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I would personally would like Aham to come home from work, go upstairs find no Gopi, change come downstairs and Koki/Hetal serving tea, Gopi has gone out to the market, there Gopi meets Dhawal saying he is rushing to buy medicine for Jithubhai who isn't feeling well, Gopi says as soon as she finishes at the market, she will come to see him. Then I want her to go there see him completely unwell, but refusing to go to the hospital, she knows a lot of home remedies so she volunteers to spend a night (wear Kinjal's clothes the next day...I know she is taller, she will hem the trousers...LOL), she goes in kitchen and starts with the remedies, meanwhile Aham and Modi's getting worried where did Gopi go off to. Eventually around 8.30pm when she makes the remedy she calls home and tells them where she is and that she's not coming home. Aham is thinking, shall I go there to see Jithu bhai, but meanwhile it's already 8.45pm (when his thinking this), dinner is being served, he eats it's already 9.15pm, he decides to make an excuse to go see Jithu bhai, Kokila says Aham it's late, I will go tomorrow, he says Ji Mom (LOL, think his pronunciation), he goes upstairs finds Gopi's school books and bag, he says, probably needs to go to school in the morning, I will take them to her, he grabs the bag and leaves, telling Kokila, Gopi will need her school bag for tomorrow morning right? Kokila agrees and he goes. He arrives at Jithubhai's house and goes to see the patient, Gopi is in the room with Jithu, he asks after Jithu who is sleeping peaceably after being restless because of Gopi's remedy.

The GoHam scene starts, he tells her to take care of herself and gives her, her school bag. But can't tear his eyes away from her, his cell phone rings, it's Kokila asking to speak to Gopi, he gives the phone to Gopi, their hands touch, Gopi takes the phone and speaks to Kokila, she want's to find out how Jithubhai is, she explains how the patient is and gives back the phone, this time Aham takes the phone but with a caress of hands, puts the phone back, Gopi follows him out of the room, no-one is about Urmila is in the bathroom, Kinjal/Dhawal in their own room, Gopi escorts him to the door, he goes, but turns to look back at Gopi, Jai Shree Krishna, Jai Shree Krishna. Gopi closes the door and locks it. 

Next day Gopi takes rickshaw to school, her friends are super happy that she didn't wear a saree, as they think her sarees are like Christmas trees...lol, Garv asks to see her homework (substitute Aham to the rescue) he says she did well, teacher enters the class and lesson starts and Gopi has a nice day, she finishes school, and decides she should go to Jithu bhai's to check how her patient is doing. She finds Jigar outside waiting, she tells him what she wants to do, Jigar said he hasn't checked on his father in law yet, as he had some work in the morning, so they go, they check on him and Gopi finds the ingredients for the home remedy medicine is finished, so she tells Jigar can you wait so I can go buy the ingredients and make it for Mahma, Jigar agrees she goes to the market and shops to buy the ingredients. Meanwhile, Aham has cleared his workload early, to make sure he comes home early, he goes home, finds Gopi not home yet and calls up Jigar, Jigar where are you, Jigar tells him where he is, that Gopi wanted to check on Jithu, Aham tells him Gopi needs to come home and study (you know how he is...LOL), Jigar agrees that they will come soon, not telling him that Gopi wasn't even there and she still has the remedy to make that takes some time to make, as it needs to cool before it can be administered etc. Meanwhile goes upstairs changes clothes come downstairs to wait, and wait, no Gopi and Jigar, he rings again, the phone is engaged, Jigar is speaking to Rashi (trying to get close to her through flirting on the phone Tongue), Aham is pursing his lips in anger...Mom, I will just go see what is happening at Jithu mahma's house I won't be long...Kokila says wait let me ask Rashi for the phone number for the house there, by this time Aham is restless and wants to be off, he tells Kokila, don't worry Mom, I won't be long, and walks out the door with large strides, to get away before she stops him again, Aham makes his way there with lightning speed.

He arrives and knocks, finds Jigar sitting on the sofa, chatting on his mobile still...LOL, Aham greets Urmila and asks after jithu bhai, she tells him his feeling better, Aham asks is Gopi with him, Urmila tells him she is in the kitchen, Aham gives Jigar an upset face (is this your coming just now bahavior...lol), he goes to the kitchen, finds Gopi preparing something on the cooker, he asks her, so you are leaving your studies to come here and cook, just because at the house you are not allowed to do housework, you are finding it in other peoples houses. ROFL

Gopi, woh, woh (starting her sentence) eventually she tells him she is making a home remedy for Jithu bhai, once its ready she will give it to the patient. Aham watches her for a while, breathing deeply trying to calm himself, he goes and sits down on the sofa in the living room. He hears, Jigar telling Rashi, no you hang up, no you...(kids stuff...that people do when in love). Jigar gets off the phone. Aham tells him I'm here, you go home to Rashi, I will wait for Gopi and come later. Jigar says okay bhai, and says bye to everyone and goes.

