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Posted: 15 January 2011 at 12:53pm | IP Logged

hey ppl... me back very JALDI.... i m SO SORRYConfused... basically its an earlier one.... and now i dunt want to DELAY it.... i knew sum readers really HECTICDead to read that.... but i think its my RESPOSIBILITY Winkas being DAYA Sir fan to spread this ABSOLUTE TRUTH that HE HAS AN AWESOME SMILEBig smile...

sum did not like the CAPITILIZING... but readers its a prolong process... cz i m so HABITUAL of it.... but i'l try to MINIMIZE it in FUTURE....

sum thought that DAYA-ABHI Sir's are so MATURE and may be they felt UNCOMFORTABLE in that situation.... but wat i do reader.... my AGE and my RELATION with my BUDDIES really pressed my BUTTONS.....Embarrassed

if U read it aur LIKE it... i m THANKFUL.... if NOT... i m XTRA THANKFULWink

any RESEMBLANCE with FIRE WORKS is purely coincidental... so plz dunt DETATCH my SMALL HEAD....LOL

always welcome YOUR'S precious FEED BACK... CRITICISM will entertain on prior basis...

plz reader if anyone SUGGEST any APPROPERIATE TITLE for this story...

OR

if anyone intentions HURTED delibrately/undelibrately by any of my WORD, SENTENCES, SITUATION, CHARACTER... anything.... I M XTREMELY SORRY.... Confused

FORGIVE ME!Ouch



A CIRCULAR BOND

 After entering at bearue... ABHIJEET feeling really happy...

ABHIJEET: arry DR TAREEKA... aap subah subah yahan kesay??

DR.SALUNKHY: yaar idhar bhi dekh lo... DR.TAREEKA kay sath….. DR.SALUNKHY bhi hay...

ABHIJEET: ohhh acha... main nay aap ko dekha nahi tha... DR sahab...

DAYA(come near to ABHIJEET): hmmmmm... wesay bhi TAREEKA ko dekh ker tumhein mushkil say hee                   koi nazar aata hay...

ABHIJEET: ahaha...

ABHIJEET: magar aap log!!!

Suddenly ACP entered and interrupts ABHIJEET with

ACP: ABHIJEET aur DAYA meray cabin mein aao...

DUO's see each other and move towards the cabin...

ACP: betho...

both sat with confusion...

ACP placed a PICTURE of a CUTE GIRL, turned his back behind them and ask with smile...

ACP: haan tou kaun SHADI karay ga is larki say???

both shocked... and undelibrately stand up... while everyone also in shock state...

ACP(again): haan ABHIJEET... tum bolo...

ABHIJEET: Sir... wo... wo... (he saw TAREEKA) sorry Sir...

ACP: acha... aur DAYA... tum?? kiya tum bhi mujhay ABHIJEET ki tarah mayous ker do gay???

DAYA is quite and after few minutes...

DAYA: main tayyar hun Sir...

ABHIJEET(come near): yaar kiya ker raha hy... pata nahi kiya chakker hay... kaun hay???

DAYA(in low tone): dekha jayey ga.... boss..

ACP: is ka naam VRUSHALI hay.... DANCER hay... buhat achi hay... main nay abhi isay bulwaya hay... DAYA tum mil lo... aur baaqi tum log (he pointed to other members) shadi ki  tayyari shroo ker  do...

DR.SALUNKHY: aur agar wo larki DAYA ko pasand nahi aayii tou??!!

ACP: tou kiya... shadi tou phir bhi karni hee hay... hain na DAYA!!

DAYA: Sir.......

After that a GIRL with green color kurta shalwar entered inside the bearue...

GIRL: Good Morning... uncle

ACP: Morning...

GIRL: tou mil gaya aap ko mera DULHA???

ACP(with smile): haan....(he pointed towards DAYA)... ye raha...

the GIRL was quite impressed after seeing DAYA... he came near to him...

GIRL: hi... i m VRUSHALI...

DAYA: nice to meet you...

VRUSHALI: i m a professional dancer... wesay tou meray DULHA ko bhi dance aana chahyey (she turned toward ACP) kyun uncle??? kiya in ko dance aata hay...

DAYA looks so confuse while everyone was smiling...

ABHIJEET: aap sikha dijyeyga... aakhir ko aap dancer jo hain...

VRUSHALI: hmmmm.... kuch aur janna hay aap ko meray baaray mein..

DAYA move his head in NO.... so the GIRL leave...

ACP: kiya hua DAYA... larki pasand nahi aayii kiya...

DAYA: nahi Sir... aisi tou koi baat nahi...

ACP: arry tou apni shakal per ye barah kyun bajayey huay hain!!!

DAYA(in low voice): nahi Sir... wo..

ACP(with smile): koi acha suite hay tumharay pass!!! ya isi jeans aur shirt mein shadi karo gay???

DAYA: Sir... aap sach mein meri shadi karwa rahay hain??

ACP: lo pichli baar... magni bhi apni pasand say ki... aur shadi bhi... meri  marzi kay khilaaf... aur jub main apni pasand say karwa raha hun tou!!!

ACP(watch him carefully):tum chaho tou inkaar ker do...

DAYA: nahi Sir...

ACP: ABHIJEET tum aur TAREEKA DAYA ki shadi kay liyey kuch shopping ker lo... aur DAYA tum apny ghar say jo bhi samaan lena hay lay lo.. tum ko shadi kay baad VRUSHALI kay mansion mein rehna paray ga...

ABHIJEET: hain....

DAYA: magar Sir...

ACP: jaldi karo...

All people leave with their tasks... DAYA move with ABHIJEET to his house... he is bit irritative and

quite.. they reached at home and now start packing...

ABHIJEET: DAYA... kya hua??? itnay khamosh kyun ho??

DAYA: itna gussa aa raha hay mujhay...

ABHIJEET(with naughty tone): lo logun ko shadi na honay per gussa aata hay... tumhein shadi honay per aa raha hay... wah wah...

DAYA(in aggression): lay kay mujhay GHAR JAWAHI bana diya...

ABHIJEET: hahahah...

DAYA look him angerly...

ABHIJEET(in laugh): arry mujhay kyun itni ZALIM nazrun say dekh rahay ho... wesay DAYA idea bura nahi hay... GHAR JAWAHI ka... hahaa

DAYA(immitate him in anger): idea bura nahi hay... tou tum ker lo....

ABHIJEET(in smile): arry... main... mera dil jo meray ikhtiyaar mein nahi hay...

DAYA: tou keh kyun nahi detay... DARPOK AASHIQ...

ABHIJEET(in shock tone): kiya... main DARPOK hun...

DAYA(bit smile): aur AASHIQ bhi......

ABHIJEET: acha... aur khud jo itna darr rahay ho...

