Hmm Nice! Lovely work, Eventhough it's Short in form, it has a Lot to dwell upon.
In the very beginning we sense pain, and Arnav's helplessness at his inability to act, he feels tied down. Dwelling in the happenings of the dreadful past and the possible event that would take place again and he would be able to do absolutely nothing to stop it. The mere knowledge that It's going to happen is eating him.
Yesterday was the day when he recognized the archetype. THE ARCHETYPE.
After 5 hours of dwelling he realizes the similar pattern of events. Comes to full realization as to what's happening around him.
And it wasn't as if he had sought after it, like the last time.
Last time he sought after it, I assume not being completely aware of the circumstances and the result. And this time It comes to him as a hindrance. As he knows and is familiar with the deadly game And with it comes the bitter memory of his Loss. Who is She ? Me curious.
Like the way you get Pen, Ink and Inking into the picture to explain the scenario. A Masterpiece!
The second thing that badgering him was the day's events that took place. The only INKLING to his other problem.
The day's event has given him one single clue, hmm I have a feeling that the Link can solve the problem and Seal the deal.
His opponent was too cunning.
The Hunter i suppose
Also I noticed many changes in Arnav.
God knows how you were released earlier.
Now does he believe in God :O
The Call, I wonder whose it from, he definitely knows about the hunter and gatherer story. Here it seemed like they were talking about business as well as the game..But Re-union? So is that the day's event?
Do you more crisp notes?"
*Paisa mera shauk nahin, pesha hai.*
"I can manage."
Referring to the loss he and his company suffered. And his reply I can manage is pretty shocking. Acceptance of the loss.
"Well, after tonight, I expect better results. Looks like you're losing your edge with age, Mr Mallik."
Particularly after tonight, and this night there is One Event which is going to take place, is it a reference to that?
"Sir, I know the lines of our conversation are secure, but the name's Raizada. HEAD AGENT RAIZADA."
Wow! One thing that would never change, He refuses to be called by his dad's name Malik. It's Raizada and it will be so. Mr Mallik refers to a possible connection of bloodline, he is destined to be the gatherer and so these people call him Mr Mallik
Interesting, Great work! But i didn't think it was chachaji
You described Arnav through and through in your chapter. From the very first line it was clear to me it's Him
Eagerly awaiting the next chap, Thanks for the PM :)
Lots of Love
Edited by TheWandmaker - 11 November 2011 at 9:27am