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"Beautifully Broken" (My 1st FF)

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Posted: 02 March 2011 at 1:38am | IP Logged
Note: I havent read much ffs' so if anybody have any objection please tell me... Forgive me for mistakes...just an attempt from me and i tried my best... :D
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HeartBeautifully BrokenHeart

Heart Story of the lovers who dared to Love but were unable to confess bcause life had stored something else for them...Heart

Characters



HeartCadet Armaan KhanHeart

Extremely Handsome and Smart...Falls In Love every other seconed...Loves his sister more than anything in world...his sister is his life...He is always center of attraction...Confident... 


HeartCadet Sanaya KhanHeart

Little Princess of Armaan...Cellphones and electronics are her weak points...She love kids...when she is happy or sad she will either be with her brother or somewhere around kids


HeartCadet Naina Singh AhluwaliaHeart

She is hard to understand...wont easily make friends but once she make friends she will always stands for them...Her eyes speak more than her words...The only one who knows her well is her brother


HeartCaptain Navin Singh AhluwaliaHeart

Ahh...In love with Ritu(Positive character) but unable to tell her... His duty is his priority...his shares everything with his sister...who is only one to know abt that he loves ritu...Best friend with Rajveer


 


HeartCaptain Rajveer Singh ShekhawatHeart

 

An Extremely striking smart Captain...Best friends with navin...His life is his country and his sister...he will do anything to protect his country and to put a smile on his sister face...Door Door tak janab ka koi love sai rishta nahi...He doesnt believe in love...shares everything with riddhima...she is the only one to understand him more than anyone



HeartCadet Riddhima Singh ShekhawatHeart

(i chose jenny...you can choose whomever u like shilpa/sukirti/jenny)

She has always been special in her own was...ordinary but still extra ordinary...she will never let anybody see her pain...she knows that a tear in her eye will hurt her brother...the only person to know her better is her childhood best friend "Alekh"...she treats him like a brother...



HeartCadet Samrat ShergillHeart

Total flirt..skirt chaser...charming and cute...lively live his life to its fullest...prank star...yaaron ka yaar...breaking rules is his favorite activity..

 

Heart  Cadet Alekh Sharma Heart

Best friend and childhood friend of riddhima treats her as his sister... he has suffered alot...but riddhima has always been there for him..Riddhima and him shares everything with each other


HeartDr. Ritu MishraHeart

Dr at KMA...superly in love with navin...but unable to tell her...rajveer knows abt it..best friends with raj and navin...


They all love their cadets and often save them from punishments... :D





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Edited by FrozenBlossom - 02 March 2011 at 2:19am

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awesome yaar!!!!
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Part 1

6:00 Pm AT KMA

Boy: Ritu mai keh raha hoon ja ky bol do Navin ko waisay bhee kal uski birthday hai'

Ritu: oh please Raj us ko mainay kitny clues diye hai aur woh hai ky koi jawab he nahi dey raha' Kia pata usko mujh sai pyar bhee hai ya Nahi

Rajveer: True'Waisay tum line mar he lo us par iss pehly ky koi aur usko lai jaye'waisay agar Na kar di to koi baat nahi'suna hai log suicide waghaira attempt karty hai'Tum fikar mat karo'Tumhai Hum War par bhaij den gai'kisi ko pata bhee nahi chalay ga'

Ritu: Raj I m so serious' aur tujy mazaq sujh raha hai'Kuch socho na kuch to idea do'Mujy us Navin idiot sai Pyar kyun Ho Gaya

Raj: No No mujy to is Love shove sai door he rakho'aur haan I agree Navin is Idiot'

Navin Entring in Cafe

Navin: Kia kaha tu ny?