DAYA: main darr thori raha hun... bus...

DAYA: ABHI... mujhay kuch samajh nahi aa raha...

ABHIJEET: kiya!!

DAYA: ye ACP Sir ko aakhir hua kiya hay!!

ABHIJEET: bhae main tou buhat dino say soch raha tha kay tumhari shadi karwa dun... acha hua jo ACP sahab ko khayal aa gaya....

DAYA: malum nahi... magar!!!

ABHIJEET(with smile): arry kya hay paglay... teri shadi hay na...

DAYA rushed to grab him but he slipped from his approach and jus move outside...

At night

ABHIJEET call to DAYA....   

ABHIJEET: DAYA tumhara favourite color kaun sa hay??

DAYA: kyun!!!

ABHIJEET: main aur TAREEKA tumhari shadi kay liyey shopping ker rahay hain...

DAYA(in anger): ABHI... main na!!!

ABHIJEET laugh and drop the call....

On next day... ACP, ABHIJEET and DAYA from bearue went on VRUSHALI's mansion...

VRUSHALI was talking with some media people... after seeing these people... she step ahead...

VRUSHALI: arry... aap log....(she grab DAYA's hand in her hand)...in say milyey... he is my TO BE HUSBAND...

DAYA was quite embarass... while smiles comes on everyones face.... buzzing around there... DAYA try to remove his hand... and silently move near to ABHIJEET...

MEDIA PPL: arry... VRUSHALI jee... aap nay mangni bhi ker li.... wesay kiya aap kay honay waly HUSBAND bhi DANCER hain?? aur aap log shadi kub ker rahay hain??

VRUSHALI: jald hee shadi hay... aur do log agar aik he proffession kay hun tou maza nahi aata...

MEDIA PPL: wesay karaty kiya hain... aap kay honay waly HUSBAND??

ABHIJEET(whisper to DAYA): GHAR JAWAHI bannay ki practice....

VRUSHALI: BUSINESSMAN hain... acha bus... no more questions... thank you...

 

 

She takes them all inside her mansion...

VRUSHALI: uncle... thanx kay aap log aa gayey... wesay aap kay ye officer kuch pareshan lug rahay hain... kiya ye is shadi say khush nahi hain???

ABHIJEET: nahi wo nayi nayi shadi hay na... is liyey...

VRUSHALI: jee... kiya matlub...

ACP: VRUSHALI matlub watlub baad mein samjhna... pehlay ye batao shadi kub hay???

VRUSHALI: aik haftay baad!!!

ACP: good... acha tum apnay saary naukarun say DAYA ko milwa do..

ABHIJEET: DAYA... aisay kyun behave ker rahay ho... tum VRUSHALI kay honay walay HUSBAND  ho... sub samajh jayein gay... tum is shadi say khush nahi ho... ACP sahab ki naak nahi katwa dena...

ACP: acha DAYA... hum log ab chaltay hain... tayyar rehna...

he rushed behind the team....

DAYA: Sir... wo...

ACP: haan DAYA???

DAYA: Sir wo shadi tou aik haftay baad hogi na... tou main aik haftay baad aa jaonga...

ACP(in anger): DAYA... main nay pehlay bhi tum say poocha tha kay tum tayyar ho tou  shadi karo... ab is waqt... tum meri izzat ka halwa bana do gy...

DAYA: nahi Sir... aap pareshan na hun... theek hay...

ABHIJEET(come near to DAYA): darr lug raha hay kiya??

DAYA is quite very confuse... he did not understand ACP as well ABHIJEET attitude.. he feels something wrong... but WHAT... still unanswerable... after team left... VRUSHALI met him with the servents and also show him his bedroom and leave him there.... DAYA is thinking...

DAYA(with himself): hmmmm... tou DAYA... boss... aish karna hay... mansion tou buhat hee khoobsurat hay... magar kuch tou chakker hay... per apnay ko kiya... khao.... piyo... bearue  say chutti... no khoon... no murday... no criminals... bus sirf SHADI...  hmmm... jo hoga dekha jayey ga...

at that moment... a servent knock his door to call him for supper.... at the table... VRUSHALI introduced him with some of the people...

VRUSHALI: DAYA... ye saary log tum say milnay ko buhat excited thay... darasal main nay tumhara zikar hee itna kiya hay..

DAYA(with smile): VRUSHALI tum bhi na..... wesay ye hain kaun??

VRUSHALI: ye (start from her right side) JAI hay.. mera personal secretry kum PA... aur is kay next hay ROBIN... meri dance trainer aur is kay next YANA hay... meri outfit designer... aur is kay next KRISHNA... mera MANAGER... meray shows wagairah ki saari deal yehi karta hay...

DAYA: hmmm... good...

JAI: wesay kya aap nay VRUSHALI ka koi show dekha hay???

DAYA(bit anger): first call her VRUSHALI MAA'M... main aainda kisi kay munh say sirf VRUSHALI na sunun...

KRISHNA: Sir aainda aap ko shikayet nahi hogi...

DAYA(again): aur haan dekhein hain... main nay kuch shows... kyun!!

ROBIN: kesa lagta hay aap ko in ka dance??

DAYA: theek thaak...

DAYA: ok... VRUSHALI... main ab chalta hun...

VRUSHALI standup with DAYA and leave him in his room... in that passage...

DAYA: sorry VRUSHALI JEE mujay wahan aap ko TUM keh kay baat karni pari... i hope u dont mind... magar ab jub meri aur aap ki SHADI honay wali hay tou aisa tou hoga hee... right...

VRUSHALI(quite confuse): nahi koi baat nahi.... main chalti hun...

DAYA enter in his room and start laughing.... suddenly his phone ringing... he pick up the call

DAYA(with laugh): hi ABHI....

ABHIJEET: kiya baat hay... baray khush lag rahay ho...

DAYA: haan boss... SHADI jo ho rahi hay meri... khush na hun kya!!!

ABHIJEET(in curious): acha subah tou bara darr rahay thay... ab kya hua???

DAYA: bus boss... main nay socha karni tou hay na sHADI... tou darna kiya!!

ABHIJEET: hmmmmm.....

DAYA: aik minute... shayed koi meray room kay lock say cheer chaar ker raha hay...

ABHIJEET was on hold... DAYA came near to see the lock but it was quite OK... he opened the door and see YANA and ROBIN to move ahead... he close his room door silently... and  again back on call...

DAYA: haan... nahi koi nahi tha...

ABHIJEET: DAYA... sawadhaan rehna...

DAYA: boss... baccha itna hoshyaar tou hay...

ABHIJEET: is liyey tou bacchy ko bheja hay...

DAYA(interrupts): SHADI karnay...

ABHIJEET: ok... take care... tayyar rehna...

