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Posted: 12 years ago
Originally posted by: drmaha

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i agree with fari sab kch tu anila nai kehdiya hai kch baki nai hai...😆
 
i loved it...
it was fantastic, mindvlowing update...
i enjoyed it alot
maza aagaya...
 
how sweet mayan kis and nupur amazing... thts wht we called true love...😊😊
and lil touch of romance was out class...😉
 
 
thanks a lot dear for the beautiful update...
gunjan apni lini pai aarahai hai wow...😆😆😆
samrat nai buhat neek kaam kia hai...
 
 as i know wht cuming uo next si feel really upset😭😭
 
love ya dear...🤗🤗

had hai bechari bachi ko tum dono ny pakar liya
aqal istamal keroo ..
aur coment kero warna murder
 
thnks alot jani for liking it...
hmm gunjan ko line per la rhai hoon
 
 
oye pls rona band ker..aur yeah tip scret hai..warna hungama hojay gay...so pls control
lov ya
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Posted: 12 years ago
Originally posted by: Auroni.92

Ahh a sigh of relief after soo long...

Thanks to u dat u made all perfect again...Now gunjan also doing her work and im so happy that nupur got the time she needs for her...otherwise all day long she keeps doing the household works..sometime fr SA, for samrat, fr baba and mayank to hai hi...shaadi hui nahi ki puri ghar ki zimmedari aa gayi...Even SA never helped her doing that...it ws so irritating...

And the best is mayank proved innocent...im soo happy...seeing him  restless and in pain ws indeed painful...specially when he's the most  honest and responsible person...

Loved the MN part the most...uff itne dino baad kuch romance mile...loved the way they wr consoling each other..they r each others strength..always by each others side and i love this fact the most in this ff...aab romance ki bare mein kya kahe u know how much we love romance...lol...par fir bhi kam tha...i want them in their honeymoon soonnn...jali bhejooo...

Loved this update...Beautifully written and portrayed...

Cont soon dii...

hmm i know its irrating yet it happens most of the time, aur asa huby bhi supprt nhi kerta..sab bolty hain..ghar k hi tu kam hai sab auratin kerti hain
saray k sary besharm..itna sara tu romance tha...over dose hojay gi
flights book hai is liyan abhi koi honey moon per nhi ja raha hai..need to wait
thnk for ur lovely coments..glad u liked it
 
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Posted: 12 years ago
Originally posted by: kirti123

wow lovely part just love the beautiful bond that mayur share 

really happy for both gr8 that they r going for thier honeymoon 
waiting to read nxt part

 
 
thnks aloot dear..gald u r loving them
i know the hoeny moon was to much awaited...will get soon
 
Originally posted by: parul_bansal

👏👏awesumesttt

hatts off to u 👏👏
wat an update it was
i loved it 2 the core
thanks 4 the pm
may god bless u

 
thnsk alot dear
glad u liked it
thnks for ur words n wishes
 
 
Originally posted by: -moona-

loved Mayank's cute drama and Thank God the matter is solved and waiting for their Honeymoon. Beautiful Part Fiza ji.

 
thnks aloot mona darling
will cont soon
 
 
Originally posted by: love.mayurarti

amazing update

loved mayur scene n happy fr them:)

 
 
 
thnku so much
glad u liked it
 
Originally posted by: --Sanchu--

wow this was a fabulous part...

 
Gawd even i was scared fora moment...
awesome job fiza...

 
 
thnsk aloot dear
lol...sorry...for scaring u
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Posted: 12 years ago
Originally posted by: -Faria-




is ladki n khenko liye kuch baki rakha jo main bolu??
anila ne sab bol diya
so mere comment karne ki koi matalb he nehi hai
just wanna say mind blowing, super-duper, fantastic part
loved it to the core..

muahhh jani


teri tuuu
manhoos tu ny coment quote kiya
exams ki wajaha se maaf kiya hai sach mein warna tu gai thi
thnsk aloot dear
lov ya
 
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Posted: 12 years ago

This might appears as filler yet it was needed. Rplyd to u all. Ur awaiting honeymoon in next update..tc

 

Chapter : 33

Mayank: he knock on the door..baba hum ajain..

