Posted: 12 years ago
WOW! chapter 2 so soon! 🥳

This was another amazing chapter...full of premeer ( I assume its them as you havn't used ther names yet!)😆

and I loved it how you've described what they were feeling and then suddenly heer pushing themselves away to save his life from the lorry and both of them rolling down the cliff on top of each other ☺️...love is in the air!😉

It was very nice to see how concerned they were about each other in their first meeting...prem offering to pick her up 😍 and heer worried about his bleeding head and bandaged it with her dupatta awww..sooo cute...

Prem's parents have kicked im out of his house?!?!?! 😲 Interesting

Now you have left us on an interesting point! please do update soon😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
hy! both chapters wer awsum! :))))))))
 
luvd d concept! n wer awsum! love at first sight! do continue! N IF U HV A PM LIST DO ADD ME!!!
 
AWSUM! <3 <3 <3 DO CONTINUE!
Posted: 12 years ago
Welcome to the forum
 
All the best for ur FF
Posted: 12 years ago
Hi! Welcome to the forum! ⭐️

It's nice to see another writer in the forum.

The story you set up sounds very interesting. 

What a dramatic way for Prem and Heer to meet.

And I'm very interested in how Prem got kicked out of his house.

Keep up the great work.

By the way I'm Chinese American so I don't know any Hindi 😳 but since you wrote some things in English I sort of guessed at what was being said.
Posted: 12 years ago
thnxxx to all...👏
i m glad u all liked it...
love u...
 
Posted: 12 years ago

LOVE CHAPTER 3...

 

As she was bandaging him,she found it hard to control and she threw herself in his arms…she let out all her worries,anxities,torchers as she was feeling a lot of secured in   his arms…

 

On the other hand, he was surprised to see her actions…he didn't understand at allthat why is she showing a lot of concern and love towards him…

 

He lovingly stretched his one hand on her head and the other on her waist…

 

"Heer , why are you crying? See,I am alrite,nothing happened…I am just all fine…"

 

jism to sirf ek bahanaa hain
ruh tak saath sath jaana hain
haath jabse hain hain tera haath mein
phir haath mein zamanaa hain

 

she was holding him so tightly that he lost control of himself and fell back….they were all alone in the cottage…

 

he was on top of her…his one hand on her face cupping it sweetly and the other on her shoulder….

 

Her one hand on his waist and the other on the nape of his neck….

 

He slowly lifted his head up and saw her still crying but looking at him lovingly….he gently cupped her face and wiped away her tears with his thumbs….and nodded his head sideways telling her not to cry…

 

lo shuru ab chaahaton ka silsila ho raha hain
mit rahi hain duriyan aur faasla kho raha hain
ho rahi hain baat kuch aisi jisme
ho rahi hain baat kuch aisi jisme shabd gum hain, arth matlab gum ho raha hain

 

she again pulled him towards her and hugged him…this time he didn't pulled himself away…he wanted that she should let cry and wash away all her worries…he closed his eyes getting in the moment…she too closed her eyes and let all the tears come out…soon both of them drifted into sleep in the same posture…

 

nearly abut after 2 hours , she opened her eyes and moaned in pain…listening to her moan , he opened his eyes and asked

"heer , what happened , are you fine…?

 

"prem , my foot…"

 

He gently got off from her…she felt shy when he got off from her and smiled to herself…he gently took her feet in his lap and started massaging with his thumbs…she closed her eyes in bliss…she again threw herself in his arms…he was shocked now…

 

"mera iss duniya mein koi nahi he…lekin aaj apse mili hun to lag raha he ki mein apni zindagi se mili hun…iss se pehle iss duniya mein mera koi naa tha…lekin tumse mil kar lag raha he…SIRF TUM ho…SIRF TUM ho…I love you…I love you….i love you…" she said crying…

 

lo shuru ab chaahaton ka silsila ho raha hain
mit rahi hain duriyan aur faasla kho raha hain

jitna pehle the kabhi itni jawaan
thoda naya sa lag raha hain yeh jahaan
aayega aur bhi ais hi samaa
aayega aur bhi aisa hi samaa
haan hamesha do dilon ko pyaara sa jo raha hain

 

his grip on her tightened and he smiled and got a lot of pleasure and love in her words because before this no one has said him I love you…

he pushed her on the ground gently and got on top of her…he cupped her serene face…

"sach batau to aaj se pehle , mujhse itna pyaar karne wala koi naa tha…lekin aaj tumne vo keh diya jo mein kab se sunne ke liye tars gaya tha…I love you too heer…I love you too…" he said lovingly…

 

"lekin ab mein hun jo umhe bohot pyaar krungi…bohot…I love you prem…I love you…"she said…

 

She hugged him tightly and rolled over him…

 

 

lo shuru ab chaahaton ka silsila ho raha hain
mit rahi hain duriyan aur faasla kho raha hain

dil yeh chaahe tutkar chaahoon tumhe
dedo ijaazat tutne ki tum hamein
dil yeh chaahe tutkar chaahoon tumhe
dedo ijaazat tutne ki tum hamein

 

she cupped his face…he closed his eyes…

 

chunke rakh lo chaahaton ke yeh lamhen
yun sambhalkar thamlo lo pal dekho woh kho raha hain

lo shuru ab chaahaton ka silsila ho raha hain
mit rahi hain duriyan aur faasla kho raha hain
ho rahi hain baat kuch aisi jisme
ho rahi hain baat kuch aisi jisme shabd gum hain, arth matlab gum ho raha hain

 

"plzzz…. love me…plzzz" he said crying and lovingly…

 

Posted: 12 years ago
SO HOW WAS IT...PLZZZ TELL ME...
LOVE...
~PIYUHEER...
Posted: 12 years ago
Wow...all d chapters were great n welcome 2 d forum 😊...
startin was great...loved d way they met 😳
do add me in ur pm list if u have...waitin for nxt chap...


Edited by sadhz - 12 years ago
Posted: 12 years ago
Originally posted by sadhz


Wow...all d chapters were great n welcome 2 d forum 😊...
startin was great...loved d way they met 😳
do add me in ur pm list if u have...waitin for nxt chap...


 
 
😊thnxxx a lot...
i m vry u r lking it...
1st meetng nd love is in d air...
u mst b surprised...dat dey said i love u 2 ech odr in d 1st meetng only...
bt jst wait nd watch...
keep in touch...
love u all...
~piyuheer...
Posted: 12 years ago
Originally posted by piyuheer


hey guysss...hiii deshians...i m new ovr here bt jst lvd all ur ff's...espicially...grace nd selvy...i hv also dcided 2 gv bst frm my side...

hope u all lv it...
plzzz supprt me...
wid love...
-piyuheer...
 
 
 
 
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