The Udayveer Chronicles| NEW UPDATE|PART 26 PAGE 137 - Page 92

res Edited by wendy25 - 11 years ago

Hey Reeha, I have read all the parts, and wanna let u know that ur fab writer and fantastic story teller, once ur done writing ur essays maybe u should think about writing a book lol and u can't blame us for asking u write the next part soon when u leave us hanging like this at such a crucial moment, now I always keep thinking about how will manyata react and how will their relationship develop, so yes update soon lol :)

btw i usually am good at guessing the storyline, but this was sooo unexpected for me, i didn't guess until they saw the kid lol then i'm like "oh he's his son"lol don't know if i should be happy or sad about it, but the way storyline developed after this bomb is sooo veryyy interesting and it has gotten very deeper and raises many questions, like M was ready to move on with UV after knowing about his affairs but can u move on with him now when there's living symbol of his past? your fairytale has gotten very real, let's see what happens, and again when r u updating lol good luck on ur essay, definitely more important :)
Edited by Herman_4u - 11 years ago

Hey Reeha, please continue with The Udayveer Chronicles. Haven't tried the TJC yet but will do too later on... and the forum will be opened as long as we keep it active. So plzz keep on updating.

Hope your essays go well and you update soon.

Uday is gonna pay for all his past distractions...all came back to haunt him when he's @ place with Manya...

hey a very shocking update😲...keep updating !

OMFG!!! THAT WAS AWESOME BUT I
HOPE THERE'S NO BARRIER BETWEEN MANVEER CAUSE OF MINA.

Re: Special Update on Page 114

 

I don't know if you all saw or read it, and if you haven't please give it a look and read over!

-Mais- was kind enough to give you guys a special treat- or teaser- while I was busy with my school work (One Essay down, One Presentation down: And one essay Left -_- )
So, our resident Hacker- Here is my take:

 

I loved it. Even when I knew that this Udayveer was not the Udayveer I had created with my words: They are still two sides of the same coin.

 

At the same time, I can see this transition you made: It's true. Udayveer has fallen for Manyata and didn't heed Aura's advice (not a fan of the name: Makes me think of ghosts! LOL!)

One thing that did surprise me was your articulate description of Sex: or post Sex. I didn't expect that from you- it was done gracefully and with extreme taste. I LOVED it!
You're a fantastic writer, and I've never understood why you haven't ever pursued to COMPLETE and FF.

Another thing I love about your writing is the Use of these : " "
I can't use quotation marks, I never get the flow right or the transitions. Hence why I have a script text:
[b] Name [/ b]: Dialogue

I personally, prefer your method- it's much more clean and succinct.

 

Overall: I rate it a 10/10. You've captured Uday at the perfect age and in the perfect mood.

 

<3

 

PS: Sorry about the late response L

WOW!👏👏👏 Edited by Piggies - 11 years ago

This content was originally posted by--Mais-

Before i go on my long comment, READ MY SPECIAL UPDATE YOU WITCH! :@ WHAT WAS THE POINT OF ME HACKING YOUR FF WHEN YOU DIDNT EVEN READ IT!? Ya know, I was honestly counting on some ManVeer separation thats why I had racked my brains to write that flashback. Though my UV was a lot different from yours :p mine was colder, royal and too close to the UV of the initial episodes of the show. Yours tou is completely outta this world lolz. I mean... Done and Done! Got it all down pat! LOL! You're comment for your update is up. Personally, I can see the difference- you're UV was like the Old UV. ; )

...inna love? Oh Yah. He's totally Inna Love. Like Really, really in love. I love Bad Boys, but there's something about watching a badboy fall helplessly in love. It's Karma. Of the best kind ; )

This brings to my comment (i know i had resed a spot but meh, too lazy :p) most of the update was fillerish and too cheesy. But in a cutesy way. Some moments were duds but some shone the brightest!  Yes! I know. Filler was necessary. I had to put in Aditya. But SLOWLY. Very "innocent" meetings- which wouldn't leave people to assume much with his presence. I personally, would have loved to have just the ball- but there needed to be context leading up to it :/

Part 21 - loved the jealous UV at the airport. Hahaha, UV jealous of J for stealing away M? Too precious! Adored the way he was being jealous and how M caught onto that. The first encounter with Andy (dun like that name much, his real name is just wow! I know! I've always LOVED the name Aditya. It's one of my favourites. Here's the thing Maisy, out here in the West, when you go to school or even out in public, people always have a hard time pronoucning our names. Aditya is turned into ADEE TEE YA. (Poor kid in my grade 7 class, his name was BUTCHERED) hence why there are tons of nick-names. Andy just seemed like the most obvious choice. But, I'd like to give myself a pat on the back *Pats self on Back* For Aditya Veer Randhawa (or Singh) It's a mind Blasting name I tell you.) was nice. He didnt like the kid, the kid didnt like him and M totally fell for the kid. Someone to put UV into place, thats gotta be cherished. And here it is a 4 year old. My alarm bells didnt ring at this point and i brushed it off just as a random encounter The magic of Fillers! LOL! That's why there were spaced out and with other stuff ; ) 
OMG! The triplets part was hilarious! Just when UV was getting worried about M not wanting to commit to him, here comes M acting all authoratative! Poor brunettes :p was laughing so hard at UV's happiness that M was jealous! Awesome! Didnt like the bedroom part much and the bathroom part was okayish. Loved the kiss though! The happy end tone to the chapter was also cool. Filler filler filler. It's icing. My readers like Icing :P LOL!

