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Posted: 13 September 2011 at 8:19am | IP Logged
awww!
2 cute!

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Posted: 14 September 2011 at 8:29am | IP Logged
next update coming withing,, bas thoda sa aur intezar... :P

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Posted: 14 September 2011 at 10:33am | IP Logged
Recap:
 
Kriya to herself: yeh mujhe kya ho jata hai baar baar. Kyu mein yeh bhool jati hun ki Rey ne uss din mere saath kya karwaya tha.
 Bas ab aur nahin.. mein kamzor nahin padh sakti. Mujhe apne aap ko sambhalna padega..


Rey is running arnd trying to find Kriya n he runs into Neha.

R: Hey Neha, tumne kriya ko dekha hai??
N: nahin toh. neha ko toh laga ki woh tumhare saath hai
R: haan thi woh mere saath but pata nahin kahan gayab ho gayi hai ab. acha pata chale toh usse kehna ki mein usse dhund raha hun n mujhe usse kuch bahut imp baat kehni hai
N: Ok.. Neha keh degi usse
R: ok thanks Neha..

Neha meets kriya in the washroom n gives Rey's msg to her to which kriya says that she is going home now n wants to be alone. ( She is very upset )
Neha thinks that d reason she is upset must be Rey as she was with him some time back. So she decides to talk to Rey


R: Hi neha, kriya mile?
N: Haan mile bhi n chali bhi gayi
R: chali gayi?? but kahan?? Mujhe bataya bhi nahin
N: Plz Rey. Kriya already very upset tumhare wajah se. Tum already usse poore coll ke saamne insult kar chuke ho.  bas ab aur nahin. So tum plz kriya ka peecha karna chod do. Bahut hurt rehti hai woh only coz of u. and yeh neha nahin dekh sakti
R: college ke saamne insult?? meine ki thi ya kriya ne?
N: Tumne n tumhari sharon ne mil ke
R: Sharon ne?? (He thinks in his mind ki firse? But usne toh mujhse promise kiya tha ki woh kriya se ab nahin ledegi)
Neha plz mujhe theek se batao ki tum kya kehna chahti ho. Mujhe iske baare mein kuch nahin pata
N: Neha sab knowing. so zyada smart mat bano. election ke time par tumne hi toh sharon se speech dilwayi thi. Neha soch bhi nahn sakti thi ki tum kisi bhi gal ke against aisa soch sakte ho


(Neha leaves n rey is kinda frozen n amazed abt wt neha said. he still cannot believe it. So he goes to vicky to clarify all this)

(On meeting vicky)

V: Oh hi Rey.. Kaha tha yaar tu.. ??
(Rey is blank n silent)
S: Reyy... Tu theek toh hai na? Tere chehre pe 12 kyu baje hui hain?
R: Vicky mein jo bhi puchunga, plz sab sach sach kehna
V: of course yaar.. meine tujhse kabhi jhooth bola hai?
R: Haan bola hai. Sach chipa kar
V: hain? Kaunsa sach?
R: kya sharon ne poori coll ke saamne Kriya ki insult ki thi?


(Vicky is shocked to hear this from Rey n uska head down ho jata hai)

R: Vicky mein tujhse kuch puch raha hun.. (Very loudly)
V: haan Rey. Usne election campaign ke time par bahut kuch kaha tha. But yeh sab toh chalta hai yaar.. (Trying to cheer him up)
R: Kya?? chalta hai?? how can u say this vicky? tum jaante ho na ki mein kriya ko like karta hun? Aisa karne se pehle tune zara sa bhi nahin socha ki jab mujhe pata chalega toh kya hoga?
V: haan Rey.. But sharon.. (Interrupts in between)
R:Sharon se toh mein baad mein milta hun. Pehle mujhe kriya se milna hai. Thanks Vicky. kya khoob dosti nibhayi yaar tum logon ne


(Rey is shattered n thinks abt the past abt wt all happend.. Kriya crying that day wen she slapped him.. Rose day party.. his rude behaviour to Kriya)

(Rey curses himself for all that happened n feels so helpless. N on the other side Kriya bhi bahut upset hai as ki y she went so close to him inspite of knowing his Casanova kinda personality n wat he n sharon did to her)

Rey calls Kriya to solve all the misunderstandings but woh phone kat deti hai. She keeps doing so n switches off her cell after leaving a text saying that plz leave me alone.

