OMG, so was telling myself I need to comment here and tell you how awesome you are, and you're the "shit"<<<in the most f**king best way to come up with such an awesome fan fiction, and with the writing skills you've got babe. And am loving every moment of this fan fiction. Yes including the waiting, the anticipation, the hopes, then acknowledging you updated, feeling my heart beat elevating, my stomach doing cartwheels, and butterlfies are flying around<<<ermm too unrealistic? But it happens, figuratively in my lala land
I love reading what you write. None of your chapter is a filler, the way you give equal ammount of concentration to every character is amazing. I love how they aren't just supporting characters, carving their presences once in a while. I love how each of them has a layer to them, how each of them have their edges, their imperfections, their moments, their roles in the story to give it such an awesome touch. I love both Muskaan and Rahul, reading them is so much fun. They are such full of life, exotic and colourful characters, I love every bit of reading them, and helping Riddhima, the arguments that follow. I love Rahul, Muskaan and Riddhima's moments. They are a treat to read.
Coming to the update, I definitely love the speed of the fiction. It is flowing smoothly. The web of both Armaan and Riddhima's emotions are a complicated yet transparent mess, their feelings, their sorrows, Armaan's constant mode of denial, the fear of letting her hurt him again, the desperation to want to hate her and yet acknowledging the cracks in his armour. His love for her, the little moments of those sweet flashbacks, and the sneak peak into the love that had bounded them together so formidably. I love every bit of it. The imperfections of the character, which I think is really important in any story, because what I believe is, a story, with perfect characters, starts feeling unappealing. Armaan and Riddhima both have their flaws, both seem like idiots at times, both seem like fighting their own wills at times, both are stubborn, both are determined, and LMFAO both are in love. Madly might be the apt word.
The update was the fruit of heaven after such a long hiatus. I think I READ AND REREAD :$ There was such a varying combination of every emotion and hope in it. I loved how it begin. Armaan reminiscing the moments when he and Riddhima were together and the little conflict they had, and the way they made up. It was really touching, deep and cute. And ahan the kiss was HOT "Turns the fan on" ;)
I think Armaan's reactions were penned down really nicely. They were natural. Any guy, especially one endeavouring so hard to hate that particular woman would be pissed at her entering into his house like that. Okay so I might contradict all others and say the hospital scene was EFFING HOT. LOL, yeah am this Armaan fangirl all the way :$ and I am really biased to Mr. HOLLYWOOD BECAUSE HE IS DRIPPING SEXINESS :$ What I personally thought as he said he was furious at her listening him singing, he was angry, because he wanted to protect himself and that one piece that he wanted to keep concealed, from her. And he feared if he gave it back to her, she might crush it again, and he was acting on instincts, because knowing people having a taste of what you want to hide from them the most is anger impressing. And maybe he was taking out all his frustration out there, or maybe trying to find a desperate way, hanging on the weakest thread of impatience demanding answers, not by raised voices but simply gesticulation. And somewhat I think his fury was natural. And at times, men tend to be more angry, they just are a little defaulted in that particular emotion
But it was definitely hurting to see the affect of consequences of his drastic actions on Riddhima. I think she is the one who has to face the brunt always, and has been the one to face such excruciating pain. And I definitely want, when they get back, whenever they do, she makes it as hard for him, as hard it had been for her all this while. They need to have equal scores when they reunite, and atm I think Riddhima has a great difference of it from him, so he might have to work pretty much hard to win her back, maybe another ten ways to win HER back? ;)
OMG RAHUL MY MAN ILY SOOO VERY VERY VERY MUCH :$ I would admit, that Armaan was an asshole over here, and that's not because he did what he did, but when he did it, its because of the impression that caused it. If you love someone you know them, you know them inside and out, and just because someone said it, she vanished you don't start thinking of her as a vamp, or a selfish bitch in a matter of seconds. Yes doubts are there, human minds are mean themselves, wanting explanation for every act, but the heart knows, and the heart feels it. Trust is really an important factor in any relationship, and Armaan should have tried finding her, tried looking into her eyes and knowing she won't have ever stooped so low for just acquiring money for luxuries. He should have known better all that time, but he didn't. And I am dying to know what inner emotion was it that stopped him. Was it fear that it would all be true if he went bersek searching for her, found her and found out that she was not what he had thought of her all his life and then seeing himself break even more. I really would love more and more insight into Armaan's heart and Armaan's brain. AND RAHUL YOU ARE THE BEST BEST FRIEND ANYONE CAN HAVE. The dialogues between both Armaan and Rahul, especially Rahul's dialogues were AMAZING, HAVING SUCH A GREAT IMPACT :$ I LOVE HIM AHRGNDKJGNDTK :$
Okay, I seriously feel it for Riddhima. This girl has been so strong, and so loving, and so amazing all throughout this fiction, that the breaking point was heart wrenching and the built in frustration was shown classically :$ Yes I love reading emotional breakdowns LMFAO, its just the emotions, the aura and the dialogues, and the intensity that comes wrapped with it that leaves me in awe, ofcourse the ones executed perfectly. And this one was. I loved her outburst, she definitely needed one, and her stand for herself. And finally the combination of guilt and Armaan. Both of them love each other madly, and the madder the love, the deeper every emotion is, be it love or hatred or angst. I loved their confrontation and the revolving of emotions around it. That STUPID SON OF A BITCH GUY WHO WAS TRYING TO TAKE HER, and the reason as she said too, being Armaan really did make me whimper with her, and my heart felt for her :( Armaan really does need to make it upto her, and how is going to be interesting to read.
I loved how you brought in Rahul's dialogues again and again in the story, its really an amzing tactic writers use to emphasise on that one particular point and let things revolve around it. And you just did that, creating the impact.
All in all YOU ARE A GENIUS WITH WRITING. I love reading this fiction, its one of the best I have read. Cannot wait for the next update and the story to unfold.
And heyy, you are a human apart from being a writer, and have a life so take all your time woman :D
Edited by BeMySexyBitchxX - 03 December 2012 at 2:09pm