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Posted: 07 January 2011 at 7:53am | IP Logged
hello dearies...thanks for such a lovely response...i didn't expect it really...
here is part 4...hope u all will like it...(sry for the delay)
                                 
in geet's room...at night...
geet is cleaning up the mess in her room...preeti enters...
PREETI: mai kuch help karu...
GEET: bilkul...neki aur puch puch...
both begin cleaning & evrything is completed in minutes...
PREETI: dekha mere ane se sab kitni jaldi sort ho gaya...
GEET: vo toh hai...aur tym ka pata bhi nahi chala na
PREETI: *thinks something* geet...i wish hum saath kaam kar sake..tu saath rahegi toh din yu nikal jayega.
GEET: haan preeti...bas ab aur intezar nhi ho rha...aur finally mai apne pairo par khadi ho jaungi sab teri vajah se...thank u yaar
PREETI: nahi yr...meri wajah se nahi...tu hai hi itni capable k tujhe koi b job de de...
GEET: haan haan uda le mera mazak...dekh hi rahi h tu k kitne jobs mile mujhe...
achcha 1 baat bata...interview kaun lega..???
PREETI: aur kaun yaar...humara DD...
GEET: oh...achcha h use mai ek baar me thik kar dungi...*giggles*
PREETI: dekh geet...kuch aisa vaisa mat karna...woh teri imagination se zyada strict hai...par shareef b utne hi hai, he admires genuine people...so just be urself aur job teri...unhe thik baad me karna...ok
GEET: ok baba ok...*lost in deep thoughts*
PREETI: kya hua geet? kaha kho gayi..?
GEET: ek baat bolu preeti...tu mera mazak toh nahi udaygi na?mujhe sacchi bahut dar lag raha hai...agar is baar b job nahi mili toh?
PREETI: tujhe kya lagta hai...mai tujhe itna b nahi samajti? mujhe pata h meri bholu geet upar se jhansi ki rani bani ghumti hai par andar se ek chotu si golu-molu si baby hai...kyu?
and she starts tickling her...geet rolls on the floor laughing...(tickling is her major weakness)
PREETI: chal geet,dar mat mujhe pata hai u r d best...babaji par bharosa rakh aur so ja...hume kal late nahi hona hai na? vaise b DD tym k bahut pakke hai...
GEET: chal ok...gud night.
*both go to sleep*
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ENTRY OF A NEW CHARACTER
SAVITRI DEVI
maan's dadi, loving, caring, fun loving, has major role in making maan what he is, loves him & is loved by him equally


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next day, in khurana mansion...
maan & dadi having breakfast, servant brings soup...
maan starts thinking about the girl whom he couldn't forget,she annoyed him but still...he felt something for her
DADI: maan beta...!! kya hua
MAAN(coming out of the trance): kuch nhi dadi maa...aj 1 imp. meeting hai bas usi baare me soch raha tha
DADI: beta, aap kab tak yu hi office me uljhe rahenge? kabhi toh..
MAAN: dadi abhi nahi.. i'm getting late
maan goes...
DADI: koi toh hogi jo is sahabzade ke sar se kaam k nashe ko utaregi...

in KC..maan's cabin
maan busy in seeing files & doing something on the laptop...adi enters...
ADI: sir..
MAAN: haan adi...jaldi bolo...i have a lot of work
ADI: sirrr...wwwoh
MAAN: jaldi bolo adi, i'm getting late for an imp meeting..
ADI: sir woh humari company me apko assist karne k liye...aur junior architect ki post k liye kai applications ayi hai...aur apne unhe aaj appointment dene ko kaha tha...toh..
MAAN: (too busy in his files) oh woh tum le lo...i'm getting late for a meeting...
ADI: ji sir...(goes out of the room)

outside maan's cabin...geet & preeti standing waiting for adi...geet all set to face maan & preeti wishing her luck & advising her how to behave infront of him...adi comes out...both look at him anxiously...
GEET: kya hua adi?? mai andar jaon?
ADI: nahi...
GEET: kya hua...?? *gets tensed*
ADI: maan sir tumhara interview nahi lenge...
GEET: usko toh mai...Angry
ADI: puri baat toh sunlo geet...maan sir nahi mai tumhara interview lunga...
preeti & geet rejoice & give a high five...
GEET: chalo ab toh meri job pakki, hai na adi?
ADI: haan, par tumhe intrview dena hoga...& i'll not cheat...mai baki sab ka b intrview lunga aur jo b best hoga...takes the cake...ok??
GEET: maan gaye baba harishchandra ko...i appreciate ur honesty...i'm ready...
ADI: all the best...!!!! mujhe pata hai u r vry capable of joining us...
GEET: thank u...let's see.

