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The Inconvenient Truth: Poems for Abhiya, 6th Jan

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Posted: 06 January 2011 at 8:44am | IP Logged
Hello..I'd really like to thank all those who commented on my poems for appreciating my work..I'm yet to gain a foothold here..but thanks anyway..Smile

Two lovers, who loved each other to a point no one knew existed
But one died, and the other lived
But he lived something which was neither life nor death
Blessed with an undead heart and undead breath
He met a girl who looked just like the girl who he had sacrificed everything for
He met a girl who totally rocked his world
But he could never tell her the truth
For he was afraid of destroying this precious pearl
He was afraid that his love could kill
And yet he couldn't satiate his unsatiable need
For the first time it wasn't a humans's blood
But a human's love on which he wanted to feed
The girl always wondered why he was so special
Why was he so mind-confusingly unique
The boy always wondered how would he stop her
For before her though his body did not waver
His heart went weak
How would he ever convince not to stay put
In her quest to find out the inconvenient truth
For her he would suffer and he would offer his life
But he could not bear to see her in strife
Two lovers who love each other to a point no one knows can exist
Now who will die, and who will live?

Critcisim would be appreciated...but praise too..Smile

Meg. Heart

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Posted: 06 January 2011 at 8:46am | IP Logged
Meg!Hug
Awesome work! and I'm the first one to comment!Party

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Posted: 06 January 2011 at 8:48am | IP Logged
Thanks Neethi. Smile Hug

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Posted: 06 January 2011 at 9:41am | IP Logged

Meg! Fab work again! Thumbs Up

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Posted: 06 January 2011 at 9:44am | IP Logged
Wow !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
That was one of the best poems I have ever read.Clap
Really.Day Dreaming
It was beautiful.CryBig smile
Loved the lines.Thumbs Up
 

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Posted: 06 January 2011 at 10:24am | IP Logged
OMG, Meg!
fantastic. I can't seem to "like" your post though, it keeps saying error. Oh well! Your poem was beautiful...it truly summarised Abhay & Piya's story & the last line was EPIC! "Now who will die, and who will live?" loved everything about the poem.. i don't have words to express the beauty of your writing. Please write 1 for each episode:)

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