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Jung Ke Dhasthan (An Abay Piya FF) PT80 - Pg 70 (Page 63)

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Posted: 16 April 2012 at 4:14am | IP Logged
hey awesome post krishi.I quite liked it.Plz cont..Embarrassed

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Posted: 16 April 2012 at 11:32am | IP Logged
hei krishi,
weaving plots n secrets koi tum se seekhe..
i really love the way u go on weaving plots..
so now details abt kabir's attack is out..n abhiya have to find out the reason yet..
interesting..rudhra devi aka pia is kul devi for 5 families now..n they r yet to figure out the 5 kids that she saved n the families mentioned by kabir have a connection r not.
the mechanic/prof is her mamma..thats nice..
waiting for more secrets to be solved..
lovel..
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superb update yar
loved ur way of narrating story
so nowabhiya were trying to understand the kabir value yhe kidnapped...
cont soon
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Part 67


"Kyunki jab tum logon ko meri zarurath padi thi main vahan par nahi tha…. Lekin muje judge karne se pehele tume mere pure kahani sunna padega."   


"Rudhra jaise tum jaanti ho main tumhara mama hoon, tumhara ma ka chota bai. Aur main tumhare maa ke saath nahi balki apni ma-aur-baap ke saath bada hua tha, ek nahi sheher main jahaan par hum saab chale gaye the. Vahi par humare pariwar ke dosthi hui thi, aana jaana donon pariwaron ke beech tho kaafi common thi lekin ek dhin jaab main attara saal ka tha mere ma aur baap donon mar gaye the, ek aag main." Piya gasped but before she could say anything Dhananjayan continued, "Main bilkul toot gaya tha, bilkul akela padgaya tha thabi unlogon ne muje apne ghar par leliya. Vahi har maine kaafi bure aatheten seek liye, paison ke peeche baagna, sharab, ladkiya kya kuch nahi kiya maine. Aur thabi vo aayi thi, tumhari ma tumhari liye preperatons karne ke liye, lekin mili thi mujse aur humare beech ek bahoth badi ladayi hui thi. Usne muje pehechaan liya tha chokri lekin maine nahi, bahtoh daanti hi muje aur yeah bhi kaha ke main uss pariwar ke liye ek kalang tha lekin jaathe jaathe ek aur baath bhi kahi thi." 


"Kya kaha unhon ne?" she asked, he sighed and took a sip of his coffee, "Yehi ki main tumhari rakwala banna padega agar unlogon ko kuch hojayega tho tumhare dusra janam thak tumhari puri responsibility meri hojayega. Aur main uspar haaskar palat liya, mere baahon main leetne waali apsara ko… Any ways, it happened, they left leaving only me your only relative to be with you and I did not even know about this for nearly a week. It took Chandh that long to trace me and get things into perspective. Vo logo kabi mere dosth nazi the, vo logo yeah chahthe the ke hummer pariwar ko pressurize karke tume thodna chahathe the. Lekin tumhare baap ka dhemag ko unlogon se bhi kaafi theez tha, he had created such a complex system that it was difficult to work out a loop hole. Any way - jaise mere in aankon se pardha uttgaya main peecha nahi dheka. Apne aap ko ek dark angel banadhiya, by choice and tumhara khal rakne laga. Dheere, dheere meri so called zindagi main fark aane laga. Mere liye sirf ek cheez constant tha, your coffin… appart from that nothing. It was like a long list of ceremonies and even a longer list of people who wanted your help aise hi chal raha tha till I found Sugandh allowing you the oppertunity to be reborn. Lekin phir bhi main tumhare liye ek aacha gaurdian nahi tha. Kai baar mere raatha maine temptations aaye the, I found my self getting distracted by a lot of things but mostly the power attached to it. I began getting women into my life rather other people's wives into my life, I did not give you the proper attention you needed. Kaai baare main gayab hojatha tha aur sirf thaab vapas aaja jub tume kuch nahi sikaya tha yaa jab tumhare liye kaam aaya tha. Most of the time I would just read out what others would have collected for you! In other words main ek terrible guru tha…"


"Oh! So you were basically the image I had of you was compleately - " Piya asked gently and he answered in one single harsh word, "Fictional, at least till I met Soniya -" 


"Umm…. so how did you guys meet?" Abhay asked, voicing the question that had arrived on Piya's mind, "Soniya ke janaam se hi path chala gay tha ke iski destiny main koi tha jiske wajay se uski ma ne usse Rudhra ki maandhir par chodhiya. Jaab main ek kaam ke liye gaya tha thabi hum dhonon mile the aur usse baad main badhal gaya it was instant, quick and smooth. That was when I ended up leaving you again, saalon thak chala gaya tha thabi humari mulakath hui thi Sughand se. Humne Sughand aur Arnab ko observe kiya for nearly years before we chose her. There were a few more candidates but non of them matched up as much as Sugandh and Arnab Dhobrial, you see Piya Arnab was the only member of the five families who matched up with the to what we needed and in nearly all those years."


