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-Shanak SS- Banwra Mann Final Pg 16 (Page 16)

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Posted: 25 January 2011 at 8:25pm | IP Logged
Khusboo looks on admirably at Khanak and wonders how much luck is Akshay having with Shaan
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PART  V- concluding part
 
Khusboo suddenly hears her phone buzz, looks at Khanak, thanks her for the locket thing,, and leaves Khanak with her hands on the blue petti..
 
Khanak with a small smile, shakes her head and turns back to what she was doing, she opens the petti only to find the blue shiny kurta with silver sleeves staring back at her. She has a small smile on her face and removes it from the petti, and feels it and closes her eyes,,, "lag raha hoon na main handsome" 'and with eyes closed she whispers "haan bahut, itne ki mai aur kissi ko'..but her thoughts are interrupted with heavy steps into the room'"Shaantanu'"???!!!
 
Shaan enters the room like a tornado,,, completely ignoring Khanak and marches to the cupboard opens the top most shelf and removes a suitcase, flings it open on the bed next to her petti ,,, and starts throwing folded shirts into it.
 
Khanak: Shaantanu, yeh kya kar rahe hai aap?
Shaan: Kyun tumne kya socha? Dhulwaadi ke liye, main kya apni cheezein tumhari iss petti mein daloonga, please haan Khanak,, how tacky,,abhi hatto,, mujhe apni cheezen pack karne do!
Khanak: Kya?? Aap Dhulwaadi kaise jaa sakte hain??
Shaan: Oh hello madam, ,,, Tumhari Dhulwaadi jaane ke liye koyi visa nahin lagta,,, vahan pe koyi bhi kabhi bhi jaa sakta hai..
Khanak: Visa? KYA??? '(shaking her head) woh sab chodiye'Shaantanu lekin aap dhulwaadi kyun jayenge??/
Shaan: Kyun ka matlab?? Kyun Nahin??? Arrey wah,,, main kyun nahin jaa sakta?? Tumhari Bai ne kahaan hai kya, ki apni pati ko dhulwaadi mat leke aana
Khanak: Dekhiye, mere khaandaan pe mat jaayiye'
(Both pointing at each other and then exasperated'and begin again animatedly)
Shaan: By the way, tum mujhe ek baat batao Khanak,,,vahan dhulwaadi mein aisa kya hai jiske liye tum baat baat pe apni petti utha leti ho'
Khanak: Dekhiye Shaantanu, is baar tho Aada ke kehne pe'
Shaan: AAAADaaa!!!!! Kya tumhare Aada jaante hain ki tum nahin chahti ki main aaoon,,, bataoon tumhare aada ko?
Khanak: Excoos me,,, maine kab kahan ki aapko nahin aane ke liye, jaane ke liye'main sirf yeh pooch rahee hoon ki aap aake karenge kya?Matlab'.
Shaan: Matlab tumhein darr hai ki kahin main pichli baar ki tarah kuch ulta sulta na kar doon?? Hai na??
 
The sudden silence in the room is broken with the Khanak's soft tears falling on the floor, to which Shaan immendiately hugs her,,, not looking at her makes it a little easier for him to say,,,,
Shaan: Main dhulwaadi isiliye aana chahta hoon taaki main  '.
Khanak: (now searching his eyes and holding his chest): Taaki aap?
Shaan: (holding her by the shoulders): Taaki main woh saari yaadein mita doon jisse tumhe takleef ho'
Khanak: Lekin uss takleef ke wajah se hi tho hum mile aur ek hue. Aur yeh sachaai uss takleef se itni badi aur khubsoorat hai ke jabhi main aankhen band karti hoon,,, to sirf aapko paati hoon.
Shaan: (holding her hands close to him): Sach? Tho jab tumne Sunny ko dekha, tumhe suraj ki yaad nahin aayi?
Khanak: (resting her head on this chest): Haan aayi aur darr bhi lagaa tha,,, ki aakhir suraj ka humshakal hamare zindagi mein aise achanak aane ka kya matlab ho sakta hai? Mujhe Suraj ki bahut yaad aayi  lekin sirf ek ache sapne ki tarah,, woh sapna jo mera beeta hua kal hai,,,aur mere aaj mein ek yaad banke reh gayee hai ,,,
Shaan: (holding her tighter) : Lekin iss Yaad ka zimmedaar tho main hoon'
Khanak: Nahin Shaantanu,,,sachai yeh hai woh ek Hadsa tha,,, aisa hadsa jiske zimmedar kismet thi ,,wohi kismet jo humein saath laayi,,, (with a small smile),,,aur waise bhi haadse ka dandh tho aapko,,,

