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FF :dakshna reunion,versn 2.0 (Page 12)

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Posted: 03 October 2011 at 3:14am | IP Logged
Originally posted by DakshnaFan

Yaar Sweetu... tu ne to sahi main zoor ka jhatka zoor se dilaya hai LOL...
I must say intezaar ka faal sachi bahut mitta hai yaar... Big smile
Dakshu ke har ek dialogue ke liye zor se taliya Clap muahTongue 
big jadu ki jappi dear...Hug
I like ki tune bhi Ayush ko +ve kiyaTongue... I too hope ki SSBN main bhi aaisa hi ho...Wink
Ur idea of revealing psycho in front of her don papa was very nice... Just loved it Clap
Each and every dialogue is superb Tongue Esp this one of Dakshu
D : Agar itna sab kuch sun kar bhi apko kuch samaj nahi aya, tho shayad apki beti ke sath apko bhi therapy ki zarurat he. ROFLROFLROFL
Joshi ki bhi aankhen khol di mast mast dialogues se... wah wah Clap Hug
 
thnku thnku thnkuHug...kaha thi re tu...misd uSmile...in fact, i  evn held up part 12 tere liyeTongue...maza aya na...joshi ko sunane ka idea jo aya beech meLOLLOLLOLLOL

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Posted: 03 October 2011 at 7:56am | IP Logged
2nd LAST PART PEOPL..Smile
 
 
 
Umm, emo he thoda sa, nd i've kept t lik, simpl...idea ye tha ki onc we giv sum credibility 2 aku...u get d drift naSmile...so here it is...

 

evening, P-zoo :

 

Aku has finished her narration, and all r in various degrees of shock...

Shyamal is thodi si calm cos they had a call frm Daksh, frm ayush's place, but is stil worried for dakshna.

Sanket, poor guy, is sitting on the other end of the couch, wary.

Ayi is disconsolate; Aku is sitting with her, trying to soothe her.

A : [ continuing their convo ] ...Lekin beta...mene Naina ke sath itni nainsafi ki...Na chintu ki bat suni na uski...Bina kuch jane, bina soche samjhe kya kya nahi bol diya us bacchi ko mene...Kitna dil dukhaya uska...Kis muh se mafi mangu me usse ab...

Aku : Naina samaj jayegi Kaku...Ap janti he na Naina kaisi he...

A : [ shakes her head ] muje bhoolna nahi chahiye tha ki Naina ne iss ghar ke liye kitna kuch kiya tha...APna mana tha usne hum sab ko, aur mene...? Kisi aur ki bato me akar mene use paraya kar diya, apne ghar se kya, dil se bhi nikal diya use...Sonakshi to parayi thi hi, lekin Rohini...[ sniffs ] Chintu se me kya kahu...

Aku : KAku..

Ayi looks up.

Daksh is standing in the doorway, tired but wary and withdrawn. They donno how much he has heard..

He goes upto sanket, places his hand on his shoulder.

D : Dada...

Snkt looks up.

D : [ softly ] I'm sorry...

Snkt pats his hand, heaves a sigh and goes back to the pensive mode. [ poor guy; he doesn deserv a vamp lik rohini Ouch ]

Daksh is about to go...

A : [ full of remorse ] Chintu...

Daksh stops, turns but says nothing.

A : Naina...

D : [ KP mode ] saman bhijvaya uska?

Aku : Nahi dada, wo aye the, saman lene lekin kaku ne vapis bheja unhe...Keh rahi thi ki wo kal aye...

Daksh storms off to Naina's office without another word.

 
 

ayi is worried, Aku offers to go check up on him...

A : Dada...

Daksh turns to her, softens a bit.

D : Ha akruti...

A : Ap...ap kya karne wale he ab?

D : Pata dhundna he Naina ka. Kaun si compny ai thi vaise...?

Releived, Aku smiles,  and tells him. She leavs the offic, Daksh calls up the packrs/movrs nd gets naina's adrs...

 

Ayi ventures in, after waitin for about half an hour...Daksh is stil in Naina's offic, in her chair, head down on the table.

She goes up, touches his shoulder.

D : Akruti me bilkul theek-- [ stops wen he sees its Ayi ]

A : Chintu...muje maaf kar de beta...[ strokes his cheek ] Me nahi janti thi ki tu aur naina ek doosre se kitna pyaar karte the...Mene sonakshi ke bato me akar na jane kya kar diya...[ heaves a sigh ] Tu sahi tha, aur me galat. Manti hu. Aur mujse hui bhool ko me sudhar lungi...Kaise bhi. [ pats his cheek, and leaves ]

Daksh stares after ayi, debating whether he should go after her...

But then, the day over now and its turmoils, he is unabl to find the strength for anything...He takes in a breath, holds it in; Saas lena bhi mushkil he...Everythin in the room, the table, the chair, the packed boxes, even the walls that are now stripped bare, remind him of HER...

He leans back into the chair, eyes closed...

 

                                                            ... contd ...
 
 
ps : ok, ok...aur nahi kheechungi...jus one moreSmile...kuch zyada hi lamba ho gaya na "Prequel"LOL...srySmile...
 
 
 
 


Edited by sweetaish - 26 October 2011 at 10:28pm

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Posted: 03 October 2011 at 8:20am | IP Logged
Too good Aish dear...
Simply loved the last para of ur FF Smile I really want to see Aai regret like this in actual SSBN also... Smile
So abhi happy ending door nahi hai... Day Dreaming
Thanks bud Hug

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Posted: 03 October 2011 at 8:42am | IP Logged
Hug@ aish

Acha tha yaar..Clapayi ko aur ruladiya hota..Angry..aur jyada..I hate her.

LOved this pachtava dialogues..Clap..Last part kab aayega? and as dakshna fan said  last para..awesome expression...Clap


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Posted: 03 October 2011 at 8:45am | IP Logged
Originally posted by lucky.m

Hug@ aish

Acha tha yaar..Clapayi ko aur ruladiya hota..Angry..aur jyada..I hate her.

LOved this pachtava dialogues..Clap..Last part kab aayega? and as dakshna fan said  last para..awesome expression...Clap


 
 
Hugthnku  darlin...*low bow* LOL... i kno yar...ayi ko aur rulati me Angry, lekin ab to itna kheech diya "Prequel" ki...last part kal subhe dal dungi dear...thoda sa tinkering karne ka ab man heSmile

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Posted: 03 October 2011 at 11:25am | IP Logged
CRY AAYI CRY! CRY!! CRY!!! KP will forgive u bcz he is ur son but we wont!!!Angry u made our angel Naina cry!!!Cry
 
Great scenes aish!!!!!!! woo hoo!!! keep rocking girl!Clap


Edited by LadyMystique - 03 October 2011 at 11:25am

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Posted: 03 October 2011 at 11:27am | IP Logged
ah...guys, ye raha d last part...i think i'v givn t my best shot...grand finaleLOL bahot lamba he, don mindTongue...sit back nd njoySmile...
 
 
note : jitna ho sake, emo+romo dono balanc kiya he...bahot bar tinkering kar li, lagta he i'l nevr b satisfied...hop kafi heSmile
 
 
So Daksh has finishd d story, nd they r stil out in the patio lekin standing under this tree ka shade now...
 

N : Acha to vakil saheb, ek din me sab solv kar di apne...

D : [ smiles ] Ha.

N : [ tweaks his nose ] Kal tak kaha the aap?

D : Kal tak tumhe khone ka darr nahi tha...tum mere sath thi.

N : [ chokes up ] Daksh...

D : Pata he Naina, wo train jab choot gayi...EK pal ke liye mujhe laga ki mene tumhe kho diya [ strokes her face gently ]...aise laga jaise...jaise dhadkane ruk gayi ho meri...

Naina ke ankhen bhar ati he, and she cuts him off. "Pls daksh..."

He takes her hand down, laces his fingers with hers.

D : Tabhi mene thaan li thi ki tumhe vapis le aunga, 24 ghante mene usike sahare kaat di...Lekin Naina, us ek pal ke liye me kitna khudkars ho gaya tha...[ takes her face in his hands ] Mene ye nahi socha tha ki agar meri jaan nikal rahi he, to meri Naina ki...

Ab to daksh ke bhi ankhen r all brimmed up...

Naina closes her eyes; the tears run down. He brushes them off, infinitely gentle, infinitely tender...drops a kiss on one eyelid, then another...And they are lost in each other's eyes...

 

The maid comes and calls them in for dinner; Naina urges her and her mom to go ahead.

Anjali comes out to call her then, sees them in the same posture...and she comes up with this brilliant idea...Dakshna eat out in the patio...[ ho sake to candles bhi lagva deti meDay Dreaming...chalo, starlight se adjust karva dengeSmile ]...

Naina and daksh are out in the lawn after dinner. Daksh has his head in her lapDay Dreaming, eyes closed.

N : [ runs her hand through his hair ] Daksh...

D : Hmm.

N : Ayi se sach me tumne char sentenc se zyada kuch nahi kaha...? Yaha akar bhi...?

D : Nahi. Flight se utar kar mene akruti ko ph kiya tha, usne bata dia hoga.

N : [ chiding ] Kp.

D : [ laughs gently ] Tumhare bina to me KP hi hu. Vaise bat to mene kisi se bhi nahi ki thi...

N : Sivay sonakshi aur mr. Joshi ke.

D : [ laughs again ] Ha.

N : tumne use thappad mara...?

D : Ha... [ no replies to that, so he looks up ] Kam pad gaye na...me janta tha. Ek kam karte he, kal subhe ki flight pe vapis jate he, aur baki ka tum de dena use...

N : Nahi daksh.

D : [ frowns ] Kyu?

N : [ smiles ] Vapis jayenge to train me jayenge...

D : theek he...[ closes his eyes again, content to be ]. Naina...

N : Ha daksh?

D : Phir kabhi mere sath aise mat karna.

N : [ still playing with his hair, thodi si lost ] Kaise...

D : Akele. Train pe. Agli bar muje sath nahi liya, to dekhna...

N : [ smiles ] Daksh...kal waha jaye...?

D : 16 A ?

N : Ha. Tumhe yad he, us din hamne kaha tha ki sab theek hone ke bad ham waha jayenge...

He sits up. "Tumse judi koi bat me kabhi bhool sakta hu? Ham kal jayenge. Tumhari fav seat par hi baithenge. Ticket iss bar bhi me lunga. Kyu?"

She smiles at that. He holds out his arm for her, she ducks under it, then scoots in closer, the better to listen to the beat of his heart, and they spend some time that way, not needing words now, completely in synch with each other...

After a while, Daksh speaks up again.

D : Tare gin rahi ho?

Naina gives up staring at the night sky and smiles at him.

D : Answer galat niklega. Ek kam hogi.

N : [ smiles; she knos whats cominSmile ] Kyu?

D : Kyunki ek yaha mere pas baithi he [ head-butt...Day Dreamingah, i kno. i misd t 2...]

But the smile goes too soon.

D : Akruti ki fikar ho rahi he.

N : [ nods ] Ayush...Mene tumse pehle bhi kaha tha ki uss rishte me kuch to khatak rahi he...

D : Janta hu. Ye bhi janta hu ki ek din me koi sudhar nahi jata, lekin ek akhri mauka to hum ayush ko de sakte he.[ half to himself ] Agar kuch aur hua, to Ayush ko me dekh lunga.

N : [ takes his hand ] Hum dekh lenge.

He places his hand over hers; eye lock, and a smile...

The breeze is cooler now, its tipping towards cold, and its getting late...

N : Daksh, andar chale...? Rat bahot ho chuki he.

He nods. Gets up, offers her his hand.

N : Daksh, tum ab bhi ayi se naraz ho...?

D : [ slowly ] nahi.

N : Phon kar lo...ayi pareshan hogi...kab se tumne theek se bat bhi nahi ki he ayi se.

D : [ smiles ] Kar lunga. Ab chale?

He raises their joined hands to his lips, kisses hers. She smiles into his eyes, nd Naina ke naino me he all her love for her Daksh...He smiles back.

And so, the cool breeze and the assorted music of a beautiful night, the starlit sky for a backdrop, they walk in hand-in-hand, a silent promise to be together, humesha nd forever..

 
 
 
ps : oh don wori, kahani kaha khatm hui...humne to dono ki shadi kabki karva di thi naTongue...honeymoon bhi manva rahe heLOLLOLLOL...
pps : kat ke chota karne ka man nahi kar raha tha...i hop der r no complntsSmile


Edited by sweetaish - 03 October 2011 at 1:11pm

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Posted: 03 October 2011 at 11:36am | IP Logged
ok...dis one s specially 4 lucky, mysti nd rupuSmileSmileSmileSmile...4 all d egging-ons, all d lovely comments ke barish, 4 putting up with my million erratic, kabhi tiny, kabhi long parts...luv u guysHugHugHugHug...this one s all 4 u...
 
lov n smilSmiles,
 
aish


Edited by sweetaish - 03 October 2011 at 11:43am

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