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Posted: 12 years ago
Hey Rubal...

Nice update dear👏

Raja Sahib loves his daughter😳

Why is rani maa believing Guruji so blindly😕

Its interesting sweetie..update soon😉


           

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chapter 4

In Avdesh's car, driving to Raj mahal for mehndi ceremony

Mohit:(on the driver's seat)bhai,abhi thodi der pehle madhu ka phone aaya tha,wo boli jis airline mein wo aaj aane waale the unki aaj strike hai,Shaadi se pehle wo india anhi pahunch payenge

Avdesh:(looking in the window)accha hua

Mohit(confused) Kya accha hua?madhu aa nahi payegi?yeh kaha se accha hua?

Avdesh:Are nahi main wo yunhi...

Mohit:(in teasing mood)oho,kuch aur soch rahe the,kiske baare mein? bhabhi ke baare mein?

Avdesh:(smilling)haan,teri BHabhi ke baare mein.

Mohit:(raising his eyebrows)Kya...mm...main to tujhe yunhi ched raha tha bhai,sach bata na kya soch raha tha?Tu ladki ke baare mein soche,baat jami nahi...

Avdesh's mobile is ringing and though Mohit couldn't complete

Avdesh is not picking his mobile

Daayi maa:Avdesh beta,phone kyun nahi utha raha?

Avdesh:Kyun ki Amar singh ki call hai,unse baat kar ke main apna mood kharab nahi karna chahta

Daayi maa:Beta ,wo tere pita hai,tujhe unse baat karni chahiye,unhe bhi pata laga hoga teri shaadi ke baare mein

Avdesh thinks for a minute and answers the call

Avdesh: yes,boliye

AS:(on phone) Yeh main kya sun raha hoon ,tum shaadi kar rahe ho,aur mujhe yeh bahar waalon se pata chal raha mere bete ki shaadi ke baare mein.Avdesh, hum ateet ko nahi badal sakte, par kya tum itne paraye ho gaye ho humse ke hame poochna tak zaroori nahi samjha ,apni maa ka to khayal rakhte, wo ro rahi hai.e kahin mooh dikhane ke layak hi nahi choda.

Avdesh: main aapse sirf apni maa ke karan baat kar raha hoon.Hamara rishta 6 saal pehle hi khatam ho chuka tha.Aur haan main shaadi kar raha hoon,aur yeh batana aapko zaroori nahi samjha,kyunki aapke yahan hone se mujhe aur sir dard nahi chahiye

AS:Mujhe laga tha tum mujhse maafi mango ge lekin nahi tum to mujhe jawab de rahe ho.Dukh ho raha hai mujhe kyun ki tum meri aulaad ho.

Avdesh:Mujhe bhi is baat ka koi garv nahi hai ke main aapka beta hoon,dard hota jab jab yeh sochta hoon ke main aapka beta hoon

Avdesh disconnected the call ,He was really hurt.Daayi maa held his hand and he rested his head on Daayi maa's shoulder.Mohit saw all this but didn't spoke anything.The next half an hour drive to Raj Mahal was in silence.

In Raj Mahal

Raja Sahib welcomed all Guests.Mahal was beatifully decorated.Arpita was helping in the Kitchen.Function started,Special dancers were arranged.The women started appyling hena on Sonali.During the whole ceremony arpita was busy.Mohit was happy here,enjoying dance because befor that,avdesh had refused him for Bachelor's party.But atleast he, now, can have some fun with girls.

Avdesh standing with Raja Sahib in a corner and talking about Udaypur.Suddenly Avdesh saw 11 missed calls on his mobile.It was ,,unknown".Avdesh excused himself from Raja Sahib and went in the Lawn.He sends message on that number to call him back.The person messaged that he will be on time and is going to tell her the plan.

After the mehndi ceremony finished.Only Avdessh's family and ladki waale were there.

