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FF: Mohabbat Door Jaane na De-part 16 pg 46 (Page 33)

tinsel IF-Sizzlerz

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The story is getting interesting. Wonderful updateHug

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Oh wow...this is diffrent but nice..plz continue soon...and pm me if u can thanks 

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Part 10:

Payal walks up to khushi who is stood there clueless and asked her who it was to which Khushi replied … "pata nahi jeeji koi bola hi nahi"

Pa: rehne de Khushi .. koi blank call hoga …  Lalita keh rahi thi aaj kal raat ko aise bahut calls aate hai … chalo hum sote hai …

Khushi still stood there wondering if it was actually a crank caller. She suddenly had a hunch, but didn't know whether to encourage the thought.  What was over was over and there was no use going all over it once more. Besides she would get her jeeji all worried.

So as she sleeps that night Khushi thinks of how shyam had pretended to ignore them at the party and behaved like he didn't even know them. She told herself, they would never meet again and that it was over. And this time if anything went wrong, she was stronger and may be even older she would handle it better. She would not let any one effect her. Not Shyam of all the people.

Raizada House:

Arnav tries to sleep but the song comes back to his mind. He sits up in his bed annoyed and how the girl had tried to make fun of it. He had hated it. How the hell did that chit of a girl get the guts to behave that way with him- Arnav Singh Raizada. But as he thought of that, he also remembered the way he held her hand and had pulled her out of the speaker room. Her eyes, why couldn't he get them out of his mind? Then he remembered how she had held his hand. He looked at his hand, opening and closing his fist confused. His behaviour confused him. He tried to go back to sleep but he remembered how she made fun of the song. He turned around. Then he saw her whistle . The way she was laughing and joking with Anjali, so full of life, and laughter disturbed him.

He got off his bed and pulled out a tablets from the drawer. He contemplated on whether to take them or not. As he looked at them, he wondered why he had been thinking about her. She was no one great and it was not like she had done anything that impactful that he should be thinking about her. Besides he didn't like her sister either, especially the way she had been looking at Akash. He decided he would tell Akash the very next day, he should be careful, after all everyone in town wanted to befriend the Raizadas for their money and clout. Besides, now he had to also fulfil his promise he had made to his jeejaji … Something in his mind told him these girls meant bad news to him and his family, but another strange feeling he had never experienced before also kept intersecting with his thoughts leaving him totally puzzled and perplexed.

Outside the Mandir:

A car stopped itself in front of the Mandir early in the morning. As the voice of a girl started to sing, the speakers of the car were so loud they started playing something else disturbing everyone else around. Khushi wondered who was doing this, as she looked around. As she walked further she realised it was coming from a car that had been parked near by. She assured the pujari as well as the people around her that she would go and make sure this stops and she proceeded towards the car. As Khushi started walking towards the car, Arnav turned around to see her walk towards him and found himself a little distracted. Khushi had been wearing a plain white suit with an orange dupatta that had a light silver border. Unlike the last time, this time her hair was open with only bits of it pinned at the back so that they wouldn't disturb her. She wore small silver baalis that accentuated the look on her face.

Khushi had reached the door and had started banging on it, mumbling to herself in anger. When Arnav snapped out, he realised Khushi had been making faces and a lot of others also had gathered around the car demanding him to open the door. Arnav stopped the music, and got off the car in style and looked at Khushi.

"Yeh kya battameezi hai Khushi asked him"

Arnav: chalo mere saath ( says Arnav)

Khushi stares at him in shock … " aap humko aisi waise ladki mat samjhiyega … aur yeh awara gardi …."

Arnav: chalo … (   he repeated determined)

Khushi now began to wonder what was wrong with this man, that he thought she would go with him..

As she turned to leave, Arnav walked up to her and blocked her way ….as Khushi turned the other way, he blocked that way as well. She realised the proximity around him was making her comfortable, but something about the his scent was so enticing, she instantly felt he couldn't be a bad man.

One of the on lookers came forward to intervene when Arnav raised his hand to stop him and said … "stay out"…

Khushi by now had made up her mind that she would tackle him on her own and she tells the people around she would handle him ….

Khushi: theek hai .. aapko jo kehna hai … yahin pe kahiye ….

Arnav grits his teeth in anger, but her determined look makes the tip of her nose go all red and this distracts him.  But not wanting to let off of the grip, he holds her hand, pulls her towards the car makes her sit and drives off.

As they stop at the raizada house, Khushi is about to get off and leave when she see's Anjali watering plants in the garden. She see's Khushi and wonders what she is doing there.  She walks up to her …

An: aap yahan …..?

Khushi looks at Arnav angrily first, and then at Anjali about to open her mouth and repeat all that happened when Arnav says … " milna chahti thi na aap … baat karlo … "

Anjali looks at her brother confused.

An: aap khushi ko yahan leke aaye hai she asks him shocked

Arnav doesn't say anything …

Khu: ji haan … zabardasti …. !! aur yeh bhi bina bataye ke kyun …..

