Posted: 17 March 2011 at 11:02am | IP Logged
Ok firstly...listened to the song-perfect. I really loved it, I've never heard it before so it was so fresh yet/and soothing to my ears! ( This is cheesy, but i didn't play the song until you mentioned it in ur FF so I could listen alongside-having said that though, I think it was the best way to read your FF! Made the moment so real.....at first I could only see the whole thing before my eyes, the sound made it as if I was there *shivers* bravo!)
This was it! The moment where Yuvi left, your FFs always surprise me though so I wasn't expecting Yuvi's departure so early on in the extract hence I had to sit up and read the first few lines again and again, teehee...
I liked Sid trying to separate himself from the crowd so he wouldn't be disturbed when Shilpa came down-that was really sweet, I "aww"d. Especially when he was dumbfounded by his own gesture! Bless, I'm glad he's moving on-it's exactly how I'd expect him to act...(so well done for carrying on your accurate depiction of the characters!!)
Yes, yes...do that. That's real brave.
She noticed that oddly her inner voice was starting to sound just like Naina.
This made me laugh! Loved the integrated humour!
Attention to detail is amazing....the first party I didn't have to attend to know the SMALLEST detail of what went on ;) brilliant!
Shilpa's lacking confidence is understandable, she's never boasted or bragged about herself ever, she's a free spirit living in the moment, loving the moment....thus in a situation where people are generally judging her on her beauty her little confidence boost ie. "she was Shilpa Malhotra after all" was apt for the occassion.
This surprised me...Up until this point you'd never let on that Sid was going to be the escort, it's only since the FF is based on them that everyone wanted it. However, if I'd been watching DMG where all couples seem to be tangled up in some way....and had this happened I would have been jumping up and down on my sofa as I watched Sid Modi "take to the stairs"!!
BEST PART EVER. (arguably) but no this was terrific!! Loved how you desrcibed everything, how he voluntarily came forward and that too without anyone having to say anything, he didn't hear Naina, he didn't hear the awkward silence from spectators in the room, no external factor motivated him to walk up and essentially save Shilpa...but it was Shilpa herself, her face as he had watched her....this touched me! Soooo adorable (Please, I want a Siddy too!! )
This was a very smooth transaction, I loved everyone's reaction and the timing! Sid as an escort, Yuvi rushing in, no one knowing if Sid would pull off the dance! Soooo smoooth!!
Here is where I played the music, the most beautifully written part I have ever read in my whole life. It's one thing to write it but in order to paint that picture for smeone over a computer screen to visualise is a completely different level in itself!
I loved everything I won't choose, the dance and the description= *flying kisses*
"A content smile came over his face at the possibility that his son might find happiness in his life after all." I'm not kidding <<< that made me cry! :( Aww shanky siddy! Like the son he never had<3
Love the strong implication of Shilpa being the "missing piece" in Sid's life, how she completes him :)
The cute smile they exchange at the end of the dance....
Armaan epitmoises the phrase "you don't know what you got till it's gone" or "you always want what you can't have" Choice is up to you :)
Wonderful! Keep it up Little Miss!
P.s. I didn't before but I checked that scene on youtube and I now have a new found love for Damon and Elena so thanks for introducing me to Vampire Diaries :) xx
Edited by nm21 - 17 March 2011 at 11:08am