DAYA: boss... really miss you...

ABHIJEET: hain!!

DAYA(with laugh): TAREEKA ki taraf say keh raha hun... hahah

ABHIJEET: hahah... contact mein rehna... bye...

in the night... he was quite attentive... check his room lock but nothing happened...

On next morning.... VRUSHALI come to meet ACP and tell somthing strange...

VRUSHALI: uncle... wo jo aap ka officer hay na... wo tou...

ACP: wo tou... kiya!!!

VRUSHALI: wo tou samajh raha hay kay sach mein us ki SHADI mujh say ho rahi hay...

ABHIJEET: hain... kuch kaha hay us nay aap say???

VRUSHALI: uncle wo mujh per aur meray logun per ruub jama raha hay... kal keh  raha tha... kay sub mujhay VRUSHALI MAA'M bolein... bataein!!!

ACP(with smile): ok hum usay samjha dein gay... theek hay...

VRUSHALI: zarur samjha dijyeyga...

after an hour... DAYA came to meet his fellows...

DAYA: hello guys!!!

ABHIJEET: abay kiya ker raha hay???

DAYA: kyun... kiya kya main nay??

ABHIJEET(wink to FREDDIE): kyun daant rahay ho... humarai honay wali BHABI ko??/ haan!!

DAYA(with smile): BHABI... arry husband hun us ka... daantna tou paray ga...

ABHIJEET(interrupts): honay walay HUSBAND...

DAYA remember something and start laughing....

DAYA(with laugh): arry... boss... agar kal tum us larki kay chahray ka rang dekh leetay tou hans hans ker tumharay pait mein dard ho jaata... hahahha...

ABHIJEET: tum na.... DAYA...

DAYA: main kiya.... koi kuch batanay ko tayyar hee nahi... na tum... na ACP Sir...

ACP: haan tou tum nay socha thora dara dun usay...

DAYA: nahi Sir... wo bus...

ACP: acha... bus tayyar rehna... aur bacchi per ruub jamany ki zarurat nahi...

DAYA(whisper to ABHIJEET): boss... main tou romance karnay ki koshish ker raha tha....

ABHIJEET(with smile): bacchi say.... hmmmmmmm....

On next morning... he got up early... and wanted to do some push ups... he heared something rushed towards that voice... but lost his way because he did not familier with the mansion... he was lost... try to find every possible way... but not found his room... after 2 hours a servent helped him and he get his room... it was very tough excersize for today so need a healthy breakfast... he sat on table... but noone is there... he called servent and ordered him to call everyone in 10 minutes on the table... after 10 minutes... everyone is there with blue mood... DAYA was quite amazed to see JAI and KRISHNA as well...

DAYA(pointed to them): VRUSHALI... ye log yahein rehtay hain kya??

VRUSHALI: haan... kyun!!

DAYA: nahi kuch nahi... aur haan kal say breakfast isi time per sub karein gay... mujhay indiciplined  log bilkul pasand nahi..

everyone watching at VRUSHALI...

VRUSHALI: magar DAYA... hum log raat ko late night sooty hain tou subah itni jaldi uthna mushkil lagta hay...

DAYA(in rash voice): kal say subah uthna hay... bus... no more argument...   aur haan abhi breakfast  kay baad tum mujhay mansion ki sair karwao gi... jaldi karo...

after breakfast... VRUSHALI familerize DAYA with the mansion.... she looks quite and confuse...

DAYA: kitnay raastay hain bahar jaanay kay yahan say??

VRUSHALI: paanch (5)....

DAYA: acha ye mansion kya tumhara hay... matlub tumhein hee mila hay???

VRUSHALI: haan... ye humari pustaini jaidad hay, magar main abhi kuch dino pehlay hee  shift hui hun...

DAYA: hmmmm...

DAYA: tum say pehlay yahan kaun rehta tha...

VRUSHALI: yahan bus caretaker hota tha... aata jaat rehta tha... GUNPUT...

DAYA: aur ab wo kahan hay???

VRUSHALI: wo ab PUNE mein rehta hay....

DAYA watch every point carefully... at last he said...

DAYA: haan main aik baat tou kehna hee bhool gaya...

VRUSHALI: kiya??

DAYA: in logun ko jaldi yahan say bhijwao... main shadi kay baad yahan kisi ka rehna pasand nahi karunga....

VRUSHALI was stunned... she again call to ACP and tell him about DAYA... this time ACP told ABHIJEET to do something... ABHIJEET call to DAYA...

ABHIJEET: yaar kyun pareshan ker raha hy...

DAYA: kis ko??? boss...

ABHIJEET: VRUSHALI ko....

DAYA(with laugh): hahaha... bacchi ko....

ABHIJEET: aaj bhi us nay shikayet ki hay teri ACP sahab say...

DAYA(with smile): boss... jub wo mujh say darti hay na... tou us ki shakal... hahahah..  itna maza aata hay...

ABHIJEET: hmmm... ye maza kahein saza na ban jayey....

DAYA: matlab...

ABHIJEET: wo suna nahi hay tum nay SHADI BAN GAYII UMERQAID KI SAZA.... kahein tumhein us say sach much ka pyaar ho gaya  tou....

DAYA: hahaha.... nahi boss... main tum ko kabhi akela nahi chorun ga....

ABHIJEET: DAYA... jhanper khayey ga mujh say....

DAYA(in naughty tone): phone say nikal ker jhanper maarna tou mushkil hay... boss... wesay do din ho gayey... kuch hua nahi abhi tak...

ABHIJEET(with smile): buhat jaldi hay... SHADI ki... hain... abhi paanch(5) din baqi hain...

DAYA: hmmm... tou main paanch(5) din mazeed ACP Sir ki bacchi ko dara sakta hun... good...

ABHIJEET(warn him): DAYA... ab daant khayey ga na... tou main nahi bachaoun ga...

DAYA: nahi boss... aisa mut karna... warna...

ABHIJEET: warna...

DAYA: abhi buhat FORMS baaqi hain.... dance kay..

ABHIJEET: sudhar ja DAYA... buhat maar khayeyga...

DAYA: boss... aaj raat main is mansion ki talashi lunga...

ABHIJEET: buhat hoshyaari say...

DAYA(with smile): wesay SHADI kay baad tou yahein rehna hay mujhay tou socha dekh lun...

ABHIJEET: bilkul.... take care...

after dropping the call... ABHIJEET think...

ABHIJEET(with himself): ye DAYA... kahein sach much tou nahi involve ho raha hay VRUSHALI  mein... koi chakker tou nahi hay... DAYA ki hansi... khair... dekhtay hain...

