Posted: 11 June 2011 at 3:36pm | IP Logged
Those facebook quizzes.
I loved the title, very hip, relatable and intriguing.
The opening statements introducing themes of fatigue from holding at bay a feeling that wishes to flow freely through you. I am tired...I am tired...I am terrified. I loved the dam you built stopping those deep, still and silent emotions that are upon a brink. Just one break, one crack and they will pour over, gushing profusely.
I loved how you weave modern day distractions, facebook quizzes into the age of old problem of is it or isn't it love? Those simple and seemingly harmless fun antics that upon a whim can become means to seeking meaning the the most urgent of matters.
I loved, JUST LOVED, that colloquial style of the writing, so that we feel as though we are in her head, so as you peppered those retorts against herself, we contend against them too. I can't
think of that word even.
Do I lo-….No And before I could possibly think
anything, I said, "Even I want to go out with you." Nicely done!
I loved this tangent, Sometimes I
take quiz on me Just inspired which upon you add depth, here through self referential humour, But then, I went back into my profile and deleted the
result. Excellently done.
You so wonderfully, seamlessly, flow forwards so that a point of no return seems to have been reached, We are not even friends! Which you creatively contrive to have her corner herself into a conundrum. "hi, I am a girl who is crazily in love with you?" She, nor us, saw that coming! Excellently done! So natural and believable and yet entertaining.
Then that subtle change from her virtual world of doubts to the real world of facts. I always try my level best to cross his path and
smile with my friends. That explains why I feel so contented when I see
him or disappointed when I don't. Adorable moments!
I have a habit of looking at the eye while talking, and
he usually stared back. I felt so shy, yet comfortable. Beautiful detailing that adds depth to the character whilst moving the plot forwards. Skillfully done!
I loved your end. For not only does she declare it to be love, but we too can see that in setting it free, it really is true love.
Excellently written. A wonderful characterization illuminating a theme that touches most if not all of us. Lovely. With much love Sabah