"Five families?" she asked, "Rember those five kids you saved? Yeah well your theory was right, they made you their kul dhevi but they did more than that… they dedicated them selves and their decendents to your service in a very powerful vow after comming to know that you are suppose to return to the human world. There is something else you need to know Rudhra - you needed the blood of one to help you get alive again. Now what he needs is someone to loose faith in you!"


"KHABIR? They targeted Khabir so that they can brake his faith on me? Uss ladka ko mere upar faith hai thoodne ke liye?" Piya demanded getting up, a pale looking Soniya and Dhananjayan nodded, "Are you sure about this guys?"


"We are more than sure about this, Piya bachpan se lekar aaj thaak har Sunday Khabir ne uss kull dhevi ke maandhir main jaakar dhiya chadatha hai. Even after the incident but he is weeping now when ever he visits!" Soniya added watching as Piya took a deep breath and sighed, "How do we solve this?" 


"Continue what we are doing." Dhananjayan replied, "Misha? Kya vo bhi?" 


"Shayna umm tharasal Misha tumhari behen nahi hai." Soniya informed her, "Misha is the worst kind of dark flame, someone with a lot of power, a power that is almost equal to yours. Agar Rajan Misha par khaabu paa liya tho samajlo Yashwanth zarur wapas aayega, lekin yeah kaam uske liye aasan nahi hai. Even though he can control his Misha for a short period of time there is no way he can make her give up her powers like that. It is important that she does it willingly so we still have a lot of chances, but we need to focus on Khabir first we need him to be normal if we are going to save Misha."          


"Save Khabir jisko almost kuch bhi yaadh nahi hai. The only way we can make things happen, make Piya get closer to him." Abhay replied pulling out the cigaret packet from his pocket handing one to Piya and lighting one him self, "We are going to do that then we might as well tell him who she really is!" 


"Abhay!" Dhananjayan snapped up suddenly leaning forward, "Khabir is one of the decendents, he can be trusted, Piya aaj shaam tumhari kaam ke baadh tume jaana padega, Rudhra ke mandhir main. Khabir vahaan par hoga, show your self, a little indirectly and a little directly bracke through his mind get what we need. A simple plan but bound to work." 


"ARE YOU BLOODY CRAZY!" she demanded to which Soniya snapped at her, "Shayna! Badon se aise baath nahi karthe and no he's not it's a wonderful idea, you can take Khabir under your wing. It would do wonders!" 


Piya thought of it deeply before she finally answered, "Sure today evening, Rudhra ki mandhir main Khabir ka saamna hoga swayam Rudhra dhevi se." 


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thts nice yar...
so now piya show to kabir his dhevi...
abhay is so understanable in this ff..
love dtheir bond abhiya...
cont soon now
misha is evil powers ??
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Posted: 25 April 2012 at 5:53am | IP Logged
Awesome update krish.I love Abhiya's bonding here.Plzz cont..Embarrassed
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wow nice one krishi..
so kabir is going to know the truth abt piya in a way n he is going to be under rudhra's wings..
oh no..misha is dark flame..
hope misha is not used for bringing yashwanth back..
waiting for the next part..


Edited by RB81 - 04 May 2012 at 6:40am
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Part 68


