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@Bhavana @Rashida Do it jaldi jaldi 😲
Well, will start reviewing now, and as Bhavana di said, critisism should be taken in the positive manner, and if hurting anyone's feeling, reallyvery sorry....
Story 1: Very good attempt.. as Visrom di said, the story was deviated from the plot, but it was really good... the team investigation was nice and the story was very catchy... but I noticed a flaw in the story..... in the painting of the lotus containing the poetic lines, the poem is written in the language "Webdings" as of in MS Word, so how does ACP Sir read the poem without any problem??? Because the language is un-understandable, and they would have to decode it..... remaining else was good.... would like to have more from you buddy.... and yeah, next time, keep your mistakes in mind!!! But overall, very very good!!!
Here are my humble opinions for all the stories below. Loved them all!
Story 1 - Well written. I like how the narration flowed smoothly, and was clear and easy to understand. The visual clue and riddle was very cool too ? I especially loved the lotus painting, it's beautiful. I think the story deviated somewhat from the given plot and was a bit too straightforward though, and could've done with some more thrilling sequences, especially in the climax. But I liked the idea of the treasure hunt and CID's dealing with the royal family. 😊
Story 2 - I think the story was well done and the plot was good, well explained in the end. It would've been even better if you had included hints about it in the script as it progressed. The narration could also be improved a little. But I enjoyed it overall, especially the scene with Daya sir and the little girl which was really cute. Interaction between the duo at the end was fun but a bit too long, would've been better if you had trimmed it a bit. Looking forward to more stories from you. 😃
Story 3 - A well-planned and nicely written story with aptly placed clues and interesting investigation. I liked the way the briefcase was stolen and how the culprit planned it all out, and the narration was really clear and enjoyable to read. Freddy's cake scenes were sweet as well (pun intended 😆). All in all, great work; keep rollin'! 👍🏼
Story 4 - I'm really impressed by the meticulous planning and effort that went into this one. Not only is the integration between the robbery and murder case really well done, but the development of suspense and thrill was incredible and I thought the plot was quite detailed and rich too. It was a bit long but never did the length seem too much, the story being so engaging. The scientific clues included were really cool too. Kudos! Loved it and I'm really looking forward to more stories from you. 👏
Story 5 - Great writing style and investigation process, and I liked the way the quarrels between the business partners and others were planned out. Nice reference to the Jewel Thief episode too. 👏
Story 6 - Very well written, I liked the detailed narration and engaging plot with the code language and scientific facts included. The story could've been a little more complex and was a bit too long, but I loved a lot of things in there, including the disguise scenes and the thrilling and tragic climax. Nice job! 😃
Story 7 - Well written and nice to read. I liked the investigative process and the overall tone of the story. The presentation was apt and team well distributed, I liked how the thrill was evenly distributed throughout. Keep it up! 
Story 8 - Very nicely planned and well presented. I liked the emotional and light moments between our team, which were perfectly balanced with the dramatic elements in the story. The mystery around Abhijeet's actions and the team's reactions to it were particularly well done and explained. Great use of two parallel plots revolving around the mystery, and liked the comic relief at the end. Great work, looking forward to more from you! 
Story 9 - Nice attempt. The investigation could've been better and the plot a little more compact, but I liked the way both Raghu and the Inspector are tricked, and the ending. The characterization could be improved, especially that of ACP sir. But it was quite good overall!
Story 10 - A real feast for fans of our duo. The characterization was exceptionally good and truly brought back memories of the golden old episodes. Loved how Abhijeet's memory loss and determination for the wellbeing of his team were the touchstone factors in the plot, it was all handled really well. I think the story was a bit too straightforward though (and also deviated from the given plot a little because of the murder), and this could've been even better if the suspense and thrill levels in the investigation were higher. But I loved it overall, and definitely looking forward to more stories from you. 😃
Story 11 - Well presented and the story was very good too. The investigation was cool and team distribution was nice, I liked the clue of the broken light and the various twists towards the end. I think the culprit could've had a little better motive though, and that Sanjeev's side plot had a happier ending (CID managing to save his family). Also some of the script could've been trimmed a bit (like the investigation scenes at the bank). Daya and Abhijeet's interactions were really nice, I like how the case mentioned in the beginning is brought back in the end with a new reaction from Abhi sir. The idea for the explosives was cool too (just a small technical point: gold's symbol Au has a small "u"). Well done and looking forward to more stories from you!
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