Shaan: (letting her go): Woh baat tho hai,,,dandh tho main bhugat raha hoon,,,
Khanak: (pointing finger at him): Aur yeh dand aapko zindagi bhar bhugatna padega,,,samjhe!!!
Shaan: Arrey wah!! Tumhare liye teen patti aur mere liye sirf ek,,,,not good Khanak, not good!!!
Khanak: Teen? Teen pati kahan?
Shaan: (grinning): Tum apni patiyon ko bahut jaldi bhool jaati ho yaar!!! Kyun woh Mr. Talwaar (enacts a sword fight) ko bhool gayee kya??
Khanak:  Kya??!!! (grinning with a small laugh back): Aapko pata tha??
Shaan: Arrey main wohi to tha,,,agar mujhe tab pata chalta (pulling her by the waist towards him) ki aakhir mein tum merehi paas aane waali ho,,, tho main tabhi ka tabhi uss talwaar ko goli se udda deta,,
Khanak: (fisting his chest and sassily smiling back): Chodiye!! Aapki tho tab girlphrand hua karti thi,,,aap tho mere patiyon ko nipat lete,,,main aapki girlphrand ka kya kartee??
Shaan: (holding her very close and feeling his hand over cheek to her ear and whispering near her lips): Waise tho tum jabhi Natashajee Natashajee kehtee,,,Natasha ka tho mujhe pata nahin,,,,lekin mera khoon tumhare liye bahut khauolta tha'.
Khanak: Dhaath!!!!!!!
 
The clanking sound of the petti falling on the floor startles Khusboo and looking at Akshay casually lie down in their bedroom says..
 
Boo:  I don't know,,, yeh dono theek tho hai??
Akshay: I am sure they are okay,,,now come here!!
Boo: Aakhir Shaan ne tumse kahaa kya?
Akshay: Yehi ki woh Dhulwaadi jaayega Khanak ke saath,,,taaki ab se jabhi Khanak Dhulwaadi ke baare mei soche,,Shaan uske man mein aaye,,,,dono ek saath nayee yaadein bana sake,,,and all that!!
Boo: How cute!! (and rests her head on Akki's chest)

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Thank you note on Pg 15 for part IV

Review Mandatory...



Edited by saaaz - 25 January 2011 at 9:19pm

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Posted: 25 January 2011 at 8:48pm | IP Logged
loved it,  keep it up saaz,  Really glad you wrote this story it was fabulous!Big smile

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Posted: 25 January 2011 at 8:52pm | IP Logged
saaz ClapClapClap...awesome....mindblowing .....aww it was final part Cry.....wish u write something long .....ur just superb with words yaar......it was cute n adorable part Clap

cant say continue soon ...can i ?

cheers

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Posted: 25 January 2011 at 9:18pm | IP Logged
SaazHug just mindblowing.. the dialogues have such an impactHeart loveeeed it.... and ur a brilliant story tellerClap... I sooo wish u were the RBO writerHug

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Posted: 25 January 2011 at 9:30pm | IP Logged
Saaz awsome yaar....first i have to say petti was rocking....LOL and then loved nok-jhok-emotional-loving shanak......akki-boo were so sweet yaar.......loved it......all the lines were fantastic.........Smile
miss these dialogues in RBO yaar-Dekhiye, mere khaandaan pe mat jaayiye and Dhaath!!!!!!! and girlphrand...loved the way u made use of it....
saaz ur amazing writer grt job dear.....ClapClapClap
keep rocking..........Big smile
 

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Posted: 25 January 2011 at 9:43pm | IP Logged

hi saaz

loved the update awesome shanak part n liked boo akki short convo...........Big smile
hey u should have continued.............becoz i want more of it...........
n thanks 4 that peti of khanak......... loved itLOL
thanks 4 the PM

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Posted: 25 January 2011 at 9:45pm | IP Logged
Awesome Saaz! 
Even I got closure=D
I shall imagine that this is what actually happened after Sunny came and not what they showed us.
You do know how to bring back the memories of the Golden days!

LOVED the sword part. Cute!
And loved the reason Shaan gave to Akshay for going to Dhulwadi.



Edited by -SYS- - 26 January 2011 at 1:36am

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Posted: 25 January 2011 at 9:53pm | IP Logged
loved it.......awesome dialoges....goradias ki bhi chutti ho jaye aise......plz zzz  saaz continue karo na......

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