Rani maa:Avdesh beta ,Hum chahte hain tum aur sonali jaa kar hamare Kul devi ke Mandir se Aashirwaad le aao,agar tumhe aitraaz na ho.Kyunki hamare ghar ke koi bhi shubh kaam hone se pehle hum Guruji ki raaye zaroor lete hai ,Aur tum dono ka rishta Guruji ne nahi pakka kiya hai,unki kharab tabiyat ki wajah se.Wo kal shaadi mein bhi nahi honge.Hum chahte hai tum shaadi se pehle sonali ke saath unse aashirwaad lene jao.Yahan sab maante hai Guruji ji aankhe pad kar hi unka Bhavishya jaan lete hai

Avdesh:( thinks for some time and replied): hum chalenge ,lekin abhi ,kyunki kal shaadi hai aur usse pehle udaypur aana mushkil hoga ,agar aap logon ko koi itraaz na ho toh main abhi jana chahta hoon,waise bhi itni raat nahi huyi,8 hi baje hai

Rani maa is very strict and never allowed her children to go outside in nights alone ,so she decided that ,they all are going.

In the Temple

Rani maa:(While climbing the stairs)Hum sabko ek baat kehna chahte hai,Guruji ke paas aurte nahi jaa sakti ,isliye Avdesh Akele hi aashirwaad lene aage bhade ga.

Mohit:Par aise kyun,Aurten unke paas kyun nahi jaa saktii?

Raja Sahib: Because he is Baalbramhachaari and had vowed that in his whole life he will never touch any women?

Mohit: toh wo aurton ko aashirwaad kaise dete hai?

Raja Sahib:door se hi aashirwaad de dete hai ,jab sonali aur arpita ka janam hua tha tab bhi unhone aisa kiya tha ,pata nahi kaise kaise dosh nikal rahe the, mujhe to kuch samajh hi nahi aaya tha.

Guruji came out from his room.The womens stand in the corner and the mens were taking blessings.RaJa sahib introduced avdesh to Guruji.Guruji gave Avdesh blessings.

Guruji sees into avdesh's eyes straight and after sometime he says to raja sahib that he wants to talk to them alone .Everyone left the room,now only guruji,raja sahib and rani maa were there.

Rani maa:kya hua guruji,kuch zaroori baat hai?

Guruji : Baat to hai ,Mujhe aapse poochna tha ,kya Avdesh ko pata hai ke uski daayi maa ne arpita ko pehle pasand kiya tha?

Rani maa:yeh to hame nahi pata ,par maine unhe Arpita ki kundali mein nadi dosh ka bataya tha aur yeh jhooth bola tha ke arpita aur avdesh ki kundliya nahi milti,aur jab hamne sonali ka prastav rakha tha ,mujhe nahi laga ke unhe koi farak pada,wo tab bhi raazi the

Guruji:dekhiye aage kya hoga yeh to main nahi bata sakta ,par yeh zaroor kahunga ke hum aapne aane waale jeevan ki yochna jitni bhi karle par hame hamesha aane waale kal ke liye tayyar rehna chahiye,chahe wo bura ho ya aacha.Aur raja sahib aap,aap mujhe pasand nahi karte main yeh jaanta hoon,koi bhi aapki jagah hota to aisa hi karta par yakeen maniye main tab bhi arpita ki bhalayi ke baare mein soch raha tha aur aaj bhi .Aap jaante hai,us samme doosri beti ke janam ko ashubh maana jaata tha aur badi ke hote chotibeti ki shaadi Rajgharane mein nahi ho sakti ,isliye maine Arpita ki shaadi ke liye inkaar kiya tha aur waise bhi sonali badi hai aur uski shaadi pehle honi chahiye.

