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EVERGREEN LOVE (RTMC ff)**note-pg 91** (Page 8)

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Posted: 03 January 2012 at 2:32am | IP Logged

update 4

She left d handle'''n ran''..ran wid speed ,,,,,,,,it worked to certain extend,,,,,,,till certain extend'''''then she ran vid her full speed ,,,,,,it worked again ,,,,,,,,,again till certain extend''.now she lost hope'''it become hard to compete the train very soon,,,,,,,,,,

Suddenly d most fabulous thing happened to her in d whole life,,,,,,,,,,,yes daqsh arrived to the gate unconcerned of her''..soon he saw her'''''running in her full pace, speed ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,vid full energy''''.he immediately reacted'''..shouted ''RUN ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,RUN''.''

HE worried like hell ''' he just could not afford to make her loose d train'''.he extended his arm towards her,,,,,,,,extended more n more ,,,,,,,,,,,,it seems that suddenly his arm length increased so much''''.

She on d other hand was   d happiest person in d world at dat instant''..suddenly she ran '''.ran like never before, as she absorbed extra power form her ambience'..d air around her'..and was successful ,,,,,,,,in touching d tips of fingers of daqsh''''

Rest part was daqsh responsibility'''to pull her and ''make her enter d train''..and he this d right way'..

He managed it vid gr8 difficulty to hold her palm'..hold her palm tightly''.hell pulled her''.vid full power ,,,,,,and making her run like hell ''..dis was just not a problem'''problem was,,,,,,,,,how will she manage to climb d ladder  and if in any case of bad fate''.accidently she can injure her leg badly''.the train speed was really challenging''''he just wanted her,,,,,,,,,on the train'''she was still running trying to climb ,,,,,,,,but managing everything together,,,,,,her speed ''direction'...her climb was difficult '' thoughts ,,,no desire ,,,,,,but to simply hold hand of daksh tightly'''''

 (i want u to read dis part vid a backgroud music...

feel aa jayegi ...boss)

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She soon shifted her palm to d upper arm of daqsh ,,,,,,,,for support'..but before she could give her first try to climb'''.daqsh curled his arm around her waist ,,,,,,,she felt secured and believed that this is possible ''.possible for her to climb''.daqsh pulled n lifted her simultaneously''.vid his full  jaat  force,,, all desires,,,,,,,complete soul'''''''.within a fraction of second''..dhwani was in d train,,,,,,tightly embedded in daqsh's  arms ''..which seemed to be most protective shield in d world,,,,,,,,,,she was having deep breadths''.very frequently'..she was damn tired,,,,,,,,,she felt a strange numbness in her right foot,,,,,,,,,,,not even in postion to lift up or stand properly''..or free herself from his grip''..after all she ran for almost d whole platform'''so she simply leaned herself on daqsh's body'''.daqsh's body supported her to stand'''daqsh himself was leaned on d wall behind''.they were close 'damn close'''their face were merely few cms away''

He wishpered'..''kaha gayi thi????????''

In between her deep breadth she said''aise,,,,,aisehi''''

They wre in each other proximity,,,,,,,,,daqsh was completely in her influence,,,,,,he was smelling her characteristic fragnance,,,,,he tried to light the situation''DAQSH,,,DAQSH SHAHLOOR,,,,NAAM TU SANA HI HOGA'''..SHE  smiled and nodded,,,,,,she raised her head again,,,,,,watching daqsh vid d most lovable gaze,,,,,,,n said''DHWANI''.DHWANI  TEVATIO(pronounce it  te-va-tia) '''''Daqsh smiled back n said''WE BOTH D-D ''..HMMM!!!!''

she was taking breadths so deep and frequently'''daqsh noticed it,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,and saw her beautiful lips participating in d breadths''..and said'' thak gayi????''

She nodded yes'''and ''..and suddenly realized a piercing pain in her right leg''she responsed it vid smooth ''aahhh!!!!''in pain'.

D next second it become louder n audible,,,,,,,,,,,soon she slipped ,,,,,a little from daqsh hold'..daqsh made his grip more tight'..

She saw her right feet ' was injured badly''a big ,,,,though not sharp and deep'..cut was seen on her upper part of feet'near her simple and neat anklets'.daqsh followd her stare,,,,,,,,and discovered it'''..he heard an trembling voice''ba''bahut,,,,,dard ho raha hai'''''.he shifted his stare to dhwani's FACE ,,,,,,,her eyes wre moist ,,,,,,though had no tears really'''he gazed her vid most romantic gaze , concern , and her pain in his eyes''.she was also,,,,seeing his eyes''..deep , black jet ,,,,,,,,,,d best remedy,,,,,in the world'''she soon realized that her pain was vanishing,,,,,,,slowly,,,,,,,(actually she was so much into his eyes''.that she even slowly stopped responding to her nerves'.)

She saw him as the most concerned man for her in d whole world''''..he bent  towards her leg wid a most caring fashion''.still supporting her''..n said''I need to lift u up!!!!!''

