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Posted: 30 August 2011 at 11:00pm | IP Logged
i believe Shyam is his real name !!!he is a liar !!!!Angry

Originally posted by sarach

wonderfull update..Gopal,,phew..even in serial i was wondering that what is his real name..i dont think that shaym is his real name..may be he has told his name to raizada's something else and to guptas something else.

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Posted: 30 August 2011 at 11:01pm | IP Logged
thanks sweet heart !!! will post the next part in a bit Embarrassed

Originally posted by cindrella255

Hiya Nihu!

Shyamua ki entry ! Surely he must startd having sinister plans!

Awesum update hun!

Waiting for next part!




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Posted: 30 August 2011 at 11:02pm | IP Logged
shaant !! shaant !!! TongueBig smilethanks alot for liking the part Embarrassed

Originally posted by rsk16

Very nice update. Loved it.Gosh, Shyam is so evil, i really have no word to describe my anger.AngryPlz continue soon. .

Great part.Thumbs Up





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Thank You Smile

Originally posted by superdil19

wow story creat lots of interest




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thanks ... glad you liked itSmile

Originally posted by aminakhan

interesting update...n thanx for pmSmile




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awww... koi  baat nahi ...  ab mil gaya na Embarrassed thanks a ton sweetheart for liking it ... hehehe u liked Mahendar?LOL i shall surely PM you SmileHug

Originally posted by monsi08

OK... No idea how I missed this FF... Ouch
But IT IS SUPERB... Clap  read all parts in one go...
mast story... narration is excellent... Thumbs Up
Shyam ka suspense ... Thumbs Up
Mahender dada ki virasat LOL (*UNIQUE*)

Please PM for the next update...





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Posted: 30 August 2011 at 11:06pm | IP Logged
it will hopefully happen very soon !!!! i will try and write all that ... i have it in my head lets see how it comes out Embarrassed

Originally posted by swetha10

nice update...
waiting to knw more abt shyam's reality..
continue soon




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Posted: 30 August 2011 at 11:08pm | IP Logged

Part 9:

Khushi is sitting on her bed, as she remembers all that happened earlier that evening and cant sleep. Payal looks at her as though sympathising with her.  Khushi almost hasn't been herself ever since they had returned.

Payal gets up from the bed and turns around saying "hume lagta hai, hume amma babuji ko sab bata dena chahiye"

Khushi: nahi jeeji, tum aisa mat karo, amma babuji dar jayenge.. aur hum nahi chahte ke humari wajah se unhey fir koi takleef ho.

Payal: par Khushi, galti toh tumhari thi hi nahi, wo bas ek bura sapna tha jo beet gaya, agar hum uss waqt…. ( her eyes going moist remembering the time)

Khushi: jeeji, humne wada kia tha na, ke hum iss bare main aur nahi sochenge .. chalo… saath main kuch banate hai na .. bahut din ho gaye …

Payal: pagal !! yeh bolo na, ke tumhe jalebi banana hai … tum na khushi … thodi der pehle tum udaas thi aur main tumhe mana rahi thi, aur ab aise lag raha hai ke tum mujhe ulta mana rahi ho .. aur iss chakkar main yeh bhi yaad nahi raha ke koun kiss cheez ke liye pehle naraaz hua tha ….

Khushi's made up her mind, she was not going to let her family or even her jeeji know she was affected and she kicked herself for exposing this side of hers to her, and decided to change the entire mood. The sisters walk towards the kitchen at 1 am in the morning in the quest of wanting to make jalebis.

Raizada House:

Everyone is seated in the hall, and all eyes are pointing towards Anjali who is sulking Obviously Arnav has been doing his share of talking.

Arn: "kya zaroorat thi, un abjaneeyo se itni dosti badhane ki …. Dekha nahi kitni battemeez ladkiya hain, thank you tak nahi bola, bas uth ke chali gayi wo bhi sab adhoora chor ke"

Anj: par chote, unhe koi kaam aa gaya hoga na ….

Arn: main kuch nahi jaanta di, you are not meeting them again and that's final…

Anj: wo bahut pareshaan lag rahey the chote … hum bas itna pata karvaana chahte hai ke sab theek toh hai na …

Arn: di, please duniya main sari musibato ki theka aapne nahi le rakha hai … aur waise bhi, mujhe wo ladkiya khaas pasand nahi aayi khaas kar wo …. ( he grits his teeth in anger as he remembers their first meeting in the temple when he had dragged her out, and he recollected how she looked him as though she had so many questions to ask)….

Anj: chote, har insaan bura nahi hota, aur … Khushi aur Payal se milke hume jo apnapan mehsoos hua …

Arn: di aap kuch nahi jaanti, aise log ….

Anj: Accha toh ab humare chote bhai hume samjhaayenge ke duniya main log kaise hote hai ….

Ji Bilkul said a voice as Anjali turned to see Shyam walking in with a glass of herbal tea, he added … " yeh ayurvedic hai aur aapke paun ko taakat bhi dega, jab hum Kedarnath gaye the toh hum wahan se leke aaye aapke liye … toh ye pee jiye aur befikr ho jayiye … "

Anj: Lekin aap kuch jaane bagair choti ki side kyun le rahey hai … Gopal ji

Gopal: kyunki humare saaley sab kabhi galat ho hi nahi sakte ….