Raja sahib:Main in sab baaton mein yakeen nahi karta

Guruji :aap samajh nahi paye kyunke aap ek pita hai ,aur koi bhi pita apne baccho ko apne aap se door nahi dekh sakta.Main nahi jaanta kal aapki beti ke vida hone par aap khush hon ge ya dukhi,par aapki beti aise same mein sabse zyaada dukh jhel rahi hogi.Aap jaa sakte hain ,main jitna aapko bol sakta tha maine bola ,aage sab aap jaane aur aapka vishwaas,jo mujhpe bilkul bhi nahi hai.Aapke pitaji ne bhi meri baat nahi maani thi aur dekhiye ,Arpita ke janam ke do mahine baad hi wo chal base

Raja sahib:wo ek accident tha,us kamre mein aag lagi thi jahan pitaji Arpita ke saath the

Guruji:to phir aapke pitaji kyun us aag mein jale ,arpita bhi to thi wahan

Raja sahib:pitaji ne arpita ko bachaya tha par wo khud us hadse mein nahi rahe.

Guruji:to kya aap yeh maante hai,jahan Arpita hoti wohan sab kuch theek hota hai

Raja sahib: zaroori nahi agar kuch galat ho to meri arpita ka kasoor hai

Guruji:main yeh nahi keh raha ke Arpita ka kasoor hai,yeh to bas graho ka khel hai.Aap ab jaa sakte hai,mujhe aur kuch nahi kehna bas yehi aasha karta aane waale kal koi alag rukh na mod le

Raja sahib:Raja sahib and Rani maa left the temple with everyone.Avdesh and his family went back to Rajgarh.

In Raj Mahal

Everyone is sleeping in Raj Mahal,except Arpita.Its 4 am ,when she suddenly heard a male voice .She got up from the swing and went to verandah to search ,whose voice was that?Arpita ordered all the guard to check the Raj mahal ,because she heard some voices.Everyone got awaked,Raja sahib himself checked some rooms but no one was there.

Dadi maa:dekh Arpita ,tune koi bura sapna dekha hoga,yahan par koi nahi hai.

Arpita:dadi maa,hamne koi sapna nahi dekha ,ham jaag rahe the

Rani maa:Arpita bohut ho gaya,ab jaakar so jayo,tum thakawat ki wajah se aise bekaar baatein kar rahi ho

Arpita felt bad ,because no one believed her.Starts walking to her room when she suddenly saw a shadow on the stairs.

Arpita turned back to the hall Rani maa woh hamne abhi kisi ka saaya...(but stopped herself because now she herself wondered)Was i dreaming?

sorry diis ,i want to tell yoou guys that i dont know much about horoscope i searched it yestzerday then wrote it,pata nahi maine kundali ka kya bhadta bana diya hai
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chapter5

Everyone in the big Hall of Raj Mahal
 

The Mandap is set in the Middle of the hall.Everyone is happy because today is the marriage of Raja Sahib's elder daughter.There are lot of Guests from girl's side but from Avdesh's side there are only some friends.Daayi maa is not here because its ritual that mother always stays at home during his son's maariage and wait at home with pooja thaali till he is back with his bride.Avdesh is brought near the Mandip ,wearinng a light brown Sherwani, everyone is waiting for Sonali now.

Rani maa: Arpita ,jaa kar Sonali ko la

Sonali's room

arpita went upstairs to sonali's room and was shocked like hell.

Arpita: yeh kya hua yahan, tum sab rassi se kyun bandhe ho?(Arpita released the girls from rope)

One girl spoke :woh pata nahi kya hua,hum sonali ko tayyar kar rahe the tabhi ek naukar aake hume niboo paani de gaya ,Usko peene ke baad hame kuch yaad nahi .Jab hosh aaya toh hum rassii se bandhe the.

Arpita: di kahan hai
The girl:pata nahi wo hamare saath hi thi

Arpita: kya matlab saath hi thi ,ab kya hoga neeche baraat aayi huyi hai

Manjiri: Hume Rani maa ko bulana chahhiye

haha jaldi jao rani maa ko bulao

Arpita went downstairs.she went to Rani maa who was standing with Avdesh and Mohit.