Tonight DAYA want to search the house... VRUSHALI told her that tonight she will busy in her  show so come late night.... she left with YANA, ROBIN and JAI, only KRISHNA is present so DAYA took his dinner with him and after say good night, move to their respective rooms... at mid night... DAYA open his room door... and move silently... he saw every entering and exit point... but security was in high alert... he moves at stairs... he saw KRISHNA talking to someone in call....

KRISHNA: abhi nahi... main tum ko baad mein bataonga... abhi wo jo idhar hay... najany kub jayeyga...

suddenly DAYA's hand touched the wall and the hanging painting was swinging with voice...

KRISHNA: arry...

DAYA rushed towards the hall but at the meantime his foot slipped and he fell from stairs for protecting himself he try to grab a railing rods.... but the rod comes in his hand... he fell down on floor but due to carpet... quite protected.. KRISHNA dont come at this side... DAYA get up... searching  and after giving green signal to himself check that rod... he get back to that specific point from where the rod comes out.. he try to fix it and feel shocked... that the rod is easily fix in its holes... its movable... DAYA thought

that any space should be open or close with the movement of this rod... so he search that space with moving that rod in its holes but invane.... he thought may be he was wrong and just due to putting a hard hand... the rod comes out from its area... in the process of fixing it again undelibrately his head move up and his eyes saw something strange... he again repeat the process and now a relaxing whistle comes from his mouth...

DAYA(with himself): lo yahan humari honay wali biwi ko pata hee nahi hay kay un kay peechay  kya chal raha hay...  he makes the video of that thing in his cell... suddenly he heard the noise of car and wrapped up all the things and rushed to his room...

Next morning, he went to bearue and show that video to everyone... after watching it...

DAYA: magar Sir, mujhay abhi tak ek baat samajh mein nahi aayii???

ACP: kiya???

DAYA: Sir is ka use kiya hay!!! kiya SIGNAL!!

ABHIJEET: aur kiya DAYA... is kay ilawa kya ho sakta hay....

ACP: DAYA tumhara shak kis per hay...

DAYA: Sir meri suspects list tou buhat lambi hay...

ACP: hmmm... acha kaun kaun!!!

DAYA take the marker and then write his list on board...

ROBIN, KRISHNA, RAGHO, SID, HARYA aur

ABHIJEET(in strange tone): aur bhi koi reh gaya hay!!!

DAYA(with smile): haan... boss...

ABHIJEET: kaun!!!

DAYA: last but not least... my wife...

ABHIJEET: hain....

DAYA: ohhh... sorry... my TO BE WIFE... VRUSHALI....

ACP: hmmmmm...

DAYA: sorry Sir... magar ye sirf mera shak hay...

ACP: nahi DAYA... aaj tum nay ek detective ki nazar say kaam kiya hay... well an good...

DAYA: thank you... Sir...

ABHIJEET: magar agar VRUSHALI  aisa  karti  tou wo hamaray pass kyun aati!!! aur wo tou abhi shift  hui hay na is mansion per....

DAYA: boss... ye sirf mera shak hay... ghalat bhi ho sakta hay...

ABHIJEET: aur JAI!!!

DAYA: boss... JAI per mera dil nahi maan raha...

ABHIJEET: herut hay....

DAYA(with himself): mujhay bhi....

ACP: DAYA ye RAGHO aur SID... un ki kya kahani hay...

DAYA: Sir ye dono security guards hain... ek kafi unusual exit point per duty deta hay... matlab exit ki wo jagah aam logun ko nazar nahi aati... wahan  say kuch bhi aasaani say ander ya bahar ja sakta hay...

ABHIJEET: aur SID!!

DAYA: boss... buhat zyada hee siyana hay...

ABHIJEET(again): aur ye HARYA...

DAYA: Sir ye bhi nauker nahi mehsus hota....

ACP: yani jo kuch bhi ho raha hay... us mein ghar kay hee log milay huay hain...

DAYA: jee Sir...

ACP: magar DAYA filhaal koi saboot nahi hay hamaray pass kay wahan kya ho raha hay???

ABHIJEET: haan Sir... talashi per bhi kuch nahi mila...

DAYA: magar Sir is video say lagta hay... jo bhi kuch ho raha hay... wo kafi zabardast  planning kay sath ho raha hay.. aur buhat chupa ker bhi....

ACP: hmmmm.... FREDDIE tum aur VIVEK... in dono GUARDS per nazar rakkhoo.... her lamahy ki report chahyey mujhay... ok...

FREDDIE n VIVEK: jee Sir...

ACP(again): aur SACHIN... tum per is KRISHNA ki zimmadari hay...

SACHIN: yes Sir...

ACP: KAJAL tum ROBIN ka dihaan rakhna...

KAJAL: ok Sir...

ACP: DAYA... VRUSHALI, aur HARYA ko tum sanbhalo gay... aur JAI ko ABHIJEET dekhay ga...

ABHIJEET(interrupts): magar Sir DAYA ko tou JAI per shak hee nahi hay...

ACP(with smile): ABHIJEET... DAYA ko nahi hay.... mujhay tou hay na.... aur jahan tak mera khayal hay tum ko bhi hay...

DAYA saw ABHIJEET with smile....

ACP: ok... sub apnay kaam per chalo... door say nazar rakhni hay... magar buhat hoshyaari say... kisi ko bhi shak nahi hona chahyey aur DAYA tum buhat sawdhaan rehna... theek hay...

DAYA: theek hay Sir...

All left from bearue... at mansion... when DAYA step out from the cab.. he saw two people talking with RAGHO... he hide himself in a bush... voice was very clear... he heard...

MAN: arry sahab... kal SIGNAL tou diya tha... aap nay...

RAGHO: kya baat ker rahay ho... kaun sa SIGNAL??

MAN: sahab raat ko... hum kya pagal hay jo itna khatra utha ker yahan aaya hay... ab jaldi bolo... kahan rakhnay ka....

RAGHO(bit anger): jub main bola kay SIGNAL nahi diya tou nahi diya... samaan lay ja apna...

MAN: sahab itna akarnay ka nahi... hum ko aur customer mil jayey ga...

RAGHO: nahi nahi... acha chal tu meray sath...

RAGHO takes both with him towards the coridor corner... in this few seconds time... DAYA came from the bush and check the bag... he felt somthing unusual so opened the bag  with small knife in hurry and put his hand inside that bag... he saw some grey color powder... suddenly the people turned... DAYA rushed to his place... the other person keep silent... RAGHO and that MAN take the bag inside... DAYA try to reach them... but at that moment VRUSHALI comes... and thought DAYA was again lost... so she bring her inside the mansion....  DAYA was quite irritative but dont do anything... jus move to his room... he scrape that powder from his fingers and palm and then smell it... he did not confirmed whats this... so next day he sent that to FORENSIC LAB...