Part 22 - depressed J? Me no likey! I guess i will have to hack the JNCs as well Go for it! I have to write it up. I should warn you JNC is going to become DRAMA Central. Oh Boy. . A scenario is jumping in my head. And this depressed J who is too scared to leave M alone with UV, the heart goes out to her She has it in the back of her head what happened to her could happen to Manyata: The heart break. It's a good bonding point for the two sisters. . Oh she despises UV and i love it! Which means she can be possible kanta in manveer in the future but meh, i dun care Perish the thought! JN is GOOD here! I personally think one of the failings of the Show was NOT Utalizing JN's potentional EAT THAT S.A!! At last we know why M isnt happy with UV. He didnt proposed. Loved the girls' outing and the J-U banter. Lolz, Unnzie told UV his mistake, no surprise there. The M giving Adi (i will call him that, andy is bleh! Be my guest! Andy is literally called Aditiya by Aman, and Mina refers to him as baby, sweetheart etc. only Aditiya when she's mad- as you'll soon find out) UV's pancakes was awesome! Bechara UV! :D bache se kaise larega? :p  LOL! I'm looking forward to writing about these two.
khair, the library part was nice. Maria was too sweet. Though i found UV opening up to Maria all these years ago a lil weird but whatever rocks your boat. UV works well with girls- especially little ones. I could do a flashback, but it's in my head. And imagin him telling her the story with a hint of cynisism.  A chubby UV? Hahahaha, reminds me of AK's old photos :p golu mollu! So anyway, nothing much happened...fillerish :p LOL! I know! very filler! Again, needed to introduce Aditya without anyone getting suspicious. AND I got the Idea from AK's old photos ; )

part 23 - the bomb! Loved how you just jumped on the oxford ball! The first paragraph was just wow! The description of the selfish relationship everyone shared was so bang on! Defo my most fav part of the huuugggeee update! I could so picture UV standing with a wine glass and M entering the hall. It was so magical! Truly beautiful! M's nervousness, her worries, that little fear felt so real. And that small kiss was magical.

"lets give them something to talk about."

i just melted there! M's confidence after that was pleasing. Their encounter with the Randhawas was so coool! The bite of the words, the prick of the tone, the coldness surrounding them; i could literally feel it. Seriously enjoyed reading it!  I liked writing it. I'm trying to humanize the Randhawas. I truely want the readers to NOT hate them. Hence why you will see two sides of them: The Rich, Aloof, Socialites and Business Tycoon. And then the natural, mother, grandfather, father-daughter tandum.

Balconies are my fav! You made it all the more special. How he just came and kissed her scar. Ufff! So beautiful...! The proposal was awesome! Her worries and fears and his reassurance that the world didnt matter. Easy said than done my boy but whatever. Love can make anyone go crazy :p i love you for making him propose her with a necklace of the old ring. I just love necklaces! And she said yes! Yaaay!

M in the washroom and Mina following her talking on the phone, thats when the alarm went off. I just knew that something is wrong. And surely it was! Adi is UV's son! Dun dun dun! Loved the way Mina was shielding him and UV just wanted to see him.  Mina has her flaws, but she is a damn good mother- you'll find out why soon enough. Hated the way he pushed her away. I just could not connect with UV's eagerness of taking his son away. Is he crazy? Outta his mind! I think this needs to be cleared up: Uday doesn't want to BOND with his son: He hates being LIED to. That something that is "his" wasn't GIVEN to him. To him, Aditiya is a possession. ALSO, there are stages (Spoiler.) Right now it's EAGERNESS, Then it's ANGER; then It's RESENTMENT; then it's CARELESSNESS. There are stages. Trust me. UV has a lot to digest. This is his root reaction- not the long term onw.  And whats with the challenging tone?! Someone Lied to the Prince. Someone dared Hides something that was HIS. Mina will explain this nicely No, i am not saying this in context of manveer but i just could not comprehend his reaction. M looked too much like a mary sue standing there. She felt unneeded Oh yes. This is Manyata's role. She is the perfect bridge, but doesn't see it. . Would have loved it if the confrontation happened between VeerNa LOL! Are Uday and Mina VEERNA? LOL! only. Khair, lets see how you shape it all up in the future.

All in all, the update was worth the wait. Lolz, sorry for nagging you too much :p but i just love it! Anyway, hope you liked this looong detailed comment! My fingers are aching from all this typing on the phone. PHONE! Are you crazy! LOL! Hope that's a suitable response love <3
P.s - i am serious about the JNC hacking -_-'  I'm serious too: Go for it :D

BTW: I should mention in the JNCs there won't be any JN flashbacks, but I've decided on Yash parallels

p.p.s - all the best for ur assignment! :D  Meh, I think it went well enough o.O