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~When They Collide~ (AY, TR, SV FF)-Prt76Updt. (Page 28)

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Posted: 26 March 2011 at 8:16am | IP Logged
Hey !!! Trisha, Sanjana , Akanksha and Eliza ... All of your updates were really really good ... loved the way each part has been properly framed and each has it's own essence ... I am really late in reading them and commenting but I read each of the parts properly and I really liked them ...
 Akanksha -- I really liked the way you used the lyrics of the song 'Wish i was her ' ... the scenes perfectly matched with the sequence ...
Eliza-- really liked the emotional bits ... you are getting really good in expressing them and I am glad you added a horror twist to read .. I read 'darna mana hai ' but woh complete nahi hua tha shayad ... I hope you guys complete the suspense ... 'SAYA' -- the name itself is a bit creepy .. LOL
loved the ranveer-ashi bonding , kabeer-ashi bonding , kabeer-sany takrana , yuvi-sany relationship , tia-ashi interactions ... loving every bit of this FF ... TongueTongue
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Posted: 26 March 2011 at 9:33am | IP Logged
Originally posted by sanjna4

lizzzzzzzz no need to mention it was amazing
k i live horror tracks withot d sight of blood
and ashi involve in horror track ............ amazing
and d hug between ashi and kabeer was gr8
it was clear dat uv was getting j
and why tia is not supporting herOuch

i think uv k saath rehne ka asar gai
awwwwwwwww i love thakur he is best
and d way he backfires uv
iwas soooo deadWink
now saya..... i love her name
i cant imagine dat we will turn out it as horror track
m really in love wid dis track
now waiting 4 next update
and tell me who is goin next

and lizzzzzzzzzzzzClapHug

love u 4 dis update

sanaaa!!!Cry Cry Cry Cry Cry Cry Cry Cry Cry Cry Cry Cry
i jut wrote u a big fat reply stating some important things and wen to sleep... and now wen i wokeup, reply aaya nahi.. and i forgot wht i wrote..
:(
anyways thanks a lot for all those kind words.. there r a very few readers here, but then i guess this is the only ff tth has gone upto 150 parts and the second book is up!!Embarrassed and reading the comments atleast makes u feel like writing more and more and more and more!!Embarrassed
am loving ashi kabeer as well!! its fun looking at the two of them.. we all so want to have a friend like kabeer, he is kust awesome!!
and yeh, uv is feeling jealous!! poora j!! but the thing is how will he hide it from ashi and all.. sany can read him from top to bottom.. he so cannot lie to her..
and tia will toh never support her.. y wld she?LOL ashi has always been the attentionseeker and so loves to play pranks.. and tia knws tht, so she and uv will join hands in not believing her..LOL
i so love ranveer and ashi aswell!! total bro-sish material!!
:))
i so wldnt mind if soniya married his dad.. par kya karein.. bechaare ke dad toh rahe nahi..
lmao...W*F am i talking boutROFL
u or ashu any1 go next, but talk to each oter b4 u do.. track discuss karke update
:D
anyway.. thanks again!

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Posted: 26 March 2011 at 9:39am | IP Logged
Originally posted by BUBLAI

Hey !!! Trisha, Sanjana , Akanksha and Eliza ... All of your updates were really really good ... loved the way each part has been properly framed and each has it's own essence ... I am really late in reading them and commenting but I read each of the parts properly and I really liked them ...
 Akanksha -- I really liked the way you used the lyrics of the song 'Wish i was her ' ... the scenes perfectly matched with the sequence ...
Eliza-- really liked the emotional bits ... you are getting really good in expressing them and I am glad you added a horror twist to read .. I read 'darna mana hai ' but woh complete nahi hua tha shayad ... I hope you guys complete the suspense ... 'SAYA' -- the name itself is a bit creepy .. LOL
loved the ranveer-ashi bonding , kabeer-ashi bonding , kabeer-sany takrana , yuvi-sany relationship , tia-ashi interactions ... loving every bit of this FF ... TongueTongue
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thanks arpu.. its really nice to knw tht u r still reading, and it feels better to read ur comments.. hope u get free soon to update with us!Embarrassed
am so nt the emotional types,, idk hw u all like my parts there.. coz i think for so long and end up writing bullshit thereLOL
horror twist is for funsake.. hopefully the horror we put up is the extreme scary at timesLOL
darna mana hai komal ne complete nahi kiya, so we asked her if we could get it here, and she was okay with it.. so yeah.. it wnt be the same story.. just the horror track idea and 1-2 scenes maybe..Wink..LOL
i so love the name saya... bilkool bhootni ko suit karta hai.. but we need ideas to get saya off wen they leave ladakh... but thts later.. u think of something let us know!Embarrassed
thanks again arpu!! keep reading!!Embarrassed