Dis disturbed dhwani and again made her aware of d injury''

He was bend,,,,,,and she supported  herself through his shoulder''.soon she  felt her legs in air''floating'..she was being lifted by most caring hands of daqsh'within a blink of eyes' she was in daqsh's arms''.tightly bonded to to daqsh's body,,,,,,his chest''.she could feel his heart beating,,,,,under her  palm''and d strength he is applying,,,,,,to lift her''on d other hands on his broad shoulders''''''

She said''tum kab kab meri help karage,,,,,,,,????????''

''tumhe jab jab help ki jaroorat padegi'''kisi ki  bhi,,,,,,kaisi hi'.kabhi bhi''.yaah phir aieveen hi''''he smiled ,,,,,,,,on his commitment ''.so do dhwani''..but she even blushed,,,,,,,,

To this,,,,,,,,,,He turned his stare to d path,,,,,,,n started walking''..the path was bit congested ,,,thin,,,,,,,thank god ,,,,,their seats( 55 n 56)'were not too away'..adjusting to the path'.carefully,,,,,,,,he made d way'''all dis time dhwani was staring'..not staring,,,,,,,gazing him''.while daqsh was busy vid d path/way'..

They reached their seats,,,,,,,,daqsh placed dhwani on seats ,,,,,,as she was d most precious element for him in d world'''..she thanked him ,,,,,,,,,,,but he didn't response'''he immediately turned''n took out a small pouch,,,,,,from his bag'''.

It had ointments, his brush , shaving kit etc''.. in it ,,,,,,,,,,

He took d ointment tube''placed it over seat ,,,,,,and soon took out his handkerchief''.wetted it from the bottle near by''.hold dhwani feet wid atmost care ''and placed it over his bag lying below the seats''he cleaned d injury vid perfection,,,,,,,,,care,,,,,skill n delicacy''''

''tumhe pata hai''.main khud jo ki ek doctor hone wali hoon ''inta ache se chot saaf nahi karti'''''''''kya tum ek doc ho??????''she commented'''feeling a bit relaxed n cool  wid her pain'..


He replied ,,,,,to distract  her from d injury''no ''not a doc ,,,,,,,,,dr dhwani tevatio''.i m  SQUADRON   LDR. DAQSH SHAHLOOR.''

SHE is impressed''..n .replies''no''.not'..dr. dhwani tevatio'''its'.''MAJOR DR. DHWANI TEVATIO''

EVEN DAQSH  is impressed '''.''wow!...ladki tho tum takkar ki ho!!!!!''

''Voh tho hai!!!!!!'' she said it proudly n gladly'''

While all dis he was done wid applying ointment and bandaging her feet vid his handkerchief ''.he hanged her anklets on a hanger on wall of train''''''n '''''.said''isse lena mat bhulana''

Edited by sweetsanyo - 31 January 2012 at 2:32am

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awesome part dearSmile...

DDLJ scene was romanticEmbarrassed...& yes reading with music surely gave the additional feel while imagining RTMCSmile...they both r so comfortable with each other...loved it...

that introduction part was superb...but it was surprising also...SQUADRON   LDR. & MAJOR DR...hmmm...surely they r perfect for each otherSmile...

plz plz update soon... 

Edited by sanyogitaprc - 03 January 2012 at 3:01am

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thankx for update n pmBig smile
Superb update!!Clap
Claplove ur narration of ddlj scene with rtmc
Winkhey n u no need to background music feel toh aisehi tera scene padhkar n rtmc ko imagine karke aa gayaBig smile
loved the romantic scene of both in eachothers arm lost in each other introducingEmbarrassed
n end introductions too.Tongue
Tongueso jaat aur jaatani takkar ke hai!!Big smile
waiting for further journeyDay Dreaming

Edited by shruja - 03 January 2012 at 2:56am

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wow ddlj scene was awesome
after getting on train n daksh lifting dhwaniEmbarrassed
dd convoSmile

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Posted: 03 January 2012 at 8:49am | IP Logged
beautiful update dear...Big smilei am loving this ff...
and omg!!!my fav RT MC in that famous DDLJ scene...Day Dreaming
i have always imagined it my fantasy...and u did it in ur ffDay Dreaming
loved daqsh's raj style of introducing himselfLOL...naam to suna hogaLOL
so these two r perfect for each other by profession tooBig smile
eager too read some moreSmile

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Posted: 03 January 2012 at 9:41am | IP Logged
awesome update...Clap
sorry for not commenting on part 3...
well part  was awesome...
n in part 4...haye mera ddlj wala scene...aur wo bhi rajat mugdha pe...kisi tune ya music ki zarurat hi nahi...n loved their way of inroducing each other...
n go daqsh...go get her...sari kundali nikalwalo...jaldi...Wink
well...i am really in love with our jaat n jatani...
update soon...
luv u...Smile

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Posted: 03 January 2012 at 2:48pm | IP Logged

wooowww simply amazing n rocking ff dear...

loved the concept n the way u wrote..

continue soon..

n dont forget to pm me...

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