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Posted: 06 September 2011 at 8:58am | IP Logged
Originally posted by khwaishfan

Hi Jaz...thanks 4 da pm ! Congrats on da SS Party! All da best Hug! The poem was wonderful. It was intense, emtional n sad SS! Poor Geet, has nt forgotten the lost of her baby. It will always b der! Geet was in so much of pain! Dadi consoles Geet. Maan wants to know y Geet is so upset n sad bt nobody will tell him nything! Beautifullly written...update soon Wink

glad you liked the poem...and oye...this isnt a "sad" ss...no one dies or anything...so this doesnt count as sad!! LOL...lol...and of course not...how can she forget...its always there with her...she fought so hard for the baby only to loose it!! Cry...

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Posted: 06 September 2011 at 9:00am | IP Logged
Originally posted by darkice7_12

Awww, you stopped it at the worst part! I need to find out what will happen next. can't wait to see how maan reacts when you update next week. great story so far. Clap of course i stopped!! thoda bohot torture toh chalta hi  hai!! LOL

I'm happy that you decided to write this amnesia ss, because we're not really getting much from maan in the show beyond his getting angry/suspicious/trying or what have you, and the show is moving at a snail's pace regarding other truths of their pasts. I really want to see him react to other events that happened in their lives beyond his reaction to finding out they were married. this baby thing and the whole dev debacle were two things i want to see maan's reaction to, and hope the show will tackle before he gets his memory back. b/c once he does, it's game over.  im liking the show...but the CV's need to pick it up and get on with getting Maan's memory back...or at least having him find out a bit about his past with geet...i want the dev thing to come out too...i cant wait for his reaction to that all over again!! its going to be awesome!!! 

Even if they don't do that, i'm glad i was able to read this fanfic and see how he might have reacted. Thumbs Up thanks!! glad i could fulfill some of your wish! Embarrassed

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Posted: 06 September 2011 at 9:01am | IP Logged
Originally posted by t_areeb

beautifully written
and it seems she was in there baby's room or where they placed his/her stuff
and he will try to find what happened, may b from dadi or from hospital
 

you guessed right...she was in the baby's room...and that is where it will all start for Mr. MSK...just wait and watch...ke aage aage hota hai kya!!Wink

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Posted: 06 September 2011 at 9:02am | IP Logged

Originally posted by mystique_girl

JUST AWESOME...PLS CONTINUE SOON...YOU, IN YOUR TRADEMARK STYLE MANAGE TO MAKE ALL SCENES SEEM NEW LOL

aww...thats such a compliment...im blushing Blushing!! thanks so much!!

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Posted: 06 September 2011 at 9:04am | IP Logged
Originally posted by spvd

congrats on new story dear... thanks!! 
wow that was awesome...
Maan's words surely hurt Geet this time more than anything about the baby thing...
hope now he gets to know something... bechara kaare bhi toh kya kaare? he has no idea what he's saying and how much its hurting Geet...but he will...Wink
poor Geet how much should she suffer?
shes happy for others when they announce they are would mothers but Geet is so missing her unborn baby... she's happy for them in their happiness..but under that lies her heart ache in her loss...bechari...yeh bhi kya kaare? Cry
cont soon dear...

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Originally posted by Mk.Gh

see...i told you id be back!! toh loh...kaam pe aake hi i logged onto IF LOL

Oh Dear Lord! omg...hogayi shuru drama queen savere savere!! Confused
 
Jazz ye tune kya kardia ... Cry  aare baba kya kiya...i didnt kill anyone naa...that should give me plus points!!!
 
UFF .. you know mentioning the baby .. no matter what way which way.. is something I really do want to see in the ML track in the show .. let's see if they implement it or not but it would be a great thing if they do show it since the Baby had such a huge connection between the two.. omg...me too...i want them to tackle this issue in some way...i mean...he has to know...he just HAS to...how can he not...the baby is what tied them together in the most intimate way!! he accept another man's child as his own...that alone is just amazing!!! Embarrassed
 
 
Coming to your SS: yay!! he he
 
 
UFF if anyone knows how to make people shed buckets it's you with your writing .. but but but...maine aaisa kya kiya...i didnt kill anyone...phir bhi saare ke saare roh rahe hai Shocked
 
I knew the baby was going to come and be mentioned but I didn't know it was going to be like this ... how did you think i was going to do it? just want to know how your mind saw it going down...Embarrassed
 
Oh gosh .. clearly everytime someone joins Geet's name with the word Baby she is bound to react .. but this time it really got to her.. ya...as if mentioning it by itself wasnt bad enough...ut the fact that the Payal chick was talking about how it "feels"...i thought that was major because for the longest time...all she had was the feeling of her baby and the need to protect it...Cry
 
Not once but twice she was reminded in the same day that not only had she lost her baby .. but that for now she had no chances of having that happiness again considering Maan doesn't even want to accept her as his wife .. truthfully...that fact...of it never happenign again and the issue with Maan not accepting her...it wasnt even on Geets mind...or at least it wasnt in mine...but...i actually love the idea...so far this SS is based on Maan's POV...i might do one based on Geet's POV...what you think? Smile
 
I understand completely why Maan doesn't want any connection with her or that he just doesn't want anyone .. not even Geet to associate him with her .. but really the man chooses the wrong words at the wrong time .. that he did...saach mein gadha bangaya yeh toh...paar uski ghalti nahin hai...he lost a few brain cells in this track toh thodi idiocy to chalta hai LOL
 
He thought of every other possibility except for the fact that Geet might've lost a child .. might've lost a baby in that year and a half that he was married and in love with her .. uff honey...the man barely admits he's married...scratch that...he hasnt admitted to himself that he's married...add a child to that mix...phir toh he is gone!! pagal hojayega!! Tongue
 
