Hi all I am RushTrip
' Vrushali, started writing on this forum after inspiration from Faz Maybe-just.
Thank you all for
giving me an opportunity to speak on the theme of Story/Screenplay. Honored to
have been invited to write on the theme. Hope you all like it. It is long..but
then I am talking about 9 month old baby.
I have segmented the
story/screenplay in track wise and what probably hit me in those tracks.
The Hoshiarpur track
The birth of a story that did sound clichd to start with,
an NRI man, no background check, rushed wedding. All a recipe for a dupe for a
family that does not believe a girl child to be worthy enough to be given a
voice, independence or decision making capabilities.
But the story took a turn, the girl bumped into an
anti-social who does fulfill his social responsibilities albeit reluctantly. He
saved her but did not become her saviour. He helped her but did not want to. He
did not fight her battles but gave her weapons to fight her own battles.
That was the story and the screenplay complimented it like a
hand in glove. Perfection in terms of expressions, characterization. Build up
mystery around the male protagonist and give a spine to the female protagonist
with each and every meeting they have. It was probably the best part of the
serial.
Lucid and with depth.
The first meeting with Dev for Geet was a warning of sorts,
she met him on terrace and a thorn pricked her. What symbolism to portray that
their relationship will only bring pain to her and he will be the thorn in the
side that will mar every relation she has henceforth. That was the depth the
screenplay displayed. Those were the nuances that made one deeply entrenched
into the Serial.
The intrigue, the drama all culminated into a mix that was
irresistible. Bravo for the story and screenplay at the time.
I do not have any knowledge about TRP and its workings so I
shall refrain from talking about it.
The Hoshiarpur Track ended with the girl becoming estranged
from her family. The first phase of the story is thus complete. Now her journey
of becoming estranged from other relationships that she may develop is pursued,
at least I believe that must have been the initial premise of the next track,
the office track, but it lost the premise somewhere down the line and today we
see all characters run around like headless chicken.
The Office track
Now again, the story had taken a turn where she bumps into
the very man who had given each vertebrae that made her stand on her feet. She
though eternally grateful was antagonistic towards any "help" that he did
provide. Again a classic case of opposites attract.
The effervescent natured girl, yes the glimpse of her was
shown in the first shot of the serial where she starts an impromptu jig on the
beat of dhol but was suppressed in front of her brother and grandfather.
Here, she explores her nature, new relationships be it Mr
Mirchandani or Pinky. A friend and a father figure. Nice mix yet again.
The brushes with the boss only brings her closer but here
the track takes a turn once the chemistry between the lead pair onscreen not
only gave the thus far elusive TRPs but also making of a much talked about pair
in the whole telly world. It was the birth of the new chemistry that threatened
to crack the screen. The golden goose was discovered.
Alas, the chemistry became the premise and the story and
screenplay thus were sacrificed at the altar of chemistry. Now we got moments,
they soon became repetitive yet the pair did make the OMG crowd swoon. I
include myself here as well though I would have expected story to go forward.
The office track gave such some fantastic moments
Mr Chopra the cupid
Rahul the fool
Kurbaan Hua the high point in Maan and Geet's angry
passionate interaction.
Well it seems the story did move'of sorts
The Outhouse track
Change of scenario if
not the scenes. The dupattas, the eye locks, chin lifts, catch and fall ( used
like thunder and lightning). Though few things did come out here to add to the
story and screeplay tried to do justice to these characters, well almost.
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Sameera ' the reason for his "Angry Young Man"
Persona'
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Pari ' The reason for Geet's jealousy
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Rasika rathod ' The reason for Maan admitting
Geet's importance to him.
Maan Singh Khurana, for the first time manhandled Geet.
Maan Singh Khurana for the first time felt divinity in
Geet's eyes at the Durgah
Maan Singh Khurana for the first time got drunk and did
raada!
The Hoshiarpur
revisited
The Rasika Rathod case got them back to Hoshiarpur, once
again the old setting brought to light what connection they have and his admittance
of her importance in his life.
Birth of friendship between them. Nice.