SA: han beta aoo..khriyat..

Mayank: ji ami sab thik hai..humain baba se baat kerni thi

MF: bolain beta…kya baat hai…study mein aram se baat kerain

Mayank: nhi baba ab is ki zaroorat nhi hai…aj sab kuch thik hoga…humain clearance mil gai…boss k khilaf sary sabot bhi mil gay aur unhony qabool bhi kerliya

MF: khuda shukar..aur ap ki job

Mayank:  ji baba job bhi apni position k sath

SA: yeah kya baat ker rahin hain aplog..kaha ki job …kasi clearance…

MF: hum apko bataty hain…abhi tu ap shukara ada kerain…apky betay k sir per se buhat bari muskil asan hi..nupur ko bata diya apny…

Mayank: ji baba….he smiled

MF: chalo bus ab apany kam per aur zayda tawajah do..kyun tum per ab aur zayda nazrain hongi….aur beta carefull raho….

Mayank: ji baba…ap aram kerain hum chaltein hain

MF: jain aj sukoon se khana khay…

SA: ab ap humain baatain k baab beaty mein chal kiya raha hai

………………

Mayank: yeah khana apny tu nhi banaya hai…continental humray ghar mein

Nupur: ab ap bhi ami ki tarah baat na kerain…jo us ko bana na aay ga wohi banay gi na….acha bana hai itna moo na banay

Mayank: ap ny taste kerliya

Nupur: mayank…pehli bar woh kuch bana rahi thi….aur koi bhi us k sath nhi tha…yaha tak k smarat bhi nhi..woh  us ny kai baar khosih ki hum se khny ki per nhi bool pai..

Mayank: tu islayn phir ap aur apka dil

Nupur: ji nhi…jab woh kitchen mein nhi thi tu hum ny khamoshi se taste kerliya tha…aur apko pata hai…is bar dar k maray us ny namak dala hi nhi tha…

Mayank: tu woh apny kerdiya hoga…

Nupur: tu kya hau…ab woh ker rahi hai na tu us ko sab support kerian gay tu hi us k acha lagy ga…wanra phir woh cook rekhny ki baat keray gi..ek aur hungama….

Mayank: bus ap tu hungamo se itna darti hain k bus

Nupur: kal sukoon se ap soo pay…samrat ko dekh ker apko bara ach alag raha hai jasay….bhai hai apka

Mayank: aray sachi mein tu bhool hi gaya tha…asa lagta hai hum apany ghar walo k dhusman hain aur ap apni…..

Nupur: hai na mujhy bhi yeahi lagta hai..

Mayank: very funny…..chalin shoro kerain ..Allah khair….

Nupur: mayankk….ap bhi ….

Mayank: hmm..wasy kahan tu acha hai..good…

Nupur: haina….aur us ki kisi ny tareef bhi nhi ki

Mayank: hmm…bora tu buhat lag raha hoga..per kya kerain asa unhony khud hi apany liyan kiya hai….khir mili agar humain tu hum b0ol day gay…ap nhi bolain gi samjhi

Nupur: acha naa….

Gunjan who came to bring tea for Samrat heard there talks, she was surprised to see nupur. Wht she is made of, she just cant stop caring of others, maybe that's why mayank trust her so much tht he take her side infornt of anyone, he speak on her behave, he guard her evry little step. But wht mayank was right she herself has made all this.

In all this what has cause pain to her is samrat changed behavior. He also use to trust her blindy, guard her like anything…but yet now he even didn't appreciated her genuine efforts today. Though he was always her support…sigh she went to kitchen to do need full she has to get back her husband tht she knew…

When asked her mom wht to do she blamed evrythng on nupur that she is a person in disguise and is back biting against her. And she sumhow was believing her mother, yet today when she heard nupur silently taking care of her, she got to know that why Samrat and maaynk love her so much. N sumhow shilpa even do yet cant show as she belive she is a mother –in-law….

Nupur: gunjaan…she came forward and off the stove..as teas was boiling…kya hoa..

Gunjan: nhi kuch nhi….