The 'Rudhra mandir' in the evening was a truely beautyful sight set on top of the hill. It was built using the most beautyful white marble set with even really exceptional art work in the toombs in front, the roof though was set with nothing more than simple desighns that reached towards the sky in a triangular desighn. The floor too was set with the beautyful triangular desighns all over the place allowing space to keep lit lamps inside it. The garden around it was set with the most beautyful flowers the people could see, grass hear and there making the entier place strike out making the several steps climb worth the effort. The effort taken by Khabir almost every week dressed in a simple white dodhi and a pale green kurthas with a dark green thread work on the neck. His eyes empty and his face had lost the light that shone across it, ignoring everything else he simply walked towards the main mandir where the moorthy was made out of the most beautyful red marble. A moorthy of a woman standing with her left leg the right foot crossing over in the back, think anklets carved into the very stone, a simple white cloth loosely tagged around her slim waist falling nearly till her ankles. Waist up lead to a beautyful figure with slender hands and soft fingers, one holding a long spear with a chakra hanging from it. On another, holding a golden bowl, a bowl filled with a mixture of nine grains. Between the arms across the shoulder was a white cloth neately folded across her chest was a beautyful white cloth, set in place with the one on her waist using a simple gold ornament like a belt. Khabir stood in front of her with moist eyes and frustation, "Maine khabir apni ma ko nahi dheka, humesha aap ko hi apna maa maan raha tha lekin aap? Aap ne apna beta ko aise hii chod dhiya? Kyun?" 


"Bahoth saare kaaran ho sakte hai, shayadh usne suna nahi, shayadh tumne teek thara puja nahi kiya, shayadh tumne apna thaqleef ko sahi thara dhikaya nahi. Kaai karan ho sakte hai lekin aanth sirf ek, tumhara barosa teek nahi tha lekin jo kuch bhi ho saktha hai - karan." Khabir turned around to see a man dressed in a simple safron dhoti with a cloth covering his shoulder with a simple round sandal paste on his forehead, literally shining against the dark nearly wrinkled skin of the man. A sight that made him instantly bend down and touch his feet, "Pranaam…." 


"Pranaam, agar aap mere saath chalenge tho aap nko apne saare sawalon ka jawab mill jayega." he added, "Aur usse kuch zyadha bhi, chalo mere saath." 


As if in a trance Khabir began walking with him following him to the back of the temple where she stood, the dirl dressed in a beautyful light brown choli with dark thread works all over it. A matching blouse to go along with it adroned by a simple duppata made of dark brown with light brown on either side, the border decorated with heavy thread work once again, her thick hair covered by a gunghat as she stood with her back to him watching the sight of the hills around her, "Kithni kuubsurath hai na Khabir, lekin shayadh kis ko bhi nahi patha hai ke in pahadon main aur unmein basthe hue jungleon main kaai baar yuudh tho chaltha gaya hai. Yudh aachai aur burai ke beech jahaan par burai apni jage se bahar aane ke kosish kartha rehetha hai aur jo aachai ka rakshak hai unse ladthe gaye hai. Kai baar logon ko iss ladayi masoomon ka bali chadadhiya hai burai apni thaqth badane ke liye. Aur humesha burai ke pure jeeth hone se pehele aachai ka rakshak ne usse aakar bachaliya, waise hi tumhara saath bhi hua. Burai ne sirf tume chua tha, isse pehele vo tume pure thara dhood dhe aachai ka raksakon ne aakar tume bachaliya. Vaise hi tumhare saath hua tha, saachai tho yehi hai ke humne tume bacha liya lekin tume shayadh patha nahi hai." 


"Mathlab?" Khabir asked, "Mathlab yahi ke jo tumhare saath hua vo tho kuch bhi nahi tha, agar vo bhi nahi hua tho hume tumthak pahonchna aur tume bachana tho bilkul na mumkin hochuka hotha."


"Muje bachane? Aap kaun hai? Muje Piya ne bathaya ke police ne muje duund kar bachaliya." Finally turning around she faced him with a gentile smile and warm eyes, "Humne jhoot bola Khabir, Rudhra aur uski saathiyon ne tume bachaya."  


"Piya? Tum? Rudhra?" he stammered as the sight in front of him changed instantly as the wind began picking up around them passing through her hair making the gungat blow over, her normally dark eyes turned bright gold and her slightly dark skin aglow in the setting sun as silence set all over the place showing her as she really was, a divinity in human form rather than a human. "Hum vahi Rudhra hai Khabir jiska puuja kiya gaya tha, vahi Rudhra jiski naam ko lekar tumhare purkon ne kaai ladayia lade the. Vahi Rudhra jiska naam ko apnakar tumhare pariwar ne Rajon se business men ban gaye the. Vahi Rudhra jiski naam lekar aaj bhi tumhari pitha haar bussiness deal kartha hai. Vahi Rudhra jise tum apna sabse pehela dosth, apna farishta aur apna maa manthi the." 


Tears filled Khabir's eyes as the truth finally became clear to him and his knees gave away making him kneel down in surender to the great lady, weeping the same manthra over and over again before becoming unconcious, "Dhevi… haay dhevi!" 


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