifold, all her anger from the afternoon having read a note from Kesar's School Headmaster already thing of past, Worried and fearful about his whereabouts at this late hour, she decided to go and look out for him, overruling MB's order forbidding the same...

 

Having searched all the known hideouts, her heartbeats were rising steadily with each failure, It was unlike Kesar not to come and seek answers to his questions, in all of last two years of knowing him this was the first time where he had decided to keep what happened in the school to himself,  "Kaha ho tum Kesar, Hey bhagwaan mere Kesar ki raksha karna, main tumhare har sawal ka jawab dene ke tayar hu Kesar bus ghar wapas aa jao jaldi se"

 

Knowing Gulaal will not take kindly to his skirmish in the school and all his questions will meet the same fate as his past queries, he was hell bent on buying time away to reflect on all those inner turmoil that he had been experiencing off late which started from innocent remark from his classmate about having a beautiful wife awaiting anxiously  his return from school, what did he really mean, and why did that other fellow smiled as if there was more to this remark and why did MB wanted him to move into a separate room now, he always slept with Gulaal since the day Vasant bha left both of them and went away never to return, Why did Gulaal get angry  at his remark to Talli about not walking into their room unannounced ,he has never been shy of changing  clothes in front of Gulaal but that did not mean same rule applied to Talli, after all Gulaal was his wife, that's what everyone says  right...

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Chapter 1http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=3 

Chapter 2http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=7

Chapter 3http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&PID=55146543&#55146543

Chapter 4http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&PID=55146554&#55146554

Chapter 5http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&PID=55459635&#55459635

Chapter 6http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=16

Chapter 7http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=16

Chapter 8 and 9http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=19

Chapter 10http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=21

Chapter 11http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=25

Chapter 12http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=28

Chapter 13http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=34

Chapter 14-http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&PID=58261324&#58261324

Chapter 15http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&PID=58751699&#58751699

Chapter 16http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=41&#59134384

Chapter 17http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=43

Chapter 18http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=44

Chapter 19 -http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=45

Chapter 19http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=47

Chapter 20 - http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=48&#60981946

Chapter 21http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=50&#61487647

Chapter 22 http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&PID=62384971&#62384971

Chapter 23http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=52&#63256521

Chapter 24 http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&PID=63700777&#63700777

Chapter 25  http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2887260&TPN=54 

Edited by enchanted23 - 17 September 2012 at 5:31am

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Posted: 15 March 2012 at 7:37am | IP Logged
resBig smile

AditiHugThe first part is simply wonderful.You picked the perfect scene to start off with.As I said earlier my fav  part is the last paragraph.That is so,so good.It's like you got a peek into Golu's mind.I swear,I can see Ali act it out brilliantly.Even in the show his classmates had started teasing him regarding Gulaal and I am sure after a time this topic would have come up.I loved how Golu could not understand the meaning of his wife waiting for him-so cute and yet so poignant.It reminds me of Kesar's dialogue at the shaadi fiasco "mera bachpan chin gaya Gulaal...waqt se pehle hi mujhe pati bana diya gaya..."CryNo one ever understood how deeply it would affect the psyche of a 12 year old kid,no one took time out and explain it to him.Everyone thought bacha hai and left it at that...Now how can you blame the kid when he grows up to have feelings for his own wife.

I am glad you are picking up this point and I am looking forward to the rest of it especially how he deals with his changing feelings for Gulaal and how does Talli figure in all of this?waiting eagerly for the next installmentBig smile


Edited by minizz - 15 March 2012 at 10:39am

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Posted: 15 March 2012 at 8:21am | IP Logged

Oh wow Aditi Star..I want updates every hour RESClap

EDit 

My Haseen QatilStar...Tu sach mein mujhe jaan se maar degi yaar.Clap

First of all huge huge thanks for starting thisEmbarrassed..I always wanted to write something on this.Thanks for making my dream come true.Who will be a better person than you who can delve into the mind of Kesar -a growing one and bring out the tiniest details about his changing feelings for Gulaal.

Aditi I agree with Mini...Kesar's statement was such a poignant one -"Mera bachpan chin gaya Gulaal.."

Yes!! A 12 year old boy just matures overnight into a pati.This theme is so so gripping as Teenage is not merely about growing physically but a lot more changes occurs psychologically.No wonder Teens  is a very tender age..which lays the foundation of your future.I am so desperately looking forward to the updates from now on...Coz I just can't wait anymore for the little details from you..My huge hugswa to you..Hug

Please update pretty soonDay Dreaming



Edited by manzilmukul - 15 March 2012 at 1:47pm

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Posted: 15 March 2012 at 9:29am | IP Logged
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where was I...res Big smile

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Aditi Hug...this is an amazing concept...

The way u started the first para...just wow...the questions he always have due to the way every one talk to him abt his rishtha with gulaal...his confusion abt every thing related to the relation they share except that he likes the naming tag they share...its this phase when gulaal stopped explaining him anything abt their relation...if she ever tried to let him knew then it would have never lead him to this confusion...2 years he never got those answers n so now he is not even asking her as his previous experience say that its no use in asking her abt this as she will never give any answers...kesar is missing n now she wants to talk to him abt this...typical gulaal...
The last para is my favorite Embarrassed...the changes that he is facing now...whether mb wanting him to change his room, gulaal not liking him asking talli to be formal while entering their room, his comfort with gulaal n not the same with talli...n n n his final declaration thinking gulaal as his wife considering every one's words abt their relation...

Excellent concept Aditi Clap...I am just loving the way u started it...I am looking forward to read the next update Day Dreaming...well I know we both r busy with lots of work these days...but u can try to update the chapter n I can try to comment on the update respectively Wink...your IT obsession...u r discussing IT logic here LOL...your love for IT is unbelievable!!!



Edited by MR21 - 16 March 2012 at 2:12am

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Aditi - May I begin with how delighted I am you have given this a shot?! Really!!! Gulaal may have ended too soon, but it has left behind a rich legacy of a plot that can be alter explored in so many ways - and there are so many people on this forum, who do it exceedingly well - you being one =)

I'm here from my phone and want to leave a longer comment - so reserved for that - just for the moment, that is the kind of start I'd expect from you, coming for something tentative but very potential! All geared up for this short story, Aditi style! *hugs* for the dedication *beams and grins goofy*

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Aditi..HugI always wanted to read an SS from u of Gulsar and esp from Kesar's POV...and when I came back from a short break,..this was really a surprise for me.Embarrassed..above all the concept and the instant from the show u chose for this really amazed me..I am so glad yaar,,really I am not getting the words..this particular concept needed more exploration than what we saw in the show..they gave it a conclusion by Kesar's out burst in the mandap..there was no any further discussion...it still remained as something which only bothered Kesar...in fact no one dared to speak about it to Kesar..
Aditi u are doing an excellent job dearClap...I am waiting for the updateSmile


Edited by alanta - 16 March 2012 at 3:36am

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hi aditi... kya baath he.. new ss n dat too of pre leap days... good going yaar..Clap. waitn 4 nxt chappi.. updt soon...
ye le tons of Hug for dis awsme cretn..


Edited by sharmishta - 16 March 2012 at 1:03am

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Hey guys, Thanks a lot for your lovely comments, will reply to all of you individually this weekend and as far as updates are concerned it will be on weekends only,hope that's acceptable, love you allHug

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