In Adi's small cabin
ADI: first applicant...come in...
an ultra modern girl in minnies...enters...
adi feels really awkward...
ADI: why do u wish to join KC?
girl: for u honey...
ADI: next...!!!!
a geek girl with large spects & weird clothes...
'why do u wish to join KC?'
'ji woh mai ji....(blushes & runs out)'
'next!!!'
and this continues for a long time...
finally....'next!!!'
and geet enters...adi has a smile on his face..
ADI: why do u wish to join KC.?
GEET: b'coz i want to become independent & make my mark...plus KC is a reputed company...nothing can be better for me..
adi continues to ask & geet replies...adi is super impressed wid her answers...he finds in her a perfect blend of dedication, values, honesty & personality...
and GEET IS HIRED!!!
ADI: congratulations geet.i expected this from u.i'm sure sir will also b impressed seeing ur dedication & honesty..
GEET: thank u sir...
ADI: itni bhi respect mat de yaar, aadat nahi hai.
GEET: sorry sorry, thx adi...
ADI: chalo,sir must b out of he meeting, sign this contract first then i'll take u to meet him. and read the contract before signing ok??
GEET: (reading the contract) oh ok...i can't leave the job for 2 yrs atleast and will have to intimate KC atleast 6months before...i agree..
but adi, i want to add one more clause, i.e. u can't fire me before informing me 6 months earlier...ok
ADI: i'll talk to the consultant, vaise it'll b done easily. i must say smart girl haan...
geet signs the contract after the clause is added...
ADI: i'll get the contract signed by sir & will also inform him of the clause.

IN MAAN'S CABIN
ADI: sir, i just completed the interviews..& i have selected Ms. Geet Handa for the job.
Maan: oh great...i hope u've choosed right.
ADI: sir, i'm sure about that...she is a perfect employee for us...right blend of hard work,dedication & honesty. 
MAAN: oh ok...tell me about her qualifications & all...
adi tells evrything...maan seems ok as he has no clue that it is the same chatterbox he collided wid,the last day...
ADI: sir, here is the contract, she has already signed it...she has sked us to add this clause too...(points to it)
MAAN: r u sure adi?
ADI: i'm sure sir...we'll not regret this..
maan signs the contract...adi is happy
MAAN: call Ms. Geet
adi uses intercom to call preeti & asks her to send geet to the cabin..
geet comes near its door, her heartbeats getting fast...she opens the door...
to be continued..
PRECAP: Maan-geet face-off round 2
NOTE: I'M REALLY SRY TO DELAY THE FACE-OFF BUT IT WILL NOT BE DELAYED FURTHER...PLZ BEAR WITH IT..
vaise bhi intezar ka fal mitha hota hai...Wink
i hope u like it...plz comment & press the like button...




Edited by maaneet_ayla - 26 June 2011 at 7:59am

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Posted: 07 January 2011 at 8:09am | IP Logged
yippie....I am waiting...

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Posted: 07 January 2011 at 8:21am | IP Logged
awsome update yaar....so superb ..especially i loved the interview part so much ..keep going Smile

Edited by mrk_1 - 07 January 2011 at 10:32am

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Posted: 07 January 2011 at 8:47am | IP Logged
Heyy Crime Partner
 
OMGGG finally got to read this and yayyyy am commenting too!!LOL
oyeee, how are you soo freaking good?....and omgg brilliant job at the characterizations!!Clap....you have nailed both of their characters down perfectly!....khadoos maan and adorablee, bakbaking GeetEmbarrassed
omgg their first meeting was again banging, literally!LOL....so he let her leave just like that, eh?....lets see how long maan ignores his own dhak dhaking heart for GeetWink....and bring it on Geet, apne boss ko line pe laoLOL
omgg i am loving this CP!!Embarrassed....can't wait for their second meetingDay Dreaming....lovee how Geet never knows that whatever she does will bring her to maan anyway!Wink
lovee you CP!!
 
P.S. remember to come early tonite or ur dead meatLOL....and u got fb?...pm me!

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Posted: 07 January 2011 at 10:22am | IP Logged
lovely............plzz cont dear.... thanxx for pm...

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thanks please pm me next trime u update

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