I loved the way you started it .. with a familiar setting like we saw in the show except the concept was different .. the way he gets mesmerized by her beauty and keeps fighting it .. clearly he's attracted to her .. and the fact that she grabs hold of his attention everytime she's around really irks him to no extent .. She affects him .. he just doesn't want to believe it .. thats what i love...even in Remembrance...i had it that way...where he knows she affects him and he doesnt know why...he doesnt like it...but he cant stop it from happening...same as the show...he was lost in her a few times even as khadoos MSk...Tongue
 
Awww Geet kept blushing to this day whenever someone associated her name with his .. or claimed her as his .. Maan Ki Geet .. or Geet Ka Maan Embarrassed im so waiting for them to say something along those lines...more like...waiting for Maan to say it...it just reminds me of the heart wrenching letter he wrote to her when he "left" amritsar ...before their reunion...haye...that was amazing!!!
 
Gosh she loves him to death .. and the fact that she can't share her sorrows about the Baby with him at such a time must be eating her up .. she can't even go to him .. talk to him .. cry her heart out to him .. nothing .. she just finds the one place where she feels she could cry about this issue -- the Baby's Room. I knew she'd go in there out of all places .. I guess the one thing that is giving her the most heartbreak is the one place where she'd be able to share her thoughts .. even if it is all alone .. just like the show .. Geet lost her Baby but the only place she found comfort was in the Baby's Room Ouch .. yup...bechari geet...the one person that knows how she feels and can empathize with her...is also the one person that has no idea of the past!! that in itself is heart breaking...ok ok...i see it...i see how this is sad and emotional...sheesh...am i really that sadistic? Shocked...and oh ...the baby's room...it was the only thing that made sense...because i remember after Maan had cleared it out...and she said "aab toh baby ki yaadein hi bachi hai mere paas"...i cried buckets!! Cry
 
And knowing that Maan is having sleepless nights because of her and her thoughts is a good enough sign that he at least has an iota of care for her and why she is so heartbroken and upset .. yes...he may be cold hearted but he has a heart...just cuz his dimag is out of wack doesnt mean his heart is...gadha has just been ignoring it!! LOL
 
Aww Geet .. I just can't stop feeling for her .. Maan comes in the room and without a word she hugs him because it is only him who has the power to make her feel better .. to give her comfort .. to make her feel happy ..but ironically he is the only one giving her the most pain .. because he doesn't understand or remember a single thing and to top that off .. he thinks she is just upset because she knows she can't have a baby with him since he doesn't want any .. EVER .. gosh did he have to say that now Unhappy .. and then he suggests she adopt a child .. agghhh pierce a knife through her heart would ya!? Cry  totally right...joh uske zakhmoon ka malham hua karta tha...aaj woh hi purane zakham ko kured rahe hai aur naye zakham deh raha haiCry...what can he do...he's just so lost and confused...not to mention he wants nothing to do with geet...a wife or family life that he finds himself in the center of Ouch
 
The girl is already this close to shattering into pieces and he drops the adoption bomb on her .. could he not wait to see why she was crying .. she hadn't clearly said anything .. but you also can't blame him for thinking that because he only spoke out of what he'd seen and heard on his birthday ..but .. still .. ughh Broken Heart usse kya pata that there is more than the story!! LOL...he figured he better clear the air now...kyun ke what if she comes all sherni types and tries to seduce him...he knows he doesnt stand a chance!! Wink
 
Gosh the moment Geet grabs her mangal sutra with such force .. oh she really just wants him to regain his memory so that he'd understand and remember .. everything .. I can so feel her helplessness ..  she totally does!! not only does she want him to remember...she needs him to remember... Cry
 
And her question come accusation was just shattering .. she can't believe it .. the one person who she knew would've understood her pain .. is just adding to it if nothing else .. and she can't bare it .. until this point...she knew he didnt remember her...but only now does she see that he doesnt remember anything...like their baby...the baby that they literally moved heaven and earth...to keep safe and healthy...its a sad sad day for geet...Broken Heart
 
 
Oh I can't wait to see his reaction when he turns around and sees the Baby's Room .. especially after the sonogram .. I think he might piece it together ... oh man .. Maan Singh Khurana you're in for some serious awakening!  who says he will turn around...maybe he will just walk out...or hey...his favorite thing to do when confronted with the past...FAINT!! LOL...im just saying...lol...but yes...yes he is!! Wink
 
 
GREAT start Jaz can't wait for the next installment Big smile glad you liked it hun!! Big smile
 
 
PS: I'm so glad I FINALLY got to comment on at least one of your OSs .. LOL i know i was shocked to see you here!! and i shall wait like a patient aachi baachi until you catch up on the others Tongue
 
 
Love ya! love ya too!! Embarrassed
 
 
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Posted: 06 September 2011 at 9:17am | IP Logged
OH TERI! In my commenting I totally forgot to comment on the poem ..
 
 
To be honest when I was reading it I thought it was like a famous poem or song and I was trying to rack my brain cells to see if I have heard of it somewhere and I couldn't .. and then at the end you say you wrote it and I was like Shocked ...Jazzy wrote this!? Jaz you're a natural poet .. I totally loved it ...
 
I like how it starts off all happy and slowly transitions to sorrow with the loss of the baby .. and I really love how you implemented the use of colour in the poem .. signifying how the bright shiny days i.e. all the bright colours represented the good days when the baby was there .. and then darker colours for when the baby was no more Cry
 
 
Amazing piece .. totally heart-wrenching .. I loved it! :)
 
 
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Akdoo Maan... stupid ...

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