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What a wonderful piece of writing! Especially the description of the kamboj is  so vivid!
I am waiting with bated breath as to when CGM will meet DurdharaEmbarrassed

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to premiyon ke milne ki setting ho gayi hai...Wink chalo ambik bhi
aaraha hai..kabab mein haddi banneLOLaur main to hun hi...

kitna accha likha hai jhum..Clapdere is nothin to criticise..jst a sugg
nxt part mein let dese lvbirds fight..kyunki takraar ke baad pyar ka
maza hi kuch aur hai..
 

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PART-7

...while Digvijay, Chandragupta and their friends reached to the royal palace and were receiving the grand welcome from the king,queen and other members of palace and people from rajpur and the other guests...Durdhara was busy in drawing a portrait of Subhadra what she had promised to make as a gift for bringing the good news and her brother's letter to her...and as when she becomes involved in painting she forgets everything so she forgot that today is the day she waited for so long...when Subhadra came to call her then durdhara went away by running in over excitement leaving her paintings and colours scattered...
...Digvijay was also excited to see his sister after 5 long years...so after meeting his parents he just ran towards Durdhara's mahal...and when Subhadra brought Durdhara he was just speechless because his little sister has grown up to a beautiful princess...but princess seems a little bit upset...

Digvijay (with overexcitement and happiness): hamare chotisi rajkumari itni badi ho gayi hai..hum to apne ankho pr bhi visvas nhi kr sakte...

Durdhara  (turning towards Subhadra) : Subhadra kumar se kehna ke rajkumari ko unse koi baat nhi krni hai...

Digvijay (surprised) : aisa pratit hote hai k hamare Dhara kisi baat se ruthi hui hai...kya humse koi bhul hue hai?

Durdhara : Subhadra keh de inhe k yadi panch varsh dur rehne se koi bhrata apne bhagini ko bhula deta hai to unhe apne behan se baatein krne ki  bhi koi adhikar nhi hai..

Digvijay (worried): Dhara ye kya keh rahi hai...tujhe ye kheyal aye kaise k hum tujhe bhula sakte hai??..aap to humesha apne bhrata ke dil me thi...

Durdhara : jhooth ..ab aap k lie apne bhagini se jyada ahmiyat apke mitra rakhte hai..

Digvijay : mere mitra??main kuch samjha nhi (turning towards Subhadra) Bhadra ..Dhara kiske baat kr rahi hai??

Subhadra : vo kumarji  aap ne rajkumari ko jo patra likha tha usme rajkumari se baat na krke sirf apne mitra Chandragupta ke pasansa kia tha..isi baat se naraz hai rajkumari

Digvijay (laughing out loud) : bas itni si baat ... Dhara apne to meri jaan hi le li thi...are Chandragupta koi sadharan insan nhi hai ..aap milogi na to aap khud samajh jaogi...parantu uske liye hum apne Dhara ko bhul jaye ye aap ne kaise soch liya??

Durdhara : hume nhi milni hai kisi Chandragupta se jo ek bhrata ko apne bhagini se dur kar de...aap hamare bhrata hai ya fir us Chandragupta ke jo tabse usike stuti kare ja rahe hai...

Digvijay : acha hum swikarte hai k humse bhul ho gaye hai...abse hum sirf apki stuti karenge.. ab to hume kshama kr dijiye ..warna hum aj hi gurukul laut jayenge...

Durdhara (became worried and started crying) : nhi bhratasree aap ab kahin nhi jayenge...(and she hugs Digvijay)

Digvijay (smiles and put his hand on Durdhara's head) : hume to laga tha ke humare behna ab bari ho gayi hai parantu vo to ab bhi utni hi bachi hai jitni panch varsh pehle thi...hum apko chorke kahin nhi jayenge...ab to ansu ponch lijiye Dhara..apko utsav mein bhag lena hai k nahi...

Durdhara now gives a beautiful smile...

Digvijay : ye hui na baat haste hue hamare behan pari jaise sundar lagti hai...

in the meantime some maid servants brought Drakshita in the room...as Digvijay ordered them to do so..

Digvijay : Dhara inse miliye ye hai Drakshita...ye bhi hamare mitra hai...aur Draksita ye hai hamari behan rajkumari Durdhara

Drakshita : pranam rajkumari...(she folded her hands and bent her head...even being a child a princess has to be shown honor by commoners ...its the rule)

Durdhara (holding Drakshita's hand) : tumse milke khushi hui Drakshita..hamare rajmahal me tumhara swagat hai...

Digvijay : aap log ab baatein kijiye ...hum aap se baad mein milte hai...

and he leaves...

Durdhara : Subhadra tum Drakshita ko uske kaksha mein le jao...Hume apne chitra ko pura krna hai...

Subhadra : ji rajkumari...ao Drakshita

and she holds Drakshita's hand and took her with herself...Durdhara walked towards terrace..her painting is almost complete only some finishing touches are left...

after reaching to the terrace she became shocked... a stranger boy is watching her paintings..the boy seems none of the palace..may be he is one of the guest..Durdhara surprised how does he dare to enter into andar mahal..except king and prince no man can enter into andarmahal specially in princess's mahal...nor even any member palace or royal family...then how could he??..as the boy was siitting on his knees with her back towards princess she couldn't see his face..but it seems may be he is younger than her brother...and has a dusky complexion..he took the paper where she made the painting of Subhadra...she couldn't tolerate this and almost screamed in anger...

Durdhara : kaun ho tum..aur kiske anumati se andarmahal mein pravesh krne k duhsahas kiya?

her voice made the boy shocked and the painting slipped from his hand and flowed in the air...Durdhara screamed ...'nhii'...and ran to catch it but her feet slipped in the liquid colours and she couldn't maintain her balance and fell directly on Chandragupta...as everything happened in fraction of seconds  so Chandu wasn't ready for this.. he couldn't keep his balance too and fell on the colours with durdhara on him...












Edited by jhum_86 - 18 July 2011 at 6:31am

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Posted: 17 July 2011 at 12:55am | IP Logged
@ jhum:
thank god u posted d next update, it's such a sweet description..my reactions is always   , digvijay & durdhara convo is too sweet , durdhara 's still a kid  


& finally chandu + durdhara =



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Posted: 17 July 2011 at 12:56am | IP Logged
Aru,its very excellent...and I am not saying this mechanically...only you need to add some commas in between words...at the right place...and write the Hindi words in more detail...like u can write behn as behan...and only some words...and I liked your style of writing and imagination...Clap
    I am very happy that you write so well...and you are so talented !Embarrassed

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Originally posted by nivren

Aru,its very excellent...and I am not saying this mechanically...only you need to add some commas in between words...at the right place...and write the Hindi words in more detail...like u can write behn as behan...and only some words...and I liked your style of writing and imagination...Clap
    I am very happy that you write so well...and you are so talented !Embarrassed


thanks abhi at last i received some criticism ..i am very happy...i know abhi  am weak in hindi...so dont't knw the proper form of writing hindi words in english letters..but now onwards i will follow your suggession...Smile

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thanks yar for those smilies...but words me aur bhi likhti to acha lagta


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