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*Dying Embers* Pg 26 Chapter 8 :) (Page 20)

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Posted: 04 April 2011 at 8:47am | IP Logged
aww Vatty why  did you delete it?

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I LOVED LOVED LOVED this update....and the beauty of this update was the whole conversation...It makes me want to think through it all...it is a very bold way of writing...and kudos for this ..I liked it a lot...it made me go back a few pages when i needed to second guess who said what...and as a writer I guess that was the hook for you right? ...will the readers guess who said who...or will they solve it by going back a few pages...

brilliant!!!! 

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Posted: 04 April 2011 at 8:48am | IP Logged
Originally posted by vatsalya

I'll post again manita di...

I always write comment and criticize...so its all in good spirit...i'll work on it again ...it really is okay.


No need to work again sweetie............it is very good.......and almost half is very clear.......
Only a few places need clarification..........which my over - imaginative mind guessed who is speaking what?.............just a few places, write - Shaan and Khanak.......that's it !!!


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Posted: 04 April 2011 at 8:50am | IP Logged
Originally posted by saaaz

I LOVED LOVED LOVED this update....and the beauty of this update was the whole conversation...It makes me want to think through it all...it is a very bold way of writing...and kudos for this ..I liked it a lot...it made me go back a few pages when i needed to second guess who said what...and as a writer I guess that was the hook for you right? ...will the readers guess who said who...or will they solve it by going back a few pages...

brilliant!!!! 


Exactly !!!.................me with saaaz..........!!!

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Posted: 04 April 2011 at 8:50am | IP Logged
WHAT the hell happened????

I read it...opened my reply box...went to do some work...put down my comment on reply box and then hit post...and now I see the update is  gone...

What the???

okay let me read everyone;s comments...

*edited*..... Aww vattie dearest.....can I say something??? ..... you are a fabulous writer....and while your writing like all of our's shall have mixed opinions and you should take all of them into consideration...the space to take comments that you believe can help your story should be dealt with in the next update.....its like any writer...reviews help the next creation ....


Edited by saaaz - 04 April 2011 at 8:54am

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Posted: 04 April 2011 at 8:57am | IP Logged
Hey VattyHug 
awesome update............................loved it......................though its emotional...................

shan & khanak .........both slipped their hands for support......................amazing.............................

their thoughts of being together but felt distant.....................

please reveal fast the suspense....................why  they r  separated...............what happened when they were together.................

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Posted: 04 April 2011 at 8:58am | IP Logged
Why did you scrap it rey ???????...............

Believe me...................it was good................and as saaaz says let it form a backbone of a further update...............

I have read several authors, whose even in first 35 pages, readers keep getting confused.......but we go on reading and everything gets clearer in the process......................

do not let the reviews affect you creatively..........
we all love what you write !!!!

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Posted: 04 April 2011 at 9:01am | IP Logged
why did u scrap it...............i just read it & was waiting 4 it...................i loved it..............& i commented on it when saw it again its gone..............
.ps...put it again...................i loved it........................write next part..........................

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