Arnav looks at his brother-in-law feeling a sense of gratitude, but there is no significant change in his facial expression. He somehow knew now that his jeejaji had come he would no longer have to explain things to his sister. Besides he hated explainin things to people are it was too exhausting mentally.

Anjali made a face and puts the cup of tea aside …

Gopal: arey arey… aap apna gussa iss bechara chai pe mat utaariye … hum toh bas mazaak kar rahe the …

Ab aap dono yahan pe aao, humare saath baitho aur batao ke baat kya hai ….

As Anjali explained everything that had happened that evening Shyam listened on intently, and finally turned towards Arnav and said … "maaf kee jiye saale saab … iss baar hum aapki tarafdaari nahi kar sakte, kyunki humko laggta hai, ke iss baar humari rani sahiba ke baat main bhi dum hai …. Aur kisi ke bare main ek mulaqaat main koi bhi faisla kar lena bahut hi galat baat hai …."

As he said this … Shyam was so consumed by a sudden volley of emotions that everything around him just blanked out, and all he would hear was an echo of a sweet tinkling voice that said … "arey rukiye na Shaam ji, thodi der baad jajiye na .. ghar pe aaj koi nahi hai … " enticingly … How could someone be so beautiful… How could someone consume someone so much .. he didn't know ..

The he remembered very well, it was on the same day that her calling out his name and thrown the ji out … "Shyaam …. " it was the first time, she had called him just sham .. And he had loved it ….

He felt a hand touch his, making him break his trance, as the surroundings changed and he realised he was sitting infact in the raizada house and Khushi .. err… Anjalii was smiling at him. He breaks into an uncomfortable smile …

Anj: Arey aapko kya hua …

Shyam: arey kuch nahi, hum aap hi ke bare main soch rahey the he lied…

He turns towards Arnav and says … "hum jaante hai ke aap apni didi se bahut pyaar karte hai, aur unko leke bahut hi protective bhi hai … lekin, aapko yeh bhi sochna chahiye na, ke unka bhi mann karta hoga, bahar jaane ka, logo se milne ka, naye dost banana ka …."

Arnav doesn't respond …. He looks away as though not wanting to register what his jeeja is trying to get across.

Shyam walks upto Arnav holds his hand and says … "dekhiye, aap yeh bhool kyun jaate hai, ke aapki didi humari dharampatni hai, aur hum bhi unse behad mohabbat karte hai…."

Arnav: Jeejaji maine aisa kab kaha…

Shyam: toh fir befikr rahiye na …hum aapki didi ke saath kuch bura nahi hone denge … aur rahi baat aapki … kabhi kabhi aapko.. wo kehte hai aapki bhasha main … haan .. bhi thoda sa let go kar lena chahiye … issey aap ke mann ko kabhi shaanti mil jaati hai …

Arn: main jaisa hoon theek hoon ( he defended)

Shyam: Bilkul saaley saab, lekin hum baat sirf aap hi nahi, aap dono ki kar rahey hai … hume iss baat ka darr hai ke kahin ek doosre ke khushi ke khaatir aap dono shayad ek doosre ke khushi ke raaste main na aa jaye…

Arn: aisa kabhi nahi hoga jeejaji…

Anjali is watching them from a distance sipping coffee and wonder what they are talking as Shyam smiles at her blinking his eyes sweetly, gesturing her he will manage things for her, and that she should for now just enjoy her coffee. Looking at the exchange of sweet gestures between his brother in law and sister, Arnav is reassured, she is in safe hands. He knows after all the pain that her sister had gone through, jeeju had definitely had been worth the wait and that's why Arnav trusted him with all his heart too.

He decides to leave the two of them alone so that they could spend some moments together when Shyam stops him and says  … "Saaley saab hum chahte hai, ke aap ab aapki didi ke liye kuch kare ….

Arn: kya?

Shyam: hum chahte hai… ke aap apni didi ke liye un dono ladkiyo ka pata dhoonde … take … hum in teeno ko mila sake …

Arn: No way !! main nahi karoongi yeh sab…. (dryly)

Shyam: Arnav …!! Hum haami bhar rahey hai unke liye … aap humare liye itna kar deediye… hum khud unse milke … baatien karke … un ke saath thoda samay bitaake ( as he says this, he once again recollects Khushi's voice calling out to him sweetly) …

Arnav: alright, jeejaji .. just for you ….

Arnav walks away as Shyam turns towards Anjali and shows her a thumbs up sign and she smiles.

Guptas Ghar

Sitting on the kitchen slab, Khushi is munching jalebis looking content. Her sister is relieved to know she has finally come back to her normal self when the phone starts to ring.

Payal: Itne raat gaye … koun phone kar raha hoga … hum jaake dekhte hai .. amma babuji so rahye hai .. kahin koi zaroori baat na ho ….

On the other side, a pair of pursed lips are getting restless, as to why no one is lifting the phone ….

"kahin number toh nahi badal waa liya hai …..  the person says scowling a little in anger"

Just as he is about to cut the call, someone lifts the receiver and says ….. Hello …. Koun … Koun bol raha hai …

And Shyam smiles relieved, and cuts the call.

Edited by -honeydew- - 30 August 2011 at 11:10pm

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