Raj: Kuch nahi..bus mai woh keh raha tha kai'aaj kal yahan Bewakoofon par experiments ho rahai hai'so mai soch raha tah tumhai bhee Bhaij Dena Chahia

He winks at Ritu..and she cant stop laughing

Navin: Ruk Tu'mai abhie batata hoon tujy'

He started chasing Raj in Cafe

Suriji: Oye Gadho..Tum Log Captain Ban gaye ho magar Adatein(Habits) nahi badlein'

Ritu: Suriji Gadhoon ko kitna bhee sudharo'magar kab sudharty hai

Raj: owwwww tum ny mujy gadha bulaya'Abhi meri bhari hai'woh Navin mai keh rahata ky Rituuuu'

Bang she stomps on his foot

Raj: oooooooooooooo

Suriji: Oye oye ruko'aaj naye cadets aa rahay hai zara harkatein theek karo

Raj: Ohh noo mujy Ridhzi aur alekh ko lainy jana tha unki train aagayi ho gi

Navin: Oye yeh kon hai

Raj: U idiot my sister and almost like my little brother'

Navin: Oh acha..meri sis ky to strict orders hai us ko pick karnay ki zehmat na karey'

Raj: Stupid hai teri tarhan'JK dude..Gotta Go Bye

Navin: bye bye'chal ja bhee'thori privacy chahia'.ooooopss

Raj surprised and then he understands

Raj: No Way'

Navin kinda embarrassed

Navin: Baad mai aa kar baat kartey hai tu late ho raha hai

He Push him out of cafe

CADETS At 6:00 pm

Armaan and Sanaya

Armaan: Sun am I looking sexy?

Sanaya: Jeezz dude'I have never seen such a vain person in my whole life'

Armaan: Wo to mai hoon'chal chor na yeh bata larkiyan impress ho jayen gee na'

Sanaya: Ridiculous..tumharra network to bus larkiyon ki network ky intezar mai he rehta hai'U r not that smart

Armaan: Not that smart but smart to hoon na

Sanaya: Jesus Save me'Irritation

Armaan: Psycho I love you'my liddo Kiddo

Sanaya: Avoid Yar'

Armaan: Oye Psycho I love you yar seriously' u r the best'haan bus thori psycho..

Sanaya starts smiling

Sanaya: Chal Bus abhie itna Muska Mat Laga'car sy nikal KMA aagaya

Armaan: Cool Sun'THora saans to lainay dai ab to jail mai saans bhee laina naseeb ho ga ky nahi

Sanaya: Chal chal nautanki band kar'

 

Riddhima and Alekh

Alekh: Nervous???

Riddhima: Tumhai Kaisay Pata

Alekh: Ridhzi'Tujy Tujh sai zyada janta hoon

Riddhima: Agree'thora thora nervous

Alekh: Apun Hai Na'Fikar Not

Riddhima: isi Liye to ayi hoon

Alekh: Yeh Lai

Riddhima: Chocolateee'I love you alekh'u r the best best friend ever and best brother

Alekh: Mery Ko Pata hai jab tu nervous hoti hai to tery ko chocolate chahia hota hai

Voice: Kon nervous ho raha hai??

Riddhima: Bhaiyaaaaaa

Rajveer: My princess how you been?

Riddhima: Fine'I missed you

Rajveer: I missed you too

Rajveer: aur chief sahab aap kaisay hai

Alekh: Fine shine bhai how have you been?

Rajveer: Theek thak'fit faaat

Alekh: Bhai aab yeh chintooo bohat tang karti hai

Rajveer: Kyun chintooo jee hamary alekh ko kyun tang kiya

Riddhima making  a face

Riddhima: mainay kab tang kiya hai'aur phir say mujy chintoo mat bulana'I warn you Alekh and Bhaiyaaa

Rajveer: apny captain say log aisay baat kartay hai kiya?

Pretend to be serious' and Alekh Trying not to laugh..

Riddhima: Bhaiyaaaa'mera khyaal hai hum KMA sai Bahar hai

Rajveer: Chalooo come here u both'I missed my group hug..

They have a group hug

Alekh: Chalai'warna late ho jayengai

Rajveer: Agreee Chief lets goo

 

Naina and Samrat

Samrat: Yar mai subah sai bakwas kar raha hoon tum kuch apny baray mai bata he nahi rahi

Naina: Thank God at least tumhai yeh to realize hua ky tum bakwas kar rahai ho

Samrat: Acha Choro na'apny baray mai kuch batao na

Naina: Mai Hitler ki chutti aulad'Logon ko marany ka mujy bohat shoq hai hai'tumhy pehla dose doon'marshal arts bhee kiya hai'

Samrat is surprised

Samrat: No no no thank you'waisay tum ja kahan rahi ho

Naina: Jahanum Chalo gai'.