Confession/Engagement/Confrontation
Now this was a long time coming but the cash cow was to be
blamed for the dealy. It seemed like a proverbial end of an era should the
protagonists confess their feelings so wow! loads of I love yous not in words
but in action. More eyelocks, more moments, more oh come off it and kiss will
ya! ( for me at least)
Engagement - a fake one, a real one, one in front of the
elements and then in front of the people.
Suddenly the writers seemed to be in a hurry for something.
They wanted to clear the air and that too in a dramatic way. But what happened.
The lead pair fell ill, so did the director and the malaria bug seem to have
hit the story.
The track changed, the happy time turned into one morose
time. The confrontation with Dev though impactful was rushed over and done with
in a day. I wonder why.
Suddenly Dev/NT ended up in Jail and then all hell broke
loose.
The story lost, the plot lost, the whole GHSP team seemed
lost. The culprits came out scot free with some flimsy excuse. Wow.
The Meera track though interesting was cut short too. Even
shorter and more mind boggling was the Jay track. By that time the loyal
viewers were only doing one thing wait and watch. The logic it seemed had
become totally parayee from the
serial.
The screenplay and story was floundering and people became
sympathetic watchers rather than the enthralled ones. They awaited the Hero's
return from illness and even after the return the story looked as pale as the
Actor. The best moment in this track was the hospital hug!
The story took a twist and as we say
WE Twist we twist'the story brought in some new twists.
Paint fell on the
story and blotted it completely track
We had Jay giving Geet the company he owned to run. Mr
Khurana had to buy it and bring 3 monkeys into KC. Wow. That track was amazing.
No logic. A pregnant lady in paint factory' worse crimes have been done
perhaps.
The track had a mini separation, dare I say the word
separation but the worst thing that had happened was one Geet pushing Maan
Singh Khurana, the Tai Chi practicing stud and then in a fit of rage Maan Singh
had dragged a pregnant lady out of his office. Bravo. Kya mardanagi!
Now we were still reeling from this atrocity and the story
takes another turn.
Face Off k and Maang
Bharo Sajna track
The wrong doer suddenly wanted avenging and was trying very
hard to get mileage. She brought in new ammunition in form of a brother. Where
did he come from ' Malaysia?
And lord behold we see yet another dropped from heaven
character called Maan's Sister. Suddenly Vicky had a sex change and turned to
Annie how uncanny.
She would have made sense to us if they had made sense in
bringing her rather than tapakofying from god knows where. She did not have
television, she did not have news..she was like the babe in the woods. May be
she lived in Kailash trying to achieve Niravana'
When push comes to shove what Pindi Queen could not do, NT
had to do. Another saviour moment. Maang Bharo sajna.
The couple sizzled when they were not aware of their feelings,
when they did not confess, when they felt only attraction for each other. But
afterwards they turned into the couple that invented Chastity Belt.
He had held her passionately in Kurbaan Hua, touched her
tremblingly in Peen Loon and after the khoon bhari maan, touch was less and
less to almost nonexistent.
Maan ban gaya Raam! Hey Raam!
Golmaal track
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Annie & Arjun ' The wedding planners
The wedding seemed was here finally oh well
the planners were from Malaysia and Kailash so it felt more like a village
wedding rather than a Delhi residing Industrialist. But Budget ka sawaal hai
shayad.
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Brij and NT the Wedding poopers
Now one would do a wedding in a lavish with
fun and frolic giving a feeling of bon homie' but no GHSP had to be dippharant
from the rest and had to bring intrigue with not one but two party poopers.
Now more than the wedding the two villains
get more mileage with their Tommy Gun ( phrase borrowed from one of my Idiot
friend) with dialogues that last longer than a freight train passing at a
railway crossing.
But it is a dream wedding none the less
The story and screenplay are not visible
but one could have had moments that would have had the screen sizzle. But looks
like a thanda couple are getting married with one trying to come close the
other pushing away.
