OMG Vattie!
That was so awesome!!!
Seriously you are a great writer!
Love all the characterization you have given, subtly slipping in tid-bits of info during the flow of the story.I like getting to know your ShaNak this way!
Okay so when I read the part where Shayeri reminded Shaan of Khanak I thought that maybe Shayeri is related to them somehow...
Waise if you were planning to make it a love triangle of any sort abhi ke abhi abandon ker do idea!
Love their meeting!How they reacted with abandon initially, back to where they had left but how they gradually realized and grew conscious.VERY realistic!
Love the last line-'the dying embers had been rekindled!'
For someone so young, you write really well.
Chalo now start working on the next update!