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~When They Collide~ (AY, TR, SV FF)-Prt76Updt. (Page 84)

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Posted: 14 August 2011 at 9:15am | IP Logged
Originally posted by elizaa

part 61!!
appy!!
awesomeee job!!
kabir and sanys part was cute! they r the next ay of this ff ;)
and sid vrindas convo was soo funny! shur mein sids like.. sheetal this sheetal tht.. and wen vrinda goes like yeah.. kittni badi rebel hai, toh hes like, all against her.. tht shes atleast nt as bad as ashi ;)
as the fact tht ranveer and tia are still in the fighthingn mood, it looks awesome on them! love their lil nokjokhs! aapy!  veryy well writte. they wer totally the tiara we see on remix ;)
ranveer pulling her legs, and she snapping bk at him :))
and then ashiyuvi.. appy... r u like serious?? did u write this??
ay feelings.. ashi was soo disturbed coz she didnt want to telll him everything.. she wanted him to understand.. at the same time, she had mixed feelings bout loving him and feeling worse bout it..
on the other hand yuvi was behaving like a kid instead... all dumb.. cldnt he understand wht was going on..  but tht was sooo yuvi!
and appy can i say tht i llove u so much for this update! i so enjoyed reading this part.. specially the last part! now am going to read the next update... am so glad! badey badey update!
u and trishu have given amazing upades this time! i promise ill give u good long ones too :D


thankyou sooo much lizzie for liking the part Hug... It seriously means a lot to me TongueTongue when I start writing I just write down whatever comes to my mind at that time and that depends to a great extent on the lines of my thoughts going on in my mind at that moment Smile  I am really glad and obliged that you both liked the part ...Tongue

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Posted: 14 August 2011 at 9:28am | IP Logged
Originally posted by elizaa

about part 62!!
apppy dear!
goshhh!
again! u seem to be awesome at dialogue delivery! 
like seriously!
its an inborn talent, or maybe its about watching too many comedy-romanic flicks!
like u wrote down every lil thing i thot theyd be feeling! tht too they poured out ecverythign in such a way tht they were not clear AT all, but the other got it clearly!
now if thts not an amazing work, thn wht is it?
i was actually  reading slowly to ctch up with wht they both said to each other in the end.. it was so mystical.  lol.. if thts a word ;)
at this moment i feel bad for yuvi too.. tho it WAS his fault wen he kissed bak the girl.. but then.. he also has been alone since then.. coz ashi never gave him the explanation for y she left.. he was equally disturbed.. the soulmate theory seems to completely work on them! lol
anyway.. ill go next!
m enjoying wtc so much!
hope u guys r too :D


that puzzlewala thing is from my personal experience ... At one point of time I told that to someone ... while writing the update it just suddenly got back to me as a memory flashOuch  kuch talent hai ki nahi pata nahi but I am glad that atleast through wtc i have managed to pour out a little part of what's inside me , my thoughts.feelings and experiences Tongue

I totally agree with you that the the soulmate theory works with them ... they are just perfect for it Tongue
I am going to read your part and then comment Tongue

i totally agree that

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Posted: 14 August 2011 at 9:34am | IP Logged

part 63

Ashi was in no mood to talk to yuvi. She laid on the bed and yuvi rested on the couch.

"so we are back to the wretched place again" said yuvi.

Ashi didn't reply to this.

She simple looked around. The interiors of the house seemed to take away all her attention. How come she didn't notice this before. Might be just coz the dufus bothered her too much then but now she didn't want to think bout him. She just chose to ignore what he said. She had changed so much.. had it been her mauriya days, she'd surely throttle  him out of his wits. But now, she would rather think more rationally.

"ashi.."

There was no reply again. She looked at the different types of veneers used in the space. They all seemed to be exquisite. The place was quiet old, might be many broken too, but had its different art. Yuvi had been blabbering in the background, but ashi wanted to go take a wash. She looked around for the washroom, but couldn't place where it was. She looked straight and sighed. 'seriously ashi.. your going insane'

There were a line of wardrobes. The middle wardrobe has a shutter leading to the washroom door.