DR.SALUNKHY: ACP sahab foran lab aa jayey... ek bari khaber hay meray pass aap kay liyey...

ACP: bari ya buri???

DR.SALUNKHY: dono samjh lijyey... jaldi aayey...

ACP: haan... SALUNKHAY... bolo... kya dhamaka karna hay...

DR.SALUNKHY: boss... ye DYNAMITE powder hay...

ACP(in shocking tone): kiya... tou kya wahan DYNAMITE aa raha hay.... magar kyun???

DR.SALUNKHY: ye tou bhayya aap log jaanein... aur haan aik baat aur...

ACP: hmmm... patakha hay ya ye bhi bomb hee hay...

DR.SALUNKHY: nahi boss... ye patakha hay...

ACP(bit irritation): tou ab phor bhi do...

DR. SALUNKHY: arry tou mujh per kyun bigar rahay ho... haan... khair...

DR.SALUNKHY: ye DYNAMITE powder jo DAYA ko mila hay... wo GRANADE mein bhi use hota hay... balkay zyada tar usi mei use hota hay...

ACP: hmmm...

ABHIJEET call to DAYA and tell him abt everything...

DAYA: boss... main ye nahi dekh paaya kay wo saamaan ander kidhar gaya... VRUSHALI  mujhay wahan say lay gayii...

ABHIJEET: kya jaan ker!!!

DAYA: kuch bhi ho sakta hay... boss... JAI ka kya hua!!!

ABHIJEET: abhi tak tou saheh hay... dekho kub dimagh phirta hay... aur tumhara!!!

DAYA(with smile): yaar meri honey wali biwi tou so rahi hay... aur HARYA khana paka ker apnay  quarter mein hay... aur meri nazar mein bhi...

ABHIJEET(in naughty tone): hmmm... biwi so rahi hay... aur sahab kya ker rahay hain...

DAYA(with smile): un kay jaagnay ka intaizaar...

DAYA(in hurry): ok boss... VRUSHALI aa rahi hay... baad mein call karta hun... bye...

DAYA: VRUSHALI tum nay apni GUEST LIST tou bana li hogi... SHADI kay liyey...

VRUSHALI(in confussion): jee... wo...

DAYA(again): haan... jaldi karo... sirf 3 din bachay hain... aur baqi sub bhi dekh lo...

VRUSHALI(whispering): aap ko kya uncle nay kuch nahi bataya!!!

DAYA: haan.. bataya hay na kay tumhari aur meri shadi hay... aik haftay mein...

DAYA(bit rash): kyun... tumhein kya main pasand nahi hun!!!

VRUSHALI: nahi... nahi... aap buhat hee achay hain... magar!!!

DAYA(in anger): kya magar... haan....

VRUSHALI leave the place and DAYA with laugh move outside....

On next day VRUSHALI was angry and tell ACP to bring back DAYA otherwise she will complain about him to DCP... ACP was quite angry... he call ABHIJEET and DAYA both at bearue.... both entered...

ABHIJEET: Sir main abhi aap ko JAI ki report denay wala tha...

ACP did not take any interest he continously starring to DAYA... DAYA feel uncomfortable with that... he saw ABHIJEET...

DAYA: Sir... koi ghalati ho gayii hay mujh say???

ACP: DAYA... tum jaantay ho main nay tum ko VRUSHALI kay ghar kyun bheja tha...

DAYA: jee Sir....

ACP: aur tum ker kya rahay ho??? haan!!

DAYA: Sir kuch ghalat ho gaya kya!!

ACP: us nay kaha hay kay agar ab tum nay usay pareshan kiya tou wo DCP ko tumhari complain ker day gi....

DAYA: sorry Sir... ab aap ko koi bhi shikayet nahi hogi... main VRUSHALI say bhi excuse  ker lunga... aaj hee...

ACP: nahi VRUSHALI say excuse karnay ki zarurat nahi... haan ABHIJEET tum bolo...

ABHIJEET told about JAI's routine that there is nothing suspecious about him... he saw DAYA was quite and bit ashamed... he nods to ACP about that... ACP also see him and say nothing... both move outside... at quallis...

ABHIJEET: DAYA ACP sahab ka wo matlab nahi tha... agar wo larki DCP kay pass chali gayii tou socho tumhara kitna bura impression paray ga...

ABHIJEET(again): DAYA kuch bolo bhi....

DAYA: mujhay nahi lagta kay HARYA is kaam mein mila hua hay... wo kafi parha likha hay magar is case mein shamil nahi hay....

ABHIJEET: yani JAI aur HARYA tou list say OUT... ab bachy hain... ROBIN, KRISHNA,  SID aur VRUSHALI... haan magar RAGHO confirmed hay... right...

DAYA: haan... main aaj phir wo SIGNAL dunga... ta kay kal agar maal aayey tou main us jagah ko dhoond sakun jahan wo DYNAMITE rakkah jata hay...

ABHIJEET: tum nay us aadmi ko dekha tha jo maal laya tha...

DAYA: nahi.... us ki peeth meri taraf thi...

ABHIJEET: aur jo us kay sath tha...

DAYA: shayed... magar main abhi confirmed nahi hun...

ABHIJEET: hmmm... DAYA....

DAYA: haan... bolo...

ABHIJEET: tum ko bura laga???

DAYA: ok boss... mujhay yahein say cab leni hogi... tum jao... bye...

he jus stop the quillas and step down... take a cab and move towards mansion... ABHIJEET feel bad... he knew that DAYA was hurted... but!!!

At night DAYA again repeat the same process of SIGNALING and go back to his room... on next day... RAGHO again in aggression after seeing the MAN... he was quite worried coz today everyone is at home... DAYA try nobody interrupt the whole scenario so he engaged every member with his fellows except RAGHO... RAGHO after a big fight take those bags inside... DAYA silently follow him and was astonished to see that he entered in his own room.... DAYA try to go but that was quite risky... so he lose that idea and back to his place... he call ABHIJEET and tell him about everything and say that he will call him at night after search that exact point... he will wait for NIGHT...

at night.... DAYA was quite excited... he lock his room after every routine work and then search every possible point... his room floor... his bed site... every drawr... closets  every small and big item... every switch or buttons kind of a thing through which any space appear... his wash room as well.... but invane... he sat on his bed with confussion... atonce his eye catch somthing... he stand and move to that place.. its his wash room handle... normally people open the door by the use of handle but close it just to push it... specially in wash rooms.... he saw a very small clear crystal button present on the inside handle of wash room... he pushed it and his room wall mirror turned into a glass door... he pushed that glass door and go downward... his gun is in his hand and he is quite alert.... he saw 3/4 bags of DYNAMITE powder... some are open  and some are closed.... few tables were also there with some different kinds of materials like nails...  some iron rods etc... DAYA search the place throughly but did not find any place of exit from here...  it means his room is the only way of entering and exit... he make a movie in his cell camera...  he want some more cameras to get the whole scene specially the main culprit... but he has only his cell camera and his LAPTOP camera... he thought to call his team for some more cameras... but at this time it was quite awkward... so he only place his cell camera and laptop camera in different areas... after that he came back to his room....

