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FF- Katra Katra- Part 25-141, Pt 26-145, Pt 27-148 (Page 58)

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Posted: 03 June 2011 at 10:29am | IP Logged
hey saaz wonderful update saaz pls continue soon

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Posted: 03 June 2011 at 11:12am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Yasharanrocks

update karo na


Sorry re...something has come up...need to attend it..the update will take two hours max..

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Posted: 03 June 2011 at 11:13am | IP Logged
I loved the update...

the friendship banter reminded me of my college friends and what not. We always have someone in our group who is a love sick puppy and then there is me who observe others like MurliLOL. I even do that Murli does to my close friends. 

I have picked few things from ur update that I loved and I have commented below them in bold. 



Originally posted by saaaz

Harshad and Amit are at the white board explaining their chemical equivalents and how they have arrived at a possible breakthrough in terms of how to move forward..Murli is in rapt attention and Karthik is busy taking notes..Shaan is listening but his mind keeps wavering..

The worried husband/friend...I loved this little touch saazy!

Suddenly, Murli notices Shaan;s silent form..and before he can say anything..

A concerned friend and someone who can easily notice what Shaan is going through. 

Shaan: I will need some time to look over it..

Murli looks on..while Harshad has an irritated face..Karthik is confused..Amit wonders..

loved this scene...Shaan showing his disinterest and Murli staying quite and waiting to see his reaction to all. 

Amit: (steps away from the white board and takes a seat):That's fine..take your time..

why is he being nice? i don't like him...

Shaan: (backs away in his chair..runs his hand through his hair): Whats the rush??

Shaan: (whispers): God..how did I forget? I don't think'

Murli: (gets up and moves towards him): What is wrong? How is Khanak doing?

Suddenly all the boys get up and move towards him..except Amit who stands but does not move..

I love this...sooo natural! ...but i hate Amit reaction...what is up with him? plz don't let him do something drastic in the future. 

Shaan: (looking at his three friends leaning over his deak): GOD! Guys relax! She just had a case of food poisining and this morning she had a fever..

Amit: that's okay, maybe someone can drop her off.

Harshad: Actually, that's not a bad idea..maybe I can check if Mohita will go with her..

Amit: I was thinking..

Murli: Excellent idea, Harshad'call Mohita..

Shaan: (picking up his notes, checking his watch, it has been over an hour): Okay..call her and mujhe text bhej..I will see you guys in an hour..

AMit: Theek hai..I need to get something to eat..

The boys disperse..Harshad frantically calling Mohita..Murli and Karthik discussing the prototype and Shaan lost in thought..

Hate Amit...loved the boys...i am not liking Amit...what is he upto? where did he go? 

Shaan enters his room..nothing seems to have changed much in the last two hours..except Khanak is fast asleep..He walks towards the enclave to keep the upma he bought from the mess..she seems to have made some tea for herself..and the half open Parle-G packet tells him she has eaten something..he keeps the upma and walks to near her bed..watches her sleep..touches her forehead..there seems to be no fever..touches her hair..and the bedsheet below it..and wonders at the silence in the room despite her being there..smiles at his wonderment..he holds the scrunchie that is next to her pillow..drops it when Khanak stirs and opens her eyes..and shifts towards the side of the bed where he stands..Opens her eyes and stares at him for a minute..he stares back and smiles..not realizing the scrunchie is on the floor..

superbly done! I love it! this is the most awesome scene! sooo like them and then the convo that followed was sooo cute...

Shaan: (his jansport already on his shoulder, his little right toe almost touching the scrunchie):  I have to leave..you practice..Mohita shall be here to pick you up..you can have lunch and then leave..

Khanak: (moves closer to him): Mohita? Why?

Shaan: (moves back and opens the door to leave): She will accompany you ..

Khanak: (yells before the door closes): For what?

Shaan: (yells back before shutting the door): wada paav khane ke liye..

Khanak glares at the door..marches towards it..and suddenly feels a little weak..sits down on the bed..she realizes it is good if someone comes..but she knew that already..hmph!!..she needs to at least practice her sargam taan before she realizes'in her sickness, she may forget the permuatations and combinations of the raag notes..

love, love love this...I hope Khanak notices her scrunchie when she returns. I loved the little banter they have...its sooo like hubby/wife/friends...shaan is def. interested...

Shaan: (looking at his watch..): Okay guys..even though it has been one of the most memorable last few minutes (rolling his eyes)..I have got to go..

so like a hubby or a guy who is interested. 

Harshad: Arrey you were supposed to let me know if Mohita should pick up Bhabhee..

Karthik: Yeh tho gaya..