Arnav: main kab kya karta hoon, zaroori nahi samajhta ke kisi ko batau …. I owe you nothing …

Khushi: oho ho … Vilaayti sahibzaade ab apne aap ko iss desh ke Pradhaan mantra bhi samajhte hai .. lekin humare saath yeh majboori nahi chulegi …

Arnav: accha ? toh chup chaap aayi kyun mere saath … ( after saying this, he suddenly wonders why he has been talking so much with this girl and getting into a banter and he walks away from there before she can answer his question)

Khushi wants to follow him and give him a piece of her mind, but Anjali stops her and tells her ….

"chote ki taraf se hum aapko maafi maangte hai Khushi… "

Khu: Anjali ji baat maafi ki nahi hai … koi aise kaise ho sakta hai …?

Anj:  wo aise hi hai … lekin humse pyaar bahut karte hai .. humari khushi ke khatir kuch bhi kar sakte hai …. Aur kal sham ko hum bahut dukhi hue ke aap log ….

Khu: Ohhh!!! Accha …. Toh yeh saara hero giri issi liye kiya aapke bhai sahib ne …. ( as if understanding what he was trying to do) … Amitabh Bacchan ke filme bahut dekhte honge na wo …

Anj: nahi Khushi … chote movies dekte hi nahi hai …

Khu: toh fir kal …..

Anj: wo humare liye aaye the …. hum unse rooth gaye the na ….

Khushi  wonders what sort of a man this guy is …

Anj: hume lagta hai… aapko Arnav ka bartaav accha nahi laga … hum abhi driver ko bulvaate hai … aur aap agar ghar jaana chaho toh .. aap jaa sakti hai … hum toh bas aapse dosti karna chahte the ….

Khushi looks at Anjali's innocent and knows the girl is as genuine as her brother is rash. She smiles and says … " arey, yeh bhi bolne ki baat hai …. Hum toh kal hi dost ban gaye the…"

An: dekha, humne kal hi kaha tha in se, ke aap bahut acchi ho …."

Suddenly Khushi's smile disappears as it dawns upon her that Shyam is actually Anjali's husband. And before she can react more, she notices him walking towards with a tray. Khushi gets up suddenly and says … " Anjali ji. Hume jaana hoga ….."

Anjali looks at Khushi confused … " kya hua …aap abhi toh aayi hai ... "

Khu: Haan … lekin hume yaad aaya ke hum chappal mandir main bhool gaye hai ….

Anj: aaj ke liye aap humare pehen lena …

Khus: please…. Hume jaana hoga ... please aap samjhiye …

Anjali makes a sad face but cant say no….

Anj: Hum driver ko bole ke…

Khus: Ji nahi …. Hum chalte hai ….

And she leaves the place in a hurry leaving Anjali wonder whats wrong with Khushi.

By then Shyam turns up with two cups of coffee….

Shy: kya hua Rani Sahiba .. aap itni udaas kyun lag rahi hai ….

An: who Khushi aayi thi …  ( and she goes on to explain everything that happened and how she left in a hurry once more) … chote ko aisa nahi karna chahiye tha na ….

Shy: ab aap toh jaanti hai unka swabaav …kahin … saaley sahab ko yeh ladki pasand toh nahi aa gayi … ( with a tinge of jealousy, humor and anger) ….

An: kya … ( as though, what her husband said made total sense)… aapko aise lagta hai ….

Shy: ab yeh baat wo hi jaane …warna .. aisa bartaav toh humne pehle kabhi nahi dekha aur hum bhi hairan hai …

Anj: Lekin Arnav ki pasand toh ……….

As she is saying this… Arnav is sitting in his room pondering over all the happenings of the morning, and is worried as to why he has turned all rash.

Arn: yeh ladki …. !! na kyun mere se aise kaam karva rahi hai .. jo main karna nahi chahta …

As he is totally consumed by his thoughts, his phone rings and he picks up the call …

" Hi ASR ….I love you baby …. I love you … love you … love you !!!  Main India waapis aa rahi hoon 3 hafto main …. I cant wait to see you .. tickets kea ate hi … I just had to call you ….. "

There is total silence at the other end ….

Voice: ASR can you hear me ???

ASR: Haan Lavanya … ! I can ….

La: I just cant wait to finally see you after 2 whole years …..

Arnav: Good.

La: That's it?

Arnav: ya !! talk to you later Lavanya !

Line goes dead.  

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Posted: 10 September 2011 at 1:52am | IP Logged
res!wil update after reading!

EBasso IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 10 September 2011 at 10:03am | IP Logged
This story is turning out to be very intriguing princess! Hug

It's getting complex and the emotions are on the high! The tension is on the rise! Something tells me part 11 will be even more intense!

Arnav's interaction with Khushi outside the mandir was just penetrating. There was loads of rabba vey in that moment. It was so beautifully written.

The reactions of each individuals, the after thoughts, the sentiments were all superb! I just love your deep understanding of human emotions and the ability to weave them so well into words.

It was just fantastic! Heart

I cannot wait to read what happens next! Day Dreaming

.Saraa. IF-Sizzlerz

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hey it was a nice update...waiting for next..for arhi to realize..

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niceee update...continue sooon

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