Originally posted by a little faith
Very interesting concept of bringing SaJan together through an arranged marriage. Quite inspired!
I loved this touching line, so simple yet significant. "being
small town morena's girl she always followed and obeyed by all but he
gave her freedom to follow her heart ,she was always amazed with fact
without saying anything how can he understands what she wants and not
she recalled their first meet for their arrange marriage" I loved how you illuminated a simple truth that we only 'recognize' our companions as they affect our hearts not merely by their presence alone as commonly depicted by TV/Films. @bold, caught my attention. Again beautifully expounded. That subtle act of his that unknowingly and quite unintentionally became the key that gave him access to her soul.
I loved the third paragraph! The manner in which you take a understated moment of courtship and intricately weave a layer through Gunjan's comparison with a neighbouring couple. In this way you highlight a common human trait to compare. We compare to our idealistic ideas, society's conditioning and TV/film stories. Excellently done!
I loved how you effortlessly brought in how love begins to suffuse our realities and our souls by staining everything with the colours of our beloved. Everything reminds her of her beloved because he has come to be everything she loves. I loved this cute instance, beautifully penned "saying
to share him everything which she wants to share to her friends
whenever she will feel to tell anything to her friend he will be always
there for her and he made atmosphere lively saying if u will have any
complain with ur husband ur best friend samrat will be always there for u
he will def scold ur husband mr shergill"
Again I loved how you embroidered upon the common feeling of missing a person through comparison to that anxiety felt upon meeting them for that first time. Just genious! My favourite sentiment of the piece. Very insightful! her heart beat racing more and more now As was mine! You quickened the pace of action of the piece and excellently pulled the reader's heart into her racing heartbeat! Excellent!
back into reality she became restless as if she has lost her one part of life she knew that's the love So true, at the moment we lose something is the moment we understand its worth!
"A single rose can be my garden, a single friend my world" He loves her, that is enough AND it is everything! For which she gives her heart openly, miraculously, and generously. Thus, they 'share' each other.
Just beautifully written and with the most wonderful insights and detailed comparisons. A joy to read! VM.
I loved the way you layered your vm like your os, with that echoing of your introductory message through use of text from it, the lyrics and words that encapsulate the moment! Very well done!
I loved that 'in dreams' texted moment @1:37. Very cute!
Again I loved how you layered upon the whole with that end dialogue of Samrat and Gunjan, illuminating their complimenting bond.
The song was excellently chosen,
aadha ishq, for like SaJan, loves grows and slowly but surely, gradually and eventually, completes itself! You wonderfully selected and choreographed the piece
The fitted the OS perfectly! Very well done!
The scenes augment the tone set by your os, and so just like Samrat and Gunjan, they compliment each other gracefully. The editing was very well done for your first attempt, I was very much impressed!
@2:09, for beshamar raate, but that paas paas aate..ghum ho jaate hai' just excellently chosen and edited, the timing Brilliant!
Very cute use of 'Bekali mein jal ke' @2:22, again the manner you embroider details, weaving the lyrics, message and SaJan together! Just excellent!
I look forward to your own development of this new found means to express yourself.
Very well done, Aashi!