Rani maa: Rani maa ,woh hame aapse kuch zaroori baat karni hai ,aap please ahamre saath upar chaliye

Rani maa: Arpita , kya baat hai ,yehi bata to na

Arpita :(seeing Avdesh and Mohit ,didn't say ) nahi Rani maa,baat bohut zaroori hai

Rani Maa (confused ,dont know what to say in front of damad)

Avdesh :( seeing Arpi's tension ) Arpita yehi bata do ,hum kaunsa paraye hai

Arpita:(hesitated first but then says)Rani maa, wo dii apne kamre mein nahhi

Rani maa: (shocked)kya matlab kamre mein nahi hai?

Arpita:aap mere saath upar chaliye

Avdesh , Mohit and Rani maa walks to Sonali 's room.The girls told them everythhing and the room's situation wasn't bad ,only some broken glass was on floor.

Rani maa: hey bhagwaan ,yeh kya ho raha hai,neeche sab intezaar kar rahe hai ,ab kya hoga

Avdesh:aap chinta mat kijiye,sonali yahan hi kahi hogi.Mohit tu dekh kar aa ,haan aur neeche kisise kuch mat kehna

Arpita:yahan kaise hogi hum sab niche hi thi,kisi ne nahi dekha

Rani (to one Guard) :sabhi servants ko abhi yahan bulao

The servants came.

Rani maa: Manjiri tum yahan hi thi,bata inke chehre dekh kar kaun aaya tha paani lekar

Manjiri watched each and every servant carefully .

Manjiri : Nahi Rani maa,inme se koi bhi nahi aaya tha

Mohit comes with Raja Sahib in the room.

Raja Sahib :yeh main kya sun raha,sonali kahan hai?

Arpita narrated everything to Raja Sahib.

One Girl : yeh dekhiye ,yeh chitthi(pointing a letter laid on the Bed)

Avdesh picked up the Letter and read it.There was written only two lines in the letter,that if you want your daughter alive then bring 2 crores in the Kaali pahadi on tommorrow morning.And don't try to complaint the police because if this happens then your daughter wil be dead.

Everyone in the room were confused that who could be it ,its obvious that first the kidnappers made everyone in the room unconcious and then they took sonali ,But how?

Rani Maa: yeh kya ho raha,hum kisi ko muh dhikhane ke layak nahi rahenge agar kisiko pata chal gaya ke Raja mahal mein se Sonali ko koi utha le gaya.Yahan sabka vishwaas uth jaye ga hum par.

Raja Sahib:(angry) hamari beti kidnapped ho gayi hai aur tumhe logon ki padi hai

Mohit : Pandit do baar bol chuka hai dulha aur dulhan ko bulane ke liye ,ab kya hoga?

Rani maa: kya hoga,ab yeh shaadi nahi ho sakti

Avdesh: Nahi ,shaadi hogi,aaj hi hogi ,main ghar apni patni ke bina nahi jaa sakta,daayi maa mera intezaar kar rahi hai,main khaali haath nahi jaa sakta upar se itni badnaami hogi agar abhi shaadi nahi huyi.

Arpita: Par dii ko itni jaldi kahan se layange,kidnappers ne waqt bhi kal ka diya hai.

Avdesh:(comes in front of Arpita, ,face to face and answered)tumhari dii nahi,tum mujhse shaadi karogi.

Rani maa:(shocked) yeh aap kya bol rahe hai ,aisa kabhi nahi ho sakta?

Avdesh:kyun nahi ho sakta ,mere liye yeh shaadi karna bohut zaroori hai,aap jaanti hai pehle hi main shaadi jald se jald karna chahta tha,mere liye meri daayi maa ki tabiyat ka khayaal rakhna bohut zaroori hai,Doctors ne kaha hai wo jitna khush rahe gi utna unki tabiyat ke liye accha hoga

Raja Sahib : par aisa kaisa ho sakte hai,yeh...muujhe kuch samajh nahi aa raha

Rani Maa : log kya soche ge ,ke badi beti ke badle choti beti ki shaadi ho rahi hai

Avdesh : nahi ,log yehi sochenge ke Sonali ki shaadi huyi ,Arpita ghungat mein hogi.Arpita,main tumpe koi davav nahi daalna chahta ,par ek baar socho agar tuzm shaadi kar leti ho sab kuch normal rahega.