Rey sochta hai ki mujhe tumse milna hai n mein milkar hi rahunga baat-cutter chahe jo marzi ho jaye..

So Rey goes to her place. Of course pipe se chadh kar jata hai window tak( do i even need to write this??)

Kriya is in her room sitting idle n feeling low


R: (loud whispers mein) Kriyaaa
(Kriya is wondering ki yeh awaz kahan se aa rahi hai. Then she turns towards the window to find Rey)
K: (very loudly) Rey tum?? yahan????????
R: shhh.. warna Rani laxmi bai sun legi.
K: Rani laxmi bai??
R: haan tumhare mom
K: Oh haan Rani laxmi bai.. (Then she realizes wt is she saying) Shut up. (Choti se smile dekar ) Woh mere mom hai
R: Just kidding.. mujhe tumse baat karni hai??
K: But mujhe aapse koi baat nahin karni.. aap plz jao yahan se.

R: aaj jab tak mein apni baat poori na kar lun, mein yahan se kahin nahin jaunga
K: Toh theek hai, Khade raho yahan par
(Kriya's for shouts from the kitchen for dinner)
K: aayi maa.. Rey tum plz chale jao. maa kabhi bhi aati hogi. kyu mere liye aur probs create kar rahe ho
R:baatcutter plz mere 2 min baat sun lo. fir mein chala jaunga yaha se
K: nahi rey.. kal baat karte hain coll mein.. ab jao yahan se

R: meine kaha na, mein aaj baat kiye bina yahan se kahin nahin jaunga
K: Fine.. khade raho yahan par.. mein dinner karne ja rahi hun..
R: acha suno, ek glass pani la sakti ho?
K: ji nahin.. kyuki aap abhi n isse waqt yahan se ja rahe ho
R: wrong.. m not going
K: yes u r
R: no m not
K: yes


Kria's mom shouts (Kriaaa.. beta khanna thanda ho raha hai)

K: aayi maaa bas 2 min...
(She leaves n he is still waiting)

k's mom: kahan reh gayi thi beta??
k: kuch nahin maa, bas aise hi..
K's mom: sab theek hai na?? coll mein koi prob??
k: nahin maa.. coll mein kya prob ho sakti hai
K's mom: acha khaana kha lo..

(They both have their dinner n Kriya is still thinking ki woh yahan kaise aaya n usse address kaise pata chala)
K: chala gaya hoga ab tak toh
K's mom: kaun chala gaya ho ga?
K: koi nahin maa.. aap khaana khao..


(After dinner she goes back to her room n goes straight to the window to check if he left or not.. Rey peeche ki side par chip raha tha. The moment she turns back, he holds his hand.. Look look hawa hawa scene)

He jumps into the room n observes the room carefully..

R: paani layi??
K: yeh lo aapka paani..
R: toh tumhe pata tha ki mein yahi hunga.. :)
K: Haan.. kyuki aapko bilkul bhi sharam naahin hai aise kisi bhi ladki
k room mein ghuste hue??
R: Aise hi kissi bhi ladki k room mein thodi na gussa hun.. mein toh ek bahut hi spl ladki k room mein aaya jisse mein .. (Pauses ) OHOO HOOO OHOOO ...LA LA LA
K: (Bahut dheere se) jisse mein?
R: Jisse mein sorry bolna chahta hun..
K: Sorry kyu?
R: Mujhe sab kuch pata chal gaya hai kriya.. Neha ne mujhe bataya ki sharon ne tumahare against..