She went to freshen up leaving the wardrobe door open. The distance between the wardrobe door and the washroom door was hardly 3 feet. Yuvi stood outside the doors and tried talking to ashi, and went bonkers when she didn't reply.

-       -

Yuvi- "ow!"

Ashi- "oof!"

Thud!

Yuvi- "get off me anvesha!"

Ashi- "i- I cant"

Yuvi- "I know how incredibly god-like my looks are, but please! Try to contain yourself!"

Ashi- "no you stupid git! I mean! Theres no room!

Yuvi- "well, open the bathroom door!"

Ashi- "ive tried already! It wont move!"

Yuvi- "try harder!"

Ashi- "I did! Try opening the wardrobe door! Dufus! How did you land in here!"

Yuvi- "doesn't open!.. and you weren't listening. Who knew these locks are jammed!

Ashi- so?? So tum mere bathroom ke bahar watchman ki tarah khade rahoge in the dark?"

Yuvi- "don't pretend tumne mujhe dekha nahi!"

Ashi- "BONE HEAD! Mujhe suicidal attempts nahi aatey!"

Yuvi- "kuch der pehle toh aa rahe the!"

Ashi- "help!! Somebody helppp!!!!"

Yuvi- "shut up ashi"

Ashi- "helppp!! Am trapped here with a bonehead!!"

Yuvi- "banging on the door is not going to work"

Ashi- "HELLLO!! Some one! Auntyyy!!! Get us outtt!!"

Yuvi- "cant you see the thick block shutters? No sound can get out of here. We will have to wait till the oldies come with our breakfast!!"

Ashi- "huh?"

Yuvi- "and what do u mean you want to get out? I need to get out too!"

Ashi- "for all I care.. you can rot here yuvi! Anyway, I cant believe I got in all this mes again! All cause of you!"

Yuvi- "are you implying that it is my fault??"

Ashi- "only because it is!"

Yuvi- "you were the one who closed the bathroom door when I was standing right in front of you.

Ashi- "and you were the one who shut the wardrobe shutter. How was I to see you in all the darkness? With glowing beads??"

Yuvi (smirked)- "aah! Id die to see you in those!"

Ashi- "shut up pervert! Still wasn't my fault, though"

Yuvi- "fine.. we still have to get out of here ASAP!"

Ashi- "how are we going to get out of here.."

Yuvi- "no idea! i wonder why I am so desperate for tht oldie to come to our from today.."

Ashi- "only if I hadn't closed the bathroom! Atleast id have place to breathe. This is so aweful"

Yuvi- "yes it is!"

Ashi- "why were you anyway?"

Yuvi- "coz I've been trying to talk to you sine.. forever."

Ashi-  "what? Why?"

Yuvi- "yawn.. I don't remember now."

Ashi- "don't remember?"

Yuvi- "I was bored."

Ashi- "honestly!"

Yuvi- "yes, honestly!"

Ashi- "ya kyat um kuch chupaane ki kosish kar rahe ho!"

Yuvi- "kya chupaane ki koshish karoonga mein ab?"

Ashi- "ke tum yahaan apne chest ke baal count kar rahe the!"

Yuvi- "shut up ashi.. tumhare pj's kitne outdated hai!"

Ashi- "stop breathing on my shoulder! Will you?

Yuvi- "well, where else am I to breathe?"

Ashi- "pata nahi.. anywhere but not my shoulder!"

Yuvi- "now your trying to bug me ashi!"

Ashi- "but don't you see? Its so easy! Just stop breathing! And try to thik of ways to get outtt!"

Yuvi- "I cant think of anything.."

Ashi- "thts coz your brains are frozen!"

Yuvi- "shut up and think!"

Ashi- "fine!"

Yuvi- "fine! But stop hitting me!"

 

After a moment of silence.

