Pyar ki Daastan | Chaand Chupa Badal Mein

Neetika

@edwardcullen19

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Posted: 12 years ago

Hi all wrote some lines after such a long time...wanted to share it with you all...i know i am not a good poet at all so please ignore my silly mistakes.

Pyaar ki suno hai ye ek daastan
Basa hai jisme ek ladki ka jahan

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Wo bholi si , gumsum si,
har gali se gujarti thi
Chup-Chup ke ek ladke ko
Woh to Dekha karti thi

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Karne lagi thi pyaar usse
Par kaise kare izhaar usse
Phir ladke ne kiya pyaar ka izhaar
Par kiya ladki ne kyun inkaar

Asli baat thi sabse chupi
Musibat main thi ladki phasi
Behen ke pyaar se hokar majboor
Ladki ne kiya apna sapna choor-choor,

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Ladki ka dil toot gaya
Pyaar ka jahan usse rooth gaya.

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Phir aaya ek pagal ladka
Dekh jise Ladki ka dil dhadka
Par phir suru hui takraar
Ladki ko tha pyaar se inkaar

Edited by edwardcullen19 - 12 years ago

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Neetika

@edwardcullen19

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Posted: 12 years ago

i know i am not a good poet at all...so guys please bear my poetry
here just want to share one thing with you all, some members prefer to go to Kinshuk's and Neha's new show forums rather than staying here...i am not saying that it's not good but please try to be active here too
many members try a lot to make this forum active and i am quite sad with the response they got from you all...please friends, don't remain quite and post your views about topics made in the forum

about the poem it's not the whole poem...i will complete it with it's second part

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aamina

@-aamina-

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Posted: 12 years ago

Very nice lines Neeti and looking forward to more.. Aww miss my NivRen :(

Neeti, ccbm forum is the first forum I joined and it will always be special just like NivRen/KinHa.

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sammy_2010

@sammy_2010

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Posted: 12 years ago

Lovely thread Neeti.

Miss CCBM and Nivren.😭

Nivren is the only jodi I fell in love with till now. They will always remain in my heart and in my mind.

Edited by sammy_dolly - 12 years ago

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Dilbole_ShiOmRu

@Dilbole_ShiOmRu

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Posted: 12 years ago

Very nice post i loved the poetry keep writing

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NiViren-Raj

@NiViren-Raj

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Posted: 12 years ago

Neetika.. beautiful post 👏... really appreciate your efforts and love it...

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FrozenRain

@FrozenRain

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Posted: 12 years ago

beautiful poem niti sweets..luv it...

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lojain

@LifeOfTheParty

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Posted: 12 years ago

What an awesome worddds... loved them... really u r making me full of happiness ...Missing NivRen so much ... Keep it up Girl 😉

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UZIS

@UZIS

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Posted: 12 years ago

Waah bhai waah...😛u left me speechless

kya poem hain ... describing the story of ccbm so beautifully😃😊

aap toh badi chhupi rustam nikli...😳

can i com for tuitions to u?😉😆

its really awesome...neeti...u r just brilliant my dear👏

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meera_krishna

@meera_krishna

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Posted: 12 years ago

Very... Good thread Neetiii...

Initially I thought these lines from some hindi movie song... When i saw your comment only i understand its ur poem... Ohhh... My... God... U r a great poet tooo... i truely loved it...

Neeti... I didnt find another magical couple till now... I dnt even want to split the name "NivRen..." So i didnt join their forums too... But i visit there and hit chaskameter for our wonderful actors... But for me they are my Nivren... it will be remain same... So i wont never ever leave this forum... sometime i am busy... but whenever i am free i will come here n comment...

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