Murli: Tell me about it!! (high fiving him)

so apt. lol i think they were talking bout Shaan's falling for herLOL

And while the guys continue to rib each other even in the canteen, Shaan is cruising along the western express highway..and cursing every signal he gets..wanting to be on time to pick up his wife from her first lesson at Sangeet Mahabhartee..

awww poor him...i feel his pain...

Tuesday..4:15pm..Sangeet Mahabhartee


His excitement allows him to reach well before time..He is directed to her classroom..he stands outside, but he can hear singing..khanak!  he thinks..he steps closer to the door..it is her, he knows..he is sure..

He opens it slightly..and peeps in..he fits himself into the crevice..drags his jansport..and takes the seat at the end of the classroom..smiles at the person next to him..who smiles back and says..'just missed the best part she played around with the sargam'..Shaan nods..has no clue what he is talking about ..and then suddenly..she hits a high note'


The whole class bursts out applauding..Shaan joins too..he does not realize the song is over..he could have gone on listening..she should have gone on singing..he thinks..the guy next to him is on his feet..grinning and clapping..he looks at him..the guy turns to him and says..'easily the sexiest voice in class'..Shaan stares at his wife..wants to punch the guy..but Khanak;s smile makes him forget everything..and when she spots him among the 55 students in class standing exactly at the spot she was sitting..she is overwhelmed beyond anything'she tears up..he just came because she was sick..aur zyada kuch nahin.. she tells herself..but ..she does a small wave and smiles back..and she walks towards him..

The teacher pats her on her back..and ends the class..

Khanak:  Aap kab Aaye..

Shaan: Bus ..Abhii..

Khanak: Aur koyee ayaa hai..

Shaan: (shifts the Jansport over his shoulder): No..lekin if you want to see loads of people, beach chal sakte hai..

Khanak: (smiles): Yes, please!

I love this scene...sooo cute...he is def. interested and she is thinking otherwise but yet at the same time she is starting to show interest too but won't say a thing...I loved it!!!


OMG Saazy! I loved the updated!!!!

plz update soon...it is addicting...
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Posted: 03 June 2011 at 11:17am | IP Logged
Saazyyy  ..I want next Update soonAngry
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Posted: 03 June 2011 at 11:19am | IP Logged
Saaz-e-dil...Update panna di !!! LOL !!
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Posted: 03 June 2011 at 11:31am | IP Logged
Saaz, fry day ko 2 updates...LOL
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Posted: 03 June 2011 at 11:43am | IP Logged
Sorry read the update but was I was not in great shape to comment...
 
So the sparks are showing...whether of jealousy or attraction..
 
He is noticing small things about her...her watching the bathroom...cleaning vessels...her singing...her smile...her voice...her hair...hte feel of it...He doesnt seem to be able to keep his hands off it...loved the usage of the word "reluctantly" when he left her hair while previously holding it up while she threw up...He touches it at every given opportunity...wants her to let it down...but does not want her to know...His concern is growing...He has grown in just 4 days from the man whole refused to go si with her in the compartment to someone who is rushing off to pick her from her first class...His friends notice it as well...and they are happy for him..and Khanak...
 
He is jealous...and whether he likes it or not...He has accepted her as his better half...the journey is destined ...the passengers are ready...the train booked...just waiting for it to take off...
 
She too does her part ...even if it is in small bits...She calls him first...She goes to him first after singing...He is different...she does not approve of some things in the beginning but slowly see his perspective his care behind it...She belongs with him..but somewhere she is scared that he is just doing this as a duty...He corrects her saying he wants this...
 
Beautiful!
 
 


Edited by Souma.N - 03 June 2011 at 11:43am

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Posted: 03 June 2011 at 12:28pm | IP Logged
Okay so i finally read what i missed and now i am in need for the next chapter soon! LOL...what can i say, it is just amazing!

This Shaantanu is realistic and i think to an extent very ordinary when it comes to accepting his circumstances and dealing with them...there is still reluctance in fully letting her in but that is the best part because it show how every important decision and event in life must take time to be absorbed in and then grow from there...The beauty in taking one step at a time is like discovering gems in a pile of treasure...I like his focus on work even when he is occupied with her thoughts... his concern for her...that's what it is for now...

Khanak...what can i say in honor of her simplicity and melodious voice...she is coy and sensitive...fragile but held together or maybe she had hidden it all for the time being...Her agreeable nature is very much like her and i appreciate that in this story as well...subtle smiles and wordless conversations suit your Khanak because she is constructed with intricate details and i think that's what makes her lead in your story...I love her as a singer...

Overall, i just wanted to let you know that this story is totally ROCKING and i am going to request you to somehow make your next update sooner than soon...I want to read more of them and their discoveries in each other...Thank You!
-imane 


Edited by imane568 - 03 June 2011 at 12:29pm

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