Ashi- "in case youv'e forgotten, we are trapped!"

Yuvi- "its like a coffin here.."

Ashi- "thank god neither of us is claustrophobic.."

Yuvi (moves a little)- "clawstrophooobic??"

Ashi- "duh! Afraid of small places.."

Yuvi- "shut up ashi!"

Ashi- "no.. I think I need entertainment! Its time for singing!"

Ashi holds her throat and sings in the most annoying tone ever.

Ashi- "NAAA KOIII TENNNSSSIIOOONNN LEEENNAAA!!"

Yuvi- "plz plz shut up!"

Ashi- "if you do so!"

Yuvi- "ok.."

Ashi- "ok!"

Yuvi- "fine!"

Ashi- "fine!"

 

 

 

Lol! I am so srry for this part.. ashu threatened me to put something like this. She read it in some story.. so I had to.. the one whos going next, can make some nice use of the current situation they r in.

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Posted: 14 August 2011 at 9:42am | IP Logged
@lizzie : the kabeer-sany part was really cute ... they are so good together ... really enjoy their bickerings LOLTongue   so now all four are on a search -- bechare bhi kya kare ... aise hi log missing hota raha toh party attend karne wala koi nahi hoga LOLLOL
sid and vrinda -- dhoondne gaye the kisi aur ko but mila koi aur LOL
and AY --- hey bhaggu !!! phirse woh aunty ... really loved the silent convo between them ... and poor Yuvi !!1 aunty se aur ek lecture ... ashi will be ashi !!! having fun watching the scene LOL
so sonia is finally here Party party time !!! loved her bickerings with sumeet ahuja LOL
some people never grows up LOLTongue really enjoyed reading the update Tongue


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Posted: 14 August 2011 at 9:55am | IP Logged
Originally posted by BUBLAI

@lizzie : the kabeer-sany part was really cute ... they are so good together ... really enjoy their bickerings LOLTongue   so now all four are on a search -- bechare bhi kya kare ... aise hi log missing hota raha toh party attend karne wala koi nahi hoga LOLLOL
sid and vrinda -- dhoondne gaye the kisi aur ko but mila koi aur LOL
and AY --- hey bhaggu !!! phirse woh aunty ... really loved the silent convo between them ... and poor Yuvi !!1 aunty se aur ek lecture ... ashi will be ashi !!! having fun watching the scene LOL
so sonia is finally here Party party time !!! loved her bickerings with sumeet ahuja LOL
some people never grows up LOLTongue really enjoyed reading the update Tongue


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thnks appy!!!Hug
now read the next part, and strt writng plzz!
i really want a nice emotional lovey dovey part from ur end.. but plz dnt make it like ashi's showing her love.. just tht shes showing it unintentionllly..
u knw wht i mean rite?
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Posted: 14 August 2011 at 10:05am | IP Logged
@lizzie : lol lizzie !!! what an update yaarLOLLOL bechare bathroom mein locked and aunty is not coming LOL aise wasroom kahan milta hai LOLLOL wadrobe, shutters and claustrophobic ??LOL
loved yuvi in this one and ashi's 'na koi tension lena ' is just out of the world ...
Ashu madam khud kahan gayab hai ??ConfusedLOL

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Posted: 14 August 2011 at 10:26am | IP Logged
okk lizzie i am going next Tongue

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Posted: 14 August 2011 at 11:28am | IP Logged
Part 65:


Ashi as well as Yuvi were feeling quite uncomfortable standing so close to each other in the dark and that too in such a small place ...

Yuvi : '' Don't you think this aunty is taking ages in bringing the breakfast ?? ''

Ashi : '' duh-ha !! how am i supposed to know that ??? I am not gaga over her unlike you to know her whereabouts ..."

Yuvi : '' Why can't you girls ever reply to us without being sarcastic ??? Don't you all realise that we are not always up for it ."