Nupur: ap thik hain…

Gunjan: ji…addab bhai…

As she saw mayank entering the kitchen…

Mayank; gunjan khana acha banaya tha apny…aj for a chnge kuch alag khaya…

She smiled…

Gunjan: thanks bhai….

Mayank and nupur left and she poured tea n went to her room…

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Gunjan: kya ap humain maaf nhi kerain gay…she finally spoke after two days of his cold behavior ..he was talking to her too the point, nthing more..was dam strick and hardly smile infornt of her…

Samrat: kya ap sharminda hain apny kiyay per…apko andaza hai k apny kiya kya

Gunjan: ji..hum ap se jhoot nhi bol rahy thy..bus woh

Samrat: phir se jhoot…sab jhoot…ami yeah kahti hain woh kahti hain

Gunjan: asa nhi hai ami humain sach mein yeah sab  kahti thi ..aur hain

Samrat: aur bhabi….yaha tak k baba bhi….sab …

She has no answer…

Tum janti ho mjhy kitni takleef hoi tum k asa dekh ker, mjhy lagata tha tum thori na samhj ho per nhi tum tu shatir aur chalak nikali…kitni aram se mjhy bewaquf banaya aur istamail kerti rahin….mjhy se shadi bhi tu kahin isi tarah nhi ki thi..han

His last line was too much to bear, cause no mater wht she loves him a lot

Gunjan: asa nhi hai Samrat..hum sach mein ap se buhat pyar kertay hain

Samrat: yeah rona band ker ap in sab k mjhy per koi asar nhi hota….log sahi kahtay hain..ek galat aurrat pora ghar hi nhi ..insaan ki zindagi bhi barbad ker dayti hain

Gunjan: Samrat pls

Samrat: kya plsss..

Gunjan: hum sab ker tu rahin hai

Samrat: ehsaan nhi ker rahi hain ap gunjan…yeah ghar apka hai….mano is baat ko..mehaz susral nhi hai..nhi kuch dino ki mehman hain ap…agar yaha sari zindagi guzarni hai tu apano is ghar ko, yaha k lago ko…unko k gilafa sahizh tu nhi keroo…

Gunjan: hum ..hum asa nhi ker rahy thy

Samrat: tu phir kya ker rahin thi ap…smajhy humain….yeah baat ti bhool jay k ap kuch bhi sahi ker rahin thi…

Gunjan bhai aur bhabi buhat diffent nature k hain, bhai ny aj tak uff bhi nhi ki  ami k samny aur na baba jan k samany…na hi khabi humain itna sa bhi kuch kiya ..chay kuch hojay…chotay thy tu un ki qimati se qeemati cheez lay laity thay aur un ko share kerny mein koi problem nhi hoti thi…aur khuda ny un ko biwi bhi isalyn asi di….

Woh ap ko maaf kerdain ga buhat aram se…

Per ap ko zara bhi zara bhi meri izzaat k kyala tha…sab se laar ker mein apko is ghar mein laya tha tu ap k kya faraz banta tha…yaha sab k dil jeetna ya angrizao k zamany k patray azmana ..divide n rule k….yeah ghar hai…

Gunjan: hum kerain gay sab…per tum tu pehly jasay hojao

Samrat: pehly jasay…huh…us pehly jasy Samrat k liyan apko woh behroos jitna paray ga gunjan…is ghar ko apna na paray ga tu shayd kahin waps humaray dil mein apki wohi jaga dobara ban jay..ap per behroosa humary liyan ab asan nhi hai….

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There was all dark there, it was dreadful silent all around…

 nupur…nupur kahain ap..yaha itna andhera kyun hai….Nupurr….

the lights on she was dam surprise looking all around her, there was beautiful smile on her face, she turned around and fine him smiling at him

Adi: happy anniversary biwi…he said hugging her

Diya: ap..she hugged him back….apko bhi..tu apny apni saali k sath yeah plan banya…hmm..aur ap kab aay

Adi: ji janab yeah idea humaray elwa kisi k ho sakta hai…aur hum abhi…2 ghate pehly aay thy..

Diya: thanku..so much….shukar ap wapas agay..uff….

Adi: hmm..sumone was missing me...wah yaar…asay jaaty rehna chaiy …qadar bharti hai

Diya: adi ap ki qadar nhi kertay kya hum..