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Posted: 26 March 2011 at 10:53am | IP Logged
@eliza : i too hope that i get free soon ... par ho hi nahi paa rahi hoon .Angry.. i think i'll be free after 16th april .. hopefully .. tab tak assignments submission for this term will be over .. kab aayega woh dinDay Dreaming I try my best to read all the updates as soon as possible .. whenever i get tym i am hooked to all the updates ... never ever think that i'll stop reading these updates ... I love it to the core and i dnt give up on things i love doing the most Tongue

extremely scary !!! --- that will be really exciting .. yaa i agree saya suits a bhootni ... i hope there's no one here by the name 'saya'LOL i will think over how to get her off them and let you all know .. abhi dimaag ke ghore ko bhagane ka energy nahi hai mujhme .. I still have to read 'impossible love'' ... woh bhi kab se pending hain .. hopefully i will finish reading it by tomorrow ... Tongue

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Posted: 26 March 2011 at 11:16am | IP Logged
Thanks Appy! Hug I would have replied to your and Liz's comment in detail, but I'm writing..and I guess you'd rather have me write? :P

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Posted: 26 March 2011 at 12:08pm | IP Logged
Part 17

Kabir lied down on the bed and shut his eyes. ''A busy night'that was.''

Yuvi closed the door behind him. Every time he looked at Kabir, the image of Ashi hugging Kabir flashed in front of his mind. He looked away. ''I know.''

Kabir tossed sideways, running a hand through his hair. ''I wonder who Ashi saw in the jungle, you know? Must be a wild animal.'' He was trying really hard to make normal conversation with Yuvi. For Ashi's sake. He didn't want to ruin her vacations.

''I don't think she saw anyone. Drama kar rahi thi .. she's always been like that.'' Yuvi snapped. She had dumped him and moved on with Kabir. He had a right to hate her, he wanted to hate her. He knew he couldn't, but he wanted to try his best.

''She's always been like 'what?'' Kabir turned around to look at him. ''You have always been like that, Yuvi. You never understood her, you never knew what she wanted, you don't know what's happened to her in all these years..'' He trailed off.

''What happened to her?'' He asked. His voice was softer.

Kabir got angry this time. ''Why would you care? It's all your fault, anyway.'' He switched the light off, and grunted as he tried to go to sleep.

Yuvi looked at him and blinked. ''What the hell?'' He muttered. ''How is it my fault? She's the one who broke all contact with me.'' Not being able to handle any more pain, he decided to go for a walk outside. Something to help him take his mind off things.

--

''Ashi.'' Tia tried to catch up with her, but she kept on pacing left and right in the room.

''Ab kya chahiye timbet ko?'' She glared.

''Ashi, Tia ke saath tum aise baat kyon kar rahi ho?''

''Main Tia ke saath aise baat kyon kar rahi hoon?'' She snorted. ''Mujhe toh Tia ke upar flowers roses barsaane chahiye, right Tia?''

''Ew! Roses. How tacky! Carnations, please!'' She grinned.

''Argh!'' Ashi continued walking around.

Sanaya came from the washroom. ''Tia, Ashi, kya hua?''

''Vo.. Sanaya..'' Tia paused. ''Ashi Tia se gussa hai ..kyonki Tia ne uska believe nahi kiya. I mean, she was playing a prank with all of us ki she saw someone in the jungle, but vahaan koi bhi nahi tha!''

''Vahaan koi tha, Tia. I am telling you.. Vahaan ek grave thi, and ek awaaz..''

''I think tumne kuch zyaada pee li hai .. Tia doesn't believe you, Ashi!'' Tia said.

''Hold on, guys. Wait a second.'' Sanaya interrupted. ''Ashi, are you sure ki tumne vahaan kisi ko dekha? Must be a wild animal!''

''Koi bhi wild animal invisible nahi hota, Sanaya! And I saw a grave..and I heard someone saying my name.''

Sanaya bit her lip, while Tia snapped. ''Jhoot! Tum jhoot bol rahi ho, Ashi.''

''You know what, Tia.'' Ashi snapped impatiently. ''Jo believe karna hai karo..I don't care. I HONESTLY don't care!'' After glaring at her, she stomped out of the door, while Tia called out. ''Whatever, punk!''

Sanaya just rolled her eyes.  ''Yuvi ke friends bhi poore masterpiece hain!''

--

''Even Tia doesn't believe me'.So much for being a sister!'' She muttered. ''And vo Yuvi .. psycho ..how dare he call me a dramaqueen!? If only he had been there, not being able to get up, feeling someone wipe your tears..'' She shuddered involuntarily. ''I don't care. I don't need anyone to believe me. Maine jo dekha, vo dekha! And vaise bhi, whatever it was, it isn't coming back. I hope. I mean, vo job hi tha, ya thi, jungle se mere peeche peeche hotel tak nahi aayega ..'' She sighed and tried to convince herself that it was safe. She was roaming around in a corridor inside the hotel.

When, suddenly, a cold gust of air blew up. Ashi froze. She had experienced a similar unpleasant feeling when she was sitting on the rock, the same cold air everywhere around her, closing in on her..until she can't move.

Suddenly, the lights blew off.

Yuvi, on the other side, cursed. ''Ab main bahaar jaane ka raasta kahaan se dhoondun?'' He snapped. ''I think I should go back to my room. It's too late, anyway.''

