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Posted: 05 December 2011 at 8:36pm | IP Logged
i couldn't believe what was happening around me , everything just changed so suddenly . there he was , lying on the floor beaten up by his enemy !! i still couldn't believe my abhay left me just to save me . y god y ? y do u always snatch away the ones we love ? first u took away my mom n now u wanna take abhay away ? i still remember how it all happned just few mins ago - 
"abhay m surprised !! u n here in dehradun ?" i asked while giving a big smile 
he kept his arms around my waist n said "well if u want i can go " he said teasingly . i can never imagine my life widout him . that line he said made me angry after all we have gone through many probs to be wid each other!!
"no way m i gonna let u go " i sad hitting on his chest . he held my arms n brought me closer . we both were smiling at each other looking at each other's eyes . we both were enjoying our perfect moment in the night n jungles where we used to meet . only we 3 were there -me , abhay n moon. but i didn't know my happiness could be snatched away in few mins. "pia " i heard my name from jeh's mouth who was coming towards us . i knew we both were in danger but abhay was in more danger . i stood infront of jeh bringing abhay back . i knew m not any copetition for guys bu for my love i could do anything . jeh came forward n told me to go away from between 2 of them but i was no way gonna do that . finally he held my arms n threw me away . i looked up n saw abhay was now out of control . i ran towards him n tried to stop him but i couldn't as he was no way gonna forgive jeh for throwing me away !! abhay n jeh started their fight . abhay was being human too was strong enough for competing jeh . at last jeh was over but abhay also left me . he just went down n down n fell on the floor . i couldn't believe my eyes . now my life was over !! 

i came back to reality when mom told me to go inside my room as it would be a bit difficult for me to see his funeral . i nodded n went inside my room just like a zombie , i had no emotions left now . i was going to take a bath when i saw a letter on my desk . i  opened it n found that it was from abhay . i wondered how he came n kept the letter here . i thought to read it anyways . 

"dear love , 
i always knew happiness wasn't for much time in my life , but i accepted the fate . i lost my parents n then i failed in love n then i lost my brother too !! but when my new parents gave back me life i had lost my emotions . but u again awake the humanity in me . i started to love u , though i tried many times not to bring u in danger but couldn't control myself . slowly we started fighting n then our love got stronger . i could never ever imagine that i would be happy again . when u n alina turned me back into human n gave me new life i found it a bit difficult to accept that i will have to leave this life now . u know typical human , never satisfied !! but the time we both spent together were the happiest moments of my whole life . i love u pia . by the time u read this letter everything might have been changed !! but this letter is just to tell u that i always loved u n i will keep on doing that even after my death . 
i wish we could be together for longer but now we can't change whats written in our destiny . 
luv abhay " 
i found drop of tears falling from my eyes . i wish abhay n i could stay a bit longer together . suddenly, mom entered my room n found me crying. 
she wasn't having words for consoling me . she just kept an apple cut into in pieces n other one with knife . she told me to have it . i nodded n as soon as she left i don't know what happened but i took the knife n cut my nerves wid it . i could not even imagine my life widout him n i knew that if i wanted to be wid him then i need to go to heaven . m sure he would have been chosen to be an angel by now . n this was the new beginning of our love story where no one could separate us !! 

hey guys i know its a sad story . but i wanted to start a story but that is like my own not on any of the show . but m not sure whether we have to write storys on charaters or we can write our own so please do tell meEmbarrassed

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Posted: 05 December 2011 at 8:44pm | IP Logged
Hey Deepa, It was amazing and especially that note part but still i love happy ending. After what all they have suffered , Abhiya deserve a fairytale ending.Smile

Edited by prerna26 - 05 December 2011 at 8:54pm
cuteteddy Goldie
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Posted: 05 December 2011 at 8:46pm | IP Logged
@prerna - thanks for commenting dear 
    well i know it is not good but i wanted to write something touchy now so thats y .

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Posted: 05 December 2011 at 8:50pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by cuteteddy

@prerna - thanks for commenting dear 
    well i know it is not good but i wanted to write something touchy now so thats y .

Deepa, it was good its just that i want to see them together leading a happy married life.Smile

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Posted: 05 December 2011 at 8:52pm | IP Logged
nice OS di...but it was sooo touchy...n emotional...after all 4 true love u can sacrifice anything...abhiya were lovely when they sacrificed their lifeSmile

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Posted: 05 December 2011 at 8:53pm | IP Logged
@prerna - i agree dear that they deserve a happy life even i would say so if someone kills any of them LOL well the question is that can we write our own stories here ?

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Posted: 05 December 2011 at 8:55pm | IP Logged
@madhu - thanks madhu . ya there love is selfless n they can go for 
                     anything to stay wid each other . they have just lost their bodies but their souls would be together forever ..!!

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Posted: 05 December 2011 at 8:57pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by cuteteddy

@prerna - i agree dear that they deserve a happy life even i would say so if someone kills any of them LOL well the question is that can we write our own stories here ?

Well I love FFs  written by IF members more than the current track and btw i love your version too. Smile 

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