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thanks every one i am really worried because this is my first FF and first thing i ever started writing.i was bitterly worried . plz tell me if there are any mistakes . im not that well with hindhi...
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Update
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Recap:
Ram identifies his feelings for priya . and gets embaressd wen his phone beeps while priya is confused. Ram want to plan something for priya in fact to spend some quality time with her. Ram gives white flowers to priya and starts driving towards the place . priya was confused of where is she going and do not have any real idea of ram's sudden change. She ask ram where r they going ram keeps it a suspence.ram observes priyas nervousness and enjoys his feelings for her in her presence
Update
There was silence in between ram and priya
P:
ram plz bathayi na
!! kaha jar aha hai hum .
R: (ram looks at priya and grins) arey tum itna nervous kyu hai. Trust me priya u ill love the place .
P:
mein nervous nahi hu!!. Just a
bit eager to know where my husband
is taking me for the first time aur wo bhi
d'.( was about t say date and stops ) uhh wo bhi
itna raath ko .
R : hmmm !! toda sabar karo madam .we r near . kyu tume mere saath accha nahi lagtha hai kya?
P: nahi aise baath nahi hai mr . kapoor. Mujhe aap ke saath acha lagtha hai . ( and thinks . bahut acha lagtha hai aap ke saath . aap ki saath bithaya har pal mere liye bahut special hai aap hai itna special mr. polar bear.)
Priya simles shyly
R:
arey yeah kya hai jara mujhe bhi baathayi ki
yeah hasi ka raaz !! waise bhi u
looking different and beautiful wen u smile.
( jindagi bar
aise hasthi rehana priya ,
mera sara problems aap ki sweet smile ko dek kar gayeb hojatha
hai.)
P:
priya blushes and says thanku Mr kapoor.
Ram park the car and
get down and take off his shoes , while priya is watching him
sitting in the car . he comes and opens door for priya .
P: yeah kya hai Mr. kapoor yeah kaun si jagha hai .
R: we need to walk now chalo . chup chap.
They
walk a while while ram steals glances at priya
they reach the beach. Priya is
happy seeing beach
P:
Mr. kapoor do u really wanted to come here again. !!! kamal hai mr. kapoor aap ko yeah jaga acha lagtha hai kay?? Am surprised
' sach mein bathayi ye na aap ko yeah jaga acha lagtha hai ??
R:
mujhe beach jada pasand nahi tha
par ab acha lagraha hai , and more over
aap ko bahut pasand hai na subha
bhi aap itna exited ho. Mein enjoy nahi kiya dhoop ki waje se aur mujhe pata hai hi
tum subha mere wajese yaha se jane
keliye kaha tha?
Ab dhoop nahi hai . tho chale.
P : thanks Mr . kapoor'. (thinks meri pasandh na pasandh ko aap itna dhyan dete hai. ????) par mein bauth tak gaye subha se . aur aap bhi.
R: ab hum ahya tho todi dher ruk ke chalthe hai.walk pe chalthe hai
P: aap tik tho hai na .??
R: haan mujhe kya hua..
(Yeah kya ho gaye golu ji ko. Flowers , beach , ab walk '' )
While walking in the sand ram starts enjoying the cool breeze both enjoys each other's company '. There was silence b /n them
Ram initiates
R : priya yek baat kahu..
P : ji kahiye..
R: aaj app bahut s..'
(stops the
word s**y in the middle.) sensuous hai.(
embaressed ram looks at priya for the
reply) red colour compliments you
so well ki
P: priya immediately interrupts and say "Thanks"" ..thinks mujhe patha hai aap kya word use karna chathe hai. ' they share a eye lock

While they both looking at each other priya steps onto the
stone and trip then ram holds her waist.. priya could feel the rams hand on her waist and looks up and identifies that she was in
ram's arms
R: tum tik tho hai na.
P: ( as ram s hand is stil on her
waist he could not speak as she got the
nerve) in alow voice says "" ha"'. Ab
mein apni perope khadi hu . tho.. aap and looks at his hand on her
waist '