Ashi : '' Do you actually think that we give a damn about your ups and downs ??? You all can forever be hanging up in the air ... We don't care or for that matter I don't care "

Yuvi : '' Is there anything on your list that you actually care about ??? "

Ashi : '' Ofcourse there is ... but sorry to dissappoint you that you are not on the list "

Yuvi : '' Do you think I will buy that ??? "

Ashi : '' Don't worry I am not in the mood to sell you anything ."

Yuvi : '' why are you being so sarcastic today ?? "

Ashi : '' What to do ?? with you being around , I have no other options available with me "

Yuvi : '' Then love to appreciate the options "

Ashi : '' That's totally upto me , don't you think so ??"

Yuvi : '' Are you actually asking me this ??? "

Ashi : '' I think so ... but i forgot you never thought me deserving for your answers"

Yuvi : '' ohh !!! so is that so ?? I think I never deserved to question you anything ... "

Ashi : '' Yeah ... that's true ... but people who can't answer others does not deserve to question either ... "

Yuvi : '' Look ashi !!! i have had enough of this since morning ... I you really want to tell me or ask me something , just go ahead and finish it at one go "

Ashi : '' i know that you are a strong believer of that ''Finish it at one Go ''  ''

Yuvi : '' Yeah i believe in it ... it's so much better than bashing for person so many times for no reason at all ''

Ashi : '' No reason at all ... ??? Is it ??"

Yuvi : '' atleast i don't find any ... If you do tell me ... "

Ashi : '' I don't want to "

Yuvi : '' then just stop being a jerk "

Ashi : '' Am I being the jerk ?? Do you know what , from today morning , I am getting a clear idea about what you think about me ??? Thanks for being go vivid in your characterization"

Ashi can't believe that Yuvi had just called her a 'jerk'... How could he ??? Doesn't he think he owes me an explanation or I was just a trashcan for him ...??? if it was to be in this manner , then why was I still trying to find the love which we once shared ... He has totally moved on ... Then why I kept feeling that there is something that is still there ... I always loved fighting with him as it brought us much closer but now its totally drifting us apart ... am I so foolish to still think of this in this way ??? fights, feelings, love, care -- all just seems to vanish ... I felt all these things once and may be still want to ??? and the person with whom I want to share these is just opposite me, so close that I can even feel his breath on my shoulders but still 'togetherness' seems miles apart ... This is so ironical --- stuck with the person you love the most in the world in such a situation yet can't help but feel sorry about it and not happy ... Is 'happy' such a heavy word or is it for only a few ???

Yuvi,on the other hand , has no clue about ashi's feelings and is getting mad at her ...

Yuvi : '' My time is too precious wacko to just sit down and analyze you "

Ashi broke away from her stream of thoughts ...

Ashi : '' I know that Yuvi ... that your time is very precious to waste by thinking about a loser like me , isn't it ??? ''

Ashi's eyes were welling up ... She really felt like a loser infront of him ... I was always born to be a winner but may be life had some other plans ... why have I lost myself to someone like him ??? Why doesn't he love me anymore ??? Why can't I move on just as he did ???

Yuvi : '' Ashi !! Have you just lost it !!! i can't believe this that just now you called yourself a loser !!!

Ashi was lost in her own world ... Yuvi had to shake her to bring her back to this world ...

Yuvi : '' I am talking to you ... Are you even listening ??? '''

Ashi : '' hmmm ... say "

Yuvi : '' just tell me why are you acting so wierd ??? what has happened ??"

Ashi : '' For you nothing has happened ...''

Yuvi : '' Just tell about yourself "

Ashi : '' why do you want to know Yuvi ?? ''

Yuvi : '' because I care "

That was too much for ashi .. her tears were threatening to come out any moment ...

Ashi : '' I don't think so ... coz if that would have been the case you would not have been kissing someone else at the hotel years back ''

Yuvi shot up his glance at ashi ... He can't make out her face properly in the darkness ... Ashi was thanking the darkness coz of it Yuvi can't see her vulnerable state ...

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