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Posted: 18 December 2011 at 6:56am | IP Logged
amazing SS...just read all parts and wow...I loved it...absolutely. Waiting eagerly for the next part honey

misssmily Goldie
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Posted: 18 December 2011 at 7:21am | IP Logged
Fantastic ! Loved it ! Nice concept Smile !

Am sorry Rosie  haven't been able to comment earlier Unhappy
Was a bit bsy... but read all parts and really enjoyed it ! Embarrassed

As usual here is my analyse Smile : Maan is tired of his routine, he feels lonely and wants something new, he is kinda jealous from Armaan who has a lovly family, hence appears geet ! Maan is trying to seduce her, but what you didn't mention  is his intention, i mean is it just physical attraction or somthing stronger, you have let us known that he never went to the extent to buy flowers for a girl and here he is doing it BUT you didn't give any indication abt his state of mind... i mean for now, as a reader, i feel that maan is interested in geet indeed BUT he is not serious about her ( for now at least ). If it is what you wanted then u succeeded if not, you should show the change in maan. Because the fact is u portryaed him as a BIG HUGE womanizer, so you will have to work a lot on his charcrter to show the change ( this will be the real challenge in this story Wink )... after the change a reader should b satisfied, like he should say : Ok now he will never leave geet even if confronted to 10 sexy b**** LOL

Hope you get what i said ^^

Me waiting for the next !
With all my love and support !

Zubi Smile

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Posted: 18 December 2011 at 7:24am | IP Logged
                 




                 
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Posted: 18 December 2011 at 9:19am | IP Logged
till part 3
for sure Mandy means trouble for Geet...
hope Maan is not gonna use and throw Geet...
cont soon dear...
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Posted: 18 December 2011 at 10:20am | IP Logged
loved the update...
maan is so confident that she will come and also he knew that mandy wud defnitely make sure to go...
eagerly waiting to c wat geet is planning to do
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Posted: 18 December 2011 at 10:22am | IP Logged
are you updating 
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