Hi Sam,
Its beautiful... and u know in very few words u have sumed it up well..for a first timer I must say it doesnt look like at all.. keep writing many more.. i am sure there is so much to share as thoughts will pour out..just dont force all beautiful things happen in creative mind when its set free to ponder on anything..
In the poem the love the unity and the breakup we could feel all and yes the disappointment too..
tc
Bhoomi