Baat Hamari Pakki Hai


Baat Hamari Pakki Hai
Baat Hamari Pakki Hai

Do Dil.... Mil Rahe Hain. ..A new ff(updte pg 62)

maris08 IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 07 January 2011 at 2:45am | IP Logged
  Everyone welcome;  These  are my baby steps attempt to write a full fledged ff in this forum..You are all free to comment liberally with your posts...
 Roses or Guns, Praises or Criticisms I accept humbly. For a change if the story is lagging or dull or without interest you are all welcome to give me suggestions and I will incorporate ur ideas.. So thanz in advance for patiently reading this and enjoy the story....
               DO  DIL Heart Heart....  MIL RAHE HAIN 
Saachi  was looking at the  Bouquet of Red roses and the greeting card tucked within it..It caught her attention as the first thing this morning.. She was late waking up as she was busy the previous night giving finishing touches to her Ballet. It was to be enacted out at her school's Annual day..Her tired and weary eyes were hurting  and stiffling an yawn she got up from the bed.. and Lo these beautiful roses caught her eye...she saw the card ;nothing was written in it except a big heart shaped balloon figure.. wondering who had sent it she went in search of her mammi...
Good morning mammi ji, g mornin mama ji; she wised them both and joined them for tea.. Maami aap ko path hai kya , khon mereliye roses bejeha aur woh card?
Kya rose or card beta  mujhe toh patha nahin.. shaayad Shreya se pooch..Jaldhi thyaar ho ja beta late hora hai school ke liye..
Saachi was on the way out when Shreya on the way in from her tuitions greeted her..gmornin didhi... wow dekha woh bouquet. kithni sundar hai.. mein subh ootne se hi dekha.. kisne bejha hai didhi? saachi was at a loss for words.. toh thume bhi patha nahin who gave these flowers... Ajeeb lagtha  hai.. does naanu and naani know anything shreya?..
Arre didhi woh dono aaj hi aane walena haridwar se.. yeh kaisa  ho saktha hai? jo bhi ho someone is really fond of you.. wah kya baat hai didhi.. kya kuch chakkar hai kya? Shreya thum bhi na.. kya kya bolthi hai.. chalo mein baad mein dekungi, ab school  jana hai, bahut late hogya.. bye bye..
Saachi's mind were on the flowers and mystery card.. who wld have the audacity to place them on her bedside when both shreya and herself were sleeping...
the very thought gave her goose bumps and an uneasy feeling...with these thoughts she entered the Doon School....

Edited by maris08 - 27 February 2011 at 7:22pm

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maris08 IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 07 January 2011 at 3:48am | IP Logged
   Chapter 1
The Doon school's imposing edifice was welcoming all its wards;teachers and students alike.. The school established inthe pre independance days still commanded respect among the educational fraternities world over.. An oppurtunity to study here is still considered the highest honour..
Into this welcoming corridors saachi walked ; her steps light, her smile bright, her head acknowledging the greetings of the students..She was the music and dance teacher imparting not only just music but the songs of life.. she was always friendly and gave a sympathetic ears to the students problems; their adolescent worries and apprehensions.. no wonder she was most popular among the students aswell as the staff, as she always moved well even with them
Entering the class she greeted  the eager faces of tommorows india.bacchon ab mein woh ballet likh liya.. aaj mein parts keliye audition karungi aur kal se rehearsals.. tikk hai..  she opened her draws after unlocking it... and lo and behold there was a box of chocolates with a heart shaped ribbon tied around it..
In the midst of the cacophony of excited , bubbling voices Saachi cldnt help wondering who her silent admirer was unnerving her and giving her a creepy feeling that was hard to shake off...
gathering  all her resourses she started her auditions immersing in the happy sounds of the children... for after all this was a fairy tale Ballet.. that of Rapunzel and Prince charming...
The morning quickly gave way to the evening.. the Joy and cheerfulness of the children at the beginning of the Day slowely had changed to one of tiredness ; just like the bright sun setting and settling for the day stretching his aching and tired rays...
Saachi wishing her wards gevein packed her things and rode her scooter home... she longed for a cup of hot chai and kahkkras..which her maami makes deliciously...
Aavo saachi.. kaisa laga aaj ka din all greeted her at home... Naana Nanni aap aagayen.. kaisa tha aap ka theerth yathra?.. with chai in her hand she settled down to her  abt their news...
Beta woh sab tikk tha.. pehele mujhe ek baat batan hai thum se.. mannonge na.. asked naana..
Arre jaan jaye par lachan na jaye.. interjected naani.. uske kyon pooch na hai.. hum jho karrahenge uski balai ke lye na .. woh thodi mana karengi... Saachi was looking askance and her gace swept from maami to bhaiya to bhabi to shreya and lastly rested on her naana..what it is naanu.. why all this ghambhir words ..
 Meanwhile her mama  Inder enterd the house from office.. kya hora ha bhai.. kya kuch khaas baat hai kya.?. he enquired..
Hum Saachi ki saadhi ki baat karrahen gen.. Dhamad ji shyaad aab bhool gya saachi ab baccha nahin hai.. kithne din ab is ghar mein rahenge. isiliye hum ek upay socha aur ek vaar bhi doonnke laya?  bahut accha khaandhan hai.....Bus aap chup hajayiye.. shouted mama cutting her off..
 saachi ko kab kaise shaadhi karna hai ye aap sab mujh par choddiye.. woh meri jimmedari hai.. usha ji eh baat aapko bhi hai..saying this he walked into his room in huff..
Saachi was feeling bad and saw everyone leaving her to her own... she went to her room, took her parents photo and hugged it.. If and only my parents had survived that accident ,then I neednt be a burden on my Mama...i neednt have been paraded like a doll before the prospective grooms... Oh what a life to live like an orphan among your loved ones...wiping her tears with a new resolve in her mind she freshned herself and went to help mammi in her dinner preparations...