Arpita:(she was going to say somthing) par main,...

Raja Sahib:Arpita shaadi karegi

Raani maa ,Arpita and everyone else in the room were shocked

Rani maa: aap aisa kaisa kar sakte hai

Raja Sahib : tum chup raho,Arpita avidesh se shaadi karegi ,aur abhi.Manjiri tum Arpi ko tayaar karo aur haan ,Arpi ,Arpita hi bankar shaadi karegi na ke sonali ,koi zaroorat nahi ghooghat bada karne ki,shaadi sabse saamne hogi.

Avdesh : aisa nahi ho sakta ,Arpita ko sonali bankar shaadi karni hogi

Raja Sahib: Agar meri beti ki shaadi hogi toh kisi bhi jhoot ke bina:Tum faisla karo tumhe abhi media ka dar hai ya apni daayi maa ki tabiyat ka.

Avdesh (in anger,left the room) main mandap pe intezaar kar raha hoon

Mohit followed him.

Rani maa:aap aisa kyun kar rahe hai.

Raja Sahib :tum bohut maanti ho na ,apne guruji ko,bhul gayi wo kya bol rahe the,aaj hamari beti ki bidaai hogi,aur sonali yahan nahi ,Arpita ke ilawa tumhe aur koi dikh raha yahan

Arpita: pitaji ,yeh aap kya bol rahe hai

Raja Sahib:bharosa karo mujhpe Arpita,main jo kar raha hoon ,bohut soch samajh ke kar raha hoon.mere liye yeh shaadi karlo lo

Arpita didn't say anything

Raja sahib:Manjiri ,arpita ko tayyaaar karo,saraswati chalo mere saath neeche.

Rani maa followed Raja sahib.Manjiri made arpita ready for the marriage because there was no bridal lehnga.Arpita wore a heavy red coloured saree.

Manjiri brought Arpita to the mandip.Avdesh was already sitting in his place.Rani maa and Raja sahib tied the end of the Avdesh's scarf with Arpita's saree. Avdesh applies vermillon on Arpita's forehead.Then Avdesh tied Mangalsutra around Arpita's neck.The Saptapadi (saat phere)started.They both circles the sacred fire seven times.After this rituals ,they took blessings from their elders.

Its time for Bidaai ,Arpita was crying and so does Dadi and everyone else in the mahal.Rani maa told Arpita to call her after reaching Rajgarh.Arpita was going to sit in the car when someone shouted

Yeh kya ho raha hai...

It was none other than sonali

Everyone shocked there.She was breathing heavily.She came running towards Rani maa and hugged her.Behind her there was a man.Tears were coming from her eyes.Rani maa told her about the letter.

Sonali:Rani maa hum kya bataye,jab hum tayyar ho rahe the ,to ek aadmi naukar ke bhes mein ham sab ke liye nimboo paani laya tha ,Hum sabne wo paani piya tha aur dheere dheere hamari aankhon ke sammne andhera scha gaya uske baad hum mahal se bahar kaise aaye hume khud nahi pata.Jab hame hosh aaya to hum ek kamre the ,woh log kuch baatein kar rahe the,unka dhyaan mujhopar nahi tha ,isliye mauka dekh kar main dabe payo us kamre se bahar nikli.Bahar nikal kar dekh to jungle tha .Maine wahan se bhagna shuru kiya ,shayad unko meri payal ke awwaz se pata chal gaya tha ,aur wo mere piche piche bhaag rahe the.Bhaagte bhaagte main highway pe aan pahunchi.Tabhi unhone ne mujhe gher liya ,tabhi yeh bhale (pointing to the man ,standing behind her) insaan wohan se guzar rahe the aur inhone mujhe gundo se bacha kar yahan tak sahi salamat pahunchaya.Par yeh sab kya ho raha hai,nakku is tarah

Raja Sahib:Beti tere kamre mein na hone ke karan ham chinta mein the aur us chithi mein likha tha ke wo tumhe do crore dene pare chodenge ,aur jagah bhi kal kaali pahadi par batayi thi ,aise mein ham kya karte ,islliye Arpita ki shaadi Avdesh se karwaani padi.