Samrat: yar tumhari problem kiya hai? Haso jiyo muskurao'live life like there is no 2mrw'

Naina feels bad for her behavior

Naina: Mai Naina Singh Ahluwalia'KMA ja rahi hoon.

Samrat: Wow what a coincidence mai bhee wahi ja raha hoon'

Naina: Niceee

Samrat:Waisay mai Samrat Shegill'u can call me Sam'by the way nice to meet you

Naina: Nice to meet you too'I believe hum KMA pohanch Gaye

Samrat: Oh yeah yeah lets go'.do you need any help?

Naina: No thanks

Samrat: ohh no Problemm

 

 

 

 

 

"Mil Jaye Dost tum sa zindagi mai Agar

Nahi hogi mehsoos mujy kami kisi mor par

Dosti to karli aaj magar

Nibahana a dost isay Zindagi Bhar"

 



Edited by FrozenBlossom - 03 March 2011 at 3:43am

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Part 2

 

 

Armaan and sanaya reach KMA first

Armaan: chalo beta yahan to pohanch gaye…ab agay kahan jaye

Sanaya: Oh God kitna bara idiot bhai diya hai...Notice Board kya exhibition ky liye laga ya hai

Armaan: Smart Kiddo…meray saath reh ky tu bhee smart ho gayi

Sanaya: jeez…u wish..yeh bolo tum meray saath reh kar smart ho gaye...

Armaan: Hai God yahan logon ko Mujh Jaisay Smart Bandy ki Kadar he nahi…is dunya ka kiya hoga

Sanaya: Sachi iss Dunya ka Kiya hoga…Jesus Bless The world…Chal beta notanki band kar aur notice board par..

Armaan: Fine…Boys Dorms: Khan, Armaan…Room F12 with Sharma, Alekh and Shergill, Samrat..Girls Dorms: Khan, Sanaya…Room A9 with Ahluwalia, Naina S. and Shekhawat, Riddhima S….. God save these girls

Sanaya: Agree God save your room mates…wait a second aren't these ridzi and naina? Remember them?

Armaan: OMG Sun r u serious? Look Sharma Alekh…dang y didn't I pay attention before…

Suddenly his face fell..

Sanaya: Naina…Shaurya..

Armaan: No Sanaya

Sanaya Understood

Suriji see them

Suriji: Oye puttar…lag da hai tussi naye cadets ho

Sanaya: hunnnn…oh jee haan…

Suriji: mai Subidar Suriji

Armaan: Hi Ji…Armaan Khan

Sanaya: Hello Ji…Sanaya Khan

Suriji: Acha puttar…tussi jaldi karo..6:30 par Brigadier Sahab ky office mai report karnna hai

He gives them directions to their dorms. They start walking

Armaan: 4 saal baad hum phir milenge

Sanaya: I know…Well ab to Chalo..dair ho jaye gee

Armaan: Bye tak carez I'll see you at 6:30

Sanaya: Chill dude u r talking like I m going on war…

Armaan: tu Kabhie nahi sudhrigi chal ja ab yahan sai

 She Smiles and go to to her room

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Rajveer: tum dono jao change kar lo fresh ho jao..abhi 6:10 pm ho rahai hai matlab tum log ky pas 20 mins hai...aur exactly 6:30 par Brigadier ky office mai pohanch jana...best of luck aur haan straight jao aur Ridzi tum left laina aur chief sahab aap right lai lena and than Your dorms..Jao Bhago ab warna late ho jao gai

Riddhima: Thanks Bhai

Rajveer winks at Alekh

Rajveer: Cadet Riddhima Singh Shekhawat…kon Bhai? This is Captain Rajveer Singh Shekhawat