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sangeeta9 Goldie

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Posted: 07 January 2011 at 3:49am | IP Logged
nice start maris...  loved it...
..-Niru-.. Goldie

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Posted: 07 January 2011 at 3:58am | IP Logged
hey awesome part !!!pls continue!!
maris08 IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 07 January 2011 at 4:10am | IP Logged
    Chapter 2
The dinner was eaten silently with only the cutlery and glass making tinkling sounds... Ahem saachi said.. mama ji bura math maniye , ise pehele jo hua woh aap bhool jayiye...ladki dekne mein eh sab hotha rahtha hai.. muje koi parva nahi hai( while saying this she swallowed her disappoinments and put up a brave face) lets hear what naanu and naani has to say.. if the boy and khandhan is nice then there must be no problem na ? Inder somewhat pacified got up and hugged Saachi.. how grown up and responsible you have become.. started earning youself and smilingly accepting all your suitors rejections.. iam sorry beta.. agar is baar  bhi wahi hoga toh hum kya karen. Dont worry Inder beta , said nannu yeh rishta bahut accha hai, yeh family hamare saath haridwar aaya tha.. unke baaren mein mujhe sab kuch patha.. is bar jaroo baat pakki hoga.. viswas karo..
saachi settled for the nite and started thinking and rewinding her life. since her 5th year she had lived with her mamma and maammi. koi kammi nahi tha unke pyar mein.. phir bhi agar maa bhaap hothen.. thinking all this she heard shreya's snores and smilingly tucked her blanket... she got up to close the windows to prevent a cold draught when something caught her eye..
A heart shaped lighted decoration on the gulmohar branch near her window..
An uneasy shivering crept into her.. for the first time she was afraid

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maris08 IF-Rockerz

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   chapter 3
Shravan  was getting late to the office... he was dressing and his dadhi was feeding him breakfast... arre bittu ithni jaaldhi kya hai.. har kaam eisa hi kartha hai .. thoda sambal ke aur soch samaj kar karo.. you will succeed.. Dadhi plz vaise bhi muje bahut late hogaya .. aur aap bhi mujhe lecture math kijiye... Hitler ki baat sun sun kar mera kaan behra hogaya .. aap bhi na...
Saying this he dashed of downstairs greeting all others at the breakfast table with goodmornin and rushed  out .. all this like a whirlwind leaving behind a vaccumn. that was the silence felt at the table.. everyone gaping at the front door...
Pratap... yeh ladka kabhi nahi sudrega.. dekho  hamesha fast  aur bahut impulsive hai... agar inka energy hamare business mein channelise hota toh hum kahan se kahan hoga...
Madura... deko ji aap hamesha yisa kyon bholraha hai.. ab Shravan bahut jimedhar aur layak insaan bann gaya ..toh aap ko garv hona chahiye...
Shravan  raced his bike onthe circutous streets of Mussorie ignorant of the beautiful scenery , the sun kissed mountains, the gentle hugging breeze , the lush green carpet of this small hilltown.. Afteral  this was an everyday picture for him.... He stopped in front of his office.. a big neon signed nameboard said  LIGHTS,CAMERA ,ACTION... with a caption underneath your events we manage...
he strode in briskly and joined his 2 friends Bunty and viren. together they had pooled their  money and started this event management co.the Three Idiots as they were fondly referred inboth their business and friends circle  have come a long way since their first school days...
Today Shravan was hard pressed for time.. Chalo Bunty..mera saath.. hum ko Doon school mein presentation karna hai.. agar unko pasad laga toh us 1 lakh ka Annual day fest hamara pocket mein hai...saying this both rode to the Doon school....
Little did Shravan know that his life was going to change in a matter of a fortnight......

Edited by maris08 - 25 February 2011 at 10:22pm

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sangeeta9 Goldie

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Posted: 07 January 2011 at 5:25am | IP Logged
ooo... shravan the event manager.... nice one maris... Thumbs Up

continue soon..

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Posted: 07 January 2011 at 6:27am | IP Logged
interesting ff....pls continue soon...

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