Aham sits and sits starts to regret sending Jigar home, as he could use the company, Urmila and his sister are avoiding him, Urmila comes, Kinjal dikhra/beta (forgot what she uses to call her), go and make tea for Aham, Kinjal comes and storms off to the kitchen she finds Gopi using the cooker all two places. She comes back phui the cooker is being used by Gopi Bhabhi I can't make it, Urmila looks at her with a twinkle in her eye, dikhra use the stove that you mother gifted us, it's in the store/pantry. Kinjal goes and lugs it out of there and finds it and arranges the lighting of it etc, She makes the tea eventually and brings it, with milk, Aham to Kinjal you know I drink black tea, or sorry bhai I forgot, Aham is thinking Gopi is in the kitchen why didn't she tell Kinjal my preference...his starting to wonder is her indifference an avoidance technique, not coming home last night, today again making excuses to remain here and now the tea.

Eventually the remedies are prepared, Gopi washes all the utensils she was using (taking more time) whilst it cools down a bit, in cold water, she asks the neighbours to have some ice, she had to walk through the living room to get the ice from the neighbour (to cool the remedy). Aham just looking at her, she didn't meet his eyes or look at him (however pallu was on). She goes to get the ice. She comes back the same no looking at Aham.

The home remedy medicine cooks and she brings it to Mahma's room, here she looks at Aham, and he gets up to follow her into the room, she administers the remedy and tells him she will come to check on him the next day, Jithu looks at Aham, which has an expression like a thunder cloud and says to Gopi, no Gopi, your place is at your saasural, give the instructions to Kinjal/Urmila to make for me and I will get well, Aham tells him, why don't you go to the hospital, the hospitals are getting advanced now, no injection administered for everything...they all laugh. They take their leave. 

Aham and Gopi in the car, Aham keeps looking at Gopi, Gopi looks back but doesn't say anything. They arrive at home (Aham is thinking well if she was stalling not coming home to avoid me, I got her now, she's coming home, so I don't have to ask her)...

They arrive at home Gopi informs Kokila all that happened and the progress of the patient. She goes up, yawns as she has had a trying day, Aham was in the bathroom, he comes out and she goes in to change, when they are both in their room, Aham is working, Gopi is making ready for sleeping, Aham asks her you are sleeping, she agrees, he tells her No you didn't do any school work bring your books, do your homework and some studying and go to sleep...Gopi is thinking, gosh I'm so tired, she does the homework quickly and shows him, his angry, you writing ineptly like before, write nicely, like the way I told you to, she concentrates and does it again, she finishes, and he give her some studying exercises to do as an extra...Gopi by this time her eyes are closing tiredly, she tells him Ahemji, I have had a really tiring day, can't we study tomorrow, Aham says No, if you had come home at the regular time before you wouldn't have this now, Gopi shocked Shocked, Aham says that's right, your mahma is unwell, they are hospitals everywhere where he could have gone for treatment. Gopi says to him I is Saarry Ahemji (like before with the chicken, thinking it was Aham), Aham explodes, it's Sorry not Saarry, you see if you put enough effort on your studies as you put on taking care of people, you would know this by now, now concentrate on those exercises, (he was yelling by this time)...

Kokila comes to knock on the door, what is going on between teacher and pupil? Gopi by this time tears are rolling down involuntarily, Aham stays quiet looks at Gopi and the door, stop crying (softly to Gopi) and opens the door, Kokila comes in looks at Gopi and turns to Aham, Aham what is this, you never loose your temper with Gopi when you are studying before, speak softly, what's the matter, Aham tells her that Gopi doesn't want to study tonight because she has tired herself out doing housework and remedies at her Mahma's house...(imagine Aham as he was when he came home from the puja...with Gopi having brought dung on her slippers in the car). Mom I'm teaching Gopi responsibilities, it's not her responsibility to take care for her mahma, he has a wife and others at his home to care for him. Her responsibilities is to take care of this house, Mom, I didn't eat dinner, you know how Urmi Aunty is and her stinginess I haven't eaten since lunch. Kokila answers but Gopi has been relieved of her responsibilities of the kitchen here, Aham answers she has her responsibilities to study and to me...Shocked Shocked Shocked Kokila looks at him, Gopi looks at him, he looks at them and realises what he said and says I mean to do what I say with regards to studying. Kokila says okay, she is tired now, from tomorrow, she will come home at the right time and you also don't come home too late from the office, come home in time so you eat and can study together. Aham looks at her silently, Gopi agrees with her head and smiles.



Edited by Nafisa_blossoms - 30 September 2011 at 9:56am

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Nafisa this is brilliant you must turn it in to a story plzSmile

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Originally posted by shaffa

Nafisa this is brilliant you must turn it in to a story plzSmile

Thanks Shaffa, I've updated it, please read again.Smile

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Realy nice OS ~!

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very nice plzzz cont

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Posted: 07 September 2011 at 8:38am | IP Logged
Awww, now that was a perfect ending!

Lovely shot where he says Gopi has duties towards him and then whooop! I meant towards the studying which I teach her! Loved that bit.

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Thank you everybody for taking the time to read my OS, I will see what I dream about over the next few days, if I think of something I shall update it and make it into a short story at least.


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very cute!!! i love it!!short n sweet n just perfect! Embarrassed

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