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FF The Bad Boy... Part 4 Page 3 (Page 2)

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Posted: 24 May 2011 at 1:09am | IP Logged
Great start...Priyo
runjhun having a sweet family...wow
how's maha bhabhi and Kukkan bhaiya...do tell something about them also
and really liked your Mr.bad boy...continue soon

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Posted: 24 May 2011 at 1:20am | IP Logged
Hi Priyo, like ur FF it's different with a new concept.  It's a good start.
Luv Gunjhun scene especially the pigeons and no evils in the family.  Maha n Kukkan r beautifully paired.  
Updt soon waiting eagerly for Gunjhun first meeting.  BTW u can call me Priya.  

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Posted: 24 May 2011 at 2:17am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Nidhsara

Priyo...excellent title and wonderful start...you have put in whole new scenario...wherein Rhunjun has a loving family and she is a college student..Kukkan is her bro and Mahs her bhabhi...thats great...and this GunJun is really cute...aur pigeons ka bahana banakar hottie ko dekhna was really superb...contnu as and when you can you can call me Nidha
 
Hi Nidha... thank you for the wonderful comment . I am glad you liked it... yes I tried making the whole thing different and am glad it worked. will post the next part soonBig smile
 
Originally posted by tehzeeb25

amazing prt priyo..
gr888
updt sooon
 
Thanks a lot Tehzeeb, is that what I should call you?Embarrassed
 
Originally posted by sur001

Great start...Priyo
runjhun having a sweet family...wow
how's maha bhabhi and Kukkan bhaiya...do tell something about them also
and really liked your Mr.bad boy...continue soon
 
Hi Sur Big smile Thanks for commenting... you'll come to know about rest of the family in the coming chapters.
 
Originally posted by pri01

 
Hi Priyo, like ur FF it's different with a new concept.  It's a good start.
Luv Gunjhun scene especially the pigeons and no evils in the family.  Maha n Kukkan r beautifully paired.  
Updt soon waiting eagerly for Gunjhun first meeting.  BTW u can call me Priya.  


 
Hi Priya... thanks a lot for commenting... well talking about evils... let's see what happensWink  Will update the 3rd part  right now let me know your views.Big smile




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Posted: 24 May 2011 at 2:22am | IP Logged

Hi guys, me again with the 3rd part... I know I am posting this one pretty quickly but that's just because I had written some of the parts last week but was contemplating on posting. I hope you like the next part and will comment on it.. Here you go.

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Part 3
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The tantalizing spicy aroma coming from the kitchen pulled Runjhun inside the kitchen for inspection. She eyed greedily the dishes and  was about to nibble from one when her hand was slapped by Mahadevi, her sister in law.

"What are you upto?", enquired Maha

"Kuch nahi bhabi… woh the food was burning.. so I was…"

"Oho!!! Food was buring? But the burner is off darling nanad", Maha teased.

"Oops!", Runjhun flustered and Maha smiled.

"Kab badi hogi Runjhun… you will be served the same food na…"

"Actually Bhabi.. there's a fun in thieving food, you wont understand", Runjhun replied cheekily and received a whack from Maha.

"Tum dono ki masti ho gayi ho to, bestow me with the food", Kukkan entered the kitchen and grabbed his sister by her neck and dragged her outside, ignoring her protests, leaving a giggling Maha

 

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 Runjhun was about to cross the gate when she stopped and gaped dumbfounded. She saw Guddu and two boys having a huge fight or it was Guddu beating up the boys black and blue, to be precise. He was angry and his eyes were spitting fire and rage, altogether he was fury personified.

The boys were being badly beaten up and the sight was too much for her to bear and she was about to go and stop the fight but was stopped by Kukkan. The way his jaw was clenched tightly, Runjhun dared not utter a single word.

"Runjhun… I am taking you to the college, I cant let you go alone when this dangerous man is in his original avatar", he grasped her hand and moved.

As soon as Guddu heard Kukkan calling her name, he automatically stopped punching and turned his face towards her and saw her looking at him wide eyed. Their gazes locked and he saw her being escorted by her big brother. As soon as she left he turned back and grabbed the boy's collar.

"What were you calling Runjhun? Masakkali huh?? One more time you call her names and I am going to grind you to bits and distribute it among pigeons, be their dinner.", he left his collar and got up.

He took deep breath to calm down and once again gazed the way she left.

On the other hand Runjhun was dazed, the scene seemed oddly familiar to her.

 
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"Guddu you should learn to control your anger dude", Vijay , his partner concluded as he scrolled through the desktop checking the error in the source code.
 
"I don't know what are you talking about", Guddu tried to shrug it off.
 

"But I know, the whole locality knows", Vijay answered and turned his chair toward Guddu. "Guddu yaar, why are you giving wrong impression about yourself to the whole locality, we both know you are not the person here everyone knows you are. Cant you keep it cool?"

"How can I keep it cool when….", his words died in his mouth and he turned towards his desktop.

"Its about her again is it?", Vijay asked finally getting the point.

Silence

"I know its about her, let me guess those good for nothing boys said something really bad about her and you lost your control?"

Silence

"I knew it.. its always her… this Runjhun girl, what has she done to you?"

"Chuck it off will you?", Guddu sounded defeated.

"Why should he?" anwered a voice from the door.

"Hira??? You at this hour?", Guddu was amazed at his friend Hiralal Chawrasia's arrival. The boy was a busy software distributor and it was against his nature to grace his presence in normal timings like this.

"First of all.. The name is Diamond", he stated as a matter of fact.

"Whatever.." Vijay murmured.

"Ya I am here because you two have another client who needs his company software with these specifications", he handed them the requirement file.

"….and because Vijay called me here to talk with you."

"Talk with me why?"  Guddu enquired.

"Because I am the person who only speaks to the point and here I go… when are you going to tell her Guddu?"

"Tell her what?" Guddu stiffened.

"Come on man! Its been a year she's back in Kannauj and the only thing you do is stare stare and  stare… ever thought of using your vocal chords?"

"I cant..I cant", Guddu confessed pressing his temples.

"Why?", they asked.

"Because she does not remember me… does not recognize me", he said those words and hid his face inside his palm and his friends gave him the knowing look.

 
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That's it guys.. too dramatic huh??? lemme know. will be waiting for your views... Luv you all..
 
Take care
 
PriyoBig smile 

 

 

 

 

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Posted: 24 May 2011 at 2:45am | IP Logged
Very exciting story. Pls continue soon.

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Posted: 24 May 2011 at 2:46am | IP Logged

Wat's an updt Priyo, it's awesomeSmile. Thx for being so fast.

Still wondering about the mystery hw R hasn't yet recognised G.  So our bad boy deals in informatic software cool n like G's 2 friends name especially Hiralal ChawrasiaLOL
 
Updt asap.

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Posted: 24 May 2011 at 2:59am | IP Logged

Hiralal Chawrasia...oops...sorry DiamondROFL...talks to the point great

I really liked Kukkan and Maha...till now there is no evilness but I won't make any judsgement coz this is a story and anything can happen ...but if R is not recognizing G means ...they were friends or classmates and would have shared a good relation in past...its getting really interesting...
 
update soon

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Posted: 24 May 2011 at 4:48am | IP Logged
hey priyo...
awwwesum prt ...
it intrstin yaar ...
updt sooon plezzz
eagerlyyy waitin
 

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