 

At morning first he saw VIVEK, who was there for SID... he signals him... and VIVEK come at his window pan...  DAYA open the window and say...

DAYA: VIVEK apna cell phone mujhay do...

VIVEK: ye lein Sir...

DAYA wanted to say more but he feel someone watching him... so he jus say to VIVEK...

DAYA: ab jao... ok

he call to ABHIJEET and tell him everything although that he is using VIVEK cell right now and also that hopefully today he got the main culprit....

ABHIJEET: DAYA... dihaan say....

DAYA: haan boss...

DAYA come outside from his room... take a cup of tea and then say VRUSHALI...

DAYA: VRUSHALI, main apnay ek puranay friend say milnay ja raha hun... lunch usi kay sath karun ga.... shaam mein milta hun... bye... after this annoucement he left, but in few sec he came back in his room from window pan... he hide himself under the bed... after 2 long hours... when he has a pain in his back and he try to come out... someone open the door of his room and come inside... DAYA saw that PERSON from there... but only half a part... he saw only BLUE JEANS and BLACK JOGGERS... the person open that space and move downward... DAYA after few second also follow that person..... he cover that man... and said

DAYA: main tum ko pehchan chuka hun... murr jao... meray pass gun hay...

when the PERSON turned back... DAYA was shocked

DAYA: tum.... main soch bhi nahi sakta tha... tumharay baaray mein....

YANA: hahaha... ye tou tumhara qasoor hay officer.... wesay tum kya karogay...

DAYA: main tum ko abhi arrest ker lunga aur sub kay saamnay tumhara pol bhi khool dunga..

      magar!!!

YANA: magar kya...

DAYA: main aisa karunga nahi... kyunki...

his voice was interrupted with VRUSHALI's scream... DAYA was really in shock... he only gave VRUSHALI name in his suspects list just for a joke... but this really hurt him... VRUSHALI came slowly and behind him a NEW FACE... he is SUSHANT... VRUSHALI's driver.... DAYA was again in shock and this time in trouble too... he try to press ABHIJEET number  but SUSHANT with covering VRUSHALI noticed it and grab the cell from his jeans and power off it...

SUSHANT: haan... tou DAYA Sir.... ye kiya harkut hay... apni jaan is bewaqoof larki kay liyey mushkil mein daal di....

DAYA: meri is say shadi honay wali hay... chor do usay... tum logun ko mujh say panga lena buhat mehanga paray ga....

both people laugh alot... DAYA silently move towards the open DYNAMITE bag side... SUSHANT and YANA tied VRUSHALI.... but when they try to tie up DAYA... DAYA threw the DYNAMITE  powder on SUSHANT, he covered his eyes by his hand... YANA comes to help him... but in this space of time, DAYA get back his gun... and SUSHANT on irritation fired a bullet from his pistol... DAYA unhesitately safe VRUSHALI by grab her in his hands coz she was unconcious... DYNAMITE powder spreads everywhere... suddenly DAYA heard ABHIJEET call... he entered inside the room but ABHIJEET rushdly want to grab DAYA... in this moment he was hitted by something... he get that thing in his hand... DAYA rushed towards him after  placing VRUSHALI on floor... he snatched that thing and then complete black out....  

DAYA heared the voice of ABHIJEET.... ABHIJEET in irritation talking to someone else..

ABHIJEET: aik tou meri samajh mein  nahi aata kay isay her baat mein apni naak ghusaany ka kyun shauq hay.... ayee bhagwaan kub khatam hoga is ka ye shauq...

FREDDIE: Sir, DAYA Sir ko hosh aa raha hy...

ABHJEET(in hurry): DAYA... DAYA... tum theek hona...

DAYA get up... and move his head in YES...

ABHIJEET: shuker hay....

DAYA: yaar mujhay kiya hua tha...

ABHIJEET: MR HIMALIYA, tumhari naak toot gayii thi... bus...

DAYA touches his nose and then saw ABHIJEET strangely... while ABHIJEET, FREDDIE and VIVEK is laughing...

DAYA: kiya hua!!!

ABHIJEET: yaar mujhay lagta hay kay CID ko apna budget barhana paray ga...

VIVEK: kyun Sir???

ABHIJEET: arry ye (pointing towards DAYA) jo her baar hospital aa ker itna kharcha karwa deta hay...

ABHIJEET(again): yaar DAYA aik baat tou batao... sach sach... kiya tumhein yahan koi nurse pasand aa gayii hay... jo baar baar yahan aa jaatay ho??? haan...

DAYA(with smile): arry boss... nurses tou meri AWESOME smile ki wajah say yahan aati hain...

ABHIJEET(bit anger): mujhay wo "larki" mil jayey... DAYA... jis nay tumhari smile per comment diya tha...

DAYA(in anger): tou kiya karo gay tum??? haan..

ABHIJEET(with laugh): main us kay hath pair jorlunga kay bhae wo apna COMPLIMENT wapis lay lay warna humara ye officer kisi kaam ka nahi rahay ga.... sirf smile hee dikhata rahay ga...

DAYA: hahahah... wesay ABHI mujhay tou jalnay ki boo yahan tak aa rahi hay...

ABHIJEET: kiya..... main tumhari smile say jalta hun...

FREDDIE(corrected him): AWESOME smile say Sir...

ABHIJEET(in irritation): haan haan... wohi... sahab ki AWESOME smile say...

ABHIJEET: mujh per bhi log martay hain... meri smartness per...

DAYA: chalo koi aik larki batao...

ABHIJEET: door jaany ki kya zarurat hay... TAREEKA jee hain na...

DAYA(again laugh): hahaha... wo tou majboor hain bechari...

ABHIJEET: kyun kiya main DAYA jitna smart nahi hun... tum batao FREDDIE...

FREDDIE: Sir wo... meri wife kehti hay... DAYA Sir aap say zyada smart hain...

DAYA: hahahah... sun liya.... haha...

ABHIJEET(towards FREDDIE): tum aur tumhari wife....

DAYA: arry... arry... boss... kyun becharay ko dara rahay ho... sach tou keh raha hay... acha aisa kartay hain... VIVEK say bhi pooch leetay hain...(he wink to VIVEK) haan VIVEK tum batao...

VIVEK: Sir... wo... DAYA Sir zyada handsome hain...

ABHIJEET: main is hospital ki ent say ent baja dunga...