As soon as he turned around, he heard someone screaming.

Ashi screamed. She had never ever screamed in her life, but right now, she couldn't help it. The same voice whispered her name in her ears; she felt hands stroking her on her face, her arms.

''S.. s.. saya!'' She whispered.

The thing's grip on her wrist got tighter until it hurt. She shook it off and ran blindly. She didn't know where she was going; she just needed to get away from that thing'from Saya. There were corridors everywhere, and she took a right when she bumped into someone.

She suddenly had a feeling of deja vu. Around three hours ago, she had run into Kabir the same way. She immediately threw her hands around him and hid her face in his shoulder. ''Kabir.. '' She whispered. 

Yuvi froze when she hugged him. He hadn't realized how his arms missed Ashi. Before he could help it, he hugged her back. When he heard her say, ''kabir.. '', it was like his whole heart breaking into two all over again.

''Ashi ''' He pushed her away. ''Kya hua?'' He snapped.

She looked at him, and his expressions softened. Her eyes had gone red, and they were beginning to tear up. He wiped one of her tears. ''What happened?'' He asked again, his voice softer this time.

''Yuvi..'' She looked back. The lights had gone on again. ''Koi tha, Yuvi. Vahaan koi tha!''

Yuvi rolled his eyes. ''Tum phir se shuru ho gayi ..Psycho, why are you doing all of this? Can't we enjoy our vacations for once?''

Ashi looked at him, and paused. Suddenly, she pushed him away so hard, he almost lost his balance.  ''I am not lying, Yuvi.'' Her hands were shaking. ''I am NOT lying. Saya..she's here.''

Yuvi blinked. He had never seen Ashi like this.. he couldn't even open his mouth to say something. He always liked to make her angry, but, right now, she didn't look angry..she looked scared, and hurt.

Ashi passed him the dirtiest glare she could manage. She took a deep breath as she walked back to her room. While Yuvi stood there for another 20 minutes, watching Ashi's retreating figure. He didn't believe her, alright. But she looked so .. scared.

He inhaled sharply. It must be another one of her pranks, he told herself. With this, he walked back to his own room.



Edited by _Akanksha_ - 26 March 2011 at 12:15pm

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Posted: 26 March 2011 at 12:08pm | IP Logged
EDITED!!
ashu!!Hugthis ones so meant for u..
loved the lil lil tracks u moved it up to... watching/... reading bout kabeer an yuvi.. i so love the love kabeer has for ashi.. and am so happy he will stand for her like he always did..
yuvi so hates him for this... and he thinks kabeer is the reason y ashi left him...Ouch
kabeer and yuvi are going to be fun t read.. trust me.. they both can kill each other for ashi... and te worst.. ashi loves them both.. kya hoga inkaLOL
sany is also having a gala time watching ashitia fightLOL tia so doent believe ashi.. lol.. she knows wht a nautanki ashi isLOL
and if all this want enuf, saya is torturing ashi.. bolte hai na- museebat aati hai toh chaaron aor se aati haiLOL
tht little ay moment there was adorable too... just tht my smile broke wen yuvi registered tht ashi called out kabeerConfused
poor thing.. he doesnt even knw why he is being given this treatment.. tht to by all o his friends.. thankfully he has sany.. and if wasnt for her, he wld surely have elizaEmbarrassed


Edited by elizaa - 26 March 2011 at 3:11pm

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Posted: 26 March 2011 at 3:27pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by elizaa

EDITED!!
ashu!!Hugthis ones so meant for u..
loved the lil lil tracks u moved it up to... watching/... reading bout kabeer an yuvi.. i so love the love kabeer has for ashi.. and am so happy he will stand for her like he always did..
yuvi so hates him for this... and he thinks kabeer is the reason y ashi left him...Ouch
kabeer and yuvi are going to be fun t read.. trust me.. they both can kill each other for ashi... and te worst.. ashi loves them both.. kya hoga inkaLOL
sany is also having a gala time watching ashitia fightLOL tia so doent believe ashi.. lol.. she knows wht a nautanki ashi isLOL
and if all this want enuf, saya is torturing ashi.. bolte hai na- museebat aati hai toh chaaron aor se aati haiLOL
tht little ay moment there was adorable too... just tht my smile broke wen yuvi registered tht ashi called out kabeerConfused
poor thing.. he doesnt even knw why he is being given this treatment.. tht to by all o his friends.. thankfully he has sany.. and if wasnt for her, he wld surely have elizaEmbarrassed

Ty ty! Hug Kabeer doesn't love Ashi as in the way he loved Ashi when she was dating him before AY got together, but, yeah, he still loves Ashi more as in the best friendly way! Embarrassed Lmao .. I'm trying my best to have Sanu as positive here, and I quite liked the T-S-A scene .. Sanu doesn't believe Ashi, but she won't diss her, either! =)

Tumne hi kaha tha she calls out Kabir! :P LOL .. ''He will surely have Eliza!'' ROFL Keep dreaming, keep keep dreaming, love. :P

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