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Posted: 12 September 2011 at 5:43am | IP Logged
Part 2
 
This is in continuation to the earlier part..
 
Rey:  Chabilal ko zinda karna padega. N yeh kaam sirf ek person kar sakti hai.
Kriya: kaun mein??
Rey: Nahin Ramaira..

K: Ohooo.. Toh mujhe Ramaira bana padega..
R: ya
K: Toh theek hai. Aaj shaam ko College ke baad milenge..
R: sure.. ( He was wondering if she is the same girl asking him out which he had been dreaming since months n still not able to pataofy her . . N yeh sab coz usne mujhe thapad maara tha )
K: Kya sochne lag gaye Mr GS??
R: Mein soch raha tha ki agar ek thapad se hum itna close aa sakte hain, toh i dnt mind getting slapped everyday . .
K: Haan yeh toh sahi kaha aapne.. Ek aur maarun kya?? (Both Smiling)
(Rey moves fwd with his left cheek closer to Kriya n she gets into a pose of hitting him like a boxer. Rey is kinda scared now. His eyes r closed. n soch raha hai ki yeh toh sach mein maar rahi hai yaar , But out of now where she gives him a small kiss on his cheek n runs away out of the fire-exit)
(This leaves Rey go crazy n runs after her. He has a big smile which SHARON sees. Kriya is already past Sharon while Rey is stopped by Sharon coz of which he can't catch kriya but his eyes are still there. Kriya also stops after some time n realizes that rey is stopped by sharon n she leaves her annoyed which is noticed by Rey)

S: Rey, tum aaj itne khush kyu lag rahe ho??
R: (Rey's eyes still searching for kriya until the last glimpse) Kuch nahi sharon. Aisa kuch nahin hai.
S: Chalo fir chalte hain rehersals ke liye.
R: nahin Sharon.. aaj nahin.. mujhe kuch aur kaam hai.
S: Kaam ?? kaunsa kaam??
R: woh mujhe Kri...(Poora nahin bola n stopped in between) kuch kaam hai related to GS work
S: ohh. Ok fine then. Theek hai toh tum jao.. mere liye toh time hi nahin hai aajkal tumhare paas.
R: Tumhe hi mera naam diya tha na sharon GS k liye. Ab GS bana hun toh responsibilities bhi toh poori karne padegi na..
S: Ahaan. But tum apna kaam uss weakling behanji se kyu nahin karwate?? (Mein hi janta hun kitne dard se mein kriya k against yeh likha.. :P)
jab se swayam mera assistant bana hai, mein apna saara kaam usse se karwati hun.
R: Oh nice.. but mein aisa nahin kar sakta sharon.. ab mujhe jana hai.. bye.. cya
S: ok bye Rey..
(Rey poori josh ke saath jata hai kriya ko dhundhne asking every1 jo bhi raste mein milta hai)
 
(In the mean time Kriya goes is in the washroom n bahut gusse mein hai)
 
Kriya to herself: yeh mujhe kya ho jata hai baar baar. Kyu mein yeh bhool jati hun ki Rey ne uss din mere saath kya karwaya tha.
(Washes her face) Bas ab aur nahin.. mein kamzor nahin padh sakti. Mujhe apne aap ko sambhalna padega..
  
Thats it for now guys. I hope u like it.. please help me in this PM thing. i am new to IF. don't know how it works.. someone do it for me please. :P :P
 
Looking forward to ur comments, suggestions n criticisms (If any)
 
** Mick **



Edited by kriyaaaansh - 12 September 2011 at 5:45am

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Posted: 12 September 2011 at 6:16am | IP Logged
WOW MIck dis is sooo AWSUM updateClap...me SUPERLIKE itEmbarrassedBig smile
hahaha i luvd d part 'colg ke baad milenge'LOL Embarrassedhehehe nd Rey ka everyday slap dialogueROFL
OMG kiss on d cheek Blushinghayye yeh ideas cv's ko kyun nahi aatheBig smile
pls update sooon cnt wait to read colg ke baad mein milnaDay Dreaming
nd thnx for d pmBig smile

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Posted: 12 September 2011 at 6:37am | IP Logged
EEE she kisses him on the cheeek!<3 that was so cuteee Mick! I loveeedd it :D Please continue sooon! =)

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Posted: 12 September 2011 at 6:50am | IP Logged
OMG she kisses him on cheek!!!Blushing EEE!!!! loved it mick!!!! plzzz update soon. can't wait for it. Embarrassed

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Posted: 12 September 2011 at 7:04am | IP Logged
nyc...
waiting for the next part...
n that was so so so so so cute...

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Posted: 12 September 2011 at 7:14am | IP Logged
Awww...Big smile lol,I've just been reading and grinning like an idiot...it's soo cute! I wish aisa sacchi mein ho jata...
please continue soon!SmileClap

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Posted: 12 September 2011 at 7:28am | IP Logged
awesome awesome and awesome...
loved that...well i m also new here i had joined yesterday...
nd me also dont knw...
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Posted: 12 September 2011 at 7:34am | IP Logged
wow mick that was sooo cutee
n kriya kisses him on the cheek ...=)
lol i can imagine rey's face...n running after her
that dialogue rocks...
 agar ek thapad se hum itna close aa sakte hain, toh i dnt mind getting slapped everyday  *claps*
but dude kriya ko achanak kya hua ??
cant wait 4 next
see yaaa
 

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