DAYA: hahahah....(hugged him and say).... arry boss... tum kisi ko achay lago na lago... mujhay sub say achay lagtay ho... (he wink ABHIJEET and continued)... aur pyaray bhi....

ABHIJEET: DAYA... DAYA... pitay ga tu mujh say...

DAYA(in sad voice): ohhh... kiya zamana aa gaya hay... BARA BHAI apnay CHOTY MUNNY say BHAI ko maaray ga...

ABHIJEET: munnay say bhai ki harkatein bhi tou dekho....

ABHIJEET(again): wesay main kiya... abhi tou ACP sahab bhi tumhari pitai karein gay...

DAYA: hain.... kyun???

ABHIJEET: kiya zarurat thi... us DINAMITE ko choony ki....

DAYA: arry boss... mujhay kiya malum tha kay wo phat jayeyga...

ABHIJEET(in anger): tou kiya wo tum say pooch ker phatta....

DAYA: hahahah... hona tou yehi chahyey tha... boss

suddenly a nurse come inside the room to check DAYA's condition... before she leave the room... DAYA ask her..

DAYA:excuse me... aap say ek baat poochni thi...

NURSE:jee poochyey...

DAYA:wo darasal ye mera DOST hay aur mery DOST ka khayal hay kay koi larki mujh say shadi  nahi karay gi kyunkay main apnay DOST jaisa handsome nahi hun... aap ka kiya khayal hay???

NURSE see both of them and replied...

NURSE: nahi... aap buhat handsome hain aur koi bhi larki aap say shadi ker sakti hay... magar...

DAYA: magar kiya!!!

NURSE(pointing towards ABHIJEET): ye bhi kuch kum nahi hain... and leave

ABHIJEET: hahahah... dekha... apna bhi koi jadoo hay boss...

DAYA(with smile): jo kisi kisi per chal jaata hay....jesay TAREEKA per... aur...

ABHIJEET: aur???

DAYA(wink him with smile): mujh per....hhhhahaha

ABHIJEET(grab his neck and said): daant tour dunga main tery...

DAYA, VIVEK n FREDDIE laughing alot with ABHIJEEET reaction... at that moment... ACP enter..

ACP: hain... ABHIJEET... DAYA... ye kiya ho raha hay??

ABHIJEET(leave DAYA): kuch nahi Sir... wo main DAYA ko gardan ki excersize karwa raha tha...

ACP(with smile): excersize kara rahay thay... kay gala daba rahay thay... khair... DAYA kesay ho???

DAYA: first class....

ACP: tou phir chalna hay hospital say... ya aur rehna hay...

DAYA getup atonce and said

DAYA: nahi Sir... chalna hay..

All move towards their places... ABHIJEET drop DAYA at his house...

DAYA: boss... kya hua tha... meray behosh honay kay baad...

ABHIJEET(with smile): tumhari shadi posponed karni pari... bus...

DAYA: bata na yaar...

ABHIJEET: jub tum nay wo cheez meray hathun say li tou pehlay tou main samjha hee nahi... magar jub wo achanak phut gayii... tou sub ko jhatka laga... shukar hay zyada explosive nahi tha us mein... shayed abhi ban rahi ho... khair tumharay cameras nay kafi acha kaam kiya kafi kuch clear ho gaya... SUSHANT, RAGHO, YANA aur SID ko arrest ker liya hay... VRUSHALI safe hay... hospital aayii thi... tumhara shukriya  ada karany... per us waqt tum behosh thay....

DAYA: wesay main SUSHANT aur YANA kay baaray mein soch bhi nahi sakta tha... jo aadmi us din us aadmi kay sath aaya tha jo DYNAMITE lay ker aaya tha... us nay KRISHNA ki shirt pehni  hui thi... is liye mera shak KRISHNA per zyada tha... aur VRUSHALI ki car zyadar tar JAI  drive karta tha.... main nay shayed aik baar hee SUSHANT ko dekha ho... is liyey us per shak raha hee nahi... aur YANA... itni seedhi saadhi sii larki aur kaam.... wesay boss ye log DAYAMITE wahan la kyun rahay thay???

ABHIJEET: yaar... ye mansion kafi arsay say khali para tha... VRUSHALI ki family nay abhi is ka case  jeeta hay aur un ko ye mansion court nay wapus ker diya hay.... ye log khali mansion ko dekh ker is mein ghuss gayey...

DAYA: aur wo caretaker... GUNPUT!!!

ABHIJEET: arry wo aata... ooper ooper say dekh ker chala jaat... aur nauker bhi usi din aatay thay......

DAYA: tou ye kya kartay thay DYNAMITE ka???

ABHIJEET: ye GRANADE bana ker bahar bhejtay thay... wesay us UNDERGROUND raastay say direct bahar jaanay ka bhi aik aur raasta hay... tum ko us waqt mil nahi saka hoga... camera mein wo raasta record hua hay... wahan per SID hota tha...

DAYA: tum wahan pohanchay kesay thay???

ABHIJEET: tum ko phone kiya.. tou phone band aa raha tha... raasta tou tum mujhay bata hee chukay thay...  aur phir hum log bhi wahein aas pass hee thay... wesay DAYA tum ko nahi lagta... tum nay kuch jaldi kii...

DAYA: haan... boss... meray ooper bhi nazar rakkhi ja rahi thi....  (bit anger) aur ye sub VRUSHALI ki wajah say hua hoga... wohi her doosray din bearue pohanch jaati thi... meri shikayet lay ker... aur ACP Sir ko  tou her koi pehchanta hay na....

ABHIJEET: haan ye tou hay....

DAYA: acha tum logun nay wo SIGNAL wali jagah ka kya kiya???

ABHIJEET: arry... jub wo jagah aur signal karna VRUSHALI ko dikhaya tou wo hairaan reh gayii... wesay DAYA idea buhat acha tha... kitna dimaagh lagaya hoga... kisi ko shak bhi nahi parta... batao... achanak stairs ki railing rod ko ghumanay say us glass window kay charoon taraf lights jalnay lagti aur raat ko aaraam say signal pohanch jaata... hain na...

DAYA: haan boss... parhay likhay log thay... dimagh tou lagana hee tha na...

ABHIJEET: acha tou MR.HIMALIYA... main ab chalta hun... kal miltay hain...

DAYA(seriously): ABHI... kya tum waqai meri smile say jaltay ho... and after that he laughed and close the door...

At night, he got a FLOWER BUNCH from courier, and VRUSHALI's call... she really thanked him and invited him for her engagement after a week with JAI.... DAYA thanked her... put off his cell and after a while threw that bunch on dustbin....

On next morning, when ABHIJEET enter, DAYA was already present there...

ABHIJEET: arry yaar batana tou chahyey tha... main abhi tum ko leenay tumharay ghar gaya tha...