Missed opportunities
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Vicky
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Sameera
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Mirchandani
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Hoshiarpur family ' Darji, Rano, Chachi, Chacha,
Raji, Tito and of course Brij's wife what's her name dolly
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Sasha
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Meera
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Jay
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D'Mellos
These were the cast of characters if they had been penned
well and given more than a 15 day track ( I have included Sasha as well cos the
amount of footage she got probably amounts to the same ultimately) ' am I being
harsh? The lead pair could have had rest. Parallel tracks could have been
created with more logic.
Today a Tasha who was dead against Geet due to Sasha is
suddenly the best buddy, part of haldi ceremony behaving like a chaddi buddy.
The Hits for me and I
miss them now are
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The symbolism
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The color palette ' change in colors of walls
and use of colors to signify a mood, next track or possible moment.
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The paintings that merged ' showed depth in art
direction and cinematography . whether it was Heer Ranjha, Radha Krishna,
Madonna and Child, The tilt toy representing maze all formed a palette that was
engrossing.
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The onion skin type of storytelling ' with each
layer you exposed, there was something more yet to be discovered. There was a time when watching
an episode once meant missing out on details and depth that was infused in it.
Today, the story does not engage you enough to look at the finesse with which
the story telling is done, if at all.
Characterization
The characterization is inconsistent, lacks homework or
thought process. They are like a one line characters as below
Adi ' man who stammers and laughs like hyena' but no
explanation as to why he stammers only in front of Maan and laughs in
nervousness. They have a character and
they could have built a back story for this but again not done.
Pinky ' the food fetish is suddenly missing. Looks like the
detailing the earlier CVs had is totally gone. The current CVs have not done
their homework and do not follow character consistency.
Tasha ' she plotted against Geet to create MU with Annie, suddenly the henchmen of Sasha
is left without a crutch so she conveniently becomes Geet's chaddi buddy.
Manishaa ' The gay guy '.is he really? Or is just
effeminate. He is not even loyal in his
adulation. Kabhi Maan toh Kabhi Adi'kya will he finally fall for Pandeyji..the
baal bramachari?
Romeo ' the potential character who seems a flirt but isn't
actually. A sensitive man who has the hots for Tasha?
Pandeyji ' The shudh hindi speaking man. Really is there a
need for him? If so give more to do. Propagating advantages of being a
bramachari. If nothing, will keep the teeming population of India under
check'really?
Even Maan seems to become the road side romeo one day and
suddenly the CVs remember he is supposed to be the AYM persona. Would Maan really
allow Manisha to touch his feet the way he did even if it is wedding? I think
not, he would have cut him to size with a look before he let that happen.
Adi has lost his stammer around Maan finally?
Geet talks of Rajnikant? Wow when did she get into the
email/sms circulation? She is after all one of Maan's phast phast girls?
The screenplay and story are lost and I have lost my
interest in a serial that had held my attention for the longest time.
Happy viewing guys.
This is my honest opinion and no pussy footing around. I
feel the GHSP had potential to become a pioneer in bringing in story that had
cause as its foundation and romance that underlined the storytelling
I had felt it was a Woman of Substance in Indian context in
the making..
Now only woman remains and it lacks substance.
After thougt?
in the piece i wrote..
i deliberately left out the biggest screenplay/story error
Dev
i
felt they missed the boat with creating a villain that would have been
svaue and stylish, who made women swoon over his charm and good looks
and his only aim in life is like the kingfisher
the king of good times..i would love to see that Dev...the Devil is his real name but he only goes by the first three letters...
i also did not focus on Naintara though i felt her character is fantastic but lately she has become delusional..
again i would have loved her to be pure evil who only wants everyone including her husband to dance to her tunes...
her husbands should be the one who wears the pants...and..she is the mastermind..they would have made a fantastic villains
phir na brij ki jaroorat na Arjun ki
but meri dilli tammanna adhoori reh gayee
kya
aisa ho sakta hai ki..i see the first evil couple on TV where both
employ seemingly opposite means to achieve the same goal...
of power and wealth...
ehhhhaaahhhhaaaa haaa! *the trademark evil laugh*
Edited by -RushTrip- - 13 years ago
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