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Posted: 07 March 2012 at 9:53am | IP Logged
thanks for changing OS to SS :)
lovely update...poor mirchi madam..

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Bidzie, again You've done a great job Clap
Awesome, ur writing skills are superb Star
keep writing, we all love it! Thumbs Up

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Posted: 07 March 2012 at 11:34am | IP Logged
Hey just came across your OS. Brilliantly written. Clap

Please do continue, I would love to read more.

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Posted: 08 March 2012 at 4:05am | IP Logged
@ bidzie :
 
               first of all, a big sorry for commenting late. coming back to your SS (its not an OS anymore nowLOL), i'm touched. specially the way you depicted mohan's helplessness ..he's unable to control his emotions, unable to save Megha, unable to console Nanhi and most importantly, all the joys that they had waited for since the case started on Amar, to see them suddenly being shattered by a ghastly accident...very well described Clap!! update soon, we all are waiting for it. ohh bdw, where is the vyas family Confused?? they are atleast supposed to be in the hospital with their DIL isnt it Confused??
 
 
ps : just loved your avi. can i have it ?? Smile

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Posted: 08 March 2012 at 6:16am | IP Logged
Bidzi- Wow ...fantastic stuff ...w8ing for th Weekend Updt

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Bidz when r v getting update... :-)

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Posted: 11 March 2012 at 1:18pm | IP Logged
Part 4
New Feelings


"Jo kabhi nahi ho sakta,woh sab kyu main soch raha hu?" Mohan questioned himself confusedly. His heart felt like to cry contently but why was it happening? Till date, he was strong enough to hide his feelings and pain,so now why wasn't he able to control himself? Different thoughts were hanging around in his mind and he had no answers of them. Frustrated,he wiped off his tears that flowed from his eyes unknowingly,turned back and just then,he saw Jiji coming.

Jiji saw Mohan and freezed. "Megha..." her voice weakened and Mohan understood what she was going through. He slowly replied,"ICU mein doctor unhe dekh rahe hai...aur Nanhi mandir mein hai."

Rushing towards the ICU,Jiji peeked inside. Her eyes were filled with tears. She was not at a state to say anything but her heart pinched severely on seeing Megha unconscious. "Amar ko hum pehele hi kho chuke hai Megha...ab tumhe nahi kho sakte." she said in a painful voice,closed her eyes,folded her hands and prayed to God for Megha's safety. Her phone rang. "City Hospital...haan jaldi aa jaiye." she said and disconnected the call.

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"Bhagwanji...meri mummy ko thik kar dijiye plz..." Folding her hands and sitting on knees,Nanhi prayed to God with her eyes closed. Mohan came and sat next to her. He observed her keenly and then turning his face to Krishna's idol,he said in his mind,"Chavanni ko aise nahi dekh sakta...plz uski dua kabul kar lijiye..."

Jiji arrived there and her heart was filled with overwhelming feelings of affection on seeing Mohan and Nanhi praying. She knew that both of them were praying for only one thing - Megha's safety, but the next moment,she wondered as to why Mohan would pray for Megha and pushing these thoughts aside for the time being,she walked inside,opening her sandals and sat beside Nanhi.

"Nanhi..." Jiji quietly called out. Nanhi opened her eyes and looked beside. "Jiji bua.." she innocently said and hugged her. "Mummy thik ho jayegi naa?"she asked in a hopeful voice.

"Haan beta...aapki mummy jaldi thik ho jayegi. Aisey roiye mat.." Jiji consoled her. Mohan silently witnessed it and standing up,he headed towards the ICU again.

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"Doctor,Mrs.Vyas ab kaisi hai?" Mohan desperately asked the doctor seeing him coming out of the ICU.

"Dekhiye..abhi hum kuch kehe nahi sakte...koshish kar rahe hai." the doctor seriously replied and left.

For a moment,Mohan numbly stood thinking what the doctor said. He then looked at Megha,who seemed paler than before and deeply said, "Tumhare liye tumhari family sabse important hai, haina? Ussike liye tumhe thik hona padega. Apni baccho ke liye tumhe vapas aana padega aur phir mere li--" Mohan stopped on realizing what he was going to say. He also realized how he was addressing her as 'tum' all of a sudden. His eyes widened in astonishment. Tears again flowed explaining the state of his heart. He was finding really hard to control himself. Finding no way to hide his feelings, he rushed out of the hospital.


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"Tum thik ho?"Guru asked Mohan for the tenth time. Mohan just quietly sat on the couch. He seemed to be in deep thoughts.His eyes were red and overall,he looked dull and the usual brightness on his face was somewhere lost.

Guru surely noticed it and he became worried. "Kuch hua hai kya?"

"Mrs.Vyas ka accident.." Mohan plainly replied.

"Kya? Kaise hua yeh sab?" Guru asked in a shocked tone.

"Ek truck ne zor se takkar mar diya.." Mohan answered in the same way as before.

Guru could understand what Mohan was going through. Before he saw him like this when his heart was terribly broken by someone and now the history was repeating again. Mohan Bhatnagar looked broken. Guru could read his feelings on his face and decided to talk about it later as this was not the right time.

"Fikar mat karo bhaiyaji..unhe kuch nahi hoga. Hum sab ki dua aise khaali nahi jaayegi." Guru consoled Mohan and before Mohan could tell him anything,he left to the kitchen.

With a plain face,Mohan thought about all occurrences that day happened with full concentration - they won the case, Dinanath threatened him and Megha had an accident. After a moment, he had a kind of knowing look on his face. He asked himself, "Kahi Dinanath ne tou yeh sab nahi karwaya?" As he said it,he felt a strange anger growing in his heart which wasn't usual and ordinary that he would feel for anyone for whatever reason. This certain anger of him was mingled with his unspoken fear of losing the one to whom his heart was getting drawn to.


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Precap:
Vyas family arriving at the hospital from a pilgrimage...
Mohan staring at Megha from far away with teary eyes and Nanhi seeing it...


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That's all...Well,to tell the truth,the CVs are rocking in scripting this show and I can't even go near their talent...so I wonder if everything I wrote was realistic and in the characters or not...plz pardon me for any mistakes and start commenting! Btw thanks to all of you for liking my work and commenting on my updates!


Edited by -Bidzie- - 11 March 2012 at 2:28pm

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Posted: 11 March 2012 at 2:23pm | IP Logged
Great update Bidzie Smile

Beautifully written. The conflict of emotions that Mohan was going through were etched perfectly.

Waiting for the next chapter already.

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