Riddhima: Bhai…abhie mainay Uniform nahi pehna

Rajveer: No bhai Cadet Shekhawat

Riddhima: Bhaiya…Alekh Dekho na Kaisay Tang kar rahay hai

Alekh: Aray…Apun Kiya keh Sakta hai…Tum Bhai Behan Ka mamla Hai

Riddhima Become Serious and Looks at Alekh

Riddhima: Hamesha Yaaad Rakhna…Meray Do Bhai hai Rajveer aur Alekh…aur agay sai bilkul aisa mat kehna

Rajveer: Theek keh rahi hai yeh…Agar ayenda aisay baat ki to mai tumhai punishment doon ga…miles durvaoon ga who bhee rifle ky saath

Alekh Smiles…ridzi and him both have tears in their eyes... Alekh Hugs both of them

Rajveer: Abhy yar Meri Reputation Ka kyal Rakho... Yeh aansooo mat bhao kisi ny dekh liya to kiya kahengy

Riddhima: Keh Captain Rajveer is the best and these siblings love each other more than anything.

Rajveer: Acha bus bus ab jao pehly he din late nahi hona

 Alekh and Riddhima starts walking

Rajveer: Aur Suno

They turn around

Rajveer: Prove Your Self and that I can Proudly say that My Brother and Sister are soldiers

Riddhima and Alekh: Yes Sir

Rajveer looks at them proudly

Rajveer: Best of Luck

 

Naina and Samrat reaches KMA

Samrat: Finally asylum pohanch gaye

Naina Smiles

Naina: Asylum Kyun?

Samrat: Uggh… Yahan say niklo nahi…cell phone nahi… raat ky 9 baje lights out… permission lai ky bahir jao… No chutii… Oh God how I am gonna Survive

Naina Smiles

Voice: Than How come u r here?

Both of them turned around

Naina: Bhaiya…

She hugs him… Samrat looks at them confusingly

Samrat: Now this is weird surprise…tum ny bataya nahi tumhary bhai yahan hoty hai… you..Naina Singh Ahluwalia than this must bhee Navin Singh Ahluwalia

Navin: Smart… How come you know?

Samrat: The KMA Booklet… which came with my Ban on Freedom

Navin: You must be New Cadet…I see u didn't choose to come here?

Samrat: Yup New Cadet…Samrat Shergill… I chose to come here but not a happy decision…My parents wanted me to be in Business…to which I m allergic so I blackmailed them and they gave me choice of business and army… so the better 1 was army

Navin: That's kinda Weird Cadet… by the way nice to meet you and you must be get going… directions are on notice board look for your room number… and best of luck cadet

Samrat: Thanks Sir…and Yeah Naina…mai tumhari help kar deta but u know I can't go to Girls Dorms..

Naina Smiles

Naina: Thanks Samrat but its ok

Samrat: Bye and see you around

They wave to each other and Samrat starts his journey through KMA

 Navin: Seems Nice Guy

Naina: yeah but talks a lot

Navin: How are you? And how were the days going?

Naina: Same as Always…Life is going same just as came in holidays

Navin: He made you smile…I should thank him

 Naina looks up at him

Navin: Just keep smiling… Naina Just try to move on its been 4 years

Naina: I m gonna try my best

Navin: Good…Now you are at KMA..starting from here its your new journey…try to live it up

Naina Nods

Navin: I wanna see my Super Girl back…I want My Naina Back… I miss You Naina

Naina have tears in her eyes

Navin: I m Sorry I couldn't do anything

Naina: No bhaiya what You did for me… No brother can ever do for it sis…and I am lucky to have brother like you

They Hug each other and wipe tears.

Naina: Bhaiya dekha na rula diya pehly he din

Navin: Sorry my Super Girl…

Naina: Bhai yahan to super girl na bulao

Navin: Acha Cadet Ahluwalia ab jao dair ho jaye gee…and yeah I am proud to say that u r my sis and I know u r gonna be the best soldier that this country could ever produce

Naina Smiles and he gives her the direction to her room and Naina Starts her New Ride of Life

 

 

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nice part
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