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FF: Mohabbat Door Jaane na De-part 16 pg 46 (Page 35)

tina_1234 IF-Stunnerz

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wats thr past...???

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A great update sugar!!
It was very interesting to find out that Payal has always loved Akash.
I hope Khushi finds a way to resolve this problem.
Looking forward to the next part.
Thanks a bunch for the PM!!
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Nice update
please continue soon
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Part 12:

Khushi looked at her father totally lost for words, not knowing what to tell him. She knew her father never got angry, but this time he had every valid reason to react the way he did.

Khu: Jee babuji….

Shashi walks upto his daughter who looks almost terrified, and hugs her and holds her face and asks her … "usne fir se….. ( with worry and concern for her)

Khu: nahi babuji, humne bas unko dekha tha, unse koi baat nahi hui .. ( she quickly covers up)

Garima: Agar Payal humko nahi batati toh hume pata hi nahi chalta… bahut badi ho gayi hai na tu, aur apne amma babuji se baatein chupane laggi hai …

Khu: hum aapko pareshan nahi karna chahte the aur …. Aur fir ab unki shadi bhi ho gayi hai …

Shas: aise insaan ke neeyat ka koi bharosa nahi kiya ja sakta ….


Khushi had been all of 15 and Payal had just joined college. Since she had found it hard to understand English and write essays, she had been taking help from their neighbour's nephew Sham who had come there to spend a few days with them. Sham was a sweet boy, who very soon became a part of the Gupta Household. He would walk in and out of the house, always hang out with Khushi and Payal, spend time with them practically live and eat in their house. Shashi and Garima, who had been impressed with Sham and his simplicity, had already even imagined him as a prospective groom for Payal. From the way they had looked at it, it was a perfect arrangement, since Sham's aunt also hailed from their village and the families knew each other pretty well. The families had already discussed this, and had wanted to break the news to the children. But all hell broke loose when the news was announced to the children. Sham had never been interested in Payal. His reason for moving in and out of the Gupta house had always been Khushi. Her innocence and bubbly nature had always enticed him. The way she called him shyamji and always greatly respected him, the way she jumped in and out of the room while Shyam and Payal would be studying, Khushi had always been a distraction. To Khushi however, all of this was harmless conversation, a man who didn't matter to her beyond a point. When the parents talked about getting Payal and Shyam engaged, she was more than happy for the two of them.

But that fateful day, the Gupta family had gone to attend a wedding, and Payal was away in college. Khushi had come back early from school since she had just finished a test. Her amma had always told her, one must bathe as soon as they enter the house from outside. So Khushi had just gotten out of the shower. Unknown to her, a visitor had stepped into the house. Tiny droplets of water adorned her forehead, and they dripped on the floor. She had not yet worn her salwar, and had been sitting on her bed… Sham who had been observing this from a distance , couldn't hold himself back anylongerwalked into the room, without notice to see Khushi in that state as she turned away embarrassed…Sham moved away from the room, as he realised she was in that state… "Hume maaf kar deejiye he uttered as he left" Khushi quickly latched the door to her bedroom, got fully dressed and walked into the hall and Shyam had gone. Khushi had heaved a sigh of relief since she had been too embarrassed to be caught in that state. But just as she turned to go back into her room, she heard a voice…

"Khushi ji …humara iraada aapko takleef main daalne ka nahi tha… yeh lo … jalebiyan khao …!!"

Khushi uncomfortably picked one .. and bit into a small piece…

"Shyam slowly walked upto her, and told her … "arey pagli …. Itna darne ki kya zaroorat hai … hum toh aapke hone waaley jeejaji hai ... aur apne wo kahawat toh suni hi hogi na .. saalie aadhi ghar waali hoti hai …."

Khushi gulps uncomfortably, starting to sweat….

Shyam made another advance towards her, trying to push the wet strand of her hair away from her face…. And then he slowly caressed her face, moved forward to smell her freshly washed hair ….

"bahut khoobsoorat hai aap"

"Shyaam ji … yeh aap kya kar rahey hai… chale jaayiye … jeeji ghar main nahi hai …."( not knowing what else to say….)

"Hum jaante hai ….. "

He now held her strongly by her shoulders as she tried to resist it uncomfortably …. Aur hum yahan aapke saath thoda waqt bitane aaye hai … sirf aapke saath … ghabrayiye mat Khushi ji … kisi ko kuch nahi pata chalega…. Saying this, he tries to move closer to her, trying to feel her close to himself, when Khushi instantly pushes him away …runs out of the house and latches the door from outside. She is too terrified to react but she hides herself inside one of the neighbours house requesting them not to tell anyone where she was until her parents returned that evening.

When her parents returned that evening, she had learnt Shyam had disappeared, as someone had unlatched the door for him. She narrated the entire story to her parents totally terrified at the experience. Payal had been shocked since she considered all this happened because of her. The Guptas had turned very protective towards their daughters after that time, but had also applauded Khushi for gathering guts and locking him inside.

No one knew, where Shyam had disappeared and his aunt had also left. After that gory incident Khushi had met Shyam 5 years later as Anjali's husband who called himself Gopal.

Khushi kept tossing in her bed restlessly. Sham was a monster, and she very well remembered what he had done to her earlier. But to her her sister Payal and her happiness were more important than Sham.Besides, Sham was now married to Anjali, and he had pretended not to even recognise her when they had met the last time. How much could he possibly harm her? What would he do? She knew, he would not do anything that would ruin his reputation with the Raizadas. If he had married Anjali, he may have really done something for them to believe he was a really nice man. That cold hearted, mean and nasty Arnav Singh Raizada would not let his sister get married to a scoundrel like Sham. She had seen the evidence of the same the earlier morning. Besides, she knew, Anjali had also noticed that look on Akash's face. She was hopeful that something would come out from one conversation.

She would bring Payal and Akash together, for the sake of her sister's happiness and not let her sister not think life was unfair to her. She knew her sister would never ask for what she wanted, so she thought it was now time to take things into her hands.

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princess84 IF-Dazzler

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stinky dirty shamm i hope this time everyone gets to see the monster he truely is
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Posted: 12 September 2011 at 12:43am | IP Logged
WAH ... back to back updates... thode din ki shaanti .. phir kraanti .. Big smile
Both updates were really really good... your narration is perfect.. it flows... almost like a movie ... details and dialogs are nicely written... Clap
Khushi facing molestation at such tender age... must have shaken her soul.. !!! So many women/girls face such things in our country Cry I hope Arnav understands her trauma.. and helps her coming out of it...and loves her they way she really deserves...  And yeah .. Poor anjali too needs her brother on her side when Shyam's dark truth is revealed... !!!

soon soon update karo Niha ji... Smile


Edited by monsi08 - 12 September 2011 at 4:16am

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villain shyamless..a good update..development in story.

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