Rani maa:dekha apne fainslein ka nateejy main mana kar rahi thi par aap ne meri ek nahi suni ab hamari badi beti dulhan ke jode mein khadi hai,kya hoga iska.Avdesh iske zimedaar tum bhi ho

Avdesh didnt says anything,Arpita was still in shock ,that she is marriend and her sis is standing in dulhan's joda.

The invitees starts talking rubbish about both the girls

Hey Ram ,ab sonali ka kya hoga .

One od the lady says:Hona kya ,jo har ladki ke saath hota hai.Sonali ko bhi apni saari Zindagi ek widwa ke roop mein bitaani hogi

The person ,who helped sonali says: aap yeh kaisi baatein kar rahe hai,isme is ladki ka kya dosh hai,wo kaun sa shaadi se bhaagi thi ,yeh to kismat ka khel hai

Rani maa:(all sad) haan ,isse koi farak nahi padta ki sonalil hamari beti hai,jo niyam doosro par lagoo hai wohi raj mahal ke bachho par,sonali ko apni baaki ki zindagi widwa ban kar hi guzarni hogi.Waise bhi ab kaun raazi hoga,kaun kare ga meri beti se shaadi

Sonali fell on ground and cried loudly ,there was silence and suddenly the person,who helped sonali spoke

main karunga sonali se shaadi

Everyone there was shocked

Raja Sahib:kya kaha tumne?

The person: ji ,main aapki beti se shaadi karne ke liye tayyar hoon

Rani maa: aap jaante hain aap kya bol rahe hai?

the person: ji acchi tarah se ,mujhe koi aitraaz nahi hai is shaadi se,aap log mujhe nahi jaante,mera naam Ranvijay hai ,main mumbai mein rehta hoon ,apna business hain ,ye raha mera card

Avdesh:tum logon ki settlement khatam ho gayi to chale arpita,mere paas time nahi hai in faaltoo kii baaton ke liye,pehle hi meri izzat ka bahut tamasha ho chuka hai.

Arpita was shocked by Avdesh's behaviour,so does others .She thought ,how mean this man is.

Arpita:par didi

Avdesh stopped Arpita by saying: yeh bhale insaan hai na teri didi se shaadi karne ke liye.Meri maa intezaar kar rahi hai

Avdesh held arpita's arn tightly and made her sit in the car and thy drove to the Rajgarh.

Raja sahib and Rani maa were feeling guilty for their daughters because they chose Avdesh.And now because of Avdesh both the sisters are suffering.

RV went on his Knee and asked sonali if she is fine by marrying him.Sonali nods in agreement.

Rani maa 's face lighten up a little bit but again she was worrying of Arpita.

Raja sahib took Sona and RV to the mandap and they both got married in the same mandap .

All guests were gone.Raja sahib offered RV to live them in raj mahal till his works get finished in udaypur.

hope you guys like it

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Rubal, your update was very good. I am not very good in Hindi because I don't speak it but I was able to understand the gist of your writing. Thanks for it once again. This comment is for chapter 4.
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Rubal, wow two wedding in one chapter. I loved how Avi insisted on marrying Arpita and how they all had to agree. I already know that Avi is smart and he could read through everyone's face. Rani Maa is now showing a caring side to Arpita. I would not worry about her because she is married to Avi. I was worrying that maybe Sonali will interfere with Arpi's departure with Avi because of her jealousy. The kidnapping was all fake and I wonder when sonali will be exposed.