DAYA: hmmmmm.... yaar ACP Sir kub aayey gay???

ABHIJEET: kyun koi kaam hay kya???

DAYA: haan... yaar mujhay un say apni SHADI ki baat karni hay...

ABHIJEET: magar DAYA... wo tou...

ACP entered and saw ABHIJEET... he looks quite amazed...

ACP: kya hua ABHIJEET... ye tumharay chehray per hawaiyaan kyun urr rahi hain...

ABHIJEET: wo Sir... DAYA... na...

DAYA(interrupts): Sir... wo mujhay ye pochna tha... kay meri SHADI kub hogi...

ACP: hain... DAYA wo tou plan tha na...

DAYA: magar Sir aap nay tou kaha tha kay aap meri sach mein SHADI karwayein gay...

ACP: DAYA... lekin...

DAYA looks quite sad... ACP watch him carefully... and now...

ACP: kya tum ko wo larki...

ACP: i m sorry DAYA... mujhay tum ko bata dena chahyey tha....

DAYA(in sad voice): jee Sir... main nay tou "angothi" bhi khareed li thi...

ABHIJEET: magar DAYA... VRUSHALI tou engaged hay...

DAYA(in shocking tone): kiya!!!

he grab his heart and trying to fell down...

ABHIJEET(in hurry): arry... DAYA... DAYA...(DAYA wink him)

ACP: sanbhalo DAYA ko...

ABHIJEET: Sir main isay sanbhalta hun... aap befiker rahein....

he grab DAYA... DAYA is laughing...

ABHIJEET: DAYA....

DAYA: arry boss.... tum log itni acting ker saktay ho tou kya main nahi ker sakta....  wesay boss mujhay malum tha kay wo engaged hay... wo bhi JAI say....

ABHIJEET: is liyey tum nay JAI per shak nahi kiya tha...

DAYA: wohi VRUSHALI ko VRUSHALI kehta tha.. meray naraz honay kay baad bhi..

ABHIJEET: acha... tou hoshyaar ho gaya hay baccha... haan...

DAYA: boss... bacchay nay angothi khareed li hay...

both sat on quallis.... ABHIJEET smiles and say...

ABHIJEET: chal bay....

DAYA: sach mein boss.... ye dekho...

DAYA pick out a RING CASE from his jeans and give it to ABHIJEET... ABHIJEET feels sad...

ABHIJEET: magar yaar....

he opened that case found something strange...

ABHIJEET: ain.... ye kiya hay???

DAYA: RING!!!

ABHIJEET: magar DAYA ye tou MALE RING hay...

DAYA(wink him): tou tum say kis nay kaha kay main "larki" say shadi ker raha hun...

ABHIJEET grab his neck... the quillas was shivering... DAYA laugh alot...

DAYA: ye tumharay liyey hay... boss...

ABHIJEET: meray liyey!!! kyun??? kis khushi mein???

DAYA: yaad hay tum nay mujh say ek baar kaha tha kay "dost tou hum bhi hain tumharay... magar tum nay aaj tak humein tou kuch na diya"... tou ye tumharay liyey.... aur is kay ander ye tumhara birthdate bhi hay.... tumhari ring jal ker kharab ho gayii thi na...

ABHIJEET: hmmmm... tou itnay saalun baad... haan!!!!!

DAYA: arry boss... gareeb aadmi hun... ek ek paisa jama ker kay liya hay buhat mushkilun say....

ABHIJEET: aur agar main ye na lun tou!!!

DAYA(in aggression): main tum ko gadi say neechay phaink dunga....

ABHIJEET: hmmmm... itni himmat hay tum mein kay mujhay phaink sako gadi say...

DAYA: wesay boss... mujhay yaqeen hay tum aisa nahi karogy... ab pehun bhi lo... kya aarti utarni  hay is ki....

ABHIJEET: hahahaha... acha...

DAYA(again): aur mujhay ye bhi yaqeen hay kay tum is ki hifazat apni jaan say bhi zyada karo gay... jesay!!!

ABHIJEET(with smile): jesay... tumhari karta hun!!!

DAYA: nahi DARPOK AASHIQ... jesay TAREEKA say ISHQ karnay walay raaz ki...

DAYA: wesay boss... agar main tum say kuch maangun tou do gay!!!

ABHIJEET: kiya!!!

DAYA: yaar please TAREEKA ko purpose ker do... mujh say KARTIK ka akela pan bardasht nahi hota...

ABHIJEET again grab his neck... and this time both laugh shiver the quallis.......

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Posted: 04 April 2011 at 7:20pm | IP Logged
1. the duo do not really have such emotional talks
2. the scenes involving all the romance hints are not really like fw's cid. not the cid, the original cid, that we love.
3. the duo are not physical when in duty. what they do as frnds we never see, and thats the charm we love. their physical touches are too dostana.


"we all like the fact that you are trying to write nice stories, but it is all too sentimental and there's no investigation. A couple of stories like this might have been fine, but you seem to be writing the same type of stories week after week. Could you please focus on the case rather than senti dialogues and scenes which make the readers uncomfortable? CID is a crime series and not a k-serial. Pls do not PM US in this matter".


Edited by suhaani.cid - 04 April 2011 at 7:22pm

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GD In CID such strong emotions are not expressed and I am sorry but you heve gone a bit over the top this  time with romance. 

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Posted: 04 April 2011 at 10:14pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by suhaani.cid

1. the duo do not really have such emotional talks
2. the scenes involving all the romance hints are not really like fw's cid. not the cid, the original cid, that we love.
3. the duo are not physical when in duty. what they do as frnds we never see, and thats the charm we love. their physical touches are too dostana.


"we all like the fact that you are trying to write nice stories, but it is all too sentimental and there's no investigation. A couple of stories like this might have been fine, but you seem to be writing the same type of stories week after week. Could you please focus on the case rather than senti dialogues and scenes which make the readers uncomfortable? CID is a crime series and not a k-serial. Pls do not PM US in this matter".

@SUHAANI.CID
its ur own opinion nd ur eyes who sees DOSTANA in GD stories.....but there all about TRUE FRIENDSHIP which bonds two SOULS not BODIES as u mentioned........
but plz dont mind u herself introduce a character SUHANI in ur own stories whom u shown ist niece of ASHA but later u introduce her as niece  of ABHIJEET........ hows possible????????
u totally create FILMY DRAMA in ur stories.............

but m EXTREMILY SORRY GUY..

how u could CRITICISE another writer by using such harsh SHARP, HARD  words ......ha  CHEAP word  like DOSTANA.........
we all here sincere nd mature READERS.........
please dont destroy nd spoil the atmosphere by using such CHEAP WORDS........
SORRY but i could not remain myself silent at all............

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