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Languished in the Moonlight ! (poem)

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Posted: 23 February 2011 at 6:39am | IP Logged
Hello people, I've posted quite a poems and short stories here..if you know me good if not then you may know me now :) first off...when you read this poem you might have this feeling why have I put this in the Geet forum...well my poem is not exactly on the lines of it, yet somewhere it describes a girl's plight and dreary life coz not every girl is as lucky as Geet and not everyone has Maan in their life !

I really dunno how you guys might react to it, since I've posted it in this forum...yet I hope to get both comments and criticism from you! It was originally written on 28/11/2010

Do leave your views Smile

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Languished in the Moonlight !





The day has ended and the moon is in up-rise,
And the stars shine in the seamless black night,
The light goes down as a smoky aura engulfs,
The starry night is not silent anymore,
As the creatures of dark are on the roar.

The voracious souls now slowly ooze,
Where liquor is dew and vile is not anew,
Girls are slaughtered and fear is in sight,
As innocence is tarnished and lust is in the air,
And green notes no longer curb despair.

The fiesta is now livid and live,
Pleas and cries are spread wide, 
As the poor souls are openly advertised,
The wails and howls are now suppressed,
And the night goes cold and wild.

-Fatima

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P.S:
 
Something that should not be ignored and nor should be called as stupidity on the girls part as some people say, though its a social crime it is unavoidable at times due to circumstances.(Yes, I know people who say its foolishness to go into the flesh trade but no one goes willingly you need to understand that rather than blaming them)

Also posted here :

http://duskndawn-fatima.blogspot.com/2010/11/languished-in-moonlight.html


Edited by -shabnoor- - 24 February 2011 at 12:06am

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Posted: 23 February 2011 at 7:07am | IP Logged
Wow....pretty heavy .... nice one dear..!! Clap Ur concept is indeed commendable..!

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Originally posted by Armu4eva

Wow....pretty heavy .... nice one dear..!! Clap Ur concept is indeed commendable..!
yah ..
very very nice

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its very very nice
just too goodThumbs Up

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Lovely poem Star Star Star Star

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Posted: 23 February 2011 at 11:04am | IP Logged
Hey Fatima!

Lovely poem... very different topic.. Loved that bit... Agree with you about no one going in flesh trade willingly... As usual beautifully penned down. It's a sensitive topic... Not something with any happily ever afters but that's also reality.. You captured its essence well in just a few verses..

Great job.

Take care,
Maham

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Loved it dear...
An unique one and beautifully penned down...

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hiiii
2 good yaar
loved it
awesome concept
thanks 4 sharing
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