R: he immediately flinches back and point to a place to sit. Chalo priya waha baithe hai.
The place he showed is very small for
both of them ram goes and sit
and make himself comfortable and showed priya place to sit. Ram want her to be in his proximity.priya
sit in the place ram gave her. Priya
could feel the warmth of ram
so close to her on one side and
also the cool breeze
.
R: tum sach kehathe ho priya . yeah jaga bauth acha hai .
P: hai na yah aa
kar kuch ajeb sa sukun miljatha hai. Ab mujhe lag raha hai ki ap bhi normal hu'
Subha
Mein soch raha ki duniya
mein
aap yek hi hai
inko beach pasandh nahi hai.
R: phir se suru hogaye. Aap ki tane'
P: app ne aj drink nahi li ' kyu.
R:
drinks aaj jaroorath nahi hai. (
thinks arey yar
drink nahi kiya tho kya mein
ab aap ki nashe mein hu this
feeling is tickiling mee)
P: kya mathlab 
R:
mein ab tak mera jindagi
mein bahuth busy
hu priya ,bussines ka pressure
tensions sab kuch so bhul ne keliye drink karna suru kiya. Apna akhela pan duur karne keliye mein apne
app ko yek busy business banaya. Rahi
baath ajj ki mujhe koi tension nahi hai
aur mein
is waqth bahut kush hai.
P:aap aise kabhi nahi sochi ye ga . ki
aap akhela hu . mein hu na aap ki ssath . aap kuch bhi mujhe share kar sakthe
ho.
Both look deep to each others eyes and
priya shyly lowers her eyes
realising what she just said
Ram thinks priya aap mere sath hu.mera paas hi rehana humesha keliye'itna paas ki koi tume mujhse dur na kar sako.
R:aap ko kabi akhelapan mehasus nahi kiya .?
P: lagtha tha. Par mein na books se company mil jatha tha .aur ab akhela pan
ki savali nahi hai.( thinks aap hai
na mere liye hamesha)
R:
looks at her sheepishly .
P: its really cold here. Rubbing her hands. Shayad aap ko tand nahi lagtha hogha
R: kyu ha tandh hai par bahut accha hai.
P: suddenly says polar bear
ko thand tho din a lagtha hai na. and starts laughing

Ram looks at her and lost in her smiles ''after

Both were very silent.as priya is
very tiered she is sleepy and rest her
head on ram shoulders as she feel s cold
she rubs her hand for warmth, ramlooks
at her holds her in one arm and make her
comfortable. Looking at her he thinks
. im lucky to have u
. I wish aap humesha mera ppas hi raho . I wish this moment last forever priya. Priya feel s
good in rams arms
unknowingly she cuddles
ram.slowly looking at priya ram also sleep . priya wakes up see
she cuddle ram and remove her hand
around him she slowly move her head and without
disturbing ram she make his head on her shoulder. Ram adjust
himself and hug priya tightly . his position
of head is such a way that priya
could feel ram's breath on her neck. She
feels nuzzled.she feels jittery
..n thinks "Ram aap humesha
mera paas hi rehana. I wish this moment last forever."when she is
about to keep her hand on rams head
he wakes up and
realises he is
hugging priya and
breaks the hug.
Both get
embarrassed and look down
to the sand. Moves their hand in
the sand.
P: its too late Mr. kapoor will make a move now .
R: han chalo and make their way back to hotel.
They
stand and look back
and see what they did in sand and
identifies priya write "ram" And ram
write "priya" . both look at each other
and share a look and
start walking toward's car coyly
IN THE HOTEL
Both change and come ready to sleep
P: thank s Mr. kapoor.u made my day
'(thinks aaj job hi hua na
..it was special to me humari first date jaisa hu ' aaj apne job hi quality
waqth hum ne bitaya na there is no price tag for it.. )
R:
who understands priyas feeling .. say
pleasure is all mine madam'( thinks mera first date acha tha priya
I wish hum dono ki beech ki yeah
duriya khatam ho jayegha)
Ram wishes her good night and sleep'''''''..

Priya looks at the flowers he gave her blushes, thinks aap wo nahi hai .. jis insan se mera shadhi ho gaye aap wo nahi hai . mein na aap ko galth samaj gaye aap bahut sweet hai . soon she listens his kharate looks at him and smiles '.
Says good night mr kharate'
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