Adi: aray baba mazk ker raha hoon…he came fowrd n kissed her forehead….

Mayank: ahem ahem…hogaya tu hum ankhein khol layin..

He said with a smirk, with one hand he has closed his eyes, n with other he has closed nupurs…who was blushing n chuckling…

Diya: moved away in embarrassment…while adi put his hand on his waist

Adi: jasay tum kuch dekh hi nhi raho haina…aur tum khud tu buhat masoom hoo…abhi dekh ankhein band kerny k bhanay side hug kis ny kiya hua hai…

Mayank: okay okay ….happy anniversary..

He came forward n hugged him…n so did nupur to diya

Adi: thank…n thanks for this all too…

Mayank: anytime yaar…chalo hum tu tum dono ko wish kerny rukh gay thy…ap log pls carry on…

Diya: mayankkk..

Mayank: kya api ...mein ny kya kiya…jo kyun is ny kiya…..he pointed to adi….

Nupur: acha api hum ja rahin hain..meray shohor ko kyun daat rahi hain…

Adi: achaa….ap bhi..kya baat hain..nupur itni taraqee…

She smiled with a blush

Mayank: yaar plss…pls maat tooko…abhi yaha sharam k saalab ajay ga..aur phir mera kya hoga

They bothed laughed…and the ladies glare…

Diya: ap dono meri behan k mazak uratay hain….

Mayank: mjhy ghar jana hai …meri majaal …

Nupur: okay…hum ja rahy hain….Allah hafiz….

……

At room…

Nupur: tu hum ko daaty hain

Mayank: ya khuda…meri biwi naraz hai ….ohoo…

He came n back hugged her….kissed her cheek…

Nupur: hum koi naraz nhi hai…jay jay..choray humain…

He griped her more tight…

Mayank: ab tu hum apko nhi chorain gay ….ap k liyan ek news hai…

Nupur: kya …..

He forward her a envelope….n snuggled more in her…

Mayank: kholein….

Kholein….being like this she even cant move and open her eyes, he looked at her n giggled..n moved a bit away yet did'nt left her from his grip..

She opened the envelope n found

Nupur: tickets…

Mayank: yes…packing strt kerdain kal se..hum teen din bad Europe ja rahin…

Nupur: haan…she looked at surprise..

Mayank: haan..he mimicked her….n she looked at the tickets n smile widely…kya baat hai..humain apki yeah muskuraht buhat achi lagi…he said pulling her cheek….

Nupur: she hugged him..n thanku….

Mayank: kis liyan…

Nupur: she looked up to him…aweien…

The both laughed at this….

 

 

 

Edited by drfizaahmed - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
API...🤗
awesome update...
i loved it lodsss...
awww...
it was such a cute part...By God!!!
i was totally awww...wid dis lovey dovey part..
Mayank is my JAAN...here...😳
uff!!! he is sooo damn cute n loving n caring...By God!!!
i want sm1 like him...😍😳😍
loved d convo from first to last...
both in dining table n Bedroom part...
awww...
i jst love dis MayUr...
n Samrat's words for Mayank was also sooo beautiful...
i toh totally fidaa for dis Mayank...😳
Samrat's words were quite harsh bt she deserved it...
bt as now Gunjan is realising her mistake hopefully all will b well soon...
so next update wud b my MayUr on "Honeymoon"😍😳😍
cant wait for dat...😍😍😍😍😍
n han API...bht din ho gaye apne woh rain wale OS ki tarha kuch bhttt Romantic nhi likha so dis time i want a very...ROMANTIC part ok!!! plzzz😳
waiting eagerly for d next part...
loved it lodsss...
love u API...🤗🤗🤗
Edited by 18anila1 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
so much nice. I love it. continue soon
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Posted: 12 years ago

Beautiful update

loved Mayur convo..
 
do continue soon
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Posted: 12 years ago

Beautiful part Fizu...

Gun realising her mistakes n everythin was awesome
Mayur as usual were brilliant
cont soon n thanks for the pm
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Posted: 12 years ago
so wonderful update waiting for their honeymoon