K: sharon nahin aapne kaha tha
R: yahi toh misunderstanding hai baat-cutter.. meine aisa kuch nahin kaha tha.. in fact mujhe aaj pata chala hai ki aisa bhi kuch hua tha.. mein tumhare baare mein kuch galat nahin soch sakta. Mere ander k Chabilal ko sirf tum janti ho. aur kissi ko nahin pata ki chabilal kaun hai.. n mujhe toh pata bhi nahin ki usne kaha kya tha.. Bas itna pata hai ki unn sab ne mujhse yeh baat chipai n mein unhe kabhi maaf nahin karunga.. M really sorry kriya.. meine tumhare saath bahut rude behave kiya. Rose day party n all.. m feeling so guilty.. (His head is down)

K: kya aap sach bol rahe ho ki aapko kuch nahin pata tha iske baare mein?
R: Haan baat-cutter..  plz believe me.. tum chaho toh vicky ya swayam se puch sakti ho..
K: uski koi zaroorat nahin hai.. (She finally smiles.. world's cutest smile wid amazing expressions... yippeee)
(Rey comes closer to her n holds her hands)
R: Tum sharmati hui bahut amazing lagti ho.. :P

(Plz imagine kriya sharmana n Rey ka uski taraf dekhna.. bas karte raho 2 min n pool mein gir jao. .:P)

(Then Kria's mom from outside shouts)

K's mom: Kriya, beta kisse baatein kar rahi ho??
K: Oh shit.. Mom...!!!!!!!!! kisse se nahin mom.. phone par thi.. Neha se...
R: Not bad haan.. :) M impressed..:)
K: Chup raho.. :) n tum ab jao.. mom kabhi bhi aati hogi..
R: Theek hai.. :) ab chalta hun.. gud nite.. sweet dreams.. (n stays still starring at her)
K: Ab jao bhi.. aise hi dekhte rahe toh mom ko bolna fir bye..
R: acha theek hai.. kal milte hain..
K: (Super shamate hue) hmm theek hai.. dhayan se jaana..
R: oyee hoyee..  (Jaise armaan bolta tha dittoo waise bola.. Akhir teacher se kuch toh seekha hai humara Romeo)

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i know ki u wanna go on reading on n on n on... but baaki ka baad mein... :) i had written this Kriya ke ghar wala scene after watching D3 today.. i had planned b4 ki this wil come under part 4 but aaj ka episode dekhke i cant leave u guys on a sad note... so yeh happy wala part bhi likh diya
I hope u guys like it as much as i did writing it.. 

Please Spread across this to ur all D3 lovers.. :)

waiting for ur commments... :) :)


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Posted: 14 September 2011 at 10:44am | IP Logged
OMG...This is MINDBLOWING...
 
MICK you write so well...ek ek dialogue...exactly in Rey's, Kriya's, Neha's and Kriya's mom's style...
 
You took me to the old and gold D3 days...oh ho ho ah ah ha ha ha ...PLease update soon...Whats next part?? I am already excited...

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Posted: 14 September 2011 at 10:47am | IP Logged
preeti: dupahar se likh raha hun yaar,, n tum abhi se aage ka waiting.. :P thoda toh rest karne do.. :) :P

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Posted: 14 September 2011 at 10:47am | IP Logged
Wow...I felt like watching a movie.The way u describe the scenes.Its amazing.
I'm still lost in Kriyansh...They are awesome.

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Posted: 14 September 2011 at 10:49am | IP Logged
Originally posted by kriyaaansh

preeti: dupahar se likh raha hun yaar,, n tum abhi se aage ka waiting.. :P thoda toh rest karne do.. :) :P
 
Achha kar lo Rest...But, next time write longer..Not that this was short...but, any FF on Kriyaansh is short for me..I feel like reading and reading and reding. ...Sara Movie create ho jata hai Dimag par

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Posted: 14 September 2011 at 10:50am | IP Logged
OK one thing,
 
Indexing kar lo on